|
|
Post by Nut on Mar 10, 2007 4:49:28 GMT -5
|
|
|
|
Post by kittygirl on Mar 10, 2007 11:13:33 GMT -5
Big Trees by Violin
Ok. Um. Wow. That was really good. You captured the strange logic children have very well. The whole thing was really well written, especially the last scene where she started ripping up the tree.
Double Crossed
Ah, I wasn't expecting that. Funny. Um.... I'm a bad reviewer because I've got nothing else to say. >.>
|
|
|
|
Post by Goosh on Mar 10, 2007 11:41:03 GMT -5
Big Trees by Violin
*wipes eyes* That was fantastic! It's great how Ever tries to be merciful on the young tree, and how she doesn't want to grow up, so she's scared when she starts to. It's a really nice, emotional, coming-of-age story. *claps*
|
|
|
|
Post by Goosh on Mar 10, 2007 12:08:22 GMT -5
Vanity: Part 2
by Luau
Great installment! Andrea is a totally believable hero, who simple does what's right!
ZOMG Bruno the Gelert was in the crowd and his mom is a Bruce? Crazy XDD
The ending was a bit confusing. It was well described, but I have no idea what was going on. I really hope that's explained next chapter. But all in all, those shopkeepers are far too emotionally attached to their buildings 0_o I mean, excellent chapter.
|
|
|
|
Post by Nut on Mar 10, 2007 12:40:49 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]Vanity: Part Two[/glow]
I loved the first section of this part. The whole sequence of events with the food shop was wonderfully done, and Andrea comes across as a magnificently believable heroine and character. The scene where Chastings wins votes from the shopkeeper is really nice, personifying the advertising required for the Beauty Contest. In fact, I love how the whole story relates to the real Beauty Contest and how it works.
I thought it was sweet how Chastings called Andrea’s paw “a heroine’s paw” in return to Sarah’s remark. However, I’m not sure what to think of him. He seems kind, but at the same time focused on votes just as much as anyone else. Still, he’s a great character. I thought Andrea’s speech was really nice, and her shyness was a realistic touch. Chastings’s plug came across as sudden and as rude as it should have.
The scenes involving the lightning, however, were rather confusing. It baffles me how so many lightning bolts can strike around Andrea and have her suffer no damage from them. If they were close enough to singe her fur, wouldn’t she have felt a shock wave? Although from your description of the one that stopped in her path, this was no ordinary lightning. I'm a bit at a loss how to picture the things that were coming out of the sky because they didn't behave like lightning. I'm sorry to say that I didn't really understand the glass wall either.
Nevertheless, this was an excellent part and I enjoyed it. Poor peddler… I’m eager to see how things work out with him. Andrea’s a really sweet character.
|
|
|
|
Post by Dan on Mar 10, 2007 13:43:07 GMT -5
Love the question about Weewoos in the Editorial, especially the caption underneath the picture:
|
|
|
|
Post by Nut on Mar 10, 2007 14:39:35 GMT -5
Love the question about Weewoos in the Editorial, especially the caption underneath the picture: I saw that too. Awesome. =D |
|
|
|
Post by Oily on Mar 10, 2007 15:49:28 GMT -5
Love the question about Weewoos in the Editorial, especially the caption underneath the picture: Lol, I saw this too! Love it ;D |
|
|
|
Post by Deleted on Mar 10, 2007 17:58:41 GMT -5
Love the question about Weewoos in the Editorial, especially the caption underneath the picture: Lol, I saw this too! Love it ;D I saw it, too, and I then I realised their "f" and "w" keys malfunctioned... ^_^ |
|
|
|
Post by Deleted on Mar 10, 2007 18:12:49 GMT -5
Spooky by KomoriMy only response:  This was, yet again, a great comic. (I need to think of more original things to say to you!)No Comment: Crossover - Some Hero by Tirilia and GenLucky Green Boots! ^_^ It took me a brief moment to catch the joke, not initially seeing the arrow stuck in the purse. The comic was funny, and the art was awesome (I enjoyed their expressions especially), so this was definitely a good comic. Me & My Mootix by PeriOh-boy! The art was quite nice, though it felt a bit plain with few backgrounds to it, but the joke itself was just great. It was quite funny and I really enjoyed it. Results May Vary by return_of_itsyErm...wasn't this comic, this exact same comic, in issue 280?
|
|
|
|
Post by Deleted on Mar 10, 2007 20:33:09 GMT -5
The Mirror of Memories: Part Seven by SytraThis part was well-written and quite enjoyable and intriguing as the rest have been, so I've few comments and no complaints at all about it. Seriously, it was done incredibly well and was really enjoyable to read. I think...that maybe...the red jewel is the start of all of Malin's troubles that Aina read about. * * * Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part Eight by YukaJen's parts were fabulously written, Yuka, and I really found it quite touching how Kail Selvar gave his cape to Jen. I also noticed how well you showed things, not merely telling them, and that, too, was done nicely. I'm slightly confused with the time consistency between Jen's parts and Pemero's. The latter's seem to me to have taken no more than a week to transpire, yet much more than three weeks have passed by Jen by the end of this part. I suppose things might be made clearer later on, though right now, I am confused. Pemero's parts were quite well-written as well, but I'm more a fan of Jen's parts than of his, I feel. It seems almost that this story could be over, based solely upon his parts, yet I have a sinking feeling that his trials are only just beginning. I also noticed that twice you used a semi-colon instead of a comma, which would have been better suited, I feel. In my experience, I've been taught that semi-colons should be used to divide a series of clauses or to divide clauses in the stead of ", and", so it might be worth watching out for them a bit more carefully. * * * Another Hero's Journey by KatYou make him out to sound like a hurricane. *grins* Yay, the cave crew's back! I liked them, and they were in the story long enough to be more than just "fillers," so they're a welcome addition to this part. Though, on the other hand, it makes the touching goodbyes of the last part seem almost...anticlimactic. The battle and the scenes surrounding it reminded me of a mixture of similar scenes in Eldest (Christopher Paolini) and of training tutorials in video games. I don't think that was a bad thing, mind you, though it definitely was different and unlike anything I've read before. That sentence feels incomplete to me. It begins by saying he gives them an answer, then it talks about the grin but it makes no connection between Reuben and the grin. I think the word "bearing" (or something similar) before "a small..." or the words "on his face" at the line's end could have remedied that. * * * Catching Up: Part Five by Fj0rdTowards the beginning, the point of view seemed to change back and forth between Evea and Patricia, so I wasn't entirely sure of a few things, most notably how much time was passing between the pov shifts. After that, though, things solidified firmly in Patricia's pov. I was eerily reminded of my ideas of the Slytherin dormitories form Harry Potter while Patricia was in her own dormitory, and then after that, my envisionment of the academy became very Hogwarts-ish (though, that's not necessarily bad). It was quite enjoyable as well. I'm not entirely certain I understand Patricia's sudden interest in Illusen and Jhudora's being a part of the Academy, yet it is quite interesting (and fun) how you have worked them both into this, and so I look forward to finding out why Patricia is made so curious on this matter.
|
|
|
|
Post by troublems03 on Mar 11, 2007 0:13:59 GMT -5
Comics:
Spooky by KomoriI don't really know what to say about your comics anymore. This one was, as always, excellently drawn and funny. Me & My Mootix by PeriAn interesting concept and nicely drawn, though I did find that the puppyblew was a little bit pixelated. But that may have been due to scaling down the image or something like that. The joke itself was funny and clear, and I hope to see more of your stuff soon. More reviews coming soon. 
|
|
|
|
Post by Birdy on Mar 11, 2007 13:02:26 GMT -5
Short Stories Big Trees by ViolinInteresting story. I liked how Ever named the trees after the different Faeries and characters. *sniffs* Poor Meuka... Double Crossed by Dan and me  XD Great story, Nut and Dan!  The transformation scenes were well written as well. And the last line = great. ;D Comics Spooky by KomoriXD Yes, I wonder who could have done that...  Great artwork (as always), and hope to see the next one soon! No Comment: Crossover - Some Hero by Tirilia and GenAww! The knid Grundo pushed the owner... into the path of the arrows? Anywho, Good artwork, and cute joke. Me & My Mootix by PeriCute comic, I liked it. New Series Super Chel: Part One by KittyAww! What a cute little Ogrin! Good first part, I can't wait to read the next part! Peter Pan thoughts coming here. XD Oooo... looks like someone's gonna have a new friend? Continued Series Sword of the Shapeshifter by Sarahleeadvent Tenultra, NOOOOOOOO! *headwhamdesk* Ouch. *rubs head* Anywho, this chapter/part was well writen (as all the works I've read of yours are), and I must read the next part! Can't...wait...one...week... But I'll survive. Towards the end, when Migalo got whaped on the head by the Mynci, I was wondering who he was and where he came from. I was reminded in the next line. Vanity: Part Two by LuauOoh, good second part! I'm looking forward to reading the next parts as well! I'm entirally sure why, but the wording on this strikes me as rather amusing. 3...2...1... Awww! I do agree with Nut though, the lightning scenes were a bit confusing. |
|
|
|
Post by Nut on Mar 11, 2007 13:31:40 GMT -5
Double CrossedAh, I wasn't expecting that. Funny. Um.... I'm a bad reviewer because I've got nothing else to say. >.> Thanks for the review, Kitty. ^^ Double Crossed by Dan and me XD Great story, Nut and Dan! The transformation scenes were well written as well. And the last line = great. ;D Thanks, Birdy--I'm glad you liked it. ^^ Dan gets all the credit for the last line--I liked it too. xD |
|
|
|
Post by Birdy on Mar 11, 2007 13:44:13 GMT -5
Double Crossed by Dan and me XD Great story, Nut and Dan! The transformation scenes were well written as well. And the last line = great. ;D Thanks, Birdy--I'm glad you liked it. ^^ Dan gets all the credit for the last line--I liked it too. xD You're welcome. |
|
neo username - dan4884 
This was, yet again, a great comic. (I need to think of more original things to say to you!)
