Issue 282 Reviews

[Nimras]

Double Crossed
by nut862 and dan4884

Oh, these two intro characters seem to be right on top of things.

Sophie is just utter adorableness in this story. The phasing you two use describing her only emphasizes how childish she seems, while at the same time shows how much about magic she’s already learned.

And tying it into the brain tree and the esophogor is just brilliant.

[Nimras]

Spooky
by ghostkomorichu

*snerk!* I’m sure it’s just an honest mistake, right? And the crack lines around the coin slot… you can just see Tombstones moments before jumping up and down on it, beating it with Kamori’s head…


No Comment: Crossover - Some Hero
by tirilia and gen

Hey, I remember this one! So you finally got it in, congrats! I don’t really have anything to add from the comments from when it was getting rejected for too much violence, but I still love the expression panels on the far right.


Me & My Mootix - Is This Tour Safe?
by peri0neo

Muahahaha! The scary truth behind the island mystic. I love the mootix’s expressions, it’s a pity the Puppyblue isn’t as expressive, it kind of lessens the impact of the punch line. Oddly though, my favorite bit is the rub the mystic is standing on… it’s hypnotic..

[Nimras]

Super Chel: Part One
by kittygirl5170

Ana at once swooped after her perfect son.

Heh, that’s never a good thing to start thinking of someone as…

Isabella rolled her eyes. Chel was immediately jealous, and asked how Isabella did that.

*laughs* You can tell that Chel is very easily distracted. And good natured, apparently -- and her dream sequences are awesome.

It’ll be interesting to see what happens when she and Eric get to know each other better.

[Nimras]

Vanity: Part Two
by literalluau

I like how you’ve incorporated the advertising for the beauty contest into a way that could really happen for a real life kind of thing. Though it sounds like it’s an expensive way… don’t visit too many places that serve food in one night!

Her sister’s reaction to the whole fire in the shop escapade is hilarious.

The whole lightning bit was freaky -- the poor Bori. I suppose someone didn’t like how many votes Andrea was getting…

[Nimras]

The Royal Meridell Garden Party: Part Two
by freefalldreams

The “stuff” she was referring to was plates of Lemon Squash, Pea Stuffed Peppers, cheese, more Aubergine Surprise... and a large plate of that nasty fish. Some breakfast!

… What’s wrong with that as a breakfast?

I’m starting to think Explorer just has something against Meridell. Doesn’t like the food, doesn’t like the clothes… well, likes Jeran -- but who doesn’t?

“Tomato sandwiches, and they’ve been squashed!”

Never got to my mother in laws house. She loves tomato sandwiches.

Umm… what happened to the whole ‘we must fix Meridell thinking they won the Altador Cup’… and Jeran? It may be just me but the ending seemed a little… confused. I got lost several times, and couldn’t keep track of exactly what was happening. And… did Karmapa randomly change colors?

I do like Explorer’s and Lee’s confrontation about the backpack when they got home.

[Nimras]

The Adventures of Trina: The Return of the Staff - Part Six
by ummagine3284

Um… what exactly happened to the staff? I’m confused… one minute it was there, and then the next it was a pile of dark particles?

Whoa, SFOONSTD. _{Sudden Faerie Out Of Nowhere Saves The Day}

Heh, I like that she pitched her empty water bottles at them in retaliation. Not exactly something that would do damage, but it’s still a fun, feisty thing to do.

Though if she wrote her ‘fictional’ weekend, wouldn’t it still be considered telling if she included Brightstar?

[Nimras]

The Mirror of Memories: Part Seven
by sytra

I stared at Kin. The baby Ogrin was sleeping soundly, his belly moving up and down each time he breathed. I frowned. He must've really missed his parents. I was torturing the poor thing!

*applauds* She noticed!

Ohh, the jewel is kinda creepy.

Enzie would die if she ever came to my house. Drinking right out of the carton…..

[Nimras]

Sword of the Shapeshifter: Part Seven
by sarahleeadvent

The Kougra’s eyes flashed with stony defiance. “It’s not over until the fat lady sings, and so far she’s only humming.”

It’s all about the fat lady.

had been flabbergasted to find a badly emaciated Sloth hanging upside-down in a cell beneath the fortress.

The mental image. It burns.

[Nimras]

Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part Eight
by yatomiyuka

Heh, nice way for Pemero to turn the tables on Seth. And with a timetable on top of it.

Somehow I think magic school would be a lot more interesting with the Pemero-of-now than the Pemero at the beginning of the story.

Aww, Jen’s working on making Mystery Island better….

[Nimras]

Another Hero's Journey: Part Nine
by precious_katuch14

The story is starting to pick up… Yey!

Poor Rueben, you get the feeling he’s not exactly a long distance runner -- more like a sprinter, very dangerous over short distances.

“Don’t – they’ve got big heavy swords! You don’t mess with guys with big heavy swords!”

But big heavy swords are slower so it means they’ll get tired faster, and that means… Okay, I’ll shut up now.

Aww, he gets so mad when they pick on Li… (Though I still hold for the Alien Aisha )

[Nut]

nimras23 said:

Double Crossed
by nut862 and dan4884

Oh, these two intro characters seem to be right on top of things.

Sophie is just utter adorableness in this story. The phasing you two use describing her only emphasizes how childish she seems, while at the same time shows how much about magic she’s already learned.

And tying it into the brain tree and the esophogor is just brilliant.

Thanks for the review, Nimras! ^^ I'm glad you liked how Sophie came across. She looks like a pretty innocent little girl in those early days...

[ummagine3284s post]

nimras23 said:

The Adventures of Trina: The Return of the Staff - Part Six
by ummagine3284

Um… what exactly happened to the staff? I’m confused… one minute it was there, and then the next it was a pile of dark particles?

Whoa, SFOONSTD. _{Sudden Faerie Out Of Nowhere Saves The Day}

Heh, I like that she pitched her empty water bottles at them in retaliation. Not exactly something that would do damage, but it’s still a fun, feisty thing to do.

Though if she wrote her ‘fictional’ weekend, wouldn’t it still be considered telling if she included Brightstar?

*my ntwf account is having issues again*

Thanks for the review!

Um… what exactly happened to the staff? I’m confused… one minute it was there, and then the next it was a pile of dark particles?

Yep, that's what happened. ;D

Whoa, SFOONSTD. _{Sudden Faerie Out Of Nowhere Saves The Day}

Definitely cheesey, I know, but it was there for a reason. Brightstar has a hidden agenda that will play a huge role in future parts of the series.

Though if she wrote her ‘fictional’ weekend, wouldn’t it still be considered telling if she included Brightstar?

Only if she found out...

Thanks again for the review!

[Kat]

nimras23 said:

Another Hero's Journey: Part Nine
by precious_katuch14

The story is starting to pick up… Yey!

Poor Rueben, you get the feeling he’s not exactly a long distance runner -- more like a sprinter, very dangerous over short distances.

“Don’t – they’ve got big heavy swords! You don’t mess with guys with big heavy swords!”

But big heavy swords are slower so it means they’ll get tired faster, and that means… Okay, I’ll shut up now.

Aww, he gets so mad when they pick on Li… (Though I still hold for the Alien Aisha )

[shadow=purple,left,300]Well, Reuben's had a lot of practice.

Reuben: Get back here with my cookies, idiot brother of mine!

Thanks for the review...and thanks for reminding me of that. XDDDD[/shadow]