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Post by Komori on Mar 15, 2007 18:11:34 GMT -5
Spooky by KomoriXD Yes, I wonder who could have done that...  Great artwork (as always), and hope to see the next one soon!  Comics:
Spooky by KomoriI don't really know what to say about your comics anymore. This one was, as always, excellently drawn and funny. Spooky by KomoriMy only response:  This was, yet again, a great comic. (I need to think of more original things to say to you!) X3 Thanks guys! Good to know that I don't have as many standout issues with my works anymore! Spooky by ghostkomorichu I really liked this comic! But then again, I like all of your comics . The space-related ones lately have been really cool! I like how you tend to do a few comics on a certain theme once in a while, and pull so many jokes out of each major theme. You have such nice writing, Komori! It's perfect for comics ^_^. It's become a lot cleaner over time, too! Not that it needed to become cleaner, but you know.. it's just so ridiculously easy to read and fun to look at xD. Good expressions, as usual! And I really like how the token is stuck, and that the electricity is coming out like that. The "Zzzt!" actually looks like another ray of electricity in itself, so I like how you kind of.. camouflaged it in there so it looks natural while still getting the sound into my head . I have.. two very, very minor things that I think you could have done differently! I promise they're very minor . One's the Grundo's eyes, which look too empty, although the anger in their shape gets the message across. I would have liked to see.. are Grundo eyes gridded? Well, I would have liked to see grids in his eyes, or maybe a shine on them (they don't actually have pupils, right?). But just something to give him a little more life, since they are the first thing you look at in the comic. The second thing is just that you should have put a thin black border around it, even one pixel. I say this because.. my Internet has been very slow lately, and it loaded the top of the comic first, with the writing, and then loaded the bottom.. and I kept waiting for the rest of it to show up until I read it and realized that was it xD. I think that with a comic like this, where it's just one panel, and you don't usually do one panels, a border would tell the reader, "That's it." Also, the panel is pretty short, in addition, so it gives even more of an impression that there might be more to it. A border would make it look more final and complete. I can't be very picky with your comics, because they all rock . I'm glad you're still making them! It's motivating me to do the same myself, as long as you're around and a few quality comics are still appearing in the NT ^_^;. Thanks Nina! Your reviews are always so indepth! <3 I totally see what you mean about the one panel thing. Thanks for that advice, it never crossed my mind that perhaps it would look unloaded. *nods* Yep, that's a big help, I'll be sure and do that next time I do single panel comics. *nods* Glad you like my writing, too. I'm now super uber careful to have legible text, ever since my Halloween Spooky comic (the important one intro'ing Tombstones) was illegible for half the people who read it. ;_; I now use an Ames Lettering Guide, ever since my Sequential Art prof taught me how to use it. It's totally indispensible to me now! And it helps get the text perfectly aligned and spaced. <3 Oooh, are you yet motivated enough to do more Smelly Nelly? :3 *hopeful smile* Spooky - I agree with Nina, I was waiting for another portion of the comic to load since yours usually have several panels  However, only one panel was needed to get the joke across. Love your comic, as usual. Can't say enough about the great expressions you draw. Can't wait to see more of their adventures in space ^__^ Thanks! With two people commenting on the same issue, I guess it came across the same way to a lot of people. Note to self, panel borders... And glad you like the space theme! I've got to finish my other spacey ones eventually. ^^; |
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Post by Nina on Mar 15, 2007 20:18:20 GMT -5
Spooky by KomoriXD Yes, I wonder who could have done that... Great artwork (as always), and hope to see the next one soon! X3 Thanks guys! Good to know that I don't have as many standout issues with my works anymore! Thanks Nina! Your reviews are always so indepth! <3 I totally see what you mean about the one panel thing. Thanks for that advice, it never crossed my mind that perhaps it would look unloaded. *nods* Yep, that's a big help, I'll be sure and do that next time I do single panel comics. *nods* Glad you like my writing, too. I'm now super uber careful to have legible text, ever since my Halloween Spooky comic (the important one intro'ing Tombstones) was illegible for half the people who read it. ;_; I now use an Ames Lettering Guide, ever since my Sequential Art prof taught me how to use it. It's totally indispensible to me now! And it helps get the text perfectly aligned and spaced. <3 Oooh, are you yet motivated enough to do more Smelly Nelly? :3 *hopeful smile* Spooky - I agree with Nina, I was waiting for another portion of the comic to load since yours usually have several panels However, only one panel was needed to get the joke across. Love your comic, as usual. Can't say enough about the great expressions you draw. Can't wait to see more of their adventures in space ^__^ Thanks! With two people commenting on the same issue, I guess it came across the same way to a lot of people. Note to self, panel borders... And glad you like the space theme! I've got to finish my other spacey ones eventually. ^^; Why no problem, Ms. Komori . I'm glad I could be of assistance! I looked back for the comic you mentioned that people couldn't read, and I think they were just wimps . I can read it fine, I don't know how it's illegible at all, I would just say it's small? But it's all for the best, since you now write the way you do, which looks incredible! I never would have thought that a change in the handwriting could make such a huge change in the overall appearance of the comic. Like, looking at Spooks In Space #1? It looks much cleaner, even.. smooth. Much more professional when the writing is all spaced out nicely! I've never heard of that guide, but it sounds great! If I had writing like yours, I would write in my own speech bubbles too. It looks much better than typing it in a font. However, although I now have a tablet, I can't write like that, because I write with my left hand, and my paper is always turned to the side when I'm normally writing? I can't really turn my tablet (while keeping the writing non-crooked on the screen) and I can't write nicely with my paper, or tablet, completely straight and unangled. Yours looks really great, though. I'm in awe . And yes! Nelly is -so- back, especially this summer, when I have more time! But even now, I've started on a comic, which is looking good. It's a lot of fun, and I'm getting ideas again . |
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Post by Nut on Mar 16, 2007 21:26:58 GMT -5
Continued Series
[glow=blue,2,300]The Royal Meridell Garden Party: Part Two[/glow]
She used Mel as a pillow? Aw… fuzzy… ^^
The image I get from Meridell’s lack of perfume spray bottles is… frightening.
I was a little surprised that it was over in two parts. The first part promised conspiracies, betrayal, possibly other worlds. This second part, however, seemed devoted to wrapping up a plot that had barely begun, leaving ends of the story dangling. Still, I can see your characters’ personalities showing through in this part, and that was enjoyable to read.
And Explorer’s ill-fated backpack… *chuckle* Poor Explorer, and poor Lee. I like how that was used as a reason for Explorer to get home, as if she didn’t have enough reason already. Karmapa was really nice throughout the story.
Though the plot could have used a bit more development, I thought this was overall a nice story. ^^
[glow=blue,2,300]Catching Up: Part Five[/glow]
Interesting development…With all these original characters flying about, it’s interesting to see a couple of site characters in their midst. I’m also rather intrigued about what effect Illusen’s connection to Evea will have. I agree with Patricia; it’d be unlikely for Jhudora to have been on the team as well, but I’ll see how that plays out. I wonder if there’ll be an explanation for why in the game Illusen is the representative Earth Faerie but Jhudora isn’t the Dark Faerie.
I also liked how Patricia tried to make light. It was a cute detail. ^^
[glow=blue,2,300]The Adventures of Trina: Return of the Staff – Part Six[/glow]
I liked how you ended the story in the same place it began: at Trina’s school.
To be honest, I thought the storyline felt like it’d been done before, especially with the faerie appearing at the end. I was a little bit confused about what was going on during the episode atop the pyramid, and I’m also not sure why Malkus was using shields as throwing weapons. However, it was a cute story and it was nice to see a rarely used character come to light. I’m interested to see what other adventures are to come for Trina. ^^
[glow=blue,2,300]The Mirror of Memories: Part Seven[/glow]
Wow, Enzie is not at all like I expected. She seems overbearing and quite the opposite of Malin’s meek, quiet personality. I found myself almost disgusted with the way she was making herself at home, and had to remind myself that she must have known Malin well enough that she could do that. Her personality could almost be compared to Aina’s own brashness; I wonder if that’ll cause problems between them, or make them grow closer.
The jewel looks more and more like trouble. This issue of Malin seeing a ghost is certainly curious, and I’m very eager to see the next part of this well-written story.
[glow=blue,2,300]Sword of the Shapeshifter: Part Seven[/glow]
Ohh, I loved this part. Beautiful description, and the friendship between the characters is really sweet, particularly that of Darigan and Tenultra. It was nice how Vex saved the day in the fight with Miaglo. I’d nearly forgotten about him.
I also loved how Sloth was captured and wouldn’t give comment… XD
And just when the story seemed to be wrapping itself up, you manage to throw in one last cliffhanger to pique our interest. I’m sure Tenultra’s all right, although it did sound like she took a nasty blow, but I’m curious to see just what happened to her, and I also pity poor Darigan.
[glow=blue,2,300]Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic – Part Eight[/glow]
Ohh, very nicely written. Seth’s trick was dirty indeed. His deal wasn’t a terribly unusual one, but it was still interesting to read and I want to see how things work out now that Pemero’s given Seth some magic—or appeared to. It surprised me a bit how Pemero defended his captors against the faeries, but I suppose it stands to reason, since they helped him find the staff.
Meanwhile, Jen’s life is shaping up to be quite interesting. She now has a magical artifact too, and the fact that she’s apparently being mysteriously watched is intriguing. I wonder if it’s the Lupe, or someone else…
[glow=blue,2,300]Another Hero’s Journey: Part Nine[/glow]
Yay, the cave pets are back to help Reuben. I’m glad he’s not going into this on his own. The takeover scenes were interesting. With the cave pets in tow, I feel that the good side has assembled and is about to have the final battle with evil, emphasized even more by the talk of Reuben’s destiny.
Yet this is the first I’ve seen of the bandits. I wonder why these bandits are attacking—simply because they’re bandits, or is there a deeper motive?
*snerk*
EDIT: Because apparently I forgot to read Catching Up. o.o;
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Post by Nut on Mar 16, 2007 21:29:12 GMT -5
Double Crossed by Dan and NutThis was such a fabulous story. It was fun to read, and well-written. The story itself I found was somewhat predictable, though the way you executed such things as Sophie's introduction into the story (which was beautifully done) and the transformation, it was made a thoroughly unique experience. The final few lines just gave it a great sense of finality, which was awesome. Great job, you two. Thanks, Wolf, I'm glad you liked it. ^_^ Double CrossedI thought the idea here was very neat! I've never seen an explanation for the Esophagor/Brain Tree, so kudos to you two for a creative story The last line made me smile ^^ Overall, it was a great story - easy to read, amusing, and fun. Nice work =D Thanks! ^^ |
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Post by Nut on Mar 16, 2007 21:45:19 GMT -5
New Series[glow=blue,2,300] Super Chel: Part One[/glow] Aww, this was such a cute first part. ^^ Chel is a really cute character. It’s too bad the other kids don’t seem to like doing what she does; I know that feeling.  Hopefully this new student will change things. I might’ve used italics to show where Chel was daydreaming, but it wasn’t too hard to figure out what was real and what wasn’t. Her dreams about fighting the Pant Devil were cute. I enjoyed this first part, and I look forward to the next one. ^^
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Post by Kat on Mar 16, 2007 23:29:43 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300] Another Hero’s Journey: Part Nine[/glow] Yay, the cave pets are back to help Reuben. I’m glad he’s not going into this on his own. The takeover scenes were interesting. With the cave pets in tow, I feel that the good side has assembled and is about to have the final battle with evil, emphasized even more by the talk of Reuben’s destiny. Yet this is the first I’ve seen of the bandits. I wonder why these bandits are attacking—simply because they’re bandits, or is there a deeper motive? *snerk* [shadow=purple,left,300]Ooohhh, destinyyyyy... *mysterious music* Thanks for the review. Ah, but Reuben messes a lot with his little brother, who has a big heavy sword, and he gets bigger and heavier ones during the course of his adventure. XDDDDD[/shadow] Another Hero's Journey by KatYou make him out to sound like a hurricane. *grins* Yay, the cave crew's back! I liked them, and they were in the story long enough to be more than just "fillers," so they're a welcome addition to this part. Though, on the other hand, it makes the touching goodbyes of the last part seem almost...anticlimactic. The battle and the scenes surrounding it reminded me of a mixture of similar scenes in Eldest (Christopher Paolini) and of training tutorials in video games. I don't think that was a bad thing, mind you, though it definitely was different and unlike anything I've read before. That sentence feels incomplete to me. It begins by saying he gives them an answer, then it talks about the grin but it makes no connection between Reuben and the grin. I think the word "bearing" (or something similar) before "a small..." or the words "on his face" at the line's end could have remedied that. [shadow=purple,left,300]Hurricane Reuben has a nice ring to it, actually. XD Thanks for the review. ^_^[/shadow] |
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Post by Ummagine3284s Post on Mar 16, 2007 23:37:41 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300] The Adventures of Trina: Return of the Staff – Part Six[/glow] I liked how you ended the story in the same place it began: at Trina’s school. To be honest, I thought the storyline felt like it’d been done before, especially with the faerie appearing at the end. I was a little bit confused about what was going on during the episode atop the pyramid, and I’m also not sure why Malkus was using shields as throwing weapons. However, it was a cute story and it was nice to see a rarely used character come to light. I’m interested to see what other adventures are to come for Trina. ^^ Glad to see you liked it more than me. Believe me, the ending was extremely horrible until I rewrote it. Now that I think about it, I should have called it something along the lines of The Beginning because it can be considered the prologue in the future. Thanks for reading and reviewing it! If you are still interested enough to read the sequel, I may finish writting it by April... FYI: I am Ummagine3284 but my NTWF account won't let me post anymore for some reason.  |
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Post by sarahleeadvent on Mar 17, 2007 2:32:02 GMT -5
Yay, another Nut review! ^_^
I confess I hadn't been completely certain precisely how things were going to pan out with Vex when I first left him lying out in the open. All I knew was that it was handy to have that backup line. I like to do that sometimes, leave a loose thread that may or may not weave a significant part of the proverbial tapestry.
On the subject of potentially useful loose threads...
Ah, that's the thing about the NT, isn't it? You always know that (with very rare exceptions, like Astral in Encountering Resistance) the main characters are going to live. Of course, that still leaves you room to put them- and leave them- in very deep crap if you so choose.
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Post by kittygirl on Mar 17, 2007 11:50:50 GMT -5
New Series[glow=blue,2,300] Super Chel: Part One[/glow] Aww, this was such a cute first part. ^^ Chel is a really cute character. It’s too bad the other kids don’t seem to like doing what she does; I know that feeling. Hopefully this new student will change things. I might’ve used italics to show where Chel was daydreaming, but it wasn’t too hard to figure out what was real and what wasn’t. Her dreams about fighting the Pant Devil were cute. I enjoyed this first part, and I look forward to the next one. ^^ Thanks for the review. I thought about doing that, and in one draft it had the italics, but the lines between dreaming and reality were sometimes thin, especially in the next couple of parts. Reality can stop mid sentence. And then like in this part would you italicize something where Chel is really yelling at the pant devil, but the pant devil isn't there? It just got too complicated and it worked with out the italics. |
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Post by Nut on Mar 17, 2007 13:31:52 GMT -5
Comics[glow=blue,2,300] Spooky[/glow] Oh gosh, that’s just… awesome. XD They say single panel comics are hard to pull off, but this one was just perfect. Any more panels would’ve just slowed down the joke, and one of the reasons this is so great is that the realization comes quickly and smoothly. The art and the caption work together perfectly—the reader reads the text, then looks down to the angry Grundo, follows his pointing thumb to the Nerkmid, and then glances to the side to see the culprit. x3 The idea was hilarious. I love the little Nerkmid shooting lightning bolts. I also like how the Grundo carries his build, a little scrunched over, with his face contorted in anger. I actually like the Grundo’s blank angry eyes. Such cute details on the NeoCola machine, too. Squee. It surprised me too when I saw that it was a one-panel comic, although my computer is fast so I wasn’t wondering if it hadn’t loaded completely. It was a little short compared to your usual comic panels, but there’s nothing wrong with that. When I first read it, the use of a caption instead of a word balloon felt a little stiff to me because of the quotes around the text, which are known to make things sound different. But that’s really a personal choice, and in all I thought this was a fantastic comic. ^^ [glow=blue,2,300] No Comment: Crossover – Some Hero[/glow] Hehe, that was a cute comic. ^^ The little stepping-on-button panel was nice. Though I think the girl’s eyes should’ve been looking in a different direction in the first panel, because with her gazing down at the floor it seems she would’ve been able to spot the trap. The Grundo’s heroic pose as he pushes her out of the way is nice, especially contrasted with his impish expression in the last panel. The joke was cute. I might’ve liked to see a couple of arrows flying towards the girl in the second-to-last panel, just so that the one in her purse doesn’t come out of nowhere, but it was a funny twist to have the purse get pierced through. One thing I would’ve left out was the emoticon in the final word balloon. In comics, a character’s facial expression eliminates any need for emoticons in speech balloons, as was the case here. But still, it was an amusing comic that made me grin. ^^ [glow=blue,2,300] Me & My Mootix – Is This Tour Safe?[/glow] Heehee, this was a very cute comic. The Jubjub wheeling the cart around was really cute, and I loved how you changed the position of the Mootix in each of the two panels it was used; it broke up a bit of the copy-and-paste feel. The pixellated art was actually rather charming, and I can see how carefully you drew the cart and cooking pot. However, I think the Puppyblew really could’ve used a change in expression from panel to panel. You took the care to make the Mootix’s eyes move, and I think that a little change in the Puppyblew’s eyebrows or mouth from panel to panel would’ve really made a difference. The pun at the end made me smile. I like how the Jubjub is walking into the last panel. Overall, a cute and amusing comic. ^^
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Post by Nut on Mar 17, 2007 15:20:05 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]Big Trees[/glow]
Aww, this was an adorable story. Ever is such a cute character. I loved how she named all the trees after Neopian characters. The scene where she was standing in front of the mirror and noticing how she’d changed was also really nicely done, in a way you could relate to.
The story progressed at a good pace and Ever’s character was so sweet and childish that you had to smile. Her uprooting the tree was sad—even while I read it, I wished she’d just stop. I loved the part at the end where Ever notices the wood grain in the table. It took me by surprise and was the perfect sweet ending to the story.
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Post by Tirilia on Mar 18, 2007 4:48:40 GMT -5
*A little late* Thank you for the reviews on No Comment- Some Hero, everyone |
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Post by Violin on Mar 18, 2007 9:54:37 GMT -5
*also late* Thanks for all the reviews for Big Trees. I really appreciate it. So, are Janice and Max her grandparents? Just out of curiosity. Janice is definitely a motherly or grandmotherly character. I like to think Max is more of an uncle to Ever, but none of them are necessarily related. I don’t really think of Neopets that way. |
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Post by Freefalldreams on Mar 20, 2007 3:39:48 GMT -5
*is a bit late too* Thanks for the review for TRMGP! I relize it was rather plotless in the end, I guess I just felt like doing something silly. I'm working on another story starring some of the crew from TRMGP, and I think it'll have more plot...and maybe a moral? Some of the loose ends from TRMGP will be tied up again, although it's always good to leave a few dangling to link the stories! |
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Post by Nimras on Mar 27, 2007 17:38:36 GMT -5
Big Trees
by violinoutoftune
Awwww…
I like the symbolism of growing like the baby tree in the front yard. Though I’m a little confused at why Ever didn’t protest when she saw them cutting down “Meuka” -- I’d interpreted her more as the kind who would march out there and tell them to leave her tree alone.
The ending was sweet though. *grin*
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This was, yet again, a great comic. (I need to think of more original things to say to you!)
However, only one panel was needed to get the joke across. Love your comic, as usual. Can't say enough about the great expressions you draw. Can't wait to see more of their adventures in space 
Hopefully this new student will change things. 
