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Post by Deleted on Dec 9, 2006 18:05:42 GMT -5
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Five by Huntress"He got out so fast that the bush never understood what hit it." -- That line cracked me up! I do agree, however, that plants have feelings, too! Oh, and I love the Faeries in this part's picture! They are awesome! *declares this favorite illustration* Beyond all of that, I feel there isn't much for me to add. As always, this has been greatly written, was humorous yet serious, was a great story, easy to read, and fun to read. But, because I don't want to sound redundant, I don't think I'll say any of that this time. ^_^ In This Together: Part Two by DreamWHAT?! I...I...I...I...I... Well, I guess I should just say I cannot, cannot wait for your next part. To be kind, though, I shall try to give something of a review. The writing was wonderful. The story progressed perfectly. I liked especially how your scenes were of reasonable length and were not overwhelming. All of your grammar and spelling was good. There was just one thing that I found, however: Voltare being what he was-- {...}-- he had had to intervene. That second "he" didn't need to be there... Other than that, though, his story was flawless, in as many ways as you can think.
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Post by Sq on Dec 9, 2006 23:53:20 GMT -5
I have a series in, Into the Sea. I'd greatly appreciate any reviews for it.  In This Together - rainbow_daydreamer Wow.  This story is so shocking! I love the way you describe all of the emotions... it's like you're really feeling what Novella is going through. So touching! Though, I'm wondering about one thing: why would Voltare attack Illusen when he knew Fiona and Novella were right there?  Anyway, I definetely can't wait until the next part. Very well-written. ^^ |
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Post by Patjade on Dec 10, 2006 0:59:53 GMT -5
Well, Brains and Nut, I took your advice and reported it. ;; (they gave that person a cookie for plagiarism? That's just not right! >_<) I wonder if Donna is still doing the editorials. if so, that'll be an interesting situation on what to do about it. Maybe it'll get play on what NOT to do to get a question in the editorial for next week. |
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Post by AutoC on Dec 10, 2006 2:00:56 GMT -5
Well, Brains and Nut, I took your advice and reported it. ;; (they gave that person a cookie for plagiarism? That's just not right! >_<) I wonder if Donna is still doing the editorials. if so, that'll be an interesting situation on what to do about it. Maybe it'll get play on what NOT to do to get a question in the editorial for next week. Actually,they dont really gain from it,so it probably wont deal with it |
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Post by Bitsy on Dec 10, 2006 10:49:16 GMT -5
I know I shouldn't be advertising, but seeing as it's my first series, reviews for "Hissi, Come Blow Your Horn" are highly appreciated. *slinks back into corner*
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Post by PFA on Dec 10, 2006 13:08:07 GMT -5
I wonder if Donna is still doing the editorials. if so, that'll be an interesting situation on what to do about it. Maybe it'll get play on what NOT to do to get a question in the editorial for next week. Actually,they dont really gain from it,so it probably wont deal with it I dunno... I guess we'll just have to wait and see what happens... ;; |
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Post by lemonkitty13 on Dec 10, 2006 13:13:39 GMT -5
I have a story in.. though I don't really count as a NTWFer because I haven't posted here in a good two years ;D I haven't been in the NT in a good two years either, when I randomly decided to write "One Hundred Years of Laughter" so.. check it out if you want.. it's probably the weirdest story I've ever written for the NT ever..
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Post by costaricangirl on Dec 10, 2006 14:20:20 GMT -5
Gallery of Evil: The Spider Grundoby Rose This story is cute in the beginning and then the foreshadowing (including the title) makes a good transition into the latter half of the story. This is my favorite part: I couldn't help but smile. I don't fully understand this part: How much taller is Shix than the second(?) bunk with a grundo sitting on it? Do the bunks start on a lower level? I loved the Whoosh! and FOOM. It reminds of sound effects from a few of the games I can't seem to remember but enjoyed for their nostalgic quality. (Ironic isn't it?) The name Shix makes for some rather humorous phrases at various parts throughout the story. I hope he has no conscience right now.  Thanks so much for the review, Wisdom! I just realized I totally didn't describe the whole bunk thing well... I had an image in my head from the mission trip I was on, but never fully explained it. Basically there are four beds on top of each other (they're pretty crammed), and the lowest is directly on the floor with no room underneath it, and the second lowest bed is probably waist height, with the next one probably neck height and the highest on over the head (I'm measuring this on myself, I'm 5' 7"). Soo... does that make sense? xD I felt the need to explain it. I'll try to get to some reviews... Any more reviews of 'Gallery of Evil: the Spider Grundo' are greatly appreciated! ^^ |
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Post by costaricangirl on Dec 10, 2006 14:34:29 GMT -5
Neopia's Golden Years by Playmobil
What a cute article! I love how you mention funny little bits like, "pondering if the Peophin next to him eats his potatoes mashed or liquidated". My favorite paragraph was definitely the following, hands down:
I was definitely laughing after reading that. I loooove how you used Old Wocky Johnson as a sort of motif for the article, it just tied it all together.
Basically I really liked it--it was a brief, refreshing read that brightened my day a bit. ^^ And, ironically, I have also decided I will retire to Shenkuu. *Nod nod*
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Post by Deleted on Dec 10, 2006 20:06:37 GMT -5
Gallery of Evil: The Spider Grundo by Rose
This was quite an interesting story, and even though I wasn't much "into" it, I did enjoy reading it. It was flawlessly written, though I felt I knew what was going to happen quite near the beginning, though not in the same manner that it occured. Also, shortly after Shix broke his arm, the empahsis placed into conversation seemed a bit awkward to me. I also loved your creativeness with the names; they were quite interesting, and Shix sounds, in a way to me at least, spidery almost. Your use of numbers as names was almost reminescent of things done in the Holocaust, and that made this story quite eerily realistic. And though it's probably not even worth bringing up such a minor typo, in the following sentence, "crosses" should have been "crossed": The mutated Grundos surrounded the young schoolchildren, their muscular arms crosses over their gigantic green chests.
In-4-Motif Tours for Newbies by TC
I was out of it for the first third or so, a bit lost amid something or other... I have been in a strange mood today, or simply tired, perhaps... ANYWAYS, once the tour started, i instantly fell in love with this. The entire story, really, was well-written and enjoyable, but the tour was honestly the best part. I loved how Skitter confused the Newbies. I fear the day they rise up to take our spots in the NT. ^_^ ... -_- ANYWAYS, again, this was te BEST!:
Shadowflame: Snowfall by Brains
Is this a custom pic I see? It's quite awesome; I like it. :)
This was an awesome, awesome story! I loved it. It was...I want to use the word "thick" (with plot), though I can't be certain anyone other than myself would understand it. I think the word epic works fairlywell enough. The battle scenes were wonderful. The rest of the story, brilliant. I even loved your Flash! So, Chet doesn't wear pants? lol. I had been guessing, if Shadow found the Dewdrop, she would see her future, but no. That surprised me. Reminded me a bit of Alladin, but, it worked, and worked superbly. It was wonderful. I liked this story, a lot. The only mistake was one "you" that should have been a "your," but no matter. This was...for lack of thinking of a better word...wonderful.
Lucky Cake by Nut
The picture was a bit confusing at first, but it made sense after a moment!
This...was an interesting, random, and fun story! It was so...random, that I didn't know what to expect, ever, but it all turned out pretty good. Not much else to say really-- I enjoyed this, had a lot of fun reaidng it, and it was written well. Short review, but all that I had to say, I said!
One Hundred Years of Laughter by robotkitty13
This was a simple story, one to which I cannot find the words to describe adequately. It was fun. It was random. It was well-written. It was...in so many ways, beyond description. I really enjoyed reading it. I can't be certain what I make of it, but this story doesn't demand anything to be made of it, as long as it's enjoyed, I feel.
I particularly love the line "she was now only a figment of her own imagination," as, in truth, aren't we all just figures of our own imaginations, of our own perceptions of the world? We can be anything we want to be, do anything we want to do, and shape the world around us however we wish to shape it. That line was the most-amazing thing I read today. Thank you for giving me the chance to read it.
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Post by TC - Back From the Dead... on Dec 11, 2006 7:26:11 GMT -5
In-4-Motif Tours for Newbies - TCI love this story so much. The way you played with the newbies' heads through the whole thing was fantastic, and all of the characters were well-written. All in all, a fantastic job and I laughed the whole time. Excellent. Thanks, Brains! I was beginning to wonder if people would find this funny or just be like 'Yawn! Old idea...' or something...thanks for proving me wrong! In-4-Motif Tours for Newbies by TCI was out of it for the first third or so, a bit lost amid something or other... I have been in a strange mood today, or simply tired, perhaps... ANYWAYS, once the tour started, i instantly fell in love with this. The entire story, really, was well-written and enjoyable, but the tour was honestly the best part. I loved how Skitter confused the Newbies. I fear the day they rise up to take our spots in the NT. ^_^ ... -_- ANYWAYS, again, this was te BEST!: Thanks again! Too bad that didn't get Quote of the Week, huh? Do they even do two people talking for that? |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 11, 2006 11:10:08 GMT -5
A few reviews: Orbulon and the Founder of Symol Hole: Part One by TashniI love your pic   Anyway, I helped proofread this, so you've already had my comments on it, but it's a really good story with lots of very quirky bits that will make you smile, so you should all read this  Spooky by KomoriNevermind Komo, poor Yooyu! Love it - one of your best I think, Komori No Game Here by Tee and KamiI remember seeing this on Tee's board. I love the art - the JubJub is amazing! Good idea too, Tee Hali the Hissi by undefindedHehe Very good, very funny, and really well drawn Don't Blame Me by ChoclatedThat's a lot of work to do in Paint, well done! Fairly predictable, but I enjoyed it. Darkest Corner by dark_elfaLovely art and a good joke. Little nitpick - you spelled 'coffee' wrong three times with two variations...  If anyone's got the time, the last part of my series is in this week: Aubrise and the Gebmid Mystery, part 7 |
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Post by Deleted on Dec 11, 2006 13:42:51 GMT -5
Orbulon and the Founder of Symol Hole: Part One by Tashni
It's a shame I don't have time to catch the past Orbulon stories...but as you, Tashni, said it isn't required to have read them, maybe I'll have the time another time to read them.
This was a most interesting story. It was so serious that the dry humor, which was said with so much seriousness, was only made funnier. And so much happened, yet it all happened with perfect flow and was all easy to understand. I really enjoyed this. Now, I wish I had the time even more to read the other Orbulons.
Also, you used "the Founder," "Orbulon," and "Earth Guardian" so much that I was certain it would sound redundant, but it didn't. Great job with that.
I just have one question... Orbulon came from the Space Station, yes? And that is why he longs to be back there? Alright...that was two questions. ^_^
I will make time to review the other series.
I am hoping for later today...but I cannot be certain if I will have the time or not.
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Post by Tashni on Dec 11, 2006 13:46:59 GMT -5
This was a most interesting story. It was so serious that the dry humor, which was said with so much seriousness, was only made funnier. And so much happened, yet it all happened with perfect flow and was all easy to understand. I really enjoyed this. Now, I wish I had the time even more to read the other Orbulons. Thank you! I really think I'm being influenced by the British humor I've been reading and watching lately. (Dr Who, for instance.) Good! Pam and Psycho, my proof readers, were all over me on repetitiveness, so you can thank them ^_^ Correct and Correct! |
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Post by costaricangirl on Dec 11, 2006 18:06:01 GMT -5
Gallery of Evil: The Spider Grundo by RoseThis was quite an interesting story, and even though I wasn't much "into" it, I did enjoy reading it. It was flawlessly written, though I felt I knew what was going to happen quite near the beginning, though not in the same manner that it occured. Also, shortly after Shix broke his arm, the empahsis placed into conversation seemed a bit awkward to me. I also loved your creativeness with the names; they were quite interesting, and Shix sounds, in a way to me at least, spidery almost. Your use of numbers as names was almost reminescent of things done in the Holocaust, and that made this story quite eerily realistic. And though it's probably not even worth bringing up such a minor typo, in the following sentence, "crosses" should have been "crossed": The mutated Grundos surrounded the young schoolchildren, their muscular arms crosses over their gigantic green chests. Thank you so much!! Yeah, I figured it would be pretty obvious what happened, since it IS about the Spider Grundo... xD I tried to make it as original as possible, though. And the note about the conversation emphasis is quite helpful... I hadn't even noticed that! Thanks! |
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This story is so shocking! I love the way you describe all of the emotions... it's like you're really feeling what Novella is going through. So touching! Though, I'm wondering about one thing: why would Voltare attack Illusen when he knew Fiona and Novella were right there? 
