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Post by Kat on Oct 6, 2006 20:24:38 GMT -5
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Post by Komori on Oct 6, 2006 21:22:35 GMT -5
Wanna apologize for my lame joke this week. u_u It was necessary for part 2.
And hooray for being at the very bottom! XDDD
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Post by Deleted on Oct 6, 2006 21:40:54 GMT -5
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Post by Salah~ on Oct 6, 2006 21:44:51 GMT -5
Continued Series: Not a Ghost: Part Three
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Post by Dan on Oct 6, 2006 21:47:32 GMT -5
New Series: What Lies Hidden in Your Closet: Part One by Puppy
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Post by Deleted on Oct 6, 2006 21:52:31 GMT -5
Done and updated. I have way too much free time.
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Post by Beanie Morton on Oct 6, 2006 22:10:42 GMT -5
Short Story: Goodnight, Graphie
Whoo...I got the news page NT link picture thingy. Heh. It was an awesome custom pic. xD
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Post by Dan on Oct 6, 2006 22:12:10 GMT -5
Short Story: Goodnight, Graphie Whoo...I got the news page NT link picture thingy. Heh. It was an awesome custom pic. xD That one is awesome. XD |
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Post by Tashni on Oct 7, 2006 1:25:45 GMT -5
Graphie's pic is AWESOME!!!
I would love reviews of "Lesser Faerie." Thanks! I'll try to do some reviewing tomorrow.
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Post by Kat on Oct 7, 2006 2:13:50 GMT -5
[shadow=purple,left,300]Kwoiffei - you didn't have to. ^^; *shifts the list up to the first post*
And reviews for "Cry for a Queen", my and Lau's short story collab, would be appreciated.[/shadow]
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Post by Deleted on Oct 7, 2006 3:14:10 GMT -5
My brain's not working at the moment, so apologies if I'm a bit incoherent... The Misadventures of a Pink Lenny by immortalmina and tamia_silverwingVery nice. I really like the art on this comic - I want to pic up the Lenny and give him a big squishy hug  Floored Rorru! by autoc007 and m3rcuriI remember seeing this one before on the boards - glad it got in in the end  A Spooky Halloween, pt 1 by ghostkomorichuI don't think the joke's that bad, Komori It's a bit obvious maybe, but that doesn't mean it's not funny. How many parts has this series got? Not a Ghost: Part Three by moonshadow711An interesting way to end the story, but it felt a bit abrupt. The Garden: Part Two by digital_microwaveI enjoyed this - you're very good at description It would be really interesting to see a sequel at some point, bringing Fyora face to face with Kass/Serik again. And yay, I'm on the front page! |
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Post by Psycho on Oct 7, 2006 14:02:37 GMT -5
Cry for a Queen
This is the first story I was drawn to, and the first story I've read so far. I do have to admit that I didn't have high hopes going into the story, but your descriptions definitely warmed me up. The story flowed well, though the one thing that puzzles me is how the Queen knows of Shimra's inner conflict, especially since up until after the visit to town, the inner conflict has remained within Shimra's thoughts (maybe I'm underestimating her actions - drawing the curtain closed, her curtness, etc). I do like the ending - it was well written - I didn't find it repulsively sappy. The gem in this story is the way you developed Shimra's emotions - I could absolutely relate and nearly felt myself feeling the same way as I read. There were a few words here and there that I would have changed (things like using "into" instead of simply "to") but there was nothing major that stopped me as I read (as is expected from seasoned writers like yourselves).
So, overall, I give this story a high rating and will encourage others to read it.
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Post by Psycho on Oct 7, 2006 14:12:40 GMT -5
The Lesser Faerie
Before I start, allow me to comment on what a GREAT custom pic you received! I am thoroughly impressed. A story like yours deserves the custom pic. I remember helping you edit this story, but that was so long ago, so I did read it again. My overall impression hasn't changed. What intensity! I felt it was written eloquently - the emotions and descriptions of the little faeries are so beautiful. This is one of your best pieces I've ever read, Tashni.
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Post by Psycho on Oct 7, 2006 14:25:22 GMT -5
Goodnight, GraphieOK, first, cute title, and custom pic! So many custom pics this week! But then again these are all exceptional pieces. Let's get the improvements done first: "No, they're seemed like three whole days. " -  I think you may have made a small change to the sentence and forgot to ""Say ah," a tall blue Techo instructed, " "Graphie reluctantly stuck out her tongue and said ah." -- I think there ought to be quotations around "ah". "Christine sighed, as she waited," -- no comma after "sighed" There were a bunch of little places where grammar and/or punctuation could have been improved, but those were the only vices I had with this story. THE GOOD!!! My favorite part. This story was fun to read - it was lighthearted, even if the situation was serious (sleep is good). I loved the pea chia. I could just picture this tiny pea chiai shouting/squeaking its words at a bewildered neopet family. Graphie herself was fun to read about - though her character wasn't anything particularly unique, she wasn't boring. You didn't overemphasize the relatoinship she had with her siblings, which is good. Gosh, I can't get over that pea chia being there. The poor thing! Great ending! Loved the characterization.
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Post by Deleted on Oct 7, 2006 22:04:59 GMT -5
I'm going to try to read a story or two this week, but for now, here are my comic reviews.
The Misadventures of a Pink Lenny by immortalmina and tamia_silverwing
I kind of missed the whole joke or point of this... HOWEVER, the art was stunning! Applause for that. *hands out stale cookie* *pleads, "it's all that I had!"* *silence* *hands you my last Oreo instead*
Floored Rorru! by autoc007 and m3rcuri
WOW! I didn't believe this would get in, but since it did, I'd like to say that it is still as funny as the first time I read this. The art is lovely, as well. I particularly am fascinated by watching Rorru's expression and posture change. Great job! *scrounges around for another cookie* *gives you Oreo crumbs* *promises to buy more cookies for next week*
A Spooky Halloween, pt 1 by ghostkomorichu
I love Spooky! This one was just as great as all the others, too. Once again, I just adore the green korbat. I might have asked this before, I can't remember, but what are their names? Well, anyways, this was really great! *runs to store and buys more Oreos* *gives Komori the whole box*
---Excuse my excessiveness over the cookies...I am quite tired today, and I really need to go to bed.
---Also, I'd really appreciate reviews for "Hyperion: The Beginning."
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neo username - dan4884 
I think you may have made a small change to the sentence and forgot to