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Post by Deleted on Jun 6, 2006 18:28:45 GMT -5
Thanks for the review.  Yes, the line about how he was going to shed his "pathetic Eyrie form" was supposed to let you understand his transformation to a Korbat. Don't worry, I did my research there.  |
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Post by Belle on Jun 7, 2006 0:09:34 GMT -5
Fyora Does the Editorial! by ladyariel32 I loved this! I enjoyed it so much. Fyora wasn't at all how I imagined her but it was funny to picture her rolling her eyes etc at some of the questions. Thanks for the review, Star. ^^ *le glomp* I keep telling you guys that I'll be reviewing some stuff but I haven't been delivering, haven't I? pXD *tries to push herself one more time* |
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Post by peri on Jun 7, 2006 1:00:21 GMT -5
Thank you so much for the reviews, blub, kinohi, Nikki and star!  I greatly appreciate it! On to my reviews. . . The Gallion Ranch - The joke seems familiar to me for some reason. . . it's still funny though and I really believe it's true  Nice artwork Underwater "Fishing" - ROFL! That is funny! Good detail in the empty pond and nice art, looks like it was made in paint (Same thing I use hehe) Shoyru Squadron - Beautiful artwork, what else can I say? I kinda expected them to all pile together to form one big Shoyru attacker after reading that first panel. Must've had Power Rangers on the mind or something Can't wait for the next one! The Adventures of Leona and Kaa - Funny facial expression in the second panel. Cute joke Congrats on your first entry! Ways to Destroy a Pesky Owner - Cute Joke is amusing. Congrats on your first entry! |
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Post by Belle on Jun 7, 2006 1:16:26 GMT -5
Okies. Finally, I'm doing some reviews (well, one, anyway - more later)! ^^
Article Review
Oh, Joy, I'm Unhappy by nut862
I miss you, Nut! ^^ *le glomp* Just wanted you to know that (heh, as if the others - at least, the NTAGers - don't know about that). *sigh* Anyway, I'll be sending this via PM as soon as I post so that you'll get to read it when you return. On to the review...
First off, like Luau, I remember you mentioning this article of yours that was being heldover and that you hoped it was funny enough. Well, it was. ^^ You have your own brand of humor, Nut. I don't know how to explain it, really. It's just that you're style is funny without making direct jokes but it's not that kind of humor that makes you fall off your chair. It's the kind that makes you bite your lip to keep from smiling and makes you think about it for a while, too (because for a moment there, I thought it might be true). Personally, I think that's the kind of humor that's hard to write.
Your article is somewhat lengthy (well, longer than the usual article, anyway) but I was never bored. ^^ The prose was easy to read and everything just meshes together, you know? Each paragraph connects with the next and your lighthearted tone makes me want to read more. Just read. And, I enjoyed what I read. ^^
I'm not sure if I've read about your topic before but even if I did, the way you tackled it was just original (and very creative). I especially enjoyed those subtle references to your pets (especially Quiggler) and the spiffeh custom pic that you made yourself!
Congratulations, Nut. This was really well done. I can't wait to see you come back and write more articles (as well as your other stuff). ^^
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Post by Belle on Jun 7, 2006 2:37:59 GMT -5
Wow. This Fyora issue sure does have a lot of nice articles, doesn't it (including/excluding mine, of course.  )? It's been so long since I did some reviewing but now I'm in the mood to keep on going. ^^ Article Reviews[/u] The Valkenweig File: An Overview of the Yora Dynasty by really_awesome_d00dWhoo! Glad to see you're still writing, Jason. ^^ I haven't seen anything of yours in a while (fwaha, and I'm sure it's likewise). First off, this was a very interesting article. The topic itself has never been tackled before. And, the details. All those precious details! You even included each queen's royal colours and symbols. It must've been hard to come up with all of those. When I was reading through Claeyora's bio, a few thoughts came to mind. I wondered if the "facts" you gave actually happened in Neopian history especially when I came across the phrase, "defeated Malikka the Vile". But then, I read on and found out that Malikka was a Dark Faerie. Whoops. It looks like I mistook her for Malkus Vile. When I came to Thyora, I had that sense that I was probably missing something here (yup, I remembered the item "Thyora's Tear"). For a while there, I was quite mystified (and, at times, confuzzled, because I think read somewhere before that Thyora's a Neopet (oh, wait, that was someone's beautiful Times story ) and I was all the more eager to read more. The thing that really daunted me here was the length. ^^; Being a person with a relatively short attention span, I was really going to quit after I read about the first queen (I mean - 7,097 words, in all? ^^; Whew. How long did it take you to come up with this?) but I decided to go on because my curiosity got the better of me (glad I did ^^). XD I would have suggested that you made the piece into a two (or three) part article series. But, that's just me being my usual nitpicky self.  All in all, this was a great piece. I loved the "encyclopedia/lecture" mood going on here. And, my favourite part in each of the queen's bios is the history. Man, I learned a lot from 'em. You managed to weave a few Neopian facts into your commentary and even give explanations for some items/places that exist in Neopia (such as who constructed the Hidden Tower and why; Thyora's Tear) which made me feel like the entire article is actually based on "real" Faerieland history. In fact, I still do (well...is it? How in the world did you research for this article? ). Great job, Jason. Looking forward to seeing more of your work again in the Times! ^^ The Many Accomplishments of Fyora by lassie_nikkiI'm getting used to seeing your articles in the Times, Nikki. ^^ Go you! Keep on going (do you have the NT Star avvy now, btw? ^^ Time flies by...) By now, I've think I've already pinned down what all your articles have in common: creative content (even with a lot of us doing Fyora-themed articles, you managed to make your article unique); elegant, clean prose (easy-to-read, flows well); and fun! ^^ I do wish you'd included some subtle humor in this article the way you usually do. ^^ And, there were a some instances of redundant adjective use (nitpicking again, ignore me ). One last thing: this is one instance where I think the article should've been a little longer! I want more! Keep it up, Nikki! ^^ |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 7, 2006 6:02:51 GMT -5
ThankYou all SO much for the reviews for my comic. You were all so kind, and I definitely appreciate the feedback. It's definitely better than my last one. Oi. Dont Comment hehe. Only more to come from thr brains of moi and xprop. ;D |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 7, 2006 6:04:08 GMT -5
Comic Review By Moi! Disadvantage by tristess hehe I dont know what the maraquan aisha looks like, but this was really cute. The F.Faerie is deinitely one of the more popular faeries to spot that's for sure. Love the blues. So easy on the eye. Nightmare by sunny_pet Well I had to stretch my brain to 'get it' but I like the style of the comic. Looks Good! I Need WATER! by dark_exodia88 eeehehehe.. very funny. Figures.. they'd rather die of thirst than drink... -gasp- Water! I used to think this way myself, so got a kick out of it. Very Cute! Random Stuff by p0king Aww hehe Cute. I always love a good welcome story. The art is simple, but you can tell what's what easily, always nice.. and the joke is cute.. mis-identification is always funny! lol. Kat's Daze by hanna_dc Oooh So BRIGHT. hehe. Very funny.. I have often wondered about the practical nature of some of the items on neopets. Classic example. hehe Quite Funny! The Adventures of Leona and Kaa: Lunch anyone? by _ob1_kenobi_ eheh the expression on the guy's face is very funny. lol.. I didn't know if it was the hissi or the spyder talking in the last frame, but it didn't even really matter, it was still funny. And appropriate. hehe. Very Nice. Flarisal's Comic Life: The Ear and Tail Problem by akress Aww I love gelert art. their appendages are so pretty. hehe. Very nice art. And funny concept.. Great Job. Leave it to Sproginess by worldbystorm hehe I always love a good battledome comic. nicely done. I love the background in the first frame. I never know how to do cool stuff like that. hehe. Nice Job! Spyder Factory by wereninj The comic shines with the art. I always love that kewl neo-kid look. I can't seem to DO it.. but it's wicked awesome. Very Very Good! Random Silliness by dragonanz Cute! It was a TEENSY bit hard to follow but you get the idea. -nods- But I loooved the expressions on the faces of the zaffies. Adorable Kiddies. Luff Em. Very Cute! The Professor's Log by allyson0226 Awww.. Just cute. Nothing more needed to say about it. Sweet and Loveable Cuteness. Baby Lennies by animalluvor94 bwahahah. I never noticed the line.. but this was very funny. lol. And who doesn't love another meepit comic. lol. Lost... Or Not by im_a_dudette I normally rawr at mispellings, but it was close enough to.. almost.. not notice it. hehe. But the joke is very cute. hehe. MADNESS by bluefornmoon ehehe.. could use a little more color.. but my favorite part of the comic was the punchline being the opposite of what the comic was trying to point out. Very funny concept. heh.. To Be Unnormal Or Not to Be Normal by danish_demon Oooh.. complex.  I had to pay attention.. lol.. but that's not always a bad thing. heh. I love the blue kougra art exceptionally. Off Track by klipsan ehehe.. I just love the owner's expression. I wish I could draw people so well. lol.. Nice!! TrueBloo by imperial_drannian hehe Plot comics are the best. I love the lutari art. Very funny. Simple Sketches by purpleplayingpenguin Ahhh... Good Point. lol. I always love when oddness is pointed out. Very Clever. ;p High Voltage - Strange Meepits! by uslibra Very interesting idea. Originality is always a plus. Great Job! The Gallion Ranch by pacmanite I am a huge fan of your art. So warm and squishy. Looove the comic.. and very cute joke. three thumbs way up. hehe. Hissi Fit by jv_4057 ooohmigosh. So funny. heheh. -snort- I love this one. The joke is awesome.. My question is.. Which head retained the knowledge from that book? heheh. lol. Very Excellent Comic!! Modern Marvels by flarethdragon lol cute idea. never thought of that. I like the art style. it's different.. unique. Very Cool. Grundo: a PIN Problem by aquarocket aww cute. sometimes the gif look works, and sometimes it just doesn't.. but this looks awesome like that. Very clean, nice.. I like it. ;p And very cute idea. hehe. Neo Mania! Doctors by unis_lover200 heh. I think it would have been funnier if you used the actual word in the last frame and not the joke word, but it's cute. A Room With an Aisha by robbydude5 hmmm. Cute Comic. Definitely has potential funnyness. ;p Hug Me! by wsprite Aww hehe well that's just adorable. -pats squishy persistent huggy- Some interesting art placement choices, but the cute factor defintely won me over.. Now I want a huggy. hehe. MAN are there a TON of comics this week or WHAT?  I dont think I noticed til now, and it's now 6am and I'm beat. AND out of time. lol. I will do the other half of thr comics tmorrow. |
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Post by Lau on Jun 7, 2006 13:43:46 GMT -5
Thank you very much for the review, Doughnut! I am so glad you liked it. I'm also glad you picked up on the "purple" imagery... I was a bit worried that it was too subtle... that no one would notice it!
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Post by Nimras on Jun 7, 2006 14:24:02 GMT -5
Nothing is As it Seems: Part Four
by estantia
Hehe, first thing I have to comment on is how the Lenny in your custom seems to be staring longingly at the Fyora in the NT banner.
"He really does scream like a girl, doesn't he?"
"Yes, very high and very loudly..."
"Hey!"
I love this as an opening for a chapter. The ending is nice too, evil cliffhanger. Though one does wonder if the “nothing is as it seems’ means that it really isn’t Illusen….
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Post by Nimras on Jun 7, 2006 14:36:26 GMT -5
A Weak Heart: Part Three
by literalluau
Ohh, nice ending! Definitely not what I was expecting. *grin*
“Maelstra's face turned from startled to amused. "Jhudora's the one who gives quests, kiddies. She lives next door."”
I really like that part, not only does it firmly place her as a resident of Faereland, it show’s her as a confident person who is comfortable with where she is in life.
While Darin doesn’t exactly fit with Darigan’s history in the plots, I like this version too. *grin*
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Post by Tay - Sock Eater on Jun 7, 2006 14:43:37 GMT -5
Yes, thank you, can be found here: www.neopets.com/topneopets.phtml I never really noticed how many exclamation points there were, but after reading your comment and looking back, I see them all. Waay too many. They end almost every paragraph. =P Thank you for your review! Thanks, I like the picture too. =) And thank you for the review!! ---- Now I just need to get some reviews in. I'll start with comics of NTWFers. =P And wow. I just realized how long it had been since I was published last. 0.o; |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 7, 2006 14:53:57 GMT -5
Thanks! ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it. Writing it was hard work; it took me roughly three days to complete. But I can see that it certainly paid off. Thanks again for the review. =D Haha, Belle, I'm glad you liked it. This has been my first piece in a LONG time, since the Christmas issue to be exact. School's been overwhelming, and I'm hopeful that I can recover from it over this summer. ^^ Anyways, I first got this idea from a Storytelling competition where it mentioned Thyora as her mother. I noticed the "-yora" suffix, and it all kind of came off from there. ^^ I started it not thinking it would become the enormously huge piece of work that it now is. It took me roughly three days to start and finish. I didn't realize just how enormous it was until I was done with it, but I realized the limit on articles was 50,000 words so I didn't think much of it. I knew it would be daunting, but I figured it would fit the whole "encyclopedia entry" better if it was all in one piece. As for the facts... Well, I made up a TON of it. It was fun, though. =D I tried to make sure I included things that were prevalent in today's Neopia, like Thyora's Tear and the Hidden Tower and all that, so that it wouldn't become too much like a boring history lesson. ^^ Anyways, I'm really glad you liked it. =D Thanks so much for the review! |
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Post by Nimras on Jun 7, 2006 14:59:13 GMT -5
City Lupe on the Plains: Part Twoby kindheartedfairy Awww, he went back to the city…. I have to admit, that flew past rather fast for me; I had to read it a couple times to figure out exactly what happened. “Owners are evil!” “I think I’m going to move to the city, please don’t get mad at me “You’ve convinced me; let’s pick up the first human we met”  Maybe if there had been a bit more space between that… a couple weeks where hunting was bad, life was hard… stuff like that… to make it seem more reasonable. Other than “we shall fight to the death to remain wild – until you go away when we’ll pack up and move to town” I adore Benny in this chapter, he’s just so cute! *huggles* *prods Kathy to write more about Benny*
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Post by Tay - Sock Eater on Jun 7, 2006 14:59:43 GMT -5
COMICS
The Gallion Ranch
I like how most of the detail is focused on the pet and in the center, and the background is simple. However, I don't think you should have repeated the first and second frames. Maybe you could make him look more frustrated. Overall, great work! =D
Underwater "Fishing"
I really like this! I love his expression in the third frame, and I especially like the last frame. The last frame looks very busy and chaotic, and it makes me giggle. Good work!
The Adventures of Zezzer
Haha, VERY cute! =D I like the style of the art, the colors, how everything is layed out... The little plushie Lupe is especially darling. Also, it's a nice joke! Keep up the great work.
Ways to Destroy a Pesky Owner
Really good artwork. I love all of the shades of blue in the sky and green in the grass. I also love the cute little way you draw the pets. However, the first thing that bothered me was on the sign. The S in Sale looked like a G. But it's not really a big deal, just me, I guess. ;P And in the last frame, the Mynci's hand is going inside the sign/table. It looks kind of odd. But again, no big deal. I like the ZOOM effect, and the joke is cute and original. Congrats on getting into the NT, and good job!
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Post by Danish Demon on Jun 7, 2006 15:01:05 GMT -5
Oh yeah, if possible, I'd like to get my comic "To Be Unnormal Or Not to Be Normal" added to the reviews list.
Thank you ^_^
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Yes, the line about how he was going to shed his "pathetic Eyrie form" was supposed to let you understand his transformation to a Korbat. Don't worry, I did my research there. 
I greatly appreciate it! On to my reviews. . .
Nice artwork 
I had to pay attention.. lol.. but that's not always a bad thing. heh. I love the blue kougra art exceptionally.
Maybe if there had been a bit more space between that… a couple weeks where hunting was bad, life was hard… stuff like that… to make it seem more reasonable. Other than “we shall fight to the death to remain wild – until you go away when we’ll pack up and move to town”
