242 Reviews

[zipperaward]

Ways to Destroy a Pesky Owner by zipperaward
Heheh... nice composition. I'm not sure if it was accidental to have the house reminiscent of Norman Bates' house, but it added to the joke. Good job!


Thanks you The house thing was unintentional XD

[nikki]

The Many Accomplishments of Fyora

Sweet Fyora, your articles are well-written. Heh. Bad pun. Although, like someone else mentioned, I'd like to see a little more humor in this article to get rid of some of the seriousness of this light-hearted topic, I appreciated how you didn't repeat anything (hard to do in articles), researched your topic well, and were creative enough to come up with different and explainable accomplishments of Fyora. I would have liked to have seen the Jhudora thing show up a few more times since you introduced it like it would have something to do with the article, but that's nitpicky. Nice idea for an article, again. (People never cease to surprise me with their good ideas.)

Thanks a bunch Glad you liked it :3 I'll work on the humor in future articles ^^

[nikki]

Review time!
Oh, Joy, I'm Unhappy
I really enjoyed this article! It was cute, specific and well-written. Best of all, I'd never seen this idea before, very original! Nice job It certainly made me think twice about playing with my pets today, haha. ^^

Popular Pet Frenzy
Very Cute idea, I love the picture that came with this article :3 One sentence that just seemed really awkward to me was "The least amount of pets on this site is the Krawks." It gets the idea across but it may have sounded better to say the "least owned pet on the site is the Krawk" or something of that sort. That's no big deal though Nice job!

Fyora Does the Editorial!
Wow, how did you think of this? I'd never thought of an idea like that. hehe Great article! It was humorous at times, yet serious in other places, and it balanced out just right.

The Valkenweig File: An Overview of the Yora Dynasty

Great idea, firstly ^^ Your article was very well-written, well laid out and gave the reader a feeling a curiousity to learn more concerning the past queens. I like how you gave each past queen the same amount of description and recognition and didn't fail to make each stand out from the other. This is a super long article! It must have taken a lot of work, and it paid off! Great job

The Gallion Ranch
This comic's art and joke are both cute and original in its own way! Nice job :3

Underwater Fishing
I've seen a bunch of Underwater Fishing comics lately, seems to be popular. The idea of this one is one I hadn't seen before, very funny Makes me wish you didn't need patience for it. Nice job

The Adventure of Zezzer
I love this article, it's really cute ^^ Even the erasers are adorable, hehe. :3 and the joke is great, makes me wish my pet would spit up a petpetpet

Just saying this again, any reviews for The Many Accomplishments of Fyora would be appreciated Thanks. ^^

[Dan]

I'd still like one or two reviews, if anyone has the time to review? I've got cookies!

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*wouldn't mind a review for A Weak Heart herself*

The Treasure

I like Remnok's character and how you made him change for the better at the end. The ending was predictable, but nice. I like the difference in speaking between Remnok and Rakna. Rakna speaks like he doesn't get out much (and he's mysterious) while Remnok sounds like a normal Aisha.

The appearance of Rakna is a little unlikely. Some explanation or event leading up to his appearance would probably help the reader. Why did he pick this particular moment to show up? Was something particular going on that Remnok would need to know about his family? It's sad that his family died, but I think that's a better ending.

[Dan]

luau said:

Ooh, I read yours, Dan. As soon as I'm done with the story I'm on I'll review it. *wouldn't mind a review herself*

I'll trade you.

A Weak Heart- (all 3 parts)

A well written, albeit a tad slow story. I liked it very much, it was nicely written and it flowed well. However, a few nitpicks. Abbi would not barge in to a house she's never been in, for one. And I think Dwennon's gender could have been revealed earlier, since I kept thinking it was a girl. And it had a slow start, although it really picked up at the end. I enjoyed the twist, it was nice. However, how could Kayla be there if this is before Darigan's rise? She came after, I believe. I think this story would have been better if you developed it a bit more, maybe added another part so you could stretch the climax into a more exciting part, and closed the story a bit better. All in all, though, a good attempt. Work on your pacing is my advice.

luau said:

*wouldn't mind a review for A Weak Heart herself*

The Treasure

I like Remnok's character and how you made him change for the better at the end. The ending was predictable, but nice. I like the difference in speaking between Remnok and Rakna. Rakna speaks like he doesn't get out much (and he's mysterious) while Remnok sounds like a normal Aisha.

The appearance of Rakna is a little unlikely. Some explanation or event leading up to his appearance would probably help the reader. Why did he pick this particular moment to show up? Was something particular going on that Remnok would need to know about his family? It's sad that his family died, but I think that's a better ending.

Thank you very much!

[Danish Demon]

kinohi said:

To Be Unnormal Or Not to Be Normal by danish_demon
Cute art, I like the layout and captions. I'll bet this situations pops up often in Neohomes throughout Neopia.

Wee, thanks. I think it happens a lot too!
It's really nice that you take the time to comment all of the entries. Must take quite a lot of time...

[Belle]

luau said:

Fyora Does the Editorial!

*claps* Yay! This was so fun. Bug's brother certainly got his sibling in some trouble with her Majesty. You displayed Fyora in a fun light. She's still full of herself, but she's sarcastic and makes jokes which makes her seem more lifelike. Bug's brother also gave you a good way to end the article, which may have been hard to do well otherwise.

Your questions aren't all the same or basic. You got creative with them and then got creative again with Fyora's answers. And you just had to stick in the Rainbow Fountain Faerie Dolls, which made me beam with pride.

Haha! ^^ Thanks, Luau. *glomps* I had fun writing it. Feh. I'm glad my humor didn't make you scratch your head for a while. And, how could I forget Rainbow Fountain Faerie Dolls?

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Fyora Does the Editorial!
Wow, how did you think of this? I'd never thought of an idea like that. hehe Great article! It was humorous at times, yet serious in other places, and it balanced out just right.
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Thankies for the review, Nikki. ^^ Fyora inspires me. She's quite a character.

I'll try to squeeze in some reviews later. ^^

Also, reviews for meh article would still be much appreciated. p:)

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I'll trade you.

A Weak Heart- (all 3 parts)

A well written, albeit a tad slow story. I liked it very much, it was nicely written and it flowed well. However, a few nitpicks. Abbi would not barge in to a house she's never been in, for one. And I think Dwennon's gender could have been revealed earlier, since I kept thinking it was a girl. And it had a slow start, although it really picked up at the end. I enjoyed the twist, it was nice. However, how could Kayla be there if this is before Darigan's rise? She came after, I believe. I think this story would have been better if you developed it a bit more, maybe added another part so you could stretch the climax into a more exciting part, and closed the story a bit better. All in all, though, a good attempt. Work on your pacing is my advice.

Thanks, Dan. I agree with you on the gender issue, I've had several people point that out to me. I guess I took for granted that I know Dwennon is a boy's name. Anywho. Abbi did know the house, she was Darin's best friend. Plus it's part of her personality not to care about people's privacy (she just went raking through Darin's stuff, ya know). As for the pacing, I see where you're coming from and even considered it while writing the story. But I like the way it turned out even though it's not the way some would have it. As for Kayla, I think you're right...easy to tell I'm not a Neopian history buff. Thanks again, I appreciate it.

[Star]

No reviews this week? I can't review today but tomorrow. I have exams this week. Sorry!

EDIT: Decided that reviewing is more fun than history so see for reviews below.

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One for Star.

The Faerie Who Rebelled

Reminds me of Rumplestilskin (sp?), but at least there are no first-born children involved.

I like the bits of humor you twist in the story. ""What did you win today?" I yawned. "Another Gross Burger?"

Melinda laughed. "Would I be excited about winning a Gross Burger?"

'Yes,' I thought. "No," I said."

So funny. Great characterizations as well, of Melinda, Caylis, and Minty. I kinda wish her brother had been brought up again since he was mentioned at the beginning, but he was also a nice way to explain why she was being blessed.

The ways that she guessed the faerie's name were clever, if a little unlikely. I can understand that you wouldn't want to draw it out for a long time and I liked the first clue especially where she laughed silently to herself.

I liked that this wasn't the typical story: pet needs blessing, faerie gives blessing, pet feels better about him/herself. At the end, she calls it a waste because her intelligence was already so high and pretty much just chalks it up to experience. I like Minty, she's clever and spunky.

[Star]

A couple of reviews...

The Cello by shadowcristal
A great story! The ending was just perfect and it wasn't at all cliched.

Fyora Does the Editorial! by ladyariel32
I loved this! I enjoyed it so much. Fyora wasn't at all how I imagined her but it was funny to picture her rolling her eyes etc at some of the questions.

[Star]

luau said:

One for Star.

The Faerie Who Rebelled

Reminds me of Rumplestilskin (sp?), but at least there are no first-born children involved.

I like the bits of humor you twist in the story. ""What did you win today?" I yawned. "Another Gross Burger?"

Melinda laughed. "Would I be excited about winning a Gross Burger?"

'Yes,' I thought. "No," I said."

So funny. Great characterizations as well, of Melinda, Caylis, and Minty. I kinda wish her brother had been brought up again since he was mentioned at the beginning, but he was also a nice way to explain why she was being blessed.

The ways that she guessed the faerie's name were clever, if a little unlikely. I can understand that you wouldn't want to draw it out for a long time and I liked the first clue especially where she laughed silently to herself.

I liked that this wasn't the typical story: pet needs blessing, faerie gives blessing, pet feels better about him/herself. At the end, she calls it a waste because her intelligence was already so high and pretty much just chalks it up to experience. I like Minty, she's clever and spunky.

Oooh thank you Luau! I was so worried that this story was a disaster! I was going to bring her brother up again but I couldn't think how so I left it. Yeah, it was unrealistic...but then so is a rebel faerie! (apart from Jhudora...but she's a dark faerie. Heh. )

[Star]

The Gallion Ranch by hakuryu_86 and pacmanite
Heh heh! I always wondered how those got in there... The art was good as well. It was cute and the last panel was perfect.

Underwater "Fishing" by gliderames and xpropugnator
This has to be the most original underwater fishing joke I've seen. It was completely different to the usual ones and I loved it!

The Adventures of Zezzer by peri0neo and king_kino
The art's really cool! Ahhh, I'm surrounded by good drawers!!! *wishes I could draw*. Anyhow, the joke was funny. Although it took me a while to get. I don't get how I took so long to get it, must be my tired mind!

Shoyru Squadron: Agents of Faerie by the_darkjedi
Need I say anything? How do you DRAW LIKE THAT?!?!?! It's amazing.

The Adventures of Leona and Kaa: Lunch anyone? by _ob1_kenobi_
Took me a while to get...but again, it's my tired mind. (Yeah, excuses, Star) But when I finally got it, it was pretty funny.

Ways to Destroy a Pesky Owner by zipperaward
Heh. Funny joke, nice art.

[estantia]

Ways to destroy a pesky owner: the joke was good, I loved the way he was trying to sell her again...

rebel faerie: I did like the twwist at the end and the idea in general, I don't think I've seen a faerie like that before, original story!

A weak heart: I like the idea and it is written well, however I did wonder, is darigan an eyrie? his head seems more like a korbat... I love the idea though...

Underwater fishing: I just wonder why no other pets have done that yet...