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Post by Huntress on May 17, 2006 10:14:55 GMT -5
If this board isn't getting nice and long again ^^ This week has many comics, so this post shall be long too. Muwahaha. I should get back to reading stories aswell... maybe later this week *absent nod* Ooh, and thanks to all who reviewed my stuff in the last couple of issues =3 I wasn't very active back there and I don't think I should bump the threads up now for my thank-yous.
The Pixel Platter: kehehe, the last panel was hilarious x3 Original joke too. Though yeah, as mentioned before, the order of the bubbles is kinda out of hand. I had to read the panels twice to fully understand them. Still, nicely done ^^
Shoyru Squadron: Agents of Faerie: the art rocks *firm nod* So many details... and that pixelized effect of the dissolving bearogs was really interesting. I'm really looking forward to the next part.
The Randomness of Skarl: now that's why I don't like that game. Way too random... I liked the joke and the art ^^ The grey dots connecting the panels were an interesting touch too.
Spooky: gawd, that was hilarious x3 Poor Tombstones. Claw's expression in the last panel is probly the best part of this comic. The only thing I found odd were the Grarrl's feet. He looked like he was about to slide off the chair. Or maybe it's just me... one way or another, I loved this comic. One of your best ones yet, IMHO.
Neopian Coffee Shop, Part 3: ooh, an animated .gif comic =3 Not sure if many people noticed QT's face going green in the second panel, I spotted that pretty much accidentally. Could've been a brighter tone of green, methinks. The expressions are great though, and the joke was cute too.
Today in Neopia: nice art, and a good joke :3 The "oops" felt pretty redundant though, and the speech bubbles in the second panel should've been more separated. Even though the Blumaroo's saying is lower, it still comes first for the human eye. All in all, well done.
Disastrous Dubloons: hehe, that was funny :3 I see that you worked a lot on that comic, and that warning sign was a really cute touch. The "sinking" note felt redundant though, and so did the red thingamabob (mouth?) on the pile of coins. Got me kinda confused.
Moooaaaaaannnnnnnn!!!: nice art, and a nice joke ^^ The doctor's expression in panel two was a bit weird, couldn't really understand what he was thinking or doing. The occasional words in bold didn't make much sense either. Still, a pretty good comic :3
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Post by Deleted on May 17, 2006 11:08:43 GMT -5
Introducing the Lovely Lutari!Yay! The first Lutari interview!  I like your description at the beginning. The unexpected news, the throngs of people, the elusiveness of the Lutaris, etc. I felt the description of the Green Lutari was a little forced. (Maybe you like them least?) You said it would match all of the reader's neopets but...why would the green when the others wouldn't? It kind of seemed like you were searching for something to say. I also know how well you can write, so I would have like to have seen more creative transitions instead of firstly, finally, the red, etc. Those are fine, I guess, but creative transitions that further your point will keep the reader more interested. I liked the interview at the end. Did you ever say what color she was? That would have interested me. Probably blue, though. To tell you the truth, a lot of times I keep glancing toward the end in articles, but while reading yours I didn't. Your writing style is anything but boring and I felt you had just the right amount of filler--not so much that I was bored, but enough to let your reader know what your point is. Great job on the first Lutari interview! You did it justice. Thanks for the review!  The green lutari is the one I like the least, so it's interesting to hear that that showed, hehe. I agree about the transition between the colour descriptions, though  I remember thinking that needed work but I guess I managed to forget  Glad you think I did it justice though ^_^ I'm glad you thought I got the personalities right That was my opinion, and so I was worried it might spoil the article if I had totally different opinions to other people xD Thank you so much for reviewing! ^_^ Reviews coming shortly, I promise *fails at time management* |
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Post by peri on May 17, 2006 23:40:03 GMT -5
Back from Vegas! Time to catch up on some reviews... The Pixel Platter - *hugs zebra* Congrats on making it into the NT! I thought your joke was really funny. I used to go there when I was a newbie and wonder exactly when it would actually start working  Can't wait to see your next one! Shoyru Squadron - Still very impressed by the artwork. I feel like waiting until you release a couple so I'm not left waiting for the next one. LOL! This is the reason I tape all my tv shows... Spooky - LOL! Love this series, love the artwork. I hate that game as well. The expressions in each panel are very appropriate. Tombstones head in the sand with his bump on the head, that's what I envision happens to my pets after a game of volleyball Neopian Coffee Shop - Funny joke! Typical literal fare of Notions & Nonsense, gotta love it Love the thoughtful expression on the waitresses face in the 2nd panel. Today in Neopia - I thought the joke was amusing It looks like the faerie was drawn with a different program than the darigan blumaroo though. I really like the darigan blumaroo, especially in the last panel Disastrous Dubloons - ROFL! I never thought of the game that way, but it sure does make sense :-D And boy is it really a long, monotonous game  Very cute comic! Moooaaaaaannnnnnnn!!! - LOL! I love the expressions of the doctor wocky between panels. Thoughtful in the first panel, all-knowing in the second and so pleased with himself in the third. Great job! |
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Post by Tashni on May 18, 2006 1:18:56 GMT -5
CotCR: Treachery - Part One by nimras23 - I LOVE the opening so much. It sets a great tone for the series and intro for Mareian. (Have I mentioned how much I love her name?)
I also really like that this is from Mareian's POV. She's so interesting already. We see the thief and gentlewoman in her. I'm really interested to see what this ring is, who the traitor is, and what will happen between her and Jeran. ^_^ Can't wait for part 2!
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Post by Nimras on May 18, 2006 9:57:15 GMT -5
CotCR: Treachery - Part One by nimras23 - I LOVE the opening so much. It sets a great tone for the series and intro for Mareian. (Have I mentioned how much I love her name?) I also really like that this is from Mareian's POV. She's so interesting already. We see the thief and gentlewoman in her. I'm really interested to see what this ring is, who the traitor is, and what will happen between her and Jeran. ^_^ Can't wait for part 2! Thank you Tashni! Just so you all know, I do save these in a word document so I can use comments and criticisms in my future projects... They really do help. |
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Post by Kat on May 18, 2006 21:52:57 GMT -5
[shadow=purple,left,300]Haven't made reviews in a while. ^^;[/shadow]
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Treachery: Part One by nimras23
Very nice beginning there, and you supplied quite a bit of info that will help the readers who haven't read Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Rivalry. However, I just have a little nitpick. Some of the parts have been described in a deep way such that some readers may need to read them more than once to get the drift. But everything seems so...professionally-written, that I can't seem to nitpick anything anymore. Overall, a really good beginning for a series. I'll be looking forward to more. ^_^
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Post by Deleted on May 19, 2006 9:59:04 GMT -5
A New DayThis was really sweet The plot moved along nicely, and I liked the way that it slowly unravelled. The opening paragraph was really nice ^_^ The way that you told the reader it was Fyora without actually saying it was good too. The only thing I wasn't sure about, was the sudden change in Rae. The diary was interesting but... would it really have changed Rae's attitude? Fyora solved her problems by becoming home schooled, and Rae didn't do that? I think it would have helped to have shown a little bit more of her thoughts in that final part All in all though, really nice ^_^
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Post by Nimras on May 19, 2006 10:16:28 GMT -5
[shadow=purple,left,300]Haven't made reviews in a while. ^^;[/shadow] Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Treachery: Part One by nimras23Very nice beginning there, and you supplied quite a bit of info that will help the readers who haven't read Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Rivalry. However, I just have a little nitpick. Some of the parts have been described in a deep way such that some readers may need to read them more than once to get the drift. But everything seems so...professionally-written, that I can't seem to nitpick anything anymore. Overall, a really good beginning for a series. I'll be looking forward to more. ^_^ What can I say... there's deep like the ocean - or deep like the black abyss. Too bad I'm usually in the second. Thanks Kat! |
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Post by Star on May 19, 2006 16:41:02 GMT -5
A New DayThis was really sweet The plot moved along nicely, and I liked the way that it slowly unravelled. The opening paragraph was really nice ^_^ The way that you told the reader it was Fyora without actually saying it was good too. The only thing I wasn't sure about, was the sudden change in Rae. The diary was interesting but... would it really have changed Rae's attitude? Fyora solved her problems by becoming home schooled, and Rae didn't do that? I think it would have helped to have shown a little bit more of her thoughts in that final part All in all though, really nice ^_^ Yay! A review! *huggles* Thank you so much! I'm glad you could tell it was Fyora. I've gotten so many neomails for this story, some critiscising me for making it too obvious (?), and others having NO CLUE whatsoever. Hmm...yes I see what you mean about Rae. But I hate making stories too long and I spent ages trying to think of a more suitable ending but couldn't think. ;P Lol. Thank you! |
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Post by Nimras on May 19, 2006 17:00:56 GMT -5
I've gotten so many neomails for this story, some critiscising me for making it too obvious (?), and others having NO CLUE whatsoever. Sounds like you made it perfect then. |
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I like your description at the beginning. The unexpected news, the throngs of people, the elusiveness of the Lutaris, etc.
The green lutari is the one I like the least, so it's interesting to hear that that showed, hehe. I agree about the transition between the colour descriptions, though 
I remember thinking that needed work but I guess I managed to forget 
Can't wait to see your next one!
Very cute comic!
