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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 16:45:32 GMT -5
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 16:58:11 GMT -5
Return of the Double Agent: Part Seven by precious_katuch14 and shadowcristal
“Apparently they were debating on whether to make Non-Cellblock Week into Non-Cellblock Month.” Hee! For some reason this line cracks me up. *grin* As does the Darigan – the – cake - maker. I adore the description of the cake, I could easily picture it – and it made me hungry. I don't really have anything to improve on... though it's kind of hard to review when you've got a big dog next to you breaking open bones. >.<
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Post by Star on May 12, 2006 17:02:08 GMT -5
Hi, could someone please review my short story, A New Day? I'll be taking short story review requests. Thanks!
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 17:08:31 GMT -5
The Five Sacred Stones of Geraptiku: Part Four by dan4884 The evil circular time question. For some reason this chapter seemed shorter than the others. It might be because there were more action scenes in this one though. I do wish there was a bit more of an explanation for why this was happening, though I can also see how it would be hard to work in an explanation so far. Hints would be nice though.  Poor Ekwi.  |
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Post by Dan on May 12, 2006 17:10:12 GMT -5
The Five Sacred Stones of Geraptiku: Part Four by dan4884 The evil circular time question. For some reason this chapter seemed shorter than the others. It might be because there were more action scenes in this one though. I do wish there was a bit more of an explanation for why this was happening, though I can also see how it would be hard to work in an explanation so far. Hints would be nice though. Poor Ekwi. Wow, thank you Nimras! I'll be sure to review your new series. ;D |
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Post by Deleted on May 12, 2006 17:17:18 GMT -5
First thing I want to say, is a huge thank you to everyone who reviewed my comic in issue 237  It seems ages ago now, but I'm in the run-up to exams and so didn't have enough time to keep up with the thread. Rather than revive that thread, I figured I'd post a thank you on this thread instead, since it's mostly the same people And I shall endeavour to get some reviews up for this issue asap ^_^ |
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 17:21:43 GMT -5
A New Day by star_29791
“She was the only light faerie in her school and when today, they had to cast spells to make a room light from dark, she'd had to leave the room as her natural glow was making the room too light.” *boggles* I love this mental picture. The diary's entries were very well done; the origin of Illusen and Jhudora's mutual dislike from the POV of a person stuck in the middle. I also like how you gave hints about the diary's original owner ( “F” and the purple writing)
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Post by Dan on May 12, 2006 17:25:30 GMT -5
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Treachery - Part One by Nimras Wow, good start! Although I'm not too familiar with the characters, I suppose that is because I haven't read the other Chronicles. But a suggestion nonetheless would be to reintroduce those characters so new readers can see who they are. The writing is lovely, the dialogue is realistic, and I'm intrigued as to what the Ring will do. Although I'm not sure what the plot is yet, I'm sure the next part will add on to it. Good job, I look forward to the rest! (And by the way, how many parts is it? Just curious, of course.  |
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 17:28:20 GMT -5
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Treachery - Part One by Nimras Wow, good start! Although I'm not too familiar with the characters, I suppose that is because I haven't read the other Chronicles. But a suggestion nonetheless would be to reintroduce those characters so new readers can see who they are. The writing is lovely, the dialogue is realistic, and I'm intrigued as to what the Ring will do. Although I'm not sure what the plot is yet, I'm sure the next part will add on to it. Good job, I look forward to the rest! (And by the way, how many parts is it? Just curious, of course. *grin* Thanks! I'm doing my best to re-introduce them each time I write a story, but they get kind of spaced out through the first three chapters in this one I think. This is the 4th one in this plotline, and it's 12 chapters in total. |
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 18:00:28 GMT -5
A Thousand Words by ridergirl333
Nice to see you out of retirement. *grin* Awww, and the picture of Emerald and Sapphire is so cute. The descriptions in this story are beautiful, especially the one with the sun flitting like a butterfly though the waves. I think some of the dialog would be kind of awkward if one hadn't read the story that took place before this one you had up somewhere off the NT. It wasn't really a problem for me because I'd read it though.
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Post by Star on May 12, 2006 18:05:56 GMT -5
A New Day by star_29791 “She was the only light faerie in her school and when today, they had to cast spells to make a room light from dark, she'd had to leave the room as her natural glow was making the room too light.?*boggles* I love this mental picture. The diary's entries were very well done; the origin of Illusen and Jhudora's mutual dislike from the POV of a person stuck in the middle. I also like how you gave hints about the diary's original owner ( “F?and the purple writing) Thank you for the review! And so fast... Yes, I didn't want to make it TOO obvious it was Fyora so I'm glad it worked. |
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 18:12:21 GMT -5
Neopian Coffee Shop, Part 3 by mindsend and Patjade
Yuck! Now I'm going to take a double take every time I see coffee. I'd never even thought of that pun. >.< I love the expressions in this comic, they convey the expression very well.
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Post by Psycho on May 12, 2006 19:11:32 GMT -5
So, I'm not around to put up a list of Titles and Authors, so no one else steps up to do it? *hinthint coughcough*
I don't have time to read the NT this weekend, and I still have to catch up on those last two issues xD Well, I'll get around to it, if people dont' mind receiving reviews a month or so late xD
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Post by Gav on May 12, 2006 19:37:21 GMT -5
[glow=red,2,300]A Thousand Words by ridergirl333[/glow]
...Rider, you have definitely been playing way too much FFX-2. *pokes*
That said, it's nice to see you come back.
Now on to the story. It's definitely interesting, for sure. It's never said how many years it's been since Emerald last saw Rider, or if he even met Amethyst, but he's definitely matured (though I personally preferred the old Em). Sapphire's also changed- a bit confused about the 'angel eyes' bit, since all Eyries technically have the same eyes, right? And I figured if Emerald's been on Krawk Island so long, he'd probably have adjusted to pirate speech or painted himself. Hmm.
It's very well written- excellent use of adjectives, decent flow, and makes a nice read. The one or two lines in italics make a nice touch, too. A decent improvement from your last piece. Good job.
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Post by Nimras on May 12, 2006 21:28:25 GMT -5
So, I'm not around to put up a list of Titles and Authors, so no one else steps up to do it? *hinthint coughcough* I don't have time to read the NT this weekend, and I still have to catch up on those last two issues xD Well, I'll get around to it, if people dont' mind receiving reviews a month or so late xD I reviewed when I recongnized the author as an NTWF member, but to be honest, I'm horrible with names. Especially when people use a very different name here than their username. So if I missed anyone, just request a review - because it means I'm a ditz and don't know who you are. *grin* |
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Poor Ekwi. 
neo username - dan4884 
It seems ages ago now, but I'm in the run-up to exams and so didn't have enough time to keep up with the thread. Rather than revive that thread, I figured I'd post a thank you on this thread instead, since it's mostly the same people 
Furgo 
Michael. 