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micrody said:

The Portrait: Part Three by Jason
The fact that you've taken the time and the words to name so many paintings and artists fascinates me. It adds so much depth and body to this story, that I just can't get enough of it. It also strengthens the story's significance of portraits, for even though I can assume which portrait is the eponymous piece, the title could always refer singularly to various paintings at various times during the story, even if they all aren't exactly "portraits."

I am stunned, stunned at how vividly and how strongly this entire piece has been written. It is part horror, part mystery, part literary-- and all parts amazing. The portrait's returning again and again...it was terrorizing to say the least. And it was awesome. The reactions each time, parallel and simultaneously unique, were baffling, and yet entrancing. Amazing.

One thing that did for me make this part much greater than the others before it was that it possessed full unity; unlike parts one and two, it followed but one character, and that one character was given length beyond that of either of the first two parts. That, I feel, made the suspense and the power of this part all the more greater.

I eagerly, eagerly await the next part, my mouth watering and my thirst begging to be quenched.

Wow! Thank you so much for that, Wolf! (You are Wolf, right? XD)

Anyways, I'd always expected that this part was either going to make or break the story; this is where the action begins to pick up significantly, and the element of horror is more expounded upon. Not to mention Mrs. Prenderghast is, as you said, the full focus.

As such, I'm very relieved to find that you enjoyed it so much. ;D The next part is where it *really* starts getting intense...

[jockylocky]

reallyawesomedood said:

micrody said:

The Portrait: Part Three by Jason
The fact that you've taken the time and the words to name so many paintings and artists fascinates me. It adds so much depth and body to this story, that I just can't get enough of it. It also strengthens the story's significance of portraits, for even though I can assume which portrait is the eponymous piece, the title could always refer singularly to various paintings at various times during the story, even if they all aren't exactly "portraits."

I am stunned, stunned at how vividly and how strongly this entire piece has been written. It is part horror, part mystery, part literary-- and all parts amazing. The portrait's returning again and again...it was terrorizing to say the least. And it was awesome. The reactions each time, parallel and simultaneously unique, were baffling, and yet entrancing. Amazing.

One thing that did for me make this part much greater than the others before it was that it possessed full unity; unlike parts one and two, it followed but one character, and that one character was given length beyond that of either of the first two parts. That, I feel, made the suspense and the power of this part all the more greater.

I eagerly, eagerly await the next part, my mouth watering and my thirst begging to be quenched.

Wow! Thank you so much for that, Wolf! (You are Wolf, right? XD)

Anyways, I'd always expected that this part was either going to make or break the story; this is where the action begins to pick up significantly, and the element of horror is more expounded upon. Not to mention Mrs. Prenderghast is, as you said, the full focus.

As such, I'm very relieved to find that you enjoyed it so much. ;D The next part is where it *really* starts getting intense...

I'm not the one that did that extra long review, but that part was significant. If it gets even more intense, i am very excited for the next part. This is one of my personal favorites, so congratulations and a well-done series!

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goosher said:

The Bunker by Huba
Yay, the Bunker's back ^^ Vrilyo and Phil remind me of two little kids. (read: my brother and I) ALways threatening to bust someone else's stuff. XD And the caffeine faerie was cute. The only criticism I have, and I think this is one you've heard before, distuingish the species of Rory and Akujima. She's a Xweetok, he's a Kyrii, but it's hard to tell. And no awesome-peophin-spell in this issue. D:

Sorry I missed a week. Like I said, testing came up. * phew * Yes! That’s exactly what I was trying to convey! The childishness! X3 Sorry, no spell this time.
As for the species thing, should I just mention at some point what which of them are, or do you suggest I redo their design? < I actually have a future issue planned where it is mentioned that Rory is a Kyrii. :/ Thank you for the review!

serene said:

The Bunker by Huba
I liked this comic because it is something that many people put up with, and with humor of how sillly the little disputes are. I liked the part about the Caffiene Faerie.

Thank you very much! *Hugs caffeine faerie* cool signature pic, by the way.

tashni said:

The Bunker by Huba - I remember reading this is the work reviews thread. Nice job, this is a really cute comic. The only thing I'd do is simplify it. There's a little much dialogue, especially in panel 2.

Yeah, I have a bad habit with lots of talking. ^_^' Sometimes though, things just need to explained to set up the situation, and words take less space than pictures..... and less wor. >_<' *Huba ish laaaaaaaaaaaaazy*

myrtale said:

The Bunker by Huba
Let me say that I thought this was a really funny and cute comic. The major problem I had with it though was Sorore's text. The font was very hard to read at times, more importantly annoying. Though, something I found particularly funny for me was when you did zoom in's of the two's eyes. The Chia just made me laugh. Chia's always have those eyes. Haha. Did you do this on purpose to show the Chia's eyes? Nice comic overall!

Drat. >_<' Knew I shouldn't have used Chiller. T_T
Ha! Yes! XD Someone caught the joke on the chia eyes. They're just a line for goodness sakes! I've always found that amusing. X3

[Belle]

This isn't really a review but I just wanted to say...

Yay. ^_^ Smelly Nelly is back.

On that note, I'll say nice pun, as well. XXDD And I really love your coloring style, Nina. The colors just pop out of the page. ^_^

[myrtale]

If some one could kindly review my short story (when time is available) I'd appreaciate it Thanks!

[PFA]

micrody said:

Dark Friend: Part Four by PFA
"What??" Wanda yelped. — I see this frequently, to be honest, but I firmly hold the stance that says double punctuation is bad... (although, under very infrequent occasions, I might think that '?!' is acceptable). Usually, strong and vivid words can eliminate the need for double-usage solely for emphasis.

The swiftness with which Laura opened up and revealed Dina's identity as the Indera seemed to happen too quickly, especially since two of those present were complete strangers for the most part. As well, to the extent with which you explained things, I feel now even more strongly that the note at the beginning concerning the prequel was without cause.

However, for how swiftly things moved, I can foresee much left to come in this story...good and bad alike.

Thanks for the review!

Hmm... yeah, I guess I use double-punctuation a lot. ;; It's tricky to get the emphasis I want without it though... but I'll see if I can use it less often.

This part was kind of rushed, wasn't it? >_>;; Yeah, I agree she said that a little quickly... and about the note, I'm seriously wishing I could get rid of that. I think it's kind of late now, though.

Again, thanks again for the review! ;

[Tashni]

micrody said:

Outsider Within: Web of Deceit - Part Five by Tashni
The action scenes were really well-written and I was clearly able to see everything that went on and where everyone was (which is sometimes hard for me with such intensity as there was). I had suspected D.A. to remain loyal to Darigan, so it didn't surprise me when she did, but you built up the suspense powerfully and I did feel relief when she turned on Hadrak and subdued him and the Techo holding Redik hostage.

Cool. ^_^ Writing action scenes is a big challenge, so I'm glad it worked well, and that I managed to build suspense. ^_^

unsure of if or how to attack

That's rather difficult wording to read, I found, and it cause me to stumble quite a bit in trying to read it properly. Of course, mind you, I was able to make sense of it after a moment, but it's worth watching out for such wordiness in the future.

You're right. ^_^"

The paragraph immediately following the first break seemed very rushed, but by the time I had finished reading that scene, I had forgotten entirely about how rushed it had felt. It was bright and joyous, that first bit, so when D.A. reacted so humbly to Darigan's wish to award her publically, it was both saddening and solemn. And then those few sentences about her name simply made it even more so. So much contrast in such a short period of space was really done well and executed flawlessly, I feel.

I'm all about the emotional contrast in this series. ^_^ I'm so happy that the feelings I meant to put into the story are coming out right.

The final bit of exposition seemed to serve a dual purpose to me. First, it served to clear up anything that might have been lingering on a reader's mind (although none of had it really lingered upon mine, truth be told); and, second, it served to imply that D.A. might someday return. Personally, I think that would be an awesome day.

Well, not to say too much, but hopefully I will be able to submit Outsider Within 2 not long after 300. (But knowing me, it will probably be a couple months. Although I'm getting out of school for the summer soon.)

So, now it's over.

You know, for this having been merely five parts, it's definitely among my favorite series to date.

You're an awesome writer, Tashni, and I look forward to reading your next piece.

SQUEE! Thank you Wolf. It means a lot. ^_^

[Goosh]

What's this? FREE TIME? *le gaspeth* I know what to do!

The Midnighter by czenko28
I liked this story a lot. At first Sammie just seemed kind of mean, then just plain heartless. And she had a Cockney accent =D The story bits (italicized) were really interesting, and I think Chipper learned that, along with the identity of then real Midnighter, that some stories shouldn't be taken seriously. Good job!

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hubadawaha said:

I'll also draw tiny little clothes on their chibi forms because I'm tired of hearing "They're naked", even though they're so blobby I find clothes are unnecessary in their chibi forms. T_T Meh.

I never said they needed clothing. ^_^ I just said it was funny.

And seeing as how this is a comedic comic series, that's a good thing. :)

reallyawesomedood said:

Wow! Thank you so much for that, Wolf! (You are Wolf, right? XD)

Yep, I'm Wolf. ^_^ _{Darn that Vykromod! *mutters incoherently*}

If part four is even more intense, I'll be happy. *nods feverishly* I love reading intense writing, and although it's not common that I read horror or suspense, I really enjoy it for the most part.

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The Midnighter by Czenko28
This was a good story. The "introduction" of the story being told was interesting, yet it made the story seem rather predictable to me. As well, Sammie's strange way of speaking soon became tiresome, and it was just heartless and cruel when she kicked Chipper out. The second italic part didn't please me much; it just seemed like a bunch of exposition giving the Midnighter's side of the story to me.

Despite my touch criticism, though, this was still well-written with only a couple of typos and I did enjoy reading it. I hope those two pets can be found good new homes because of this. :)


A Cooty's Fang by Myrtale
I once read a story that, for the four out of five pages, told about a woman's trip to France. Then, on the last page, she returned home to find her parent's had died and the ensuing scenes of her life were rushed through. I felt cheated somehow, because the true conflict of the story, what I truly wanted to read, had been rushed through.

Your story felt like that to me; it was beautifully written (although I did at times find the perspective of a Petpet a bit strange to read), yet, at the end, what really had my interest-- the Cooty's relationship to the Fangy --had been rushed through. I would have loved for that aspect of this story to have been expanded and given more substance. The rest seemed like characterization that had ran rampant to me; though it was effective characterization, only a couple paragraphs of it had given me a good image of Fang, and after that, the rest seemed a bit dull until the Cooty came along.

The last line, in which the Cooty declared that the Fangy was its own, made me smile. Yet, I still wished that I had gotten to know the Cooty more, so that this statement would have been a little something more beyond simply being cute.

[myrtale]

Thank you for that, Wolf. I had a lot of fun writing this story actually. the fact it was a Petpet perspective was a challenge. I wanted it to be more realistic to the fact Petpet's don't really talk in Neopets. Like most pets in the real world, I'm sure they could talk to eachother though. As Fang the only Petpet I stayed away from giving it a sort of smarter intelligence (I mean, aside from the fact I wanted this to be a very unintelligent Petpet haha). As for the Cooty, I agree wholly that I should have expanded more on it. Although, I'm not sure if the story would have been the same centralized idea behind Fang, but then, I could have made it much stronger too.

Again, thank's for the review

[kamikatze24]

tashni said:

shapeshifter said:

www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=332025&issue=291

This made my eyes pop. I'm really really disappointed this got it. With all the sensors of the neoboards today, (we're not even allowed to say Myspace) and a lot of other things, but a comic with a curse word gets in?? I'm sorry, but that's just not right.

EDIT: Hell is fine, it's not really a curse word according to neo since they used it. But this is just.. no. Like they say, make acceptable for children. Yeah, I'm sure parents are thrilled about their kids reading that.

WHAT THE HECK?!?! I'm completely serious here: we should notify Droplet. She does NOT allow bad language in the NT. It must have been a slip-up.

Sorry to interrupt the nice reviews and all, but I actually find this one a lot worse than "darn".
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=331955&issue=291

[Nina]

kamikatze24 said:

tashni said:

WHAT THE HECK?!?! I'm completely serious here: we should notify Droplet. She does NOT allow bad language in the NT. It must have been a slip-up.

Sorry to interrupt the nice reviews and all, but I actually find this one a lot worse than "darn".
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=331955&issue=291

Do you mean "sucker"? That's not even a swear word xD. It's also technically a type of fish. I'd use "sucker" in any of my comics in a split second.

Unless you mean something else that I totally missed? o-o

[kamikatze24]

nina said:

kamikatze24 said:

Sorry to interrupt the nice reviews and all, but I actually find this one a lot worse than "darn".
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=331955&issue=291

Do you mean "sucker"? That's not even a swear word xD. It's also technically a type of fish. I'd use "sucker" in any of my comics in a split second.

Unless you mean something else that I totally missed? o-o

No, I did mean it. However, I doubt he was calling him a fish. I'm not native to the english language, but I always had "sucker" understood as a pretty strong word for "idiot". *shrug*

[Nina]

kamikatze24 said:

nina said:

Do you mean "sucker"? That's not even a swear word xD. It's also technically a type of fish. I'd use "sucker" in any of my comics in a split second.

Unless you mean something else that I totally missed? o-o

No, I did mean it. However, I doubt he was calling him a fish. I'm not native to the english language, but I always had "sucker" understood as a pretty strong word for "idiot". *shrug*

Nope, "sucker" is pretty mild, I would say. Although if anyone disagrees with me, you're definitely free to tell me. People say "I'm a sucker for chocolate" which means they are not strong enough to resist it, kind of. Even "You suck" is usually said in a joking way. I don't think I've ever seen "You suck" used in a really mean way. It's really hard to explain, but "sucker" is usually not meant in a rude or offensive way at all. In this instance, the Tombola man is just saying that he tricked the Eyrie, and "sucker" is not meant in a literal way.

Anyway, anyone's free to disagree with me here. Sorry I didn't explain it well.. it's one of those things that's pretty hard to explain to someone =P.