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Post by Deleted on Apr 7, 2007 12:23:11 GMT -5
The editorial response was great, I agree.
That one comic, Hunty, was just...woah, like PFA said. But it was funny. ^_^
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Post by nadia8705 on Apr 7, 2007 13:02:26 GMT -5
Of Holes and Headaches by Komori and tambourine_chimp
Picture was great and awesomely designed. The joke was great. I had a laugh. Definitely a favorite of mine.
Slippery Slorg by Tee and Aiyakhiori
Very cute joke. I thought it was quite funny, and the art was very good as well. Also another one of my faves.
Opportunist by Hunty
Great images and very funny. Definitely a good job.
Family Meeting by Kat and Manda
The pictures were cute and the joke was great. A very nice job!
A.C.A.R.A. by Nadia
Thanks for all the comments. It was my first entry. I am quite excited
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Post by Dimi on Apr 7, 2007 13:23:06 GMT -5
A Tiny Adventure by Dimi I didn't exactly see the point of bolding that. I think the point was made clear enough with out it, and it just confused me. Maybe I'm stingy with bolding, but again it seems out of place. Ok, now that I'm done reading it, the whole piece wouldn't have lost anything if you had taken out all the bolding and italics. But that wasn't a major problem. This story was good. The only problem I have with it is that I don't think there was enough character development. The guy was running around, and as the reader I didn't understand the motivation. I didn't feel connected to him. But I did love the ending. That last section was very well connected to the beginning and I loved that. A Tiny Adventure by DimiI agree with Kitty on some things: the bold isn't really that necessary. I also felt that you didn't need to use specific Neopian names for everything (i.e. Furwitch Pillow=Pillow). It just kind of distracts form the story in my opinion. But I really liked this story! A had visions of the Zafara riding the Zomutt around the house. And, of course, what potion doesn't have a counter-potion that can be formulated from thing's in an average mad scientists garden? I think 'scream' is a bit strong here, and the last bit isn't grammatically correct--But I'm just nit-picky. Overall, though, I really loved this story. ^^ And congrats on this being your first! Thanks for the reviews! I'll try to improve next time I write a short story.  |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 7, 2007 13:23:15 GMT -5
Goosh, if someone has a series running, their collabs can get in. No physics to defy, really... *blink blink*
Catching Up: Part Nine by Fj0rd
This was another great part, Fj0rd. The interaction of the characters in the waiting room was quite nice, though I'm a little let down that we didn't get to hear Lillian speak at all during this part. But, that's not to say I'm not pleased with what happened, for I am.
I await the next part, as always, and the courts.
The Mirror of Memories: Part Eleven by Sytra
That was a wonderful ending to a most-wonderful series, Sytra, and I quite enjoyed reading it every week. It's hard to imagine that nearly three months have passed since I started reading it, yet it's true, they have. Thank you, for making these past eleven weeks so much more enjoyable.
I really don't know what to say beyond that. You perfectly and satisfactorily wrapped up the entire series in this part, and there's no better ending than one that does just that. I was very pleased watching the events unfold, and I have so much hope for Aina to go see Malin and Enzie now that's she's home again - I'm sure they will all be so excited by meeting once again after twenty years (or two days, lol).
That's one thing I've noticed in reading your stories: where you end them, it's perfect, but there's that feeling that so much more will happen, could happen. That's a great way to end a story, I feel, that the story's over but you know there's so much more to come, even if it'll never make another story. It just makes it seem so much more real to me.
This was an awesome series, Sytra, and you truly wrote it amazingly well.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 7, 2007 15:08:32 GMT -5
Discovering the Denizens of the Deep by Pyro
*Squee!!!* Sorry, I couldn't help myself...lol.
This was quite an enjoyable article, I found. It was also quite hilariously funny and amusing. ^_^ I can't say squid are my favorite topic to discuss or read about, but you did a wonderful job writing this and I had a good time reading it.
The Truth of the Faerie Wars by tj_wagner (not an NTWFer)
PFA pointed this article out, so I decided I'd have myself a looksie.
And I am happy that I did. This writer not only wrote a skillfully-written and entertaining article, he never once pointed fingers at the reporters (the NTWF), but blamed the entire prank (which he never did explicitly call either a big joke or a prank) on a misunderstanding of the Faeries themselves of what Fyora had said, that Faerie Quests would be reduced in number because the right was being abused.
This fit so well with all of what appeared in last week's 'Times that I'm actually almost surprised that he himself wasn't in on the whole thing as well.
So, thank you, PFA, for pointing this out; it definitely is worth reading if you've got the time.
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Post by Tyrannitar on Apr 7, 2007 15:59:04 GMT -5
I've defied the laws of physics in my debut issue. I had a comic and a short story in.  |
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Post by Huntress on Apr 7, 2007 16:43:39 GMT -5
Goosh, if someone has a series running, their collabs can get in. No physics to defy, really... *blink blink* Not really, series fall under the same one-per-issue rule, though I've seen exceptions for special issues. The trick with collabs is, the one who sends it in fills the quota. The co-collaber can still have something else in the issue, though I don't think it's wise to push that limit too often. Again, comic reviews x3 No promises for stories, but I'll try my best. Of Holes and HeadachesPoor meepit x.x The joke is great though (despite meepit cruelty... me, biased? Nevurr >>) and the art is awesome, as always ^^ The meepit's expression in the second panel is to die for, and the Gelert's in third panel as well. If I were to point out anything, it's the Gelert's tail. I know that their tails are thin at the ends but as the wider part of the tail didn't show, it felt a bit... Pluto from Mickey Mouse, for lack of better wording. (Not sure if it's a bad thing though, I loved Pluto xP) And the shading on the meepit in last panel felt kinda odd, seeing that you shaded nothing else, but then again it helped to create the feeling of an undergroud pit. Kudos for using a meepit without going down the usual omg-meepits-are-evil path x3 Overall, one great comic. Slippery SlorgNice to see a handdrawn comic for a change. The joke is nice and the art is pretty good, though the Slorg's expressions seem off - determined rather than freaked out or something that'd help to understand the comic better. And the fact that the Tuskaninny was all awake and sitting up in the second panel when it had been fully asleep in the first looked a bit odd too, I would've expected it to look up sleepily while the Slorg rockets over its tail. But the crash through the two panels was a nice touch, helped to create the feel of speed, and I love the shading. Nice work, both of you. OpportunistWhile I'm already here with the list, might as well point out that though I finished that comic pretty recently, it was started last January. So the lineart gets icky at times >< Couldn't correct it either, 'cause I got back to it when it was half-inked. And if anyone's wondering about the colors of some of the pets, the Usul is white - they do have red eyes as default, talk about weird - and the Uni is grey. With lotsa green hairdye. The grey Eyrie is pirate-colored. Family MeetingI remember seeing the script somewhere in Collabs board, nice to see that you got it done and published. Good joke, and good art, I like the slow pace of the comic and the tension. Felt a bit too big though, the pets took up a lot of space in the panel compared to the text. It would've worked out just as well if the comic in general had been smaller. The exclamation marks in the last panel felt strange as well, it probably would've been better with a general group shot that shows the look on everyone's faces. Still, overall, a nice comic. Anonymous Candy and Rude AwakeningsNew flesh! =D First off, welcome aboard. As for the comic, I'm not entirely sure if I get the same joke you meant, but I found it funny xP And the art is really nice. Your scanner seems to have butchered it though, I know that dark line down the left side all too well. When the whole sheet of paper isn't pressed against the scanner, the white areas can get messed up like that. And the Brightness and Saturation options work wonders, I say. The comic seemed a bit dark even for my LCD monitor, and I know that older monitors aren't as bright. Overall, a cute comic and I hope you'll make more ^^ On a side note, I'd reconsider about the title if I were you. The A.C.A.R.A. is nice, but the expansion of the abbreviation feels waaaay too random. Either leave it unexplained in the future or create a full title that relates to the comic. Just a suggestion ^^ |
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Post by nadia8705 on Apr 7, 2007 17:49:00 GMT -5
Anonymous Candy and Rude AwakeningsNew flesh! =D First off, welcome aboard. As for the comic, I'm not entirely sure if I get the same joke you meant, but I found it funny xP And the art is really nice. Your scanner seems to have butchered it though, I know that dark line down the left side all too well. When the whole sheet of paper isn't pressed against the scanner, the white areas can get messed up like that. And the Brightness and Saturation options work wonders, I say. The comic seemed a bit dark even for my LCD monitor, and I know that older monitors aren't as bright. Overall, a cute comic and I hope you'll make more ^^ On a side note, I'd reconsider about the title if I were you. The A.C.A.R.A. is nice, but the expansion of the abbreviation feels waaaay too random. Either leave it unexplained in the future or create a full title that relates to the comic. Just a suggestion ^^ lol... you are totally correct with the whole scanner thing ^_^ But as for the title, I gave it this title b/c I plan on doing a series comic. I don't know about it anymore. Well thanks for the comment. Guide to a Super Secret Sweet-Fest by pupluvr7177 I thought this was a very cute article. It had my two favorite things babies and chocolate...lol |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 7, 2007 19:14:49 GMT -5
A Tiny Adventure by DimiThis was a fun story to read, very random yet at the same time very orderly. The scientist, the witch, rather, was very ingenious in some of the things he chose to do, and I enjoyed watching as he overcame his challenges and treated his "condition." The conclusion was good, and I liked his declaration that his potion had truly worked after all, showing him how good he had it and giving him a reason to be happy. That, I feel, made this story for me. Your use of using bold-faced text was intriguing, though in some places it didn't seem necessary. Nevertheless, this was still a good story and I enjoyed it. Sand Balls by Fj0rd and GooshSun. Sand. Surf. Alliteration. Sorry. That cracked me up! This was an amazing story. It was fast-paced, incredibly so, just like I like them. But, regardless of how fast it went, I could still understand it (sometimes, if it's too fast...I get lost). The entire piece was witty, clever, and quite creative. I found it all heavily amusing and many times hilarious. The fact that this Kougra was so casual about everything and defensive of himself and his perfectness made this even funnier and much more enjoyable to read. Great job with this, it was great. A Sprinkling of Trouble by CVHilarious. Laugh-out-loud funny. Knocked me out of my seat laughing. Yep, those are all adequate adjectives for how funny this story was. If I wasn't laughing to the point I had to stop laughing to continue reading, I was shaking my head and chuckling at how ridiculous this was. But, I enjoyed it, as it was quite entertaining and well-written. A note on sarcasm, though: specifying that something is said sarcastically usually weakens the sarcasm itself. It should be obvious from what's said that it's being said sarcastically, so it needn't be said that it was said sarcastically so. (Towards the beginning, the narrator's noting that his pet's sarcastic tone seemed odd was fine, but towards the end anonymous001's sarcasm was evident and didn't need to be told by saying "he said sarcastically.") Overall, a good story, well worth reading, I feel. Easter in the Gnome Underground by TyrannitarThis was a strange story. I found myself, unfortunately, confused most of the time while reading it; the beginning began a bit wordy, and that wordiness seemed to continue throughout the piece. There were a lot of characters, and it became hard to distinguish among them all. The Gnome Underground itself seemed to lack a cohesive description, and the rainbow boxes seemed to only to add to my confusion. Bear in mind, however, that at the end of this, I was able to make a little more sense of things, so I certainly don't consider the time I spent reading this wasted; in fact, the latter parts of this story, particularly in the presence of Easter, I found rather enjoyable and seemed to flow much better than what had led up to that point. The Playful Kougra's insistence on his name being Rainbow was a running theme which I enjoyed reading about, especially when he got all colorful (and then Ecksie's comment, I believe, to not get colorful on her). I was wondering, for some reason, earlier today if people could use font colors in the NT, and I guess they can. ^_^
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Post by Komori on Apr 8, 2007 0:15:16 GMT -5
Of Holes and Headaches...If I were to point out anything, it's the Gelert's tail. I know that their tails are thin at the ends but as the wider part of the tail didn't show, it felt a bit... Pluto from Mickey Mouse, for lack of better wording. (Not sure if it's a bad thing though, I loved Pluto xP) Ohhhhhh. You know, I didn't actually look at a Gelert before I drew that, so I thought their tails were like Pluto's tail. XDDDD Eh heh, thanks for pointing that out. |
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Post by Kat on Apr 8, 2007 0:47:34 GMT -5
Family Meeting by Kat and MandaThe art was very cute, but the last panel made it all worthwile. I started to giggle. Family Meeting by Kat and MandaThis comic was simply amazing. The art was quite good, the expressions all very nice, and the little diamond-like sparkling things at the corners of every frame were quite a nice touch. The joke was just amazing as well; from the start it sounded so...presidential, that not only did I find that funny, the "problem" itself was made even more hilarious. Wonderful comic, you two, just great. Family Meeting by Kat and Manda The pictures were cute and the joke was great. A very nice job! Family MeetingI remember seeing the script somewhere in Collabs board, nice to see that you got it done and published. Good joke, and good art, I like the slow pace of the comic and the tension. Felt a bit too big though, the pets took up a lot of space in the panel compared to the text. It would've worked out just as well if the comic in general had been smaller. The exclamation marks in the last panel felt strange as well, it probably would've been better with a general group shot that shows the look on everyone's faces. Still, overall, a nice comic. [shadow=purple,left,300]Thanks for the reviews, guys. ^_^ I'm just glad people get my sense of humor. XD As for the one-piece-per-issue rule, yeah, a collab can usually get in while you have a series running, provided that it's your partner who submits it. For example, while AnHJ was running (it seems like only yesterday XD), I was able to get a short story collab with Lau in for Jhudora Day, but Lau was the one who submitted it. And, two thumbs up for the editorial response![/shadow] |
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Post by Deleted on Apr 8, 2007 0:48:49 GMT -5
Some short story reviews. Not very in depth, but I am just getting back into this whole NT thing: A Tiny Adventure - 'Twas okay. Reminded me of the Calvin & Hobbes comics where Calvin would shrink and have to run all over the pages of books  Cute ending. The Joys of Maraqua - Aishas can't swim...? I understand this was her debut, so it's a very good first story. Sand Balls - Hilarious! Some of it was silly but there's nothing wrong with that  Thoroughly enjoyable! I loved the end where he just relaxes on the boat, it really cemented his character. A Sprinkling of Trouble - This one was even more hilarious! The characters worked wonderfully together and the jokes were funny! ^_____^ I believe I even laughed aloud - that's quite an achievement. Inside the Crate - I'm sorry, I didn't really like this one. It just did not seem to have a point, my initial feeling was that it was just a story slapped together to get a trophy. But the ending was unexpected, which slightly made up for it. And that's all I've read so far. |
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Post by Dimi on Apr 8, 2007 2:39:38 GMT -5
A Tiny Adventure by DimiThis was a fun story to read, very random yet at the same time very orderly. The scientist, the witch, rather, was very ingenious in some of the things he chose to do, and I enjoyed watching as he overcame his challenges and treated his "condition." The conclusion was good, and I liked his declaration that his potion had truly worked after all, showing him how good he had it and giving him a reason to be happy. That, I feel, made this story for me. Your use of using bold-faced text was intriguing, though in some places it didn't seem necessary. Nevertheless, this was still a good story and I enjoyed it. A Tiny Adventure - 'Twas okay. Reminded me of the Calvin & Hobbes comics where Calvin would shrink and have to run all over the pages of books Cute ending. Thanks a lot! |
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Post by Ginz ❤ on Apr 8, 2007 12:56:59 GMT -5
Revenge and Resistance: Part One by Dan
I promised you I would read it. See? I remembered! ^_^ And I'm glad I did! It's a really interesting story. So exciting and entertaing and mysterious. Amusing too, at some points, like:
"There were more pressing matters than a sudden kidnapping."
"If they missed, they were all dead. And that was never a good thing."
XD I love it so far! ^_^ I can't wait for the next part.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 8, 2007 13:33:44 GMT -5
Revenge and Resistance: Part One by Dan
This served as a nice opening for a series, I feel.
The hook seemed a little weak and a bit wordy, and your constant using of "the figure," "the human," and "the Gelert" added to this; using names more often would have made the characters seem realer, I think. As well, you referred to his "pets," yet if any mention of any pet aside from the Gelert was made, it was swept aside by what was happening and I missed it.
That was a harrowing image, I feel, very well done.
Things truly began picking up for me after Dan and his pets had been shipped away. Then, it seemed, a true hook was given. That played out well, though it would have been nicer to have the hook appear sooner.
The final scene with Sloth and his minions definitely set up intrigue for me to keep reading, so I certainly await the next part.
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Cute ending.
Thoroughly enjoyable! I loved the end where he just relaxes on the boat, it really cemented his character.
