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Post by kamikatze24 on Sept 22, 2006 3:33:33 GMT -5
Cheesecake - Tyrannian Paint –About the only thing I didn’t like, was the author’s note… but that’s a known pet peeve of mine. I know, it's also mine. It was a collaboration, and alyssa_renne, the author, insisted on it... :/ But thanks for the reviews!!  |
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Post by Fj0rd on Sept 22, 2006 15:59:46 GMT -5
Beauty of the Snow: Part Oneby extreme_fj0rd What a perfect picture. *Grin* I love the descriptions here. Beautifully done, makes you feel like you’re right there. The fact that my house (and thus, my fingers) is really cold right now really didn’t help.  All the snow makes me cold. There’s not much conflict in this chapter (like I can say anything, I don’t think I’ve ever managed to pull of any decent conflict in a first chapter) but I’m guessing the rest of the series is figuring out who the mysterious Aisha who doesn’t talk is? Mm... only a bit. It's sort of hard to explain (and I don't want to spoil it!) but... not in particular, I guess. ^^ Anyway, thanks. I'm glad you liked the snow descriptions. Beauty of the Snow - Fj0rdI feel it began quite slowly. The description of the snow, though beautiful, lasted too long and quickly got monotonous. I felt it hard to follow, though as the story went on, it loosened up a bit and became easier to grasp. Inga seems like quite the mother figure, and I feel her part of the story will become quite essential before we reach the end. As for Aisha, I had at first gotten the impression that she were some sort of snow spirit, due to your dream-like descriptions of the snow simultaneously placed beside that of the Aisha, yet at the end, I feel she may be more of a lost pet. Though I did not enjoy this as much as I had thought I might, as I love the snow and chilly weather, I am interested to see where this is going. Annd... a contrast! ^^ Yeah, I sort of get obsessive about snow sometimes, it happens in the deep dark of winter (I wrote this last December), and I just go on and on. Anyway, most of the rest of it won't have that lengthy of descriptions of snow. And... yeah. Not much else to say, except thanks for the review. (I could say other things, but they might be spoilers and that wouldn't be good. ^_^) |
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All the snow makes me cold. There’s not much conflict in this chapter (like I can say anything, I don’t think I’ve ever managed to pull of any decent conflict in a first chapter) but I’m guessing the rest of the series is figuring out who the mysterious Aisha who doesn’t talk is?