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Post by Deleted on Sept 19, 2006 17:44:37 GMT -5
A Different Kind of Game - Kat and DanA very interesting, thought-provoking tale. I was confused at first, not quite certain where you were heading but knowing the path you were upon, though at the end, when everything came together, I couldn't help but smile at the implications of it all. Well-written and fun-to-read; good job. Card Collections: Guardian of Fire Magic - Amy and YukaFirst off, though the Grarrl in the picture looks good, the Acara deters me...it just looks...wrong and unhealthy. As for the story itself, it was long and slow and I did not enjoy it as much as I have enjoyed other stories. It was well-written, yes, and told a great story, yes, I just simply did not find it as enjoyable as other things. That is merely my opinion, though; it was written well, as I said. The Great Bicycle Race - Cutie CucumberThis was a sweet story. It was a nice read, too. I seem to be a bit out of it today, and not up for lengthy comments, but it was good nonetheless. I enjoyed reading it. Raeka - LuauThis was another sweet story. I totally understand all of the characters - and that's a lot! It was quite long, but my interest in it never wavered. It was simple and straightforward, though maybe that's what I like about it. It was well-written, too. Nice job. 
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Post by Yuka on Sept 19, 2006 18:04:04 GMT -5
Card Collections: Guardian of Fire Magic - Amy and YukaFirst off, though the Grarrl in the picture looks good, the Acara deters me...it just looks...wrong and unhealthy. As for the story itself, it was long and slow and I did not enjoy it as much as I have enjoyed other stories. It was well-written, yes, and told a great story, yes, I just simply did not find it as enjoyable as other things. That is merely my opinion, though; it was written well, as I said. Thanks! I agree about the picture. I couldn't stop staring at it. xD |
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Post by mysterioustd on Sept 20, 2006 1:20:43 GMT -5
I know how you feel about the small error. Trust me, those tiny errors get to me as well. I hated seeing that there. I'll have to pay more attention to the errors shown on my spelling filter. Thanks for being honest, anyway. I'll admit, it wasn't one of my best. I'm not very good with articles. :/
It all depends on the owner, of course. xD
It's alright. Baby isn't my favorite color either. It's so... bland. I might repaint Jeniha another color in the future.
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 21:49:01 GMT -5
Card Collections: Guardian of Fire Magic
by yatomiyuka and iwantyours
*grin* Don’t you just love ‘foolproof’ plans?
About my only comment is that the turn point happened a little… fast. To me, it would have made a little more sense if there’d been some reference about how he was immune to fire, or at the very least that he’d never been burned. Something to connect him to fire ahead of time, if that makes any sense?
Other than that, I really liked his character, just earnest about everything. *grin*
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 21:59:18 GMT -5
The Great Bicycle Race
by sweetie_me274
Just barely… see?
Other than that omission, I liked the story; a happy story about a girl with a bike, and loving to ride it. The fact that she wins the race almost seems incidental, compared to the freedom just riding it gives her.
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 22:07:29 GMT -5
Raekaby literalluau Love the custom. I remember this story! Didn’t we do a Workshop on it? *grin* I like it just as much now as I did then. I really like how you changed Raeka dialogue, it’s obvious that Common isn’t her first language – something that makes her stand as different right away. IE “weird” to a person not used to it.
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 22:14:34 GMT -5
Beauty of the Snow: Part Oneby extreme_fj0rd What a perfect picture. *Grin* I love the descriptions here. Beautifully done, makes you feel like you’re right there. The fact that my house (and thus, my fingers) is really cold right now really didn’t help.  All the snow makes me cold. There’s not much conflict in this chapter (like I can say anything, I don’t think I’ve ever managed to pull of any decent conflict in a first chapter) but I’m guessing the rest of the series is figuring out who the mysterious Aisha who doesn’t talk is?
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 22:16:48 GMT -5
No Game Here: Extreme Rider
By hello5346 and 13blackdragons
I’ll admit, it took me a moment to get this comic… Mainly because I didn’t recognize the game right away. Whoops. The look on the Dogglefoxes face in the second panel is great, poor widdle petpet carrying that big old Kacheek…
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 22:20:21 GMT -5
Cheesecake - Tyrannian Paint –
By kamikatze24 and Allysia_renne
Very cute idea. *grin*
About the only thing I didn’t like, was the author’s note… but that’s a known pet peeve of mine.
I also really like the expressions on the Xweetok’s face thought-out the plot. Especially the second to last panel.
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 22:24:29 GMT -5
The Pianist's Quandary: Series
by micrody
I loved this series. Ellamara and Nevan’s relationship is so sweet. I love the year confusion in the third chapter. Year 8 of what? Since the humans came? Since Adam’s reign?
…. I knew she wasn’t dead. ;D
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Post by Nimras on Sept 20, 2006 22:29:39 GMT -5
Needed Adventure: Part Four
by tdyans
I’m so bad, I’ve been reading this… just not reviewing. *wince*
You’re my hero for what you put in the pre-Enzo and very young Enzo time period. *grin*
*dies* The mental picture alone is priceless.
Poor Enzo, he’s far too much like his father to admit it. *grin*
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Post by Deleted on Sept 20, 2006 23:18:00 GMT -5
The Pianist's Quandary: Seriesby micrody I loved this series. Ellamara and Nevan’s relationship is so sweet. I love the year confusion in the third chapter. Year 8 of what? Since the humans came? Since Adam’s reign? …. I knew she wasn’t dead. ;D Thanks, Nimras! I've probably gotten the most responses to this series than I have any other publication of mine in the NT (on Neopets, of course). And, well...it is Neopets, so that was probably a given from the start... |
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Post by Yuka on Sept 20, 2006 23:45:26 GMT -5
Card Collections: Guardian of Fire Magic by yatomiyuka and iwantyours *grin* Don’t you just love ‘foolproof’ plans? About my only comment is that the turn point happened a little… fast. To me, it would have made a little more sense if there’d been some reference about how he was immune to fire, or at the very least that he’d never been burned. Something to connect him to fire ahead of time, if that makes any sense? Other than that, I really liked his character, just earnest about everything. *grin* Thanks for the review, Nimras! |
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Post by Deleted on Sept 21, 2006 16:16:02 GMT -5
Needed Adventure - Tdyans
Another great part, Tdyans! I disliked the beginning of it a bit, and I found it to be all-to-obvious what you were getting at there, but I can't place my finger on what made me dislike it - it was as well-written as the rest of it. Personal taste, I guess.
Then, yes, well, there isn't much else I can say. It was, to put it simply, great.
I do wish to say, however, that this reminds me of the first animated 101 Dalmatians movie. I'm not sure if I've said this already, but it does. That is a good thing, too! Back when I was still a child (as opposed to now, when I'm a teenager *lol*) , that was one of my favorite movies and I'd watch it all the time. The way humans and animals were portrayed in that is similar to how they are portrayed in this, except they're Neopets here rather than animals. I think, maybe, that is why this flows so smoothly and is so enjoyable for me (beyond the fact that is is written flawlessly). You have made the Neopets into people, but in doing so, you have not made them into humans (a good balance, I think).
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Post by Deleted on Sept 21, 2006 17:47:18 GMT -5
Beauty of the Snow - Fj0rd
I feel it began quite slowly. The description of the snow, though beautiful, lasted too long and quickly got monotonous. I felt it hard to follow, though as the story went on, it loosened up a bit and became easier to grasp.
Inga seems like quite the mother figure, and I feel her part of the story will become quite essential before we reach the end. As for Aisha, I had at first gotten the impression that she were some sort of snow spirit, due to your dream-like descriptions of the snow simultaneously placed beside that of the Aisha, yet at the end, I feel she may be more of a lost pet.
Though I did not enjoy this as much as I had thought I might, as I love the snow and chilly weather, I am interested to see where this is going.
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Some of mine inherited my love of sharp, pointy things….
All the snow makes me cold. There’s not much conflict in this chapter (like I can say anything, I don’t think I’ve ever managed to pull of any decent conflict in a first chapter) but I’m guessing the rest of the series is figuring out who the mysterious Aisha who doesn’t talk is?