Post by Nut on Aug 4, 2006 12:38:18 GMT -5
Article Reviews
[glow=blue,2,300]Influential Ideas[/glow]
This was a lovely, informative article, on a topic that I don't see much of. Sharing a bit of the Neopian Time's history with the younger crowd of writers who weren't around for the old days (such as me) was a wonderful and interesting idea. The opening paragraph is clear and builds up the reader's interest. The individual ideas were interesting to read and think, "Hey, cool, I didn't know that. Now I do." ^^ I didn't know that the Eyrie Taxi was first a Uni Taxi. ^^ Nor did I know that Karma had christened Rose the Uni, or that Sloth ever hadn't been a comic character (really... who could fear him? ). The sections were well written and stir interest in the pieces with their prose. Your writing is analytical, yet has plenty of verbal twists that keep the reader interesed; it sounded quite like a professional article. ^^
Wow, I didn't know that Muas's idea actually came before TNT ever used Unis in their plots. ^^ How interesting.
This point gives the section on Rose more meaning, and the way you write it captures the reader's interest. You point out things that even one familiar with the old issues--which many aren't, including me--might find interesting to see written out as you do. Your writing is engaging and informative, and it's interesting to learn about the NT's history. ^^
I, like the others, thought that the article was a bit short and ended rather quickly, but I see you've explained that those were the only ideas you could find. A shame, though those three ideas still made for a very interesting article. ^^ Excellent work, Tdyans! I'm glad to see you with another written piece in the NT. ^^
[glow=blue,2,300]A Gnawing Curiosity[/glow]
This was a very sweet article; the way you wrote it is like a story, and having the character Leona narrate it gives it personalization and interest. Pointing out the Neopian Times's "lack of combustion" was a cute note, and describing Leona's routine reading of the Neopian Times added a sweet personal touch. ^^ You give background to Leona's character in the first couple of paragraphs, making her more interesting than if you'd just given her name and species and dived into the article like many others do.
For some reason I'm not so keen on the title of the piece; I don't feel like it really relates to the subject. The reader relies on the title of an article for learning what the article is about, so I thought it should be a bit less generic. It'd probably be a fine title if this were a short story, where mysterious titles are generally encouraged. n:P
Whoot! ^^ I'm still very honored to have been mentioned here.
Whoot for references! XD
I tend to associate the word "shook" with shaking your head no, as opposed to "nodding" your head yes. But that may just be me and the terms I'm used to.
Roffle! ^^ I love references. n:P Congratulations on incluing so many of them here, Luau. ^^
Someone else already pointed this out, but "as we are" is correct. ^^ Though, I guess she could have made a mistake on her own. I once had a conversation in which I suddenly doubted the existence of the word "uninterested" (as opposed to "disinterested"), and felt a need to correct someone on that point. Luckily, I was with a couple of people who didn't speak English very well, so they didn't notice my error. (Or unluckily, depending on how you look at it...)
The article reads like a story, giving personality to the main character and those she meets (particularly the "jingle-obsessed girl"). You can feel how Leona is intimidated by the writers, and how it gradually fades. Yet near the end of the story, you provide facts and information typical of an article. It's a lovely blend of the two. The end of the article is cute, as we see Leona's inspiration carried out. ^^ All in all, it's a very sweet article written in an unusual style. Lovely work, Luau. ^^
[glow=blue,2,300]Influential Ideas[/glow]
This was a lovely, informative article, on a topic that I don't see much of. Sharing a bit of the Neopian Time's history with the younger crowd of writers who weren't around for the old days (such as me) was a wonderful and interesting idea. The opening paragraph is clear and builds up the reader's interest. The individual ideas were interesting to read and think, "Hey, cool, I didn't know that. Now I do." ^^ I didn't know that the Eyrie Taxi was first a Uni Taxi. ^^ Nor did I know that Karma had christened Rose the Uni, or that Sloth ever hadn't been a comic character (really... who could fear him? ). The sections were well written and stir interest in the pieces with their prose. Your writing is analytical, yet has plenty of verbal twists that keep the reader interesed; it sounded quite like a professional article. ^^
(It’s interesting to note that this method of transportation has since become “official,” as we saw Uni used for travel across both earth and sky during the Meridell plots.)
Wow, I didn't know that Muas's idea actually came before TNT ever used Unis in their plots. ^^ How interesting.
But Karma didn’t just give Rose a name—she gave her a personality. And that’s a big part of why the name has stuck. Rosemadder was the perfect foil for Dr_Death—sweet and perky and always willing to tease the “poor” doctor.
This point gives the section on Rose more meaning, and the way you write it captures the reader's interest. You point out things that even one familiar with the old issues--which many aren't, including me--might find interesting to see written out as you do. Your writing is engaging and informative, and it's interesting to learn about the NT's history. ^^
I, like the others, thought that the article was a bit short and ended rather quickly, but I see you've explained that those were the only ideas you could find. A shame, though those three ideas still made for a very interesting article. ^^ Excellent work, Tdyans! I'm glad to see you with another written piece in the NT. ^^
[glow=blue,2,300]A Gnawing Curiosity[/glow]
This was a very sweet article; the way you wrote it is like a story, and having the character Leona narrate it gives it personalization and interest. Pointing out the Neopian Times's "lack of combustion" was a cute note, and describing Leona's routine reading of the Neopian Times added a sweet personal touch. ^^ You give background to Leona's character in the first couple of paragraphs, making her more interesting than if you'd just given her name and species and dived into the article like many others do.
For some reason I'm not so keen on the title of the piece; I don't feel like it really relates to the subject. The reader relies on the title of an article for learning what the article is about, so I thought it should be a bit less generic. It'd probably be a fine title if this were a short story, where mysterious titles are generally encouraged. n:P
Or a Green Kau called Trika who’s Illusen’s biggest fan (Cream Cookies by Nut862)?
Whoot! ^^ I'm still very honored to have been mentioned here.
They all kept talking about cheesecake and Meepits and water and fires and things that didn’t really make sense to me.
Whoot for references! XD
“Not important,” she answered and the rest shook their heads in agreement.
I tend to associate the word "shook" with shaking your head no, as opposed to "nodding" your head yes. But that may just be me and the terms I'm used to.
“Sure… but I have to tell you, I don’t understand anything you’re saying. I really came here to talk to some Neopian Times readers and writers, not to talk about, errr, cheese graters or pie.”
Roffle! ^^ I love references. n:P Congratulations on incluing so many of them here, Luau. ^^
“You said ‘as we are,’” she told the girl. “It’s just ‘as we.’”
Someone else already pointed this out, but "as we are" is correct. ^^ Though, I guess she could have made a mistake on her own. I once had a conversation in which I suddenly doubted the existence of the word "uninterested" (as opposed to "disinterested"), and felt a need to correct someone on that point. Luckily, I was with a couple of people who didn't speak English very well, so they didn't notice my error. (Or unluckily, depending on how you look at it...)
The article reads like a story, giving personality to the main character and those she meets (particularly the "jingle-obsessed girl"). You can feel how Leona is intimidated by the writers, and how it gradually fades. Yet near the end of the story, you provide facts and information typical of an article. It's a lovely blend of the two. The end of the article is cute, as we see Leona's inspiration carried out. ^^ All in all, it's a very sweet article written in an unusual style. Lovely work, Luau. ^^