Issue 250 Reviews!

[Star]

Comic Reviews

Don't Blame ME by choclated
Awww, poor Uni! Well it shows fame isn't everything. I loved the Uni's expression in the last panel.

No Comment by ssjelitegirl & x_massacre_x
Haha. The expressions in the last panel were perfect.

penny dreadful by angelica030788 & velveteen
Great joke and nice graphics.

And the Meepits Outgrabe by kittylin
I LOVED the graphics. So adorable. And the joke was great.

Little Orby by Tashni
Awww he's so cute.

Notions And Nonsense - Time Travel by x_b0b0_x & patjade
The art is really, really nice. I never thought of it like that but now I have excuses to sleep more.

Sutek Muffin by thegreenmooseofdoom
Amazing graphics and I found this one hilarious. The expressions in the last two panels are just great!

Spooky by ghostkomorichu
Hilarious! As always. And the art is wonderful as always!

[Star]

So Many Times by hmlanden
Aww this was wonderful! It reminds me of one my old stories in a similar format but I have to say yours was much better. It was completely flawless. There wasn't even a typo or punctuation mistake! You described everything perfectly and I didn't once get bored - it kept me gripped the whole way through. I'm glad it wasn't too long or too short either. A really nice story.

[Tay - Sock Eater]

One Bar of Chocolate {star_29791} I liked this story a lot! It was very simple and easy to read... not to many characters and it wasn't too long, either. I also really liked the whole idea of it. I'm sort of frustrated with Coco because she's so greedy and desperate for that chocolate. And she's only giving to the poor so she'll get that chocolate in the end! Well, I really liked your story. 2 Thumbs up

[Tay - Sock Eater]

Battledome-ify Your Neopian Times Items {doughnut215 and shadowcristal} I really liked this article! About halfway through it got a little boring, but I'm an impatient person. I really liked the Usuki set one, and I could picture the giant poster one; I liked it too. Funny! This was a very interesting article in my eyes, even if it got a little bit boring halfway through. Good job, both of you.

[Tay - Sock Eater]

Alright, I did some more reviews. short story review and an article review. That's probably all of the reviews I'm going to do for this issue. Wow, that's probably the most reviews I've ever done, to tell you the truth. Well, I might do more reviews, but I doubt it. If anyone else desperately wants a review, I will. ^^ Tootles.

[Belle]

Any more random reviews for my short story, A Bunch of Letters Again would still be much appreciated. ^^

Review/s coming in a while...

[Deleted]

hmlanden said:

M'kay, it seems a little underdeveloped. I don't exactly what gave me that impression, and I wish I could tell you, but...heh. The grasshopper joke was funny at first, but you overdid it a bit. It seems that you jump back and forth between emotions without any transition whatsoever. Very moody blumaroo, he is. Your writing style is...different. It seems choppy and flow-y (That doesn't make sense, does it?). I have a feeling that, with time, you can become an impressive writer. But you need to work on developing a character, a story, and a setting. Things you may know in your head are unknown to the reader. You gotta let us know. Hope I helped somewhat.

Looking back at it now, I s'pose I could have nicely eliminated a few of those grasshoppers, though I personally feel I didn't take it too far. (Author's pride, I guess.) My writing style...is unique. I find it changes with the project I'm working on (the trilogy I'm writing is NOTHING like this story), so I will be sure to keep that in mind, to keep things more harmonious in that aspect. In this, I wanted the reader to feel the wind as if in Kenneth's shoes (speaking figuratively; Blumaroos don't wear shoes), so I wrote it with a more meditative style, one driven by thoughts and feelings and not necesarily actions. I guess this style is one I could still work on refining. I'm pretty sure I got everything on paper, but, to be honest, I wrote it not all at once, because originally it was too short, so I had to expand it. I suppose that might have upset that unnameable quality, though I can't say. And, yes, all critiques are helpful.

star said:

Patience by micrody
I liked the beginning when his Sensei kept calling him grasshopper- I found that very funny. The middle bit was easier to read than I would've thought and the ending was just perfect. It was just the right length and the tone was perfect as well. I really liked this. A great story.

Thanks for the great reviews, Star.

[troublems03]

A Bunch of Letters Again by ladyariel32

That was pretty long but I liked it a lot. The letters were well written and even though I haven't read any of your other stuff yet (though I am plan to) I was able to understand it all. The images were great to break up the text, as there was a lot of that, and the letters themselves conveyed some great emotions. I look forward to reading more of your stuff!

--

Any more reviews for my Attack of the Slorgs: this is NOT a Game Guide would be much appreciated

[Deleted]

Battledome-ify Your Neopian Times Items

I'm just going to re-do this review. The last one was a little jumbled.

In addition to what I said last time n;) : "Wham! Bam!" is a great opening. It draws the reader in. The whole first paragraph was very descriptive and made me want to read the rest of the article.

That would be paper (paper cuts, anyone?), staples (no comment), scissors (self-explanatory), quills (already been there) and so on and so forth.

Roffle! I especially like "no comment" for the staples and "already been there" for quills.

And I like how you put in the description for the Battle Quill that you needed to put it in for those who would nitpick and say the rest of the items weren't for the battledome.

I love the last line you use to end the article. If you had just ended with "We guarantee that you will never look at a Neopian Times item in quite the same way again," it wouldn't quite have matched the humor that you used throughout the article.

[Nut]

A real review! Yes!

[glow=blue,2,300]A Bunch of Letters Again[/glow]
Yay, a new Letters story! ^^ If this was the one you were worried about, Belle, it came out lovely. ^^ It's very sweet and the characters come across clearly. ^^ (For some reason I can't see the letter images that everyone else is talking about, which I'm a bit disappointed in. I have no idea why they're not displaying for me. It doesn't show a red X; there's just nothing there. o_0) One thing that I like about your Letters series is how you include other correspondence besides the letters between the two main characters, and still make it pertain to the story without confusing everything. :3 Starting off the story with the letter from a prospective buyer for Isis's house was a good way to pull me into the story. It probably had something to do with the fact that I already knew the characters, so I was aware as I read it that it was Isis's house, but it gave me an instant sense of a problem that would of course have a resolution.

Besides being needlessly rude, this will also get you in trouble with TNT.

Whoo, she's threatening. XD

Isis's first letter to Yannagiba was touching and full of believable emotions. You can sense her anger and sorrow in comparison with Yannagiba's calm and, towards the end, somewhat wistful letter. (You like the name Currant for Zomutts, don't you? XD) I see Yannagiba's serious side coming out in this newfound desire to be a Times author. (I don't suppose this means we'll be seeing a real piece by him to follow the tradition of Yuki and Ashi? ^^)

I've forgotten how hot it is here in the desert.

It's so easy to forget, isn't it? ... Excuse me, Belle, I'm agreeing with Isis. XD

The ending was very sweet. Isis's wish to return home was expected, but you put across her feelings in a very real way. And I loved Yannagiba's choice of subject matter for his story; it tied everything in nicely, not to mention being really sweet. ^^
If there was one thing I would've wanted more of here, I think I would've liked to see some of Icy's character... but perhaps that's just me being impatient. xD After all, this was more a story between Re and Isis.
In all, you did a lovely job with this story. ^^ It's sweet, believable, and nicely written. Excellent work, Belle. ^^

--

More reviews coming up...

--

By the way, more reviews for Unnatural Beauty would still be much appreciated. ^^

[Nut]

A slightly short comic review...

[glow=blue,2,300]Spooky[/glow]
Ack, so many Weewoos! So much whiteness! ^^ They're so adorable! I love the Weewoo that's sitting placidly on Komo's head. ^^ I love how the Weewoos on the red couch and bookshelves seem to be migrating over the course of the panels. XD As usual, your expressions are fabulous; Claw's face is perfect in every panel, and Komo just looks so matter-of-fact. I love how you drew him standing up so straight, in contrast to the slouching Weewoo on his head. ^^ The joke is great. I definitely agree with the Meepit comic statement, and the way Komo announces it so certainly is funny in itself. ^^ Yet another great Spooky comic, in celebration of Issue 250. ^^

[Star]

mygoodguild said:

One Bar of Chocolate {star_29791} I liked this story a lot! It was very simple and easy to read... not to many characters and it wasn't too long, either. I also really liked the whole idea of it. I'm sort of frustrated with Coco because she's so greedy and desperate for that chocolate. And she's only giving to the poor so she'll get that chocolate in the end! Well, I really liked your story. 2 Thumbs up

Thanks, Tay! I'm glad you liked it. I kind of got frustrated with Coco too but I love her in her own little greedy, self-absorbed way.

[Tdyans at work]

Thanks to everyone who's reviewed my article. It's been a while since I had anything in and it's nice to get some feedback again. As the NTAGers know, I moved to a new apartment this past weekend so I won't have internet access at home until Friday at the earliest, and I'm also really swamped at work, so unfortunately I can't return the favor by doing any reviews myself.

doughnut215 said:

This either represents dedication to the NT or an awful lot of research to track down the people who initiated the ideas. I'm guessing it's a combination of both, but even so, I can't think of many people who could attempt an article like this and make such a nice job of it.

I don't know about dedication , but it helps to have been there when these things first happened. Still, I did have to add a lot of research to it as well to make sure my memory was correct and get all the links in there (and a BIG thanks to Droplet for getting all those links coded-- I'm sure that must have been a pain). It was fun to highlight a bit of the NT's history, and it's been interesting seeing the responses from people who weren't there at the time.

As for there being only three ideas, that was honestly all I could come up with that would really fit my criteria (well, there are a couple of others that I was considering but decided to leave out), which just goes to show how rare it is for an idea to come along that has that kind of influence. So I was pretty relieved that what I wrote for those three was enough to make up an average-sized article. I can understand any disappointment that I caused with all that buildup in the beginning, though. And I can't argue with the fact that the ending was abrupt. When I got there, I just didn't know what to write without retreading, so I figured a simple little conclusion would suffice.

[Deleted]

The Cheesy Villains Awards

*is still roffling*

I love how Hannah gets boo'ed off the red carpet. That's not something that usually happens to her.

And Sloth is causing trouble as usual. I love how when he tries to get back in he says "...this isn't the bakery."

You both did a great job of getting a lot of villains in while still making the piece flow easily. It didn't feel like you were trying to squeeze them in. You had some of them present the awards, some were just mentioned in passing, and some received awards, but none of them felt like they had just been stuck in there.

Usually I can't stand articles written like this

Name:
Name2:
Name3:

But I think the problem most people have with writing things like that is they tend to lose coherency and you two never did. It was an easy, entertaining read all the way through and had a lot of really funny moments. I loved how you ended it. "*Pant Devil comes flying across the stage* Pant Devil: FEAR ME!"

Just that one line gives me such a hilarious mental picture and it ends the article perfectly.

If I had criticisms, I'd give them, but I don't see anywhere to improve. n:)

[Retired Blub]

*glomps* Thanks Luau for the great review!