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Post by Deleted on Jul 23, 2006 1:07:12 GMT -5
To Work or Not to Work
I'm surprised her owner let her go look for a job at that young of an age. Especially since you'd think she'd still need Emily to watch the shop.
Also, why exactly did she go to the Hidden Tower? To buy something to help her get a job? That was a little fuzzy.
This is really picky, but I would have tweaked that sentence just a bit so there wasn't two nexts or they weren't so close together.
I liked the encounter with Fyora, though, and how Fyora repaid her for her honesty and responsibility. And the sweet attack on Mr. McClanahan at the end was a nice touch. Is this your first short story? Good job. n:)
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Post by Deleted on Jul 23, 2006 1:25:26 GMT -5
Eerie Friends
Roffle! That is so like a younger child, thinking mommy is always right.
I was glad you kept this story simple. Westie is cute, if not a little misunderstanding. I thought it was a little strange how quickly she said it was a dream, but oddly it works. Maybe it's because she's so young and really wants her nails varnished. Does mom know? Is that why she was eager to take Westie's mind off it? I smell another ghosty plot. n:)
The last line is a little strange, but somehow it works within the language of the story. And awwww, we were thanked. n:) *hopes she is an NTWF friend*
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Post by Deleted on Jul 23, 2006 20:35:38 GMT -5
Thanks, it's one of my favorite comics that I wrote, yet I prefer comics with more stories.
Thanks Andy, really, I need to look your comics again. Anyways, yeah, I had a great artist!
Again, I had a great artist, a great, great one! Yeah, I have to agree, I mean, I know it's funny but like you, I like more comics that tell a story.
Yeah, he would have been even poorer if I would have shown him bering bounced around like you can with a cheat in Zurroball. I need to tell Kami how much you love the art!
Thank you and yes, we all know, the art pwns XD
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Post by Tay - Sock Eater on Jul 24, 2006 1:06:36 GMT -5
Thanks for reviews. I really appreciate them.  More reviews for Eerie Friends is always appreciated. |
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Post by Deleted on Jul 24, 2006 4:28:03 GMT -5
No Game Here: Zurro(Heavy)BallI really like the art in this one, and the expression on the Grundo's face when he's covered in snot is great  The Flotsam QuestionOoh, I remember you asking if you should submit this I'm glad it got in. The Locker RoomYeah, I could see this happening if the ball was alive! Have you got any more Locker Room cartoons in the pipeline? Triple NegativeHehe Funny, and so true! Lunaticity #5It's a great idea and nice art too Gallion Ranch - SpinoffI like the size of this - you don't see the punchline until you scroll down To Work or Not to WorkI liked the way this story turned out. It was easy to read, nice and light, and had a nice ending. I did wonder if she was going to end up babysitting at one point, but I think working for Fyora is a better ending Fight!Hee I love these cartoons and I sooo love Shad! Eerie FriendsI like the idea, and I like that you're going to do more ghosty stories, but I found this one a bit difficult to read, sorry. Maybe it's just that I'm tired though... I'll watch out for any other ghost stories you do though!
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Post by Pacmanite on Jul 24, 2006 4:51:08 GMT -5
Ah, good question, I should add it to my soon-to-be FAQ  Only one of those Gallion Ranch comics actually has a Gallion in it. They're called the Gally Ranch because my collabber, Hakuryu_86, is obsessed with those petpets. If you ever visit his userlookup, you'll find that he calls himself "The Unofficial Gallion Rancher" ^^ For the comics, it's mostly a title, and little more. Thanks for the comment! Thank you! Heh, it's funny when I remember that I've been told "I wanna squish him" before ^^ Again, thanks for the comment! Yup, that was my intention ^^ |
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Post by Draeroz on Jul 24, 2006 6:05:01 GMT -5
Lunaticity #5It's a great idea and nice art too Thanks for the review. |
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Post by Deleted on Jul 24, 2006 7:17:20 GMT -5
Ah, good question, I should add it to my soon-to-be FAQ Only one of those Gallion Ranch comics actually has a Gallion in it. They're called the Gally Ranch because my collabber, Hakuryu_86, is obsessed with those petpets. If you ever visit his userlookup, you'll find that he calls himself "The Unofficial Gallion Rancher" ^^ For the comics, it's mostly a title, and little more. Thanks for the comment! I took a moment to go back and read the Gallion Ranch comics and the first spinoff, and let me tell you, they are so much funnier when I don't expect to see a Gallion! The first one of both series cracked me up. I will definitely be looking forward to your next one with hakuryu_86. |
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Post by Deleted on Jul 24, 2006 12:49:26 GMT -5
No Game Here: Zurro(Heavy)BallI really like the art in this one, and the expression on the Grundo's face when he's covered in snot is great That's it, I'm recruiting Kami to these boards! |
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Post by costaricangirl on Jul 24, 2006 13:00:29 GMT -5
Haven't been here for a while, but also my new series "The Mynci Squad" could be added. ^^; Reviews are appreciated! |
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Post by costaricangirl on Jul 24, 2006 13:13:54 GMT -5
I'll do a quick comic review...
Fight!
Haha, really cute, and good artwork. ^^
The Flotsam Question
Hahahaha! No one knows. O.o
Triple Negative
Hehehehehe! That's all I can say. Funny!
Gallion Ranch
Hahaha, I love it.
The Locker Room
Hehe, cute. Good artwork!
Lunaticity #5
Also quite cute. I love the expression of the Aisha! Haha.
No Game Here: Zurro(Heavy)Ball
Funny and yet so true. xD
I would do more story reviews and stuff, but... I need a nap. Alabama tired me out. xD
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Post by Draeroz on Jul 24, 2006 17:06:53 GMT -5
Lunaticity #5Also quite cute. I love the expression of the Aisha! Haha. Glad you like it too. |
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Post by Deleted on Jul 24, 2006 17:50:20 GMT -5
Haven't been here for a while, but also my new series "The Mynci Squad" could be added. ^^; Reviews are appreciated! Cute intro (I like the preschool scene). A couple of grammatical/punctuation errors, but overall it was well written. There are quite a few characters, but hopefully in the next part I'll be able to sort through them a bit more. ^-^ Nicely done. |
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Post by costaricangirl on Jul 24, 2006 22:01:21 GMT -5
Haven't been here for a while, but also my new series "The Mynci Squad" could be added. ^^; Reviews are appreciated! Cute intro (I like the preschool scene). A couple of grammatical/punctuation errors, but overall it was well written. There are quite a few characters, but hopefully in the next part I'll be able to sort through them a bit more. ^-^ Nicely done. Yeah, I was really nervous about having way too many characters, but I was in love with them all! If I ever write another story then I'll probably just use a couple of them as my "mains". I dunno. xD Thanks!! |
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Post by Tashni on Jul 25, 2006 13:19:52 GMT -5
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More reviews for Eerie Friends is always appreciated.
Only one of those Gallion Ranch comics actually has a Gallion in it. They're called the Gally Ranch because my collabber, Hakuryu_86, is obsessed with those petpets. If you ever visit his userlookup, you'll find that he calls himself "The Unofficial Gallion Rancher" ^^ For the comics, it's mostly a title, and little more. Thanks for the comment! 
DOOMY DOOMS OF DOOM!! 
