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Post by Deleted on Feb 4, 2006 9:47:54 GMT -5
Sia's random reviews! Trophy AdventuringQuite a quaint little article. Rather nice introduction, but not so much guide-wise and it had only coverage on five trophies, not that many. Though they are easy to get, so I suppose it isn't that bad... The energetic language really persuades and helps you to get going, though it feels as if the author was a whirlwind going through the trophies. Overall, an amusing read. Not so much tips as telling, though. A Hero's Journey: Part FiveAww... *sniffle* Sir Reynold leaves... A bit of foreshadowing there? I like how Rohane wins and is really oblivious about Reuben's feelings... He's a good winner, that's one thing for sure. And Reuben just turned a bit evil with all that screaming  It's a bit funny as to how the dinner goes, that Rohane is more educated, but I suppose he should be since he's the great hero. I can see where we get Reuben's scary schemes from now... This part was quite suspenseful, and nicely written and I could really feel the emotions. A bit of a cliffie, and I'll be looking forward to the next part as always! |
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Post by Dan on Feb 4, 2006 12:18:21 GMT -5
Jhudora: Naughty or Nice?Interesting article, the faeries' vanity was shown very well. The part when Jhudora tried to convince you that she is evil was funny. Your witty remark made me laugh: In all, the interview portion was very entertaining but could have been longer. I noticed that you included a significant chunk of GoE write-up about Jhudora and it helped to make the word count. I'd advise writing more on the interview/original content part to beef up your article. The article (apart from the personal account) is in present tense, so your last line should have been "Maybe she is evil after all". Good effort though. =) Bleh, that was my mistake. I was in such a hurry to get it done, I ran out of ideas. Oh well, next time I'll start earlier on so I don't rush.  EDIT: Thanks by the way. |
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Post by Huntress on Feb 4, 2006 14:21:07 GMT -5
The second part of my series, Treasure of the Caves, is out, packed with brainlessly absurd humor and begging for reviews. Atleast I think it's better than the first part... >.>
And my comic Generosity got in too. Whoot. All comments are very appreciated *puppehdog eyes*
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Post by nttryingtogetin on Feb 4, 2006 14:24:24 GMT -5
Jhudora: Naughty or Nice?: Now to start off, I'll say I really loved the intro. I could imagine a real reporter talking on TV saying something like that, so nice intro! I also liked that you interviewed people that were involved with Jhudora, not just random pets in Neopia Central who run away screaming at Jhudora's name, so yeah. Nice.  Well, the Bori was in Faerieland, so does that count? XDD Whatever. I really liked when Fyora said Jhudora was 'cuddly', it made me laugh. I couldn't imagine Jhudora cuddling a Pink Faellie or hugging people, could you? Rofl, overall a good amusing article! ^^ Still more coming.
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Post by Dan on Feb 4, 2006 14:32:45 GMT -5
Jhudora: Naughty or Nice?: Now to start off, I'll say I really loved the intro. I could imagine a real reporter talking on TV saying something like that, so nice intro! I also liked that you interviewed people that were involved with Jhudora, not just random pets in Neopia Central who run away screaming at Jhudora's name, so yeah. Nice. Well, the Bori was in Faerieland, so does that count? XDD Whatever. I really liked when Fyora said Jhudora was 'cuddly', it made me laugh. I couldn't imagine Jhudora cuddling a Pink Faellie or hugging people, could you? Rofl, overall a good amusing article! ^^ Still more coming. Thanks very much! |
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Post by jxhn on Feb 4, 2006 14:35:01 GMT -5
Perhaps someone could review my article?
There's a link in my signature.
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Post by Nina on Feb 4, 2006 14:37:18 GMT -5
 I'd appreciate reviews for 'He Promised Her Orange'. www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=180077&issue=226I'll start. *kicks self* How in the world did I forget to finish panel number *counts* 12. Too pixelized. I think by the time I got to the sponge part I was getting weary of drawing and just rushed through it. Thanks First of all...very intriguing title! It sounds almost poetic, like it should be the title of a song or a poem, or maybe a short story. I must congratulate you for coming up with one of the best comic titles I've ever seen  . Also, I completely understand the references to the violin at the top. Very humorous, I must say. It also added to my enjoyment of the comic... I could hear the sad violing music in my head while I read the comic, and I found that that actually amused me. I also assume that it refers to the "world's smallest violin" joke? Lots of panels...actually, when I read this post, I was like, "What?! Someone had the patience to do 12 panels?!" It actually adds to your comic, though, which is something that I wouldn't say for many with so many panels. It almost seemed like slow motion, and the comic would not have been funny if you had drawn it with 3-4 panels...which I guess you could have, if you had been particularly lazy. Honestly? I think that the only reason why I laughed at the end was because of your pacing throughout the comic. The joke in itself was not hilarious, if you had drawn it in less panels, but the fact that you added so much suspense with the slow action really built it up. It seemed so serious! I can't help but laugh at it every time I look at the comic xD. I must say, the second row of panels? HILARIOUS. The patting of the Lab Ray? -shakes head-. You really have a way of conveniently changing the angle, and changing the zooming out of the characters in such a way that it works, and forces the viewer to really look at what's happening. Plus, it adds variation, which just makes the comic more interesting. Not many people can do that ^_^. The last set of panels, with the Grundo falling on his/her face... very nicely done. I like the shaking thing. Without that, the punchline wouldn't have been nearly as effective. It's all so dramatic xD. A perfectly timed comic, which I don't see too often. And a unique idea, flawlessly portrayed and drawn out. Most people wouldn't have been able to do this idea in such a way to make it funny, but you obviously have the talent to do so ^_^. Hilarious, and I must congratulate you for being able to avoid the use of speech bubbles. You know, they're in almost every comic these days. I think you should continue doing these sorts of comics. Very humorous, and I'd definitely read them. As a side note, you definitely shouldn't poke at flaws in your own comics, if you can help it. Unless they're blatantly obvious, or something =P. Personally, I never would have noticed anything if you hadn't pointed it out, and it still doesn't seem obvious to me as it is. I guess I see what you mean with the pixels, but it's not a big deal, and it doesn't look out of place. Also, if you're ever getting bored with your comic, I would advise you not to rush it in the future. Just take a break, and come back to it when you want to. Making your comics should be enjoyable, and not a chore. Plus, the NT's not going to run away if you don't get it in a certain week, right? Congratulations on a great comic, overall! I really must say that I enjoyed it. |
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Post by Kat on Feb 5, 2006 4:16:03 GMT -5
Venturing into Jhudora's CloudYay, action + humour + unexpected twist = great story. The pace is good, I didn't sense that the story was lagging anywhere. Jhudora was written very well. All those little gestures like squirming, touching her hair, etc were very good characterization. The funniest bit was: Rofl XD Although the story was rather informal - switching perspective back and forth between Jhudora and the Xweetok - it worked for me because it wasn't confusing. However, the sheer amount of "......" was a bit overwhelming. A period could have replaced a couple of dots. Save the dots. Conservation. =p THE DOTS WILL RULE J00. BEWARE THE DOTS. XD *cough* Thanks, Kushbi. ^_^ You pwn. A Hero's Journey: Part FiveAww... *sniffle* Sir Reynold leaves... A bit of foreshadowing there? I like how Rohane wins and is really oblivious about Reuben's feelings... He's a good winner, that's one thing for sure. And Reuben just turned a bit evil with all that screaming It's a bit funny as to how the dinner goes, that Rohane is more educated, but I suppose he should be since he's the great hero. I can see where we get Reuben's scary schemes from now... This part was quite suspenseful, and nicely written and I could really feel the emotions. A bit of a cliffie, and I'll be looking forward to the next part as always! YAY SIA. ;D Thanks! (Note to self: MAKE WITH THE REVIEWS.) |
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Post by nttryingtogetin on Feb 5, 2006 9:45:37 GMT -5
Walking the Plank: Before I say anything, I have to say that I LIKE overdescriptive stories, I think they good. ^^ Description is good. Moving on. To start with, I like the simple sentence, 'The sea stood barren.' I thought it kind of gave a suspense to the story. Ya know when in films there's just a normal sea, and then there's a blast of water and a monster comes out? Anyway. xDD I really liked the intro, with the whole Garin missing, and it showed that his shipmates really felt for him. Your story kept me asking questions throughout, and I think thats a very good thing - it keeps the reader reading, doesn't it? ;D Overall, I thought it was a lovely tale about Garin, and the description was really good. ^^
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Post by nttryingtogetin on Feb 5, 2006 9:58:43 GMT -5
The Weaver: Nice introduction, I liked the description of how the Weaver works, for example, '...though a galloping steed, creating neat, even stitches.' It was brilliant! As in my last review, I had questions about the story that urged me to read on. Did the Weaver have much money? Why did she dress herself in simple clothes when she had the talent to make beautiful garments? And things like that. The questions were answered, of course, but I thought maybe you could've answered them at the end to keep the reader on their toes? It didn't really matter however, because the answers slotted in nicely with the story. ^^ To finish, I really enjoyed the ending. I thought it was simple yet effective. Good work, Doughnut! 
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Post by Deleted on Feb 5, 2006 13:49:19 GMT -5
If anyone wants to review the first part of faerie forest (it's my tenth thing in the nt, yay!) well, any reviews would be appreciated.
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Post by ohmandoh on Feb 5, 2006 14:08:18 GMT -5
He Promised Her Orange
Ah, I was a bit slow on this one, had to stare at the last panel and look at the title before getting the joke. But when it hit, I laughed. The art is really cute, especially the last three panels. Is there a reason for the line "A bow is placed upon a string..."? Thank you for the review. I was trying to be poetic and bring a lonely sounding violin into to make the comic more tragic, hehe. Wow, Nina! Thank you so much for that review! Also, I completely understand the references to the violin at the top. Very humorous, I must say. It also added to my enjoyment of the comic... I could hear the sad violing music in my head while I read the comic, and I found that that actually amused me. I also assume that it refers to the "world's smallest violin" joke? I didn't realize that was what I was doing. I never really understood that joke... but I looked it up, and that's exactly what I was trying to do. Haha. As a side note, you definitely shouldn't poke at flaws in your own comics, if you can help it. Unless they're blatantly obvious, or something =P. Personally, I never would have noticed anything if you hadn't pointed it out, and it still doesn't seem obvious to me as it is. I guess I see what you mean with the pixels, but it's not a big deal, and it doesn't look out of place. Hehe, I was just shocked when it came out and I realized I never finished... there was alot of sponginess I wanted to add there. Thank you so much! |
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Post by hmlanden on Feb 5, 2006 18:53:06 GMT -5
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Post by Nut on Feb 6, 2006 3:36:50 GMT -5
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Post by Kiddo on Feb 6, 2006 3:52:00 GMT -5
Hey, Kiddo! Nice name for your story. LOL! Well. It was. I was staring at the NT submission form and going "Name, I need a name, I need a name..." and then I looked at the clock and was like, homg past 3 am? Hey, a name! - Written at 3am. Ironically enough, it's about 4 am right now. I really need to stop staying up late writing. |
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It's a bit funny as to how the dinner goes, that Rohane is more educated, but I suppose he should be since he's the great hero. I can see where we get Reuben's scary schemes from now...
neo username - dan4884 
Well, the Bori was in Faerieland, so does that count? XDD Whatever. I really liked when Fyora said Jhudora was 'cuddly', it made me laugh. I couldn't imagine Jhudora cuddling a Pink Faellie or hugging people, could you? Rofl, overall a good amusing article! ^^
I'd appreciate reviews for 'He Promised Her Orange'.
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