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Post by Nina on Oct 15, 2005 12:55:22 GMT -5
Yay! My comic finally got in after over 2 months of waiting!  Yes, I did really enjoy your comic, Jazz ^_^. You should make more comics like these, drawn by you. Or, at least, I think you drew it? The art had an interesting style to it. Also, the joke was great. It literally made me laugh out loud. This is definitely my favourite comic by you so far. You should try to save it better, though, because I see that some of the quality was lost, and there shouldn't be any lost, because your comic isn't even that colourful or large width or length-wise. If you use Photoshop, try using the Save For Web feature under File, if you don't already. |
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Post by Komori on Oct 15, 2005 15:02:34 GMT -5
... Well, I should be studying for my Survey of Animation midterm. So I decided I'll take this time to do comic reviews! ;D Because that's how I work. This time, I won't review everything. Just what people request. So, request away! (comics only) And, for the people who've already made some requests: Tomb Trouble Hehe, it's a pretty cute idea. It's one of those comics with a limited audience. It only makes sense to those who are following the plot and puzzle. In addition, as time passes, it will make less sense, as plots come and go and people forget the details of plots. Nevertheless, for the time being, it's a good idea. Other comics have indeed embraced the concept of the tomb, but this particular idea is rather clever. Artwise, it is nice. It's simple enough that people can understand what's going on. The text is almost too light colored to be able to read. I wonder if all screen settings could read it. *shrug* I think the main issue is the lineart. I don't think any of the lines are actually black, they all look like a shade of dark grey. I think it would've helped a bit if they were darker and bolder. The symbol above the door especially should have used thicker lines. The problem with those sort of thin and sketchy lines is noticible in the door. There are lots of white spots where the color couldn't be filled in. That is destracting, and could've been avoided by using a solid line rather than a number of thin ones. Or you could've gone without lineart on the door at all, and it still would've worked. My last problem is that cursor. XDDD It's right above the paint brush. Tsk, tsk. You should've moved that out of the way before you screencapped the pic.  Nerkmid Mania Hm. Firstly, pirates pwn ninjas. That simple fact thusly lowers your comic rate pointage. I'm sorry. Ideawise, it's pretty clever. The subject matter of Nerkmids is something that is rarely seen in the Times. Maybe once every thirty issues or so. I think it's because there isn't much to be said about the Vending Machine or Nerkmids, so nobody really cared. It's great that you found something to joke about. Also, the use of ninjas is always a nice touch, despite my preference for pirates. It's one of those topics that hardly ever gets old. Artwise, it's rather nice. One of these days though, I think you ought to draw a comic yourself, Jazz. I'd like to see your art style. ;D As for this comic, I'm quite fond of the colors. They're nice and colorful, yet not garrish. The chibi ninja is cute, but not overly painfully anime. The panel with the flying nerkmids is well organized, and well composed. The text in the background is a nice touch as well. I think my main complaint is the emoticon in the second panel. It was completely unnecessary, and actually detracts from the Blumaroo's expression. ... This is especially true because the emoticon doesn't match the blumaroo's face. The emoticon equivalent would have been "-_-", not "  ". But all in all, don't use emoticons in comics! Emoticons are for text, when you don't have a drawing to convey expression. If you're using drawings, why also use text? Put the face on the character, not in the dialogue! Ooh, and also, I love the first panel. The action transitions are quite nice. Bravo. Cross Word Puzzles Oh the pun! Oh the punniness! *groans* I'm not a big fan of puns, but it's still a nice comic. The subject matter is unique. I think it would've had more of an impact if the word Cross in the last panel was italicized. Artwise, it's very well done. The expressions are lovely and appropriate. I like the action in the second panel. I'd imagine it was quite difficult to draw an ixi tearing a paper, as Ixis don't have fingers. The hourglass fallling is a nice touch, and a nice detail. Bravo on drawing the backgrounds individually for each panel, rather than copying and pasting. It makes the comic more vibrant. And the colors are quite lovely. The colors on the clouds really say 'Faerieland'. Welcome to Kreludor! Hehe, I know you didn't actually ask for a review, but I just had to say. Kess comics = <3 I've always been a huge fan of a successful one panel-er, and this one is marvelous! It's short and to the point, yet it has a lot of details that keep the eye moving about the pic. I love the joke, it's just so cute! It's so wonderful how the dialogue plus the visuals really make the comic. I mean, the joke wouldn't have any impact if you didn't see that big net the purple grundo is holding. It's just so perfect. Like a Neo version of the Far Side or something! The text is very nice and clean. And the silhouettes of the pets in space is so great. I think it's because of how the silhouettes are colored so cleanly, and with nice muted colors. The background gradients on the moon and the sky are so beautifully done, yet they don't detract from the actual point of the comic. The details on the spacesuit of the grundo is just love. X3 Squeee. ______ Mkay, if anyone else wants a comic review, just ask. |
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Post by Beanie Morton on Oct 15, 2005 17:16:43 GMT -5
Thanks for reviewing xDDD. I agree about the outline, I could have done it differently. And thanks for pointing out the cursor, I didn't realize it.  |
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Post by ICKessler on Oct 15, 2005 19:33:49 GMT -5
Thankee Komori! You're very kind! |
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Post by Tiger on Oct 16, 2005 6:14:55 GMT -5
Finishing....
Roses In the Snow- This was a really good short story! I love the description of the
snow,and how into detail you went about skiing itself. The little hint about a missing skier was
thrown in very nicely-I didn't suspect a thing! The only thing I would suggest is to
introduce your character's color and species earlier in. Great job!
Tomb Trouble- XD Boy do I wish I could do that...the dialougue was great. The only
thing I'd suggest is filling your drawings in with full color, and keeping it in the
outline. Keep it up!
Gallery Blues- Your friends a good writer, Arula! I liked the Bruce, he had a lot of
great character! Getting three friends together to create a gallery was also a good idea,
otherwise I don't see how a complete gallery would've been made. Great job!!
Nerkmid Mania- XD Very original idea! I love the background when the stars are being
thrown...I don' think I'd have the patience to do all that. Very nice job!
Magic Smelly Socks- USEFUL?! Wow...what a long start! I love the discalimers, and
the flag thing. *Thinks about people I could do that to* Hmm....
Chatterbox- I was a little confused while reading this story. I don't think it's too
many pets, but they need to be described seperatly. Aside from that, it was a great story!
I like the beginning part, that starts with Glitter balbbering. Nice job!
OK- If ANYONE wouldn't mind reviewing Avalon and the Emerald Noil Gem: Avalon's Apprentice
Part 6, please do! Or if you happebn to be reading and ghave a comment, please give me that. Thanks!
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Post by fipples~ on Oct 16, 2005 8:01:47 GMT -5
Magic Smelly Socks- USEFUL?! Wow...what a long start! I love the discalimers, and the flag thing. *Thinks about people I could do that to* Hmm.... Thanks! Yeah, I have a tendency to write articles that 2/3 of them are just blabbering so-called "introductions", heh. |
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Post by Beanie Morton on Oct 16, 2005 9:35:58 GMT -5
Thanks. =D
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Post by Star on Oct 16, 2005 10:21:40 GMT -5
Whoops I missed one out...
Chatterbox by precious_katuch14
I got sooo confused at the beginning! I thought there was at least six pets but it got clearer as I read. Maybe it would've been easier to describe each pet by itself. But other than that it was a sweet story. =D
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Post by Belle on Oct 16, 2005 23:05:57 GMT -5
Feep. Short Story reviewsChatterbox by precious_katuch14. I had to reread the first ten paragraphs quite a few times because I couldn’t figure out which pet was which. ^^’ After that, though, the rest of the story was pretty good. ^^ I like the idea of having a male Pink Jetsam named Angel. Sweet, cuddly…with sharp white teeth. :3 I did find the plot a bit predictable, however. Glitter just seems like the type of pet to do what she did. Your characterization was great, though (I really love Angel) and the ending was sweet.  Roses in the Snow by extreme_fj0rd. Officially my favourite short story from this batch. ^^ For starters, your imagery is simply beautiful. Those first four paragraphs painted a clear view of the setting as well as introduced the character effectively. Although you did introduce the pet species a little late, I hardly noticed (but perhaps the picture helped). I could follow the flow of the story easily (your “action” scenes are quite efficient). I also loved the bit about the mystery skier. I would have to agree with Blub about the conversation with Nathan, though. I would never have guessed they were friends if Kali had not called him by name. ^^’ Always at Home by genius5000x. I enjoyed the story because I loved the scenario. A pet working at the Grundo’s Café caught in the influx of the worsening Neopian economy. The plot was easy to follow and Matrixpaw’s characterization was good. I was just caught off guard by the ending. I was expecting reconciliation between Matrixpaw and his family (I thought the family who entered the café was his) but I guess I was wrong. I was expecting them to recognize each other or something but as it turned out, they were completely unrelated. Feep. I loved it. ^^ That’s all I have for today. ^^ *vanishes* |
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Post by Nut on Oct 16, 2005 23:07:15 GMT -5
I wasn't published this week, but I can still do reviews. A Spooky Halloween: Part 2 Ooh, I'm attempting a comic review. Spooky is one of my favorite comics to begin with; I love seeing the art every week and looking forward to what is bound to be a pretty funny joke. I thought the second part of your Halloween comic was just great. First Panel - I like how Claw looks happy here, as he casually introduces to the reader that he's the host of a Halloween party. His mouth is open in an interesting way there, looking as if he's just opening it on one side. The Ghost Kyrii's ghost aura seems to be cut a little close near the hand, but that's all right. I love the Halloween Blumaroo sitting back and watching nonchalantly, being obvious and yet not the focus of the panel. It's drawn so nicely, too. The mummified Ruki and its companion are a nice background touch. Second Panel - Your characters' expressions are delightfully exaggerated as usual. I love Claw's pose as he's leaning back on his tail in a clear display of unwillingness to even see what's going on with the two party guests. And Komori looks so genuinely alarmed and eager for Claw's assistance. I like the subtle dark lines behind them that make up the background decorations. The hanging bat cutouts by their heads add a bit of Halloween party feel to it. Third Panel - The punchline! Oh, I found this spectacularly funny! Eliv Thade's expression pushes the joke to extra lengths. He looks so frustrated and the Brain Tree looks so smugly satisfied, as if he's just teasing Thade. I love how the Brain Tree is leaning towards Thade with his arms crossed in such a self-satisfied pose. The expressions in this panel are priceless, and continue Thade's rivalry with the Brain Tree. Absolutely great comic, Komori! |
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Post by Scar on Oct 17, 2005 5:24:03 GMT -5
Again, I have some time to burn so here's my two cents on a couple of short stories: Chatterboxby precious_katuch14 A nice 'feel good' story to read. The characters and their respective traits were very well presented, especially the chatterbox herself, Glitter. I felt a little confused in the beginning with several characters interacting at once but once the story got started it pretty much sorted itself out. A really minor detail is the choice of names for male and female characters but that's just my personal opinion and doesn't really matter. Good job, Kat The Daring Dish Dashby katiea14 "ROFL" pretty much sums up this extremely amusing tale. The myriad of Petpets, including their respective quirks and physical 'disabilities' (or rather lack of certain body parts), were very nicely detailed, not to mention the many sounds and voices and actions. Kudos to the writer for such an interesting writing style, though I feel that the writer used too much detail in the voices and sounds. Still Petpets make annoying noises so great job! ;D ps: Who's Philip Ardagh? Gallery Bluesby falcon970 A nice story with the typical theme of a bunch of kids (or in this case, Gelerts) seeking out an ingenious plan (entering Burb's Gallery contest) to get some quick cash. Kyra's also realistically portrayed -- optimistic one moment and nervous the next. For some strange reason, I also liked Burb Bruce. Not only is his name catchy (Su burb? ;D) but his accent made me chuckle. The custom pic was nice too Overall, a very well written story and first try by the writer. Congrats. Always at Homeby genius5000x I think this was posted here a while ago. Looking at it again (the full version, mind), I remember why I still remember it. A great story which realistically details the outcome of inflation, a foreign and dull work environment, and the disillusioned MP (which some of us can definitely relate to) with just the right touch of sarcasm. I particularly liked the 'overtime' reference and the Neomail in the ending, especially the moral at the end. Good work The New Family Memberby animalnutz1993 A nicely written and touching story if I say so myself. I liked how the story was written from Loretta the Doglefox's point of view and especially how the writer touched on the issue of sibling rivalry (even if Loretta is a Petpet). Still, I feel the story is a bit rushed, especially when Loretta's being ignored, but the ending was nicely done IMHO. Good job Roses in the Snowby extreme_fj0rd From a simple skiing contest to something spookier. A great story with a twist at the end (or rather middle) that's sure to elicit a few gasps. On another note, Kali was very nicely portrayed, though you could have added a bit more detail on her wanting to win. And the race through the mountains with Shelly had just the right touch of spookiness and excitement. Great story, Fjord! I have some series on disc so I'll do their reviews soon too |
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Post by arula100 on Oct 17, 2005 6:07:10 GMT -5
Gallery Blues by falcon970 This was a short, simple read. I liked the Neo-fu! I thought that the fact that they were going to win was obvious but most stories like that are. A good first NT publication anyway! =D Gallery Blues- Your friends a good writer, Arula! I liked the Bruce, he had a lot of great character! Getting three friends together to create a gallery was also a good idea, otherwise I don't see how a complete gallery would've been made. Great job!! Gallery Bluesby falcon970 A nice story with the typical theme of a bunch of kids (or in this case, Gelerts) seeking out an ingenious plan (entering Burb's Gallery contest) to get some quick cash. Kyra's also realistically portrayed -- optimistic one moment and nervous the next. For some strange reason, I also liked Burb Bruce. Not only is his name catchy (Su burb? ;D) but his accent made me chuckle. The custom pic was nice too Overall, a very well written story and first try by the writer. Congrats. Thank ya'll so much! Falcon is in Disneyworld right now, so I've Neomailed them to her to read along with all her fanmail when she gets home. I'm going to try to get her to join here, too ;D |
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Post by Kat on Oct 17, 2005 6:14:20 GMT -5
*pops in* Thanks so much for all the reviews. I'm just so sorry that I can barely do any.  Perhaps I'll do some in a couple o' days or so. |
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Post by Thundy on Oct 17, 2005 19:25:28 GMT -5
Thanks everyone for your revies of my story, much appreciated! ;D
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Post by Scar on Oct 17, 2005 21:24:59 GMT -5
As promised, the reviews for a couple of new series. Please note that this is only for the individual part and not the story as a whole. I reserve judgement for the complete story Legend Seekers: Destiny Discovered - Part Oneby yatomiyuka A good start to a Mystery Island adventure. I do have a couple of bones to pick (all minor of course or they wouldn't be bones ) For one thing the part is rather short. Okay, maybe i'm overreacting but I like my series' long so ignore that ^^; Another thing is the premise of the adventure is there ("I'm going to discover its every secret.") but what about some direction, like a rumour or something. Still, I suppose it's in the next part And finally Jen's letter sounds almost like Pemero's. I expected her exasperation and sarcasm to be reflected in it. Still, overall a good start if ye ask me. Looking forward to the next part, Yuka. Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Rivalry - Part Oneby nimras23 Another Meridell court intrigue story set in Meridell. Don't get me wrong, i like reading medieval fantasy as much as the next person, but i'm not a big fan of using main characters like Jeran and Lisha in stories. Nevertheless, Rivalry contains an interesting twist of those masters of disguise -- thieves! -- and that's more than enough to get my attention. I do have to comment on how slow the story is in certain parts but I'm sure it's going to pick up in the next part. Till the next part ...may it have more thieves. ;D The Sought, the Sister, and the Sorceress: Part Oneby animalnutz1993 Two entries in one issue, eh? Anyway, I'd say that this first part has done an okay job of describing the characters in the story, with the exception of Sam who's detailed quite a lot since she's the protagonist after all. As a whole the part is pretty vague on the 'gang' and Kari's role as the 'Chosen One' but i'm sure that's forthcoming. On a minor note, IMHO all basic pet colours, like white, brown etc., shouldn't be capitalized. Anyway, till the next part. |
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". But all in all, don't use emoticons in comics! Emoticons are for text, when you don't have a drawing to convey expression. If you're using drawings, why also use text? Put the face on the character, not in the dialogue!
Perhaps I'll do some in a couple o' days or so. 