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Post by PFA on Nov 3, 2010 11:29:39 GMT -5
The girl fidgeted slightly, pushing a lock of her long, dark-brown hair behind her ear. "...Elena. I'm Elena."
And he finally learns her name!
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Post by Strife on Nov 3, 2010 11:35:55 GMT -5
"Her personal prayers were interrupted, though, when an explosion rocked the back end of the vehicle, causing it to flip over and crash onto the pavement upside down."
Yeouch. <.< Good thing her alloy suit is designed for these kinds of impacts.
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Post by M is for Morphine on Nov 3, 2010 11:51:01 GMT -5
"Kill it, you idiot! What are you waiting for?"
"Your love and approval?"
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Post by Ian Wolf-Park on Nov 3, 2010 12:27:35 GMT -5
I groaned due to the fact that my nightmare had caused me to be on edge for no reason.
Ouch, that's got to hurt, having a nightmare like that.
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Post by PFA on Nov 3, 2010 15:30:39 GMT -5
"This is pretty good soup, isn't it? They have some great chefs here, it seems. Is all the food here this good?"
piet makes small talk with the pretty girl who smacked him with a door
write faster, pfa
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Post by Yuka on Nov 3, 2010 16:34:57 GMT -5
Piece by piece, I grow and remember. MuahaHAhaHA - - Ahem.  |
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Post by insanepurpleone on Nov 3, 2010 18:10:05 GMT -5
"Well, Adam thought, having a number key stick was certainly better than having a letter key that was sticky, considering the fact that he was a writer and all and needed to be able to write lots of words with different letters in them."
Lololol. Stretching to hit 2,500 words at the end of a scene leads to sentences so bad they're hilarious!
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Post by Kathleen on Nov 3, 2010 18:13:30 GMT -5
"I like to think we look just the same on the inside, even if it is all messy and wet and pink."
Marin says the sweetest things. =D
>.<
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Post by Amneiger on Nov 3, 2010 19:45:06 GMT -5
"Someone, somewhere, pressed a virtual button. "
srs bsnss gaiz
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Post by Butterfly on Nov 3, 2010 19:46:00 GMT -5
After reasurring her that her family and farm would be alright, I led her through the gateway to be reunited with long dead family members and friends. Awww...  My writing is so happy and fluffy right now, even if I am talking about dead people. Need action...XD |
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Post by Lizzie on Nov 3, 2010 20:21:22 GMT -5
It was pretty much the best smile ever known ever in the history of peanut butter and jelly potatoes. Not. Even. Kidding.
What.
What am I writing.
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Post by Shadaras on Nov 3, 2010 20:28:16 GMT -5
“I don’t know.”
...brilliant, Lionel. xD ((Preceding line of dialogue (from August): “Should I be annoyed with you?”))
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Post by Kathleen on Nov 3, 2010 21:32:51 GMT -5
The people always bleed to death anyway. But at least they have someone next to them, holding their hand.
It's an analogy. And it's not as morbid as it sounds. Seriously. xD
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Post by Rikku on Nov 3, 2010 23:47:03 GMT -5
“Neither,” said Riff, with dignity, “does your face.”
... Because high school? I guess? I blame high school.
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Post by Stephanie (swordlilly) on Nov 4, 2010 0:18:13 GMT -5
"So she listened to the music that he habitually listened to, until her heartbeat slowed to a manageable rhythm. But still sweet and exciting and layered, like a fugue."
Hmm, I realize that I have a lot of sentence fragments. But they're a stylistic device, aren't they? (Darnit! I just wrote another fragment!!)
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My writing is so happy and fluffy right now, even if I am talking about dead people. Need action...XD
