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[Serene]

micrody said:

The Bunker by hubadawaha
Once again, I don't think the white background detracted from the Bunker feel one bit. You know, I also don't know why I had thought you'd never personally be in there...guess I figured you were one of those "heard but not seen" kind of owners, lol. Though, when Oracle did arrive, why'd she have to climb out a window and around to the front if she was already inside...? The short words war between Oracle and Phil was funny. ^_^ The bonus, though, wasn't that great this time.

I believe it said in the comic that the door that leads to the portal room was locked from the outside. If so that would explain, if I am mistaken, then I have the same question.

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serene said:

micrody said:

The Bunker by hubadawaha
Once again, I don't think the white background detracted from the Bunker feel one bit. You know, I also don't know why I had thought you'd never personally be in there...guess I figured you were one of those "heard but not seen" kind of owners, lol. Though, when Oracle did arrive, why'd she have to climb out a window and around to the front if she was already inside...? The short words war between Oracle and Phil was funny. ^_^ The bonus, though, wasn't that great this time.

I believe it said in the comic that the door that leads to the portal room was locked from the outside. If so that would explain, if I am mistaken, then I have the same question.

Hmm... I read it that the portal in the room on the third floor of Headquarters was what she used to get there, and where she arrived was their house. So, then, why would she have to go out the window to be at the front door, if she was already inside?

Or maybe I'm simply misunderstanding what was said? O_o

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silvermare said:

The Bunker:
I love how your comics always have lots of jokes in them instead of just one punchline! Phil doesn't really seem like much of a 'people person', does he? D=

Why, thank ya! I always like to fit in as much comedy as possible, seeing as it'll be a whole week (if not more) till the next one.
Phil may seem kind of.... smarmy? Nah, that's not right... waspish? No, that's not it either... A smart aleck? Yeah. Yeah, that sounds right. XD Any who, he really is a good guy once you get past the initial... well, insults. T_T

pyrosquirrelx said:

The Bunker by hubadawaha

“What’s with the ‘no pants’ thing?” made me laugh. Phil is really funny. I want to know what happens next :3

Shweet. X3 I've waiting FOREVER to whip out that one. I heart Phil. ^_^ And no worries. The next one is on the way!

goosher said:

The Bunker by Huba
XDDDD Excellent! Now, lesse, we've got Sorore, Phil, Valryio, the...um....other two, and you. This is -packed-. =D And insanely funny.

Vrilyo, Sorore, Phil, Aranane and Akujima, plus se moi. Yes, the six main characters are finally in place! Rest assured though, the cast of The Bunker is far greater than it is now. I just haven't introduced them yet. Not to worry, they're all just as kooky as the others! X3 Thank you for the reveiw.

serene said:

The Bunker by Huba
I love how many jokes seemed to fit in one of your comics. I loved the "no pants thing" also Phils simple way of saying" touche"

Thank ya again! As with the "no pants" comment, the classic "touche" has also been eagerly awaiting it's debut (hope I spelled that right...).

micrody said:

The Bunker by hubadawaha
Once again, I don't think the white background detracted from the Bunker feel one bit. You know, I also don't know why I had thought you'd never personally be in there...guess I figured you were one of those "heard but not seen" kind of owners, lol. Though, when Oracle did arrive, why'd she have to climb out a window and around to the front if she was already inside...? The short words war between Oracle and Phil was funny. ^_^ The bonus, though, wasn't that great this time.

Hehe. Yeah. ^_^' I did kinda wait a while to introduce my alter ego, but hey, I had a lot of setting exposition and character introduction to do! Anyway, I figured ya'll would get such a kick out of the one liners that the Bonus section wouldn't have to pick up on the funny as much as usual.

serene said:

micrody said:

The Bunker by hubadawaha
Once again, I don't think the white background detracted from the Bunker feel one bit. You know, I also don't know why I had thought you'd never personally be in there...guess I figured you were one of those "heard but not seen" kind of owners, lol. Though, when Oracle did arrive, why'd she have to climb out a window and around to the front if she was already inside...? The short words war between Oracle and Phil was funny. ^_^ The bonus, though, wasn't that great this time.

I believe it said in the comic that the door that leads to the portal room was locked from the outside. If so that would explain, if I am mistaken, then I have the same question.

Yes, exactly! See, there's a special room in the Bunker with portals to certain places (all shall be revealed later). I suspected that, because I hadn't shown the portal room yet, some people might get a little confused by this comment. XP My apologies. Anyway, yeah, the door to this particular room was locked from the hallway side of the door. Therefore, it was either climb out the window, or go back through the portal and take the long way there. Obviously, the window seemed quicker.



Phew! Lotta reveiws while I was backpacking.

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micrody said:

serene said:

I believe it said in the comic that the door that leads to the portal room was locked from the outside. If so that would explain, if I am mistaken, then I have the same question.

Hmm... I read it that the portal in the room on the third floor of Headquarters was what she used to get there, and where she arrived was their house. So, then, why would she have to go out the window to be at the front door, if she was already inside?

Or maybe I'm simply misunderstanding what was said? O_o

Ah, there's the problem. The portal is on the third floor of the Bunker, not HQ. Simple misunderstanding. I'll try to word things more carefully. ^.^' My bad.

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Revenge and Resistance: Part Eight by dan4884
Somehow, I knew the Resistance hadn't been blown up. Perhaps, though, I had just been hoping for it enough, not really as certain as I felt after all. *shrugs* Nevertheless, the way you revealed that fact was quite skillfully done. But then, at the bar, I expected the room to be empty when Skyfire and Garoo looked in it. The Resistance had gone too far, it seemed, for them to suddenly be found out, I guess.

Sophix's freeing of the Space Faerie was unexpected, though believable. I actually hope she is able to escape as well, to return home. But, despite that, I have a nagging feeling she's not out of this war yet. The Space Faerie's arrival at Gormos' house was nicely done, though the onomatopoeia seemed pointless as in the very next paragraph you said he heard knocking from his door. Anyways, her speech was very inspiring, I feel, and the fact that she was able to read his thoughts was played excellently well and certainly cut out his ability to deny the situation, and that made it flow faster to completion.

I look forward to reading the next part.

[Scar]

Now, I don't often review anything in the NT these days but my first ever NT entry was an article so I was browsing that section out of curiosity and came across this gem.

Professor Edgar Eyrie's Magic Square
by shamboo5

A nice simple simple article about a very intriguing and well thought out game: Magic Square. The character interaction flows smoothly and the solution to the puzzle comes at a good pace. It is also one of the more well written articles I've seen and a great first attempt by a NT first-timer. I personally would look out for more puzzle articles by the author.

[Goosh]

Extraordinary Shelter by Luau
It was a unique and refreshing story, and you have an excellent balance of description, which is hard with an empty desert, and action, which is again difficult. But you did great on both. I do have a few criticisms. I don't really see how Cora, even though she was a Ruki, being able to trip across the desert in three days. If the sun was as hot and glaring as described, I think she would have collapsed sooner. The ambiguous ending was rather hard to follow as well. Though I appreciated the message and metaphor of the cactus, I don't think that Cora would easily find help in the middle of the desert, far away from both her home and her destination. But other than that, I really enjoy your writing style, Luau. ^___^ Thumbs up!

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Thanks to Goosh and Pyro for reviewing Extraordinary Shelter. I did have some trouble with ending this one, so I'd appreciate any suggestions for the ending in particular. Also, usually I wouldn't say anything, but since there is an NT writer who's name is Lau, I need to point out that I'm Luau.

[Goosh]

Sorry about that. ^^;;;;;;

Wolf didn't post the NTWF name, so I wasn't sure whose story I was reviewing.

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Running Faster than Destiny: Part Six by tj_wagner
That was a wonderful part, and that was a wonderful series.

At the end of the last part, wasn't too thrilled with Fyora's arrival. It just seemed like the easy way out then. But now, having read the conclusion, her presence fit perfectly, and the story wouldn't have been quite the same had she been substituted with somebody else. I can't say her arrival wasn't a bit deus ex machina, but it seemed to fit, and that's all that matters in the end. Her punishment to Onyx was fitting and not cruel, and her "punishment" to Twitch was perfect. The interaction they shared was perfectly done, and the words that she said to him were so encouraging and inspiring, it was just beautifully done. Great job with how well you wrote it.

It was incredibly obvious, to me at least, that Gar was Twitch. But the revealing moment was written well and still made me smile when the truth came out. How he showed Kari the second-place ribbon was really nice and sweet, and in some way, touching as well.

I'm glad that neither of them placed first. That truly would have been the easy way out. Some might argue that their "losses" made the ending sad, prevented it from being a happy ending, but I would certainly have to disagree. Maybe it was disappointing that they didn't win, but it wasn't sad, and in fact, how you wrote it, even second place fitted for a happy ending. That, I feel, was just wonderful.

This was a sweet story, and it was really well-written. I loved reading it every week.

[Dragon]

Thanks for the reviews. flufey_is_cute is also on here (she goes by Ange). She does the art and I do the script.

Now I just have to go and read everything. (I was out of town.)

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Dark Friend: Part Six by petfriendamy
That part was fast-paced and incredible. The fighting scenes were amazing. I almost got confused with how many times Dina switched bodies, but you consistently described everything accurately and it all flowed smoothly and was easily followed. Action that intense can be really hard to write, but you wrote it well. Good job.

The Royal Dagger coming alive was a twist I never saw coming, but it was awesomely done and quite amazing, very unexpected as well. However, I don't fully understand why he let them all go so easily. Unless you plan on making this a trilogy...? *grins*

I think I would have enjoyed a little more time spent with everyone after the fight, but having everyone go their separate ways so soon wasn't a bad thing, and it actually served as a great way to end the series. I loved Wanda's comment about wallpaper at the end, but, well, I can't figure out why she's so hung up on wallpaper! lol. ^_^

All in a day's work, though, eh?

This series was very enjoyable and I had a lot of fun each week, PFA. I look forward to your next piece.

[PFA]

micrody said:

Dark Friend: Part Six by petfriendamy
That part was fast-paced and incredible. The fighting scenes were amazing. I almost got confused with how many times Dina switched bodies, but you consistently described everything accurately and it all flowed smoothly and was easily followed. Action that intense can be really hard to write, but you wrote it well. Good job.

The Royal Dagger coming alive was a twist I never saw coming, but it was awesomely done and quite amazing, very unexpected as well. However, I don't fully understand why he let them all go so easily. Unless you plan on making this a trilogy...? *grins*

I think I would have enjoyed a little more time spent with everyone after the fight, but having everyone go their separate ways so soon wasn't a bad thing, and it actually served as a great way to end the series. I loved Wanda's comment about wallpaper at the end, but, well, I can't figure out why she's so hung up on wallpaper! lol. ^_^

All in a day's work, though, eh?

This series was very enjoyable and I had a lot of fun each week, PFA. I look forward to your next piece.

Thanks for the review!

Yes, writing fight scenes is quite difficult. I got a Neomail from someone, also saying it was a little confusing... But yeah, trying to write about Dina using her power is tricky.

Yay for unexpected plot twists! And of course there has to be sequels.

Yes, I kind of rushed the end because the part was getting kind of long. ;; And to be honest, I haven't figured out why she wants wallpaper so much, either.

And thanks again for the review!

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The Portrait: Part Five by really_awesome_d00d
For the buildup you gave it, that one sentence that said Mrs. Prenderghast saw the Portrait once more in her lifetime gave me goosebumps. I had been expecting such, I truly had been, yet with how well you set up the scene, even though I knew it would ultimately be somewhere, it caught me when I wasn't expecting anything.

It was not as heart-pumping, adrenalin-rushing, horrifically-intense as I had expected the Portrait's final moments to be. Quite on the contrary, it was somber and solemn, still and silent. It flowed wonderfully, beautifully...and it was touching, saddening, and harrowing...haunting, even. It was quite nicely done, very well-crafted and exquisitely told.

The final paragraphs were incredible, but that's not quite the word I'm looking for. They were written as well as the rest, and they summed up the aftermath perfectly. It was saddening to read it, very depressing, striking a chord more realistic than most things I've ever read in the NT. The emotions of departure were captured wonderfully, and they were made real. The moments spent talking of thieves was nicely written. And the final words were more fitting, more perfect, than most things I've ever seen end a piece as literary as this was.

Throughout this series, I have been captured by its amazing descriptions and vivid storytelling. It enchanted me and stole me away to a world filled with shadows and spectres, a world unlike any I've ever seen elsewhere. Certainly, the descriptions could have been improved and made stronger, though its vividness as it was was strikingly done, and I still admire how very much like a portrait this was written, every detail being divulged until, at last, the painting began to move and the true colors began to show.

I loved this series and it is certainly among my NT favorites.

You did a, awesome, incredible job writing this, and I will not soon forget it.

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micrody said:

The Portrait: Part Five by really_awesome_d00d
For the buildup you gave it, that one sentence that said Mrs. Prenderghast saw the Portrait once more in her lifetime gave me goosebumps. I had been expecting such, I truly had been, yet with how well you set up the scene, even though I knew it would ultimately be somewhere, it caught me when I wasn't expecting anything.

It was not as heart-pumping, adrenalin-rushing, horrifically-intense as I had expected the Portrait's final moments to be. Quite on the contrary, it was somber and solemn, still and silent. It flowed wonderfully, beautifully...and it was touching, saddening, and harrowing...haunting, even. It was quite nicely done, very well-crafted and exquisitely told.

The final paragraphs were incredible, but that's not quite the word I'm looking for. They were written as well as the rest, and they summed up the aftermath perfectly. It was saddening to read it, very depressing, striking a chord more realistic than most things I've ever read in the NT. The emotions of departure were captured wonderfully, and they were made real. The moments spent talking of thieves was nicely written. And the final words were more fitting, more perfect, than most things I've ever seen end a piece as literary as this was.

Throughout this series, I have been captured by its amazing descriptions and vivid storytelling. It enchanted me and stole me away to a world filled with shadows and spectres, a world unlike any I've ever seen elsewhere. Certainly, the descriptions could have been improved and made stronger, though its vividness as it was was strikingly done, and I still admire how very much like a portrait this was written, every detail being divulged until, at last, the painting began to move and the true colors began to show.

I loved this series and it is certainly among my NT favorites.

You did a, awesome, incredible job writing this, and I will not soon forget it.

Wow, thank you, Wolf! I'm so happy you liked it. This was my first series. Considering the reaction I've received, I'm quite energized to write another one. Thank you so much, Wolf, for sticking through and reading it to its conclusion. You've given me so much advice and plenty of confidence with your reviews. I hate to be so redudant, but... thank you so much. ;D

Anyways, I have a LOT of free time this week (first week of summer, YES) so I'll probably be able to review some stuff.