Issue 277 Reviews

[Kat]

[shadow=purple,left,300]Excuse me while I make THE LIST[/shadow]

Articles:
The Neopian Night Sky - goosher

Short Stories:
The Diva - Playmobil
Looking for a Living - Pyro

Comics:
The Gallion Ranch - Pacmanite and Hakuryu_86
No Comment: Crossover - Tirilia and flufey_is_cute
Results May Vary - return_of_itsy

New Series:
The Adventures of Trina: The Return of the Staff - ummagine3284
Twist of Fate - mandapanda9188

Continued Series:
Another Hero's Journey - Part 4 - yours truly
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Jealousy - Part 5 - Nimras
The Mirror of Memories - Part 2 - Sytra
Revisited - Part 8 - Puppy
Sword of the Shapeshifter - Part 2 - Sarahleeadvent
Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part 3 - Yuka

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Yaaay, the list! *bows*

I really really really want to start reviewing again. And I feel horrible for not doing so. This week I am committed to getting some reviews out. *proud nod* Now it's time for sleep... I hate how the Times comes out so late over here, it's 12am...

[sarahleeadvent]

Results May Vary by return_of_itsy

It's got no background. It isn't shaded. It isn't even coloured in. But I LOVE the punch line, and the facial expressions are perfect. (And honestly, what else matters in a comic?)

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I also have a new series entered in the NT; "Twist of Fate" if anyone was interested in reviewing it ^-^

[ummagine3284]

Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Jealousy - Part 5

This chapter was a great buildup, as always. The characters' personalities were all wonderful in this chapter as well. It brings me to the question I been thinking about ever since the first series: How. Do. You. Do. It?

[Kat]

[shadow=purple,left,300]List has been edited to include the stuff I missed. Sorry 'bout that. ^^;[/shadow]

[Goosh]

Aargh. I stayed up all night for the release, and I missed it by five minutes!

[Nut]

Comics

[glow=blue,2,300]Gallion Ranch[/glow]
Haha! I was expecting a great Battledome clash in the final panel, but no. The art is really nice; I very much like the smooth outlines. The Krawk’s expression in the second panel is very nice. Nice dramatic effects in the third panel, a buildup just before the peaceful little home scene in the last one.

This wasn’t the first time I’ve seen this joke, but it was nicely done, and you have to chuckle at the despairing Krawk throwing up his cards in the last panel. The poses there are very nice. I like the little straw mat with all the Godori cards.

It kind of disturbs me how there’s no punctuation at the end of a sentence each in the second and third panel—a couple of exclamation points wouldn’t have hurt there. At first I wondered a little how the Scorchio managed to get such injuries from just a card game, but on second thought I realized it was just part of the fantasy sequence. Silly me. In all, nice work. ^^

[glow=blue,2,300]No Comment: Crossover[/glow]
Oh dear. This girl is either a newbie, or very desperate. I feel sorry for the Pteri.

I like how she looks so happy as she’s pointing her finger at her poor Pteri, as if expecting it’ll really listen to her and transform into a Draik. The art is nice, and carries a lot of the joke, showing the situation in the Draik Nest nicely.

It took me a while to get the joke at first, though, because I didn’t know what the girl was doing, aside from the fact that whatever it was she was doing it wrong. I could see she was trying to make a Draik egg out of something that wasn’t, but it took me a bit to figure out that it was a Baby Pteri. Still, it’s a cute comic. ^^

[glow=blue,2,300]Results May Vary[/glow]
What’s your NTWF name? I don’t recognize the username.

I really like this comic. XD Despite the lack of anything except outlines, I love the art. The expressions and poses are just great! I love the last panel, with the little Grundo glowering at her headless Usuki. The second one is also really nice, with her owner bending down and looking so concerned.

And the punchline is just great. It, combined with the expressions in that last panel, are priceless. XD

[Nut]

Article

[glow=blue,2,300]The Neopian Night Sky[/glow]
It’s Altador! *loves that plot*

I came at this with interest to begin with because it involved Altador, and I found it an amusing article. The first few paragraphs interested me, and though I thought the first few parts tended to be funniest, it was fun to see your ideas in the rest of the list.

She is said to be wearing a clown wig, large square glasses, and a fish costume.

*chokes* I can just picture that.

Just gazing at the constellation makes me sleepy. Or is that because I stay up all night, stargazing?

*laughs*

This constellation is aptly named, as you can only see it between 7:00-8:00 a.m. NST.

Huh, I would’ve thought more like 6 AM. I like this creative detail of time. ^^

I, for one, hate the ocean! It gets my fur all wet! But astronomers flocked to the docks to figure out this one! I even saw a group of scuba diving Techos one day!

This many exclamation points one after the other is kind of overwhelming. Use them sparingly, when you really need to set an excited tone. I don’t think the last two here were needed at all, even if Cory does have a fetish for scuba diving Techos.

Sara (see “Kidnapped By a Wannabe Villain”, week 272) is an iffy inclusion as a constellation, but I’ll include her anyway.

Generally I’d try to avoid making people read extra material if it’s not really necessary, though maybe I’d find this line funnier if I had actually read the story linked to (and I may, later).

Of course, M*YNCI threw a ghastly tantrum, but I suppose that’s the price of fame.

No, they’re just poor losers.

*This passage, depicting a constellation representing many types of faeries, has been removed due to the author squealing about faeries that haven’t been released yet. Have a nice day.*
Conclusion
I bet you didn’t know about all those unreleased faeries, eh?

…Did I miss something? I feel like I should get a joke here, but I don’t know what the unreleased faeries are supposed to be. I wish there’d been a few more of your own constellation listed. But still, this was a very nice article. ^^

[Goosh]

nut said:

Article

[glow=blue,2,300]The Neopian Night Sky[/glow]
It’s Altador! *loves that plot*

I came at this with interest to begin with because it involved Altador, and I found it an amusing article. The first few paragraphs interested me, and though I thought the first few parts tended to be funniest, it was fun to see your ideas in the rest of the list.

She is said to be wearing a clown wig, large square glasses, and a fish costume.

*chokes* I can just picture that.


*laughs*


Huh, I would’ve thought more like 6 AM. I like this creative detail of time. ^^


This many exclamation points one after the other is kind of overwhelming. Use them sparingly, when you really need to set an excited tone. I don’t think the last two here were needed at all, even if Cory does have a fetish for scuba diving Techos.


Generally I’d try to avoid making people read extra material if it’s not really necessary, though maybe I’d find this line funnier if I had actually read the story linked to (and I may, later).


No, they’re just poor losers.

*This passage, depicting a constellation representing many types of faeries, has been removed due to the author squealing about faeries that haven’t been released yet. Have a nice day.*
Conclusion
I bet you didn’t know about all those unreleased faeries, eh?

…Did I miss something? I feel like I should get a joke here, but I don’t know what the unreleased faeries are supposed to be. I wish there’d been a few more of your own constellation listed. But still, this was a very nice article. ^^

Thanks a bunch for my *second* reivew, Nut! We all know Cory has a fetich for scuba-diving Techos! I just put the link so I could have a basis for calling the space Faerie Sara. The Faerie joke, it's sort of common. The joke is, if an author adds a bit of scret news to a piece, TNT just deletes it and puts in a disclaimer. Thanks alot for the review!

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This comic is also funny, and the artwork's cute.

The Gallion Ranch - Pacmanite and Hakuryu_86
I love the art....but on this particular Saturday morning...the joke flew over my head. The one panel with all the flames and the silhouette was just awesomely cool though. ...Then again, looking at it again, it reminds me of the evil guy in that movie with Nemo and the flying bed, whose title slips my mind at the moment...Nemo's Adventure, maybe? Anyways, that's not a bad thing. Just...strange. (And reading Nut's response made me get it... so, yes, I did laugh.)

No Comment: Crossover - Tirilia and flufey_is_cute
The art was a bit plain...but the joke was hilarious!

Results May Vary - return_of_itsy
The artwork, for being almost monochromatic and having no background, was just great and had wonderful detail, I thought. It had a really unique feel to it, and I enjoyed that. Then, the punchline at the end, was just.... *shakes head in loss of words* It cracked me up.

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The Neopian Night Sky - goosher
The opening was very exuberant, very enthusiastic, and very good. It hooked me right away.

The rest of this article kept with the same enthusiasm and the same exuberance,which was good, and that made it really enjoyable to read. I felt that "Cory" got side-tacked a bit too much for my liking and did too little speaking of the actual constellations, but, alas, I suppose that was half the fun of this article.

Good job; I enjoyed reading it.

[Dice]

The Neopian Night Sky - goosher

I loved this article; it was very humorous and well-written. A creative idea that I liked, because there aren't many stories about Altador anymore. I felt that Cory's long name (made me giggle) along with his rambling and little random points of interest added to the overall charm of the article. My only critique is that I would've like it to be longer! Great job, goosher.

[Nut]

Short Stories

[glow=blue,2,300]The Diva[/glow]
Aw, I really liked this story. ^^ Ach, poor Mekaella; I sympathize with her about being late. Mekaella was a nice character, from the lofty attitude she carried till she was brought crashing down to uncertainty. I liked Riley too, being Mekaella’s friend even when she was acting like a brat. I like the little conversation in which Mekaella’s teacher nitpicks on her mistakes on stage. The ending echo was nice. ^^ I hope she’s learned her lesson.

The little descriptions of the stage life and Mekaella’s world under a spotlight were nice details. The characters and the writing were very good, and I quite enjoyed this story. Very nice work.

[glow=blue,2,300]Looking For a Living[/glow]
That was an amusing story; I liked the touches of humor flavoring it. Poor Dan is so clueless, but I had to laugh at many of his mistakes.

“Yes, that’s nice,” a Kyrii muttered, dropping several packages when Dan accidentally smacked him with an arm, “but maybe you could go be a salesman somewhere else. Like the Lost Desert. The very lost desert.”
“Ah, splendid idea!” Dan called after the shopper. “These Neopians, so kind and helpful.”

He has no idea…

“Overpriced vases?!” Of course, he had never been able to keep his mouth shut either, or his ideas in his head.

A classic slip of the tongue. XD I was a little confused who was speaking here because the line in Dan’s perspective followed the exclaimation from the Aisha, who wasn’t mentioned till the next paragraph.

Then, like a pie hitting a Robot Chia Clown, like an ice cream scoop hitting Adee the Chia, like a piano hitting Mika and Carassa—what’s with all the injured Chias?—it hit him.

*snicker* I blame Lupes.

For some reason, I didn’t have any clue to Dan’s identity until the end of the story, in spite of the image. In fact, if not for that Scratchcard Wocky picture, it might have taken me a while to understand, but as it was I realized just what had happened at the last line. Dan doesn’t quite seem the clever type, but I guess a scratchcard seller doesn’t have to be. (Perhaps what more fueled my ignorance was that I always thought of that Wocky as a girl. ) A fun little story about the Wocky’s origins. ^^

[Nut]

goosher said:

Thanks a bunch for my *second* reivew, Nut! We all know Cory has a fetich for scuba-diving Techos! I just put the link so I could have a basis for calling the space Faerie Sara. The Faerie joke, it's sort of common. The joke is, if an author adds a bit of scret news to a piece, TNT just deletes it and puts in a disclaimer. Thanks alot for the review!

Ohhh, now I get the issue with the faeries. *sheepish* I was looking for something to connect "unreleased faeries" to, as opposed to removed passages, and was thus confused. ^^;