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micrody said:

100 Excuses Not To Clean Your Room by petfriendamy
phoebehalliwell4155?! And here I was...thinking I would be without Charmed until Monday morning. Guess I was wrong.

This was an interesting concept and you made it work out nicely. All of the excuses were funny, though only a handful made me burst out laughing, especially the one about Jellyworld and TNT coming (the note at the end was also quite funny).
I'm just saddened to not see my favorite excuse: "You don't understand!" lol
This was great; seriously, it was.

Thanks for the review! ^_^

[Dimi]

micrody said:

Digging Into Randomness by pokemon_lunatic and princton_fan
I didn't find the joke of this that funny, but it was a nice comic. The art was really great, though the Faerie Grundo had so much detail, it took me a moment to realise that it was flying, not being thrown back...still, though, good job.

Thanks for the review!

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micrody said:

The Provider by playmobil_is_my_life
Who is playmobil_is_my_life, exactly? The name doesn't ring a bell in my memory of who goes by what here and on Neopets...perhaps there should be a directory someplace... ANYWAYS, moving on...

This was a simple story, but a profound one. It was incredibly well-written and incredibly easy and enjoyable to read. It had perfect flow. It had a lovely plot. The characters and their actions were incredibly realistic. This is definitely one of the best stories I have read in the Neopian Times. Great job, really. I would have loved to see more of Shenkuu, but none of that was needed and the story was perfect as it was. Honestly, this was a perfect story.

Thanks so much for the review!

I used to be around the NTWF (and NT) quite frequently. I guess I kind of lost interest in NT writing... but I guess I found my way back. I think some of the older NTWFers probably remember me, but it has been a while since I've posted. =(

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Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Four by ssjelitegirl
The second paragraph was a bit crowded with details, and for some reasons (probably the reason of my eyes continuously darting to gaze at the awesomely awesome illustration below it), the details kept getting mixed up in my head. Definitely not poor writing, I would say, but poor reading. :) lol

As for the rest of this part, it was as great as the others, and it led up to a nice cliffhanger ending. There was one thing that confused me, but I'd blame that on poor reading yet again. So...good job!

A Question of Worth: Part Two by extreme_fj0rd
The bit about shoes at the beginning sounded a bit redundant when they were mentioned for the second time, though aside from that bit, this was a great story and was incredibly well-written. I think Christopher has made a nice friend in Sara, and I think he has also made his owner very proud. I really enjoyed reading this series, no matter how short it was in comparison to some others. Great job.

[Deleted]

Ah, the last review... It is almost a sad moment, yet it is also a moment of accomplishment...

In This Together: Part One by rainbow_daydreamer
I loved how you began this story with a flashback-esque scene. It really established your characters beautifully. Going on, the rest of the time your characters were all quite beautifully and naturally introduced and described, very subtly but quite effectively. The mechanics were wonderful, though you said Buzz Toy in one place and then Buzz toy in another, but quite clearly that is of no consequence and is just me being a bit too nitpickity. This was also incredibly easy to read and enormously enjoyable to read.

I also love the picture, so serene... I even chose a color to match it!

The ending, such a sudden and unexpected ending, has left me craving more.

[Nimras]

Aubrise and the Gebmid Mystery: Part Six
by rookina

Love how you threw Aubrise and Sarina together, separated from the rest of the group. *grin* More archaeologist arguments! Yey!

I also love the bit about unraveling the mummy.

There was a lot of action in this chapter, even if there wasn't a lot of plot explanation. The beginning clarified some of the questions I had at the end of the last one.

[Tyrannitar]

micrody said:

The Princess Letters by myfallenrevival4
This was a nice story. I am not greatly fond of it, but it was written quite well. I think the note at the beginning was a bit unnecessary, and the death of Coltzan could have been dealt with much better (though, seeing as this is Neopets, perhaps it could not have been). Overall, this was a well-written, easy-to-read, and enjoyable story.

Thanks for the review, even though you didn't really like it. I guess this wasn't my comeback piece after all. I'll have to make a new one.

In the meantime, I will get to comic reviews sometime this week; I've got studying tonight and a band concert tomorrow, plus more studying on Wednesday, so expect them by Thursday.

[Nimras]

Prophecy of the Second Equinox: Part Five
by laurelinden

Correct me if I’m wrong, but this is shorter than the first one, isn’t it?

I love the opening; how you can’t tell whose point of view it was -- especially since it was so close to an earlier ode to the night.

And the baby Draik at the end (nice to know he made it though okay *grin* ) was so cute…

This one seemed to go a lot faster pace wise than the last one -- at least to me.

[Huntress]

I like Tuesdays. I get off from college at noon and have the whole day to myself, and as I cannot currently write my essays as they´re based on Lord of the Rings which is at home, I can catch up wth things on my to-do list. Including reviewing stuff.

So, ARTICLES

Queen Fyora´s Guide to Status Symbols
See, impersonating prissy females suits you, secretary-person x3 *whack´d* Sorry, couldn´t resist. Again.

Mkay, the easiest way to comment on this is to copy-paste what Writingwolf said but that would be boring, aye? So lessee... I loved this one xD So much stuck-uppedness and snobbishness and being-better-than-the-rest-of-the-universe. You picked the perfect character to discuss that topic and pictured her a bit differently from how we usually know Fyora. Frankly, I like her more your way than the usual powerful and elegant Fyora. More fun ^^ And I could clearly imagine Fyora raking up countless trophies and avatars, greed gleaming in her eyes. Bwahaha (Hey, next time you plan doing something like that, let me know, I´ll draw you a custom =3)

And I´ve never thought of the Chocolate Ball as some elite gathering of Neopia´s cream. Hrm, that´d make a good story *ponderponder*

100 Excuses Not To Clean Your Room
When I was about half way down the excuses, I got this mental image of what would happen if my pets read this article and tried some of these excuses on me. It went kinda like this:

65: I know where you live.
*whacks*
64: What´s the difference between ´junk´ and ´stuff´?
*whacks*
63: What? You don´t want me to raise a Snorkle?
*whacks* No.
62: Start telling a story that doesn´t go anywhere.
*whacks during the second sentence*
61: But the junk is the only thing that´s holding my walls up!
That actually shut me up o.o For a minute. Then: \\\"Sweet, then it´s time to move. Pack all your stuff.\\\"
60: Pheobe? Who´s Pheobe?
*whacks*

Yeah, I´m a bad owner. And yay for Robots reference in #48 ^^ One way or another, it was a nice article. Not laugh-out-loud funny but still really good. List articles are always fun to read and you had many good ideas there (unless you´re dealing with a mean owner like me, yus x3)

SHORT STORIES

The Provider
Ooh, the pretty news page custom ^^ That was one good story. You made Shenkuu look just like I´ve always imagined it, old and majestic and beautiful. Marshall being the good responsible buddy and Thomas being the bad boy who eventually comes to his senses... classic, yeah, but it worked out well in your story. It was easy to read and descriptive, I had a constant mental image of the story running past my eyes as I read. The only problem was that at times the names Marshall, Thomas, Marshall, Thomas occurred every other paragraph. Could´ve used some more variety there, `buddy´, ´classmate´, anything like that. But still, loved that story ^^

The Princess Letters
I wasn´t around for the original Lost Desert plot so I´m not sure how much you followed the story but your plotline was nice nevertheless. Vyssa sounds like a really annoying brat >> And Sankara sounds so nice and lovable. The part where the old palace was rebuilt mainy because of luck was kinda too deus-ex-machina and rushed, had the palace been in progress for a longer time, it wouldn´t really have effected your story so I saw no point in adding that part. But still, it was a nice story and I enjoyed the letters´ aspect of writing for a change.

[Huntress]

*cracks knuckles* Awright ladies and gentlemen and everyone inbetween, I finally got started with the thing I´ve been meaning to do for a long time. Here´s to Nimras and all her pwnsome reviews every single week no matter how lazy the others are (including moi, but that´s no surprise), my longest review of all time,

CHRONICLES OF THE COURT ROGUE

meaning that I don´t like starting from somewhere in the middle so I´ll just abuse this week´s review thread a little and start from the very beginning (hey, better than resurrecting long gone threads),

Chronicles of the Court Rogue: The Bargain
starting time 17:32 - don´t mind this, I like to know how long reading series takes me.
...
finished 17:56
I never thought of Mareian as being... small o.o Probly because my main impression about her was from the custom pictures. And I´m almost feeling sorry for Danner x3 He gets abused all the time.
That story really captured me. Never got boring, never got stretchy, always flowing easily and having simple vocabulary, which is good because a) I´m currently at the dorm with no access to good dictionaries minus the ones online and b) I´m too lazy to check the dictionary when reading things anyway. Boo me.
Kinda strange that Khalyen´s door made no sound. Mareian was right, woulda been really easy to take him down that way. If I was a thief and had a study, I´d probably arrange a system of bells that ring when someone´s coming down the hallway... *reads too much*

The Lord Sheriff had been on his way to sit down; her unexpected appearance made him miss the chair.

Do You Know how hard it is to actually make me snort with laughter when I´m reading something? I´m too serious for my own good. And that was only the first makes-me-snort-with-laughter part in the series. I swear, you should get a medal for this or something...

*takes a break to go wash the dishes, yay dorm life*

Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Lessons no starting time here as it´s a short story
*pokes the custom picture* I´ve yet to see a custom less suitable for a story like this. The next time you finish a CotCR (ooh, funny abbreviation), feel free to ask me for a custom, I like drawing those x3
I like reading prequels. I already know the situation and characters and prequels just give a whole new level and depth to that info. Fizzen is a such an adorable little guy, he could use more spotlight later in the series (or will he? Haven´t read that far yet.) Even if someone like that following me around would probably drive me into really wanting to crack his sweet little neck =3
(Yus, I´m scary, what else is new?)
Actually the faerie Wocky would deserve more featuring as well. And I like that zafara guard x3 Gosh, am I a demanding reader or what? Maybe issa good thing that you write so much x3

Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Rivalry started 18:41, finished 19:23, ooh, getting faster :3
I`m getting more and more sucked into this whole thing. You make Meridell look so real, with the snowy roads and small houses and descriptions of the castle... and Jeran has more personality than any of the Neo plots have ever given him. Frankly I´ve always considered Jeran slightly overrated but in the CotCR series he really looks like a dedicated and concerned guard of his homeland. Now watch me finish reading all your series and turn into a hopeless Jeran fangirl xD
The part where Jeran´s inside of ears blushed was interesting. I´ve never thought of how a furry creature would blush, but guess the inside of ears would really be the only part where it´s visible.

Rolan\'s jaw hit the floor as Mareian smoothly pulled the brooch apart and revealed the dagger.

*chuckle* Oh the mental images...

*takes another break to watch TV*

Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Treachery started 20:23, CSI: Miami wasn´t half as interesting x3 - finished 21:44
Well, after some good five hours spent reading this epic, I´m starting to forget where the previous series ended and this one started... it´s like Lord of the Rings, one long continuing story. And just as awesome as the previous parts *may or may not be developing a slight addiction*

\"Sure you weren\'t,\" Danner laughed, grabbing paper of his own and crumpling them. Soon the air was thick with paper missiles flying in an all out paper wad war.

The fearless guards of Meridell´s peace and prosperity, indeed xD

\"Oh,\" the squire said in an odd tone. \"I was in the hospital, helping roll bandages.\" Jeran couldn\'t tell if the Draik was relieved or disappointed by Mareian\'s question. Securing the cabinet door, Jeran turned to see Athless make a wry face and add, \"Some jobs can\'t get holidays off; I didn\'t have anything better to do, and they always need help in there.\"

At that point I was glaring at the screen thinking \"Check the ring, Jeran, check the friggin´ ring...!\" But then you woulda been some three parts shorter of the whole story, aye?
And the skeletons were a really great idea o.o Plus it added a fully new depth to the already elaborate picture of the Meridell castle.

*takes a break to lurk the NTWF a little and stare out of the window* Eyes need rest, etc.

Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Instincts Lookie, finally came to this one x3 Started 22:10, finished 22:39. Result: I take about 40 minutes to read a six-parter and twice as long for twelve-parters. Logically enough. And why the first one with two parts took me half an hour is a mystery o0
How you managed to pull these stories off with all these sparkles between Jeran and Mareian is beyond me >> Well, that sure was different from those usual court intrigues. A Werelupe Jeran is a pretty interesting idea and I like how you pictured it. The setting was different from the previous series aswell. It was a nice change (especially seeing my today´s crazy reading marathon... though believe me, I´ve been through worse. Harry Potter 5 in one day, anyone? x3 *is nuts*)
Poor Danner always gets mocked so much x3 He could use a more serious spotlight one day...

You on the other hand, look like lunch. Or at the very least, a new blue fuzzy chew toy

*mental image* xD

Mareian probably also didn\'t need to know about his idea of the two of them starting a pack.

See, proves my point about you getting away with the craziest things x.x

Conclusion? Write more of these chronicles, really. And should you ever need someone to illustrate the chronicles, contact the people who work for my meepits and they will see if they can work something out ^_____^

[Ice]

Not exactly a review but..

For CCR: Instincts, I love the end :3 I didn't realize the whole fishing thing (rather like Danner xD) for a second, then I reread it and it was amusing You've definitely made the relationship between those two concrete in this one, but without triggering the Neo filter GREAT JOB! <3 Like Hunty, I'm hooked on CCR!

[Dan]

ssjelitegirl said:

I like Tuesdays. I get off from college at noon and have the whole day to myself, and as I cannot currently write my essays as they´re based on Lord of the Rings which is at home, I can catch up wth things on my to-do list. Including reviewing stuff.

So, ARTICLES

Queen Fyora´s Guide to Status Symbols
See, impersonating prissy females suits you, secretary-person x3 *whack´d* Sorry, couldn´t resist. Again.

Mkay, the easiest way to comment on this is to copy-paste what Writingwolf said but that would be boring, aye? So lessee... I loved this one xD So much stuck-uppedness and snobbishness and being-better-than-the-rest-of-the-universe. You picked the perfect character to discuss that topic and pictured her a bit differently from how we usually know Fyora. Frankly, I like her more your way than the usual powerful and elegant Fyora. More fun ^^ And I could clearly imagine Fyora raking up countless trophies and avatars, greed gleaming in her eyes. Bwahaha (Hey, next time you plan doing something like that, let me know, I´ll draw you a custom =3)

And I´ve never thought of the Chocolate Ball as some elite gathering of Neopia´s cream. Hrm, that´d make a good story *ponderponder*

100 Excuses Not To Clean Your Room
When I was about half way down the excuses, I got this mental image of what would happen if my pets read this article and tried some of these excuses on me. It went kinda like this:

65: I know where you live.
*whacks*
64: What´s the difference between ´junk´ and ´stuff´?
*whacks*
63: What? You don´t want me to raise a Snorkle?
*whacks* No.
62: Start telling a story that doesn´t go anywhere.
*whacks during the second sentence*
61: But the junk is the only thing that´s holding my walls up!
That actually shut me up o.o For a minute. Then: \\\"Sweet, then it´s time to move. Pack all your stuff.\\\"
60: Pheobe? Who´s Pheobe?
*whacks*

Yeah, I´m a bad owner. And yay for Robots reference in #48 ^^ One way or another, it was a nice article. Not laugh-out-loud funny but still really good. List articles are always fun to read and you had many good ideas there (unless you´re dealing with a mean owner like me, yus x3)

SHORT STORIES

The Provider
Ooh, the pretty news page custom ^^ That was one good story. You made Shenkuu look just like I´ve always imagined it, old and majestic and beautiful. Marshall being the good responsible buddy and Thomas being the bad boy who eventually comes to his senses... classic, yeah, but it worked out well in your story. It was easy to read and descriptive, I had a constant mental image of the story running past my eyes as I read. The only problem was that at times the names Marshall, Thomas, Marshall, Thomas occurred every other paragraph. Could´ve used some more variety there, `buddy´, ´classmate´, anything like that. But still, loved that story ^^

The Princess Letters
I wasn´t around for the original Lost Desert plot so I´m not sure how much you followed the story but your plotline was nice nevertheless. Vyssa sounds like a really annoying brat >> And Sankara sounds so nice and lovable. The part where the old palace was rebuilt mainy because of luck was kinda too deus-ex-machina and rushed, had the palace been in progress for a longer time, it wouldn´t really have effected your story so I saw no point in adding that part. But still, it was a nice story and I enjoyed the letters´ aspect of writing for a change.

Thank ye kindly, Hunty. ^^

And you'd really draw me a custom?!

[Nimras]

Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Four
by ssjelitegirl

LOVE the picture of the library.

Shad seems to be disturbingly in his own natural environment once he gets outside the fortress. *grin* Unlike the ladder. Poor quadruped Lupes…

I love the idea of how it was possible for the Uni to write. *grin* It’s always hard to keep keep things in mind for them to do in my stories, with the lack of hands.


EDIT: *reads review* Holy Kau, thanks for all the reviews!

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ssjelitegirl said:

100 Excuses Not To Clean Your Room
When I was about half way down the excuses, I got this mental image of what would happen if my pets read this article and tried some of these excuses on me. It went kinda like this:

65: I know where you live.
*whacks*
64: What´s the difference between ´junk´ and ´stuff´?
*whacks*
63: What? You don´t want me to raise a Snorkle?
*whacks* No.
62: Start telling a story that doesn´t go anywhere.
*whacks during the second sentence*
61: But the junk is the only thing that´s holding my walls up!
That actually shut me up o.o For a minute. Then: \\\"Sweet, then it´s time to move. Pack all your stuff.\\\"
60: Pheobe? Who´s Pheobe?
*whacks*

Yeah, I´m a bad owner. And yay for Robots reference in #48 ^^ One way or another, it was a nice article. Not laugh-out-loud funny but still really good. List articles are always fun to read and you had many good ideas there (unless you´re dealing with a mean owner like me, yus x3)

Thanks, Hunty! ^_^

Ooh, actually I never watched that movie, so I wouldn't know. My friend suggested that one... so that's where she got it...

[Dan]

Chronicles of the Court Rogue-LAST PART OH NOES

Awww, it's over! ;___; This was great, Nim, it really was. It wrapped it up nicely and I loved the line about Jeran never eating Mareian's food. ^^ Genius. Really, what else is there to say besides write more, soon please? XD

Aubrise and the Gebmid Mystery

Ooh, I luffs the action in this part. Very very nice. And it's written so well. I loved the unraveling at the end. ^^ Can't wait for next part.

Sorry for the shortness, you two, but I don't have much time tonight.