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Post by Lau on Nov 7, 2006 11:06:02 GMT -5
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Post by Nimras on Nov 7, 2006 14:57:28 GMT -5
If...by violinoutoftune I’ve missed seeing your stories in the NT, Violin. I have to confess, most of the ‘adventures’ that Teddy wishes he could have didn’t sound to appealing to me. My mind went “Ohh… that would suck.” I guess I’m just a boring person.  I do like how he had such random wishes for fame. There really wasn’t a central theme -- it really reminds me of a little kid and his make-believe for what he’s going to be when he’s all grown up. “I’m going to grow up and be a firefighter and a millionaire and be president!” This one just cracked me up.  Maybe it’s my warped sense of humor, but the 18 meals a day + fat tummy != Jeran’s physique… *dies of giggles* Yes, there are some grammar issues -- but I think in this story it works better that way. It’s like reading something a kid is writing to his very bestest friend in the whole world. (Or petpet, or favorite plushie, or imaginary friend…) Somehow this story would loose some of its charm if it were the paragon of the English literature.
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Post by Nimras on Nov 7, 2006 15:07:39 GMT -5
Attack of the Gummy Dice – The Official, Unofficial Guide
by danman111111
I’m noticing a disturbing trend with Blumaroos, Roo Island, and dice.
I so have to make a joke about how the Blumaroos claim to have invented dice… Or gambling… Or something.
It may be just me, but there seems to be an overabundance of exclamation points for my taste. Unless Armageddon is approaching, there shouldn't be more sentences ending in '!' than with a full stop.
The explanation of the different types of die, and the effects of them, are very useful for people who don’t know the game very well. I usually score well over 1000 every time I play, so this guide really didn’t have anything new for me. But for those just starting out, it should be very helpful.
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Post by Brains on Nov 7, 2006 22:18:51 GMT -5
Chronicles Of The Court Rogue: Instincts- By Nimras
Ah-HA evil plot twist! Another great installment... and the name of the series is starting to make sense. I'm excited to see just where this goes from here, but something tells me a lot of damage is going to be dealt before the end.
Can't wait for Friday.
-More reviews as I can read the stories.
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Post by ngc_5128 on Nov 9, 2006 15:29:21 GMT -5
If... by violinoutoftuneVi, I loved your story I often find myself daydreaming about what could be, if only something were a bit different, so I could really identify with Teddy. As others before me have mentioned, each of the little 'what if...' parts could be a seperate story on their own. I think this is what sells the story. You could have skimped on the details and padded your story with more scenarios, but taking the time to flesh out the ones you did make it really worth reading. If... by violinoutoftuneThis was a really cute story. I really liked reading it, and I really think that Teddy and Tibby are pretty good friends. (It's almost a bit sad that Tibby couldn't say anything in the story.) It was also mechanically sound, and that was nice. I noticed that you often used "was" when you should have said "were" (as in "I wish I were," as opposed to "I wish I was"), though you kept it fairly consistent, so it seemed to me that it fit well with Teddy's character. God job. I had fun reading this. (It has a great moral, too. ^_^ ) I'm glad the incorrect grammar seemed to fit with Teddy's character. I guess he's as terrible with grammar as I am. Thanks for reviewing! I think the incorrect grammer fits in with the letter theme. My grammar is not the best, but it only worsens when I am writting letters to someone. Well done!
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Post by Violin on Nov 9, 2006 17:31:32 GMT -5
If...by violinoutoftune I’ve missed seeing your stories in the NT, Violin. I have to confess, most of the ‘adventures’ that Teddy wishes he could have didn’t sound to appealing to me. My mind went “Ohh… that would suck.” I guess I’m just a boring person. I do like how he had such random wishes for fame. There really wasn’t a central theme -- it really reminds me of a little kid and his make-believe for what he’s going to be when he’s all grown up. “I’m going to grow up and be a firefighter and a millionaire and be president!” If... by violinoutoftuneVi, I loved your story I often find myself daydreaming about what could be, if only something were a bit different, so I could really identify with Teddy. As others before me have mentioned, each of the little 'what if...' parts could be a seperate story on their own. I think this is what sells the story. You could have skimped on the details and padded your story with more scenarios, but taking the time to flesh out the ones you did make it really worth reading. Thank you for the reviews. I really appreciate it. |
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Maybe it’s my warped sense of humor, but the 18 meals a day + fat tummy != Jeran’s physique… *dies of giggles*
