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Post by Dan on Nov 10, 2006 22:45:18 GMT -5
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Post by Psycho on Nov 10, 2006 23:44:21 GMT -5
CCR: INSTINCTS - NIMRAS One word: EEEEEK. I DO like this ending! Nimras, this is the first series I've ever read from you, and already I am eagerly waiting for anything more you will write. Something about this extended love story you've written about, between Jeran and Mareian. I really pity Danner. Somehow, this town sheriff just doesn't get all the credit he deserves  Thought the breakfast scene was a little overdone, though. I appreciated the humor in teasing Danner, but there was a sentence about what happened to each one of his food items  I would have thought Jeran would not have joined Mareian, but alas, even grown Neopets must have their fun. Poor Danner! And he wasn't even properly miffed about it. Well, I guess Jeran and Mareian know him well enough not to stick around and see what happens. I see a lot of foreshadowing in this part of the story - really looking forward to see what happens. I also picked up on the little references to extended family, etc, and I have to wonder if, to learn more about them, I ought to go back and read your previous series |
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Post by Brains on Nov 11, 2006 0:04:46 GMT -5
Issue 265 Reviews! (Now With More Tasty)
Dear Crabby By Dan4884
This was hilarious, I’m not going to lie. The mood swings created some fantastic laughs and the little self-arguments he makes really made my day. They were best when you kept them shorter, it felt like he had absolutely no defense for what he just did. The ‘Violence is the only solution’ line still cracks me up. I may have to go read the rest of the articles, because this was great.
Also, way to go, no writing a list.
Shadowflame: Prisoner By Brains03
Oh wait, I wrote this. A review would be a tad… biased then?
Oh, and Brains, you should try to be less verbose, it crowds up your sentences and makes you sound like you’re trying hard to be smart. Geez.
Darkest Corner By Dark_elfa
Ah, that made me chuckle so much. I love the artwork, it’s so clean and smooth looking. A lot of comics now can be hard to read through the art, but that wasn’t a problem here. Excellent work!
Cure for the Itch By Autoc007
Great joke, nice artwork. Not really a lot to say, I enjoyed it. Also, that Faellie’s expression in the final frame is priceless, I love it!
Your Check, Gentlemen? By Gliderames and Xpropugnator
The joke fell a tad flat, but the set-up was fantastic. I kept waiting for a huge punchline to kind of finish the whole thing off, and it never cam- it was still hilarious, but just a little under. Still a great comic though, and worth a read. Also, that is one really awesome looking Shoyru.
Brothers'n'Sister - Paint Brush Luck Part III by Kamikatze24
Not having read the other two parts, I went back and took a look at them. I really enjoyed it once I got the joke. Not a whole lot to say, really.
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part One by Huntress
… So you’re the one who wrote the Ultimate Cork Gun comic in Issue 203? Oh man, I loved that one! And the Travelling Library comic in 207? *Squeal*! I love your artwork.
All Fanboy stuff aside now…
I really enjoyed this, it’s got a wry sense of humor but a good feeling of adventure too. I LOVE the illustration, that caught me so off-guard since you don’t usually see that in stories, but it was a nice change of pace. Great setup, I can’t wait to see where this goes.
The Battle for Kreludor Part One by Azellica
Good stuff, nice opening to something that could be interesting.
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Instincts - Part Three by Nimras
*Jaw drops promptly to the floor*
Oooooooh scandalous! I loved that scene where Jeran is arguing with himself over Mareian, it was so tense. I eagerly await the next horrifying part of Instincts. Also, great reference to Mareian’s foul language at the end when Danner gets mad. I chuckled.
I’ll finish up the last few later tonight, but right now I must move boxes! Yay!
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Post by Deleted on Nov 11, 2006 0:45:57 GMT -5
Thanks Brains! ;D I know what you mean about the ending linage falling a bit flat. It was a bit different, (about the avvie), but Droplet didn't want me to give away the secret of any avvie.  So I was forced to change it), and HOPE that the art would carry it.. Personally.. (and I know I'm biased cause he's my pet, hehe), just SEEING Iba, my draik.. all rolley polley like that.. it still makes me giggle. hehe. And ThankYou.. That's my co-partner's shoyru. He's very fierce. ThankYou so much for the review!! I'm hoping to get to do mine on Monday night.. ThankYou to anyone and everyone who reviews for me!! *hugs*  Ame.. |
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Post by Deleted on Nov 11, 2006 11:12:12 GMT -5
Reviews! Such a sad, sad day that Needed has ended...
I dread opening the link...and reading the last installment... *tear*
Darkest Corner by dark_elfa
The art was fantastic! Though, in taking in the details all at once, I missed getting the joke fully. Having my eyes read, "I can't breathe," first and seeing everyone seemingly passed out, I must admit I thought for a moment they had been changing a diaper until I noticed the Yooyu's faerie wings, which I feel were very lightly drawn and seem to be missing the other half behind the Yooyu.... Aside from that bit of confusion, though, I did find the joke funny, and the artwork alone was amazing.
Cure for the Itch by autoc007
I recall reading this before, though it's still as funny as it had been then. ^_^
Your Check, Gentlemen? by gliderames and xpropugnator
The name rings a bell... wasn't this mentioned as having been taking a really, really long time to get a response from? Well, I am glad it's finally made it in.
It was quite funny. I liked it a lot-- the joke had a lot of plot to it, so it was different than most comics that I read in say newspapers or such, but that was enjoyable. The art was amazing. I can't imagine how long you spent doing it all. I found myself constantly going back to look at the tables to catch the details I had missed, simply because there were so many. My one complaint is that the background inside the restaurant and outside the restaurant is the same, but that's just me being nitpicky, I guess. Really good job with this one. ^_^
Brothers'n'Sister - Paint Brush Luck Part III by kamikatze24
I have three words for this one: It was great!
I loved the part two of this series, and the part three continues it perfectly. Poor, poor, Shlosh...
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Post by Dan on Nov 11, 2006 12:54:32 GMT -5
CCR Instincts: Ooh, this has got to be one of my favorite series parts ever from you. It's great how you conveyed Jeran's change, and the ending was amazing. Soooo excited for the coming weeks, this is such a great series! And the love story parts you get away with are astounding. XD And you know what occurred to me? I think, if you have the time/care to, it'd really help if you made an encyclopedia of sorts on a petpage or something documenting all the characters. There are so many it'd be immensely helpful in remembering all of the characters. ^^ Aubrise and the Gebmid Mystery: Ooh, good part. So we've established what's to come, and I'm excited to see how it turns out. ^^ I do think it's a little implausible that they didn't hear Sarina go by, I think it would have been a better explanation to say that she took a different passage or something. Other than that, though, this series is shaping up to be good. Nice work. |
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Post by PFA on Nov 11, 2006 14:45:19 GMT -5
Ha ha, I guess I'll try doing reviews. Maybe it'll get me reading more. Of course, I'll start with comics! --- Darkest Corner by dark_elfaIt's a pile of Altador Cup-ers!  The art's good. I like. ^_^ Cure for the Itch by autoc007LOL! ;D It's a good idea. And it made me laugh, so that's good. Your Check, Gentlemen? by gliderames and xpropugnator...I don't understand how a Royal Draik can eat so much. Good job, though. Brothers'n'Sister - Paint Brush Luck Part III by kamikatze24Poor Sloth... XDDD It's funny! I like the art, too. ^_^ --- Wee... my first set of reviews! And how short they all are, too. |
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Post by PFA on Nov 11, 2006 14:58:05 GMT -5
Now the articles! Err... article. >_>
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Dear Crabby: Bring on the Happy! by dan4884
"Those friendly psychiatrists prescribed me some happiness pills! Isn't that great?"
"Argh! I can't stand this stupid happiness, but if I don't take the pills, my column will be canceled! Help me readers! If you're reading this, save me from the pills!"
That was funny! I loved how he was fighting himself. I laughed at just about every question! And that one part at the end. Good job! ^_^
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Post by PFA on Nov 11, 2006 15:31:12 GMT -5
Shadowflame: Prisoner by brains03
...it's full of pirates... >_>
But I liked the story. Even though it was full of pirates. (it probably would've made more sense if I had the other stories, but that's beside the point) Although it was a bit confusing, mostly because it kept changing the points of view, but also probably because I was trying to read while my parents were making background noise and trying to ask me questions...
...a ninja likes your pirate story. That's gOOOOOd...
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...I'll probably do the series (especially the continued series) later... ^_^
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Post by Deleted on Nov 11, 2006 20:55:16 GMT -5
A one-time double-shot! Haha! lol! I'll shut up now. Thank you. ArticlesDear Crabby: Bring on the Happy! by dan4884I can't decide which word is better to describe this: hilarious or awesome? Both fit perfectly, as this was wonderful. It felt a bit short, but perhaps I read it too quickly... I want more, more, please. Comparing it with the first, it was just as hilarious, if you were wondering. Short StoriesShadowflame: Prisoner by brains03Despite the unpleasantness behind this that totally confused me, however much I can understand its necessity to be there, I still found this at times slow moving and hard to read. However, and that's a pretty big however there, I quite enjoyed this story and the bits of humor that you flawlessly, and quite seriously, too, worked into it. Your POV shifts, though confusing at first, were executed nicely and made a lot of sense, especially the one with Wings. That was surely the best one, I feel. Overall, this was flawlessly written and was awesomely read. This was amazing. Truly, it was. Also, the comic below is among the best. Surely you shall check it out. Get to it. Please. neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=281348&issue=265 |
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Post by Nimras on Nov 11, 2006 22:33:54 GMT -5
CCR: INSTINCTS - NIMRAS One word: EEEEEK. I DO like this ending! Nimras, this is the first series I've ever read from you, and already I am eagerly waiting for anything more you will write. Something about this extended love story you've written about, between Jeran and Mareian. I really pity Danner. Somehow, this town sheriff just doesn't get all the credit he deserves Thought the breakfast scene was a little overdone, though. I appreciated the humor in teasing Danner, but there was a sentence about what happened to each one of his food items I would have thought Jeran would not have joined Mareian, but alas, even grown Neopets must have their fun. Poor Danner! And he wasn't even properly miffed about it. Well, I guess Jeran and Mareian know him well enough not to stick around and see what happens. I see a lot of foreshadowing in this part of the story - really looking forward to see what happens. I also picked up on the little references to extended family, etc, and I have to wonder if, to learn more about them, I ought to go back and read your previous series *grin* The breakfast scene was really done for one particular person, hence why some of the details that I normally would have skipped over a bit being placed there. It's a very long story of a very inside joke. And Jeran can be a bit of a goofball. No one can be serious all the time.
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Instincts - Part Three by Nimras*Jaw drops promptly to the floor* Oooooooh scandalous! I loved that scene where Jeran is arguing with himself over Mareian, it was so tense. I eagerly await the next horrifying part of Instincts. Also, great reference to Mareian’s foul language at the end when Danner gets mad. I chuckled. I'm glad you liked it! I was so worried that Droplet would change that... CCR Instincts: Ooh, this has got to be one of my favorite series parts ever from you. It's great how you conveyed Jeran's change, and the ending was amazing. Soooo excited for the coming weeks, this is such a great series! And the love story parts you get away with are astounding. XD And you know what occurred to me? I think, if you have the time/care to, it'd really help if you made an encyclopedia of sorts on a petpage or something documenting all the characters. There are so many it'd be immensely helpful in remembering all of the characters. ^^ The encyclopedia's a good idea -- I have a name pronunciation list but that doesn't really tell you anything about the characters. I'll have to look into that. *plots* ........................................... Needed Adventure: Part Twelveby tdyans *sniff sniff* It’s the last one… Out of curiosity, Tdyans, when you say on your User Lookup that you are still working on Needed 3 -- is this Needed 3? If so, you might want to update that a little. *grin* I had the horrible mental image of them all bursting in through the city at a full gallop, scaring the poor citizens who wondered where this stampede of wild looking Neopets came from… This confused me at first, maybe ‘for the second time in as many minutes’ would have flowed better -- but that could just be my personal preference. Awwww…… Hee! Poor Whooter… He’s never going to get a break. Though I think ‘Whoot’ should start with a capital W. I love the ending. *grin* Nice way to wrap it all up from the beginning. |
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Post by Tdyans on Nov 11, 2006 23:26:32 GMT -5
Out of curiosity, Tdyans, when you say on your User Lookup that you are still working on Needed 3 -- is this Needed 3? If so, you might want to update that a little. *grin* Yeah, this is Needed 3. I tried to change it the other day and got an error message-- something about my code being bad. And since I'm too lazy to try to figure that out, I've just left it. But yeah, it needs editing as soon as I can be bothered to work out how to fix it. Any of you more computer savvy people wanna help? I think I left it with a small w throughout, since his name is so similar that I felt like it would help avoid some confusion. It's kind of weird to have it finally done. Thank you for reviewing it all the way through, Nim. I'm glad you liked it. |
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Post by Auto Run on Nov 11, 2006 23:30:13 GMT -5
Thanks for all the reviews  |
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Post by Brains on Nov 11, 2006 23:34:16 GMT -5
Well that explains a lot right there. It doesn't matter a whole lot, it was still a good comic, and that right there is all that's really important.
Thanks for the review!
No matter how often people point this out to me, every time I write a first chapter, or story, or whatever, I seem to use odd POV shifts. Would breakers have helped at all?
*Blushes*
Thanks for the review!
Like I said above, I have a horrible tendency to use awkward POV shifts at the beginning of everything. I'm working on it, I promise the next one won't have that.
The story IS a bit slow to start, and a bit dark and 'unpleasant'. Again, it's just that sort of 'getting into it' thing, and I hope it's all pretty much fixed the next go round.
The humour worried me a bit, I wasn't sure it would fit in with the overall 'dark' tone of the story. Good to hear that it came out alright after all.
I appreciate the glowing (Yet extremely constructive) review, really I do.
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Post by PFA on Nov 12, 2006 9:43:50 GMT -5
No matter how often people point this out to me, every time I write a first chapter, or story, or whatever, I seem to use odd POV shifts. Would breakers have helped at all? Probably. That's what I do. |
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neo username - dan4884 
Thought the breakfast scene was a little overdone, though. I appreciated the humor in teasing Danner, but there was a sentence about what happened to each one of his food items 
I would have thought Jeran would not have joined Mareian, but alas, even grown Neopets must have their fun. Poor Danner! And he wasn't even properly miffed about it. Well, I guess Jeran and Mareian know him well enough not to stick around and see what happens. I see a lot of foreshadowing in this part of the story - really looking forward to see what happens. I also picked up on the little references to extended family, etc, and I have to wonder if, to learn more about them, I ought to go back and read your previous series 
So I was forced to change it), and HOPE that the art would carry it.. 
Ame..
The art's good. I like. ^_^
