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Post by Tashni on Oct 27, 2006 0:05:47 GMT -5
Good grief, where did the week go? I haven't done ANY reviews!
Mootix Itch by autoc007 - Hah, funny! I wasn't expecting that at all. I do think the "Somuch for perfect aim" could have been something more clever, but it's amusing as is. Nice art, too.
A Spooky Halloween, pt 3 by ghostkomorichu - Ah, the perfect ending. Your characters are so cute. Komo's expressions are adorable. (That's what you call him, right?)
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Post by Tashni on Oct 27, 2006 0:12:06 GMT -5
What Lies Hidden in Your Closet - This keeps getting stranger and stranger! I only wish there was more action involving Kalina.
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Post by Nut on Oct 27, 2006 8:43:26 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]The Pant Devil’s Desire[/glow]
Heehee, I love this. XD Maybe it helps that I found out what a Pant Devil Attractor was a while back and thought it was an interesting and inspiring item, and that someone ought to write a story about it. This story has such a quirky and original concept that it’s fun to read just for that, and your dry humor is great—it’s subtle, something I don’t see too often in humorous stories. The Pant Devil Attractor was a fun surprise, as well as a nice way of explaining the Pant Devil’s… attraction to the girl. ^^
I love the little jabs the Pant Devil and Grundo Leader trade with each other. ^^ The story played very much off of Neopets random events and daily happenings, and those sorts of references are fun to read when you recognize them all and can relate. The Pant Devil bursting out from the Wheel of Excitement fit, and whether you knew it or not, the fact that it can actually happen added a sort of realism.
I too was a little confused by the paragraph involving Glitch. I think the main problem with it was this part:
it was really too bad sneaking in and passing the disappearance off as "a glitch in the substance of Neopia's magic" was considered poor sportsmanship.
The first time I read this, I saw it as “It was really too bad sneaking in and passing the disappearance off…”, as if he did both those things at once. Naturally, that made the last part of the sentence sound a little odd. I think a comma after “sneaking in” would have helped break the sentence up, or maybe splitting it into two sentences, or clarifying it in another way.
The descriptions of the Pant Devil involving “deep blue pants” seemed a little odd to me because I never thought of him really wearing pants. He doesn’t have legs. I get an odd idea of him pulling jeans on over that ragged edge he has down there, or wearing them under it.
Poor target girl, hehe. I found her frustrated outburst funny. ^^ The mentions of Chickaroo were fun, too. And how ironic that the Pant Devil stole Herbal Scrambled Eggs from her. x3
Overall, though, I loved the story. ^^ It’s refreshing and fun to read. I’ll mention again that I really like it when writers use the ironies of Neopia for the benefit of their readers, and you threw in a lot of that, throwing in multiple funny references. ^^
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