Issue 262 Reviews

[Dan]

schefflera said:

Dan, thank you for the review too. I'm glad you enjoyed it. And yeah, I guess the assorted Random Event Thief characters would be misfits.... Sorry that some parts were confusing. Especially about Glitch the Red (DFM) Pteri, as I rather liked that joke.

Try more humor. It suits you.

Heh, thank you. Although I'm not really sure if it does.

I got the Glitch joke, it was just the sentence that confused me. Also, didn't it kind of defeat the purpose that the whole paragraph was in parentheses?

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Before getting onto my final reviews...

Schefflera, your story wasn't hard to follow, but the ending I found confusing because it ended so abruptly. It felt as if I had missed something, but I hadn't. Still though, I really enjoyed reading it.

Needed Adventure: Part Nine by tdyans
This began nicely, well, nicely is an understatement, actually, but I was soon confused by the following line:

She seemed to concede defeat, at least for the time being, not offering any struggle, but still refusing to look at all intimidated by the growling Gelert.

I get the impression that it is missing a comma, or maybe a "the"...or I am simply too dimwitted to understand what is trying to be said.

The room that the pair found themselves looking in on appeared to be a small office-- or at least, that was what it appeared to have been once, for the fire had already spread to it, and the furniture and files that were not already destroyed were engulfed in flames.

First, I think I would have used "into" instead of "in on," but that's just me being nitpicky. What really gets me about this paragraph is that they just opened the door from the room where the fire started, and the room beyond is engulfed in flames. How did the fire pass through the closed door? Why did neither Enzo nor Whooter feel the heat on the doorknob, or on the door itself? It just doesn't make sense to me....

Towards the beginning, you used the word "leapt." Later, you used the word "leaped." Though I have nothing against either, I think they were spaced far enough apart that you could have used them uniformly. Oftentimes, small things like that bug me.

Overall, this was another wonderful Needed Adventure, and I truly loved reading it. I'd comment ever more on how great it was, but I must be getting back to my novel...after months of leaving it be...

[Auto Run]

A Spooky Halloween, pt 3 by ghostkomorichu
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=274371&issue=262

I would have to say...the only comics that appear in the neopian times that i regard as comics are those of komori.everything else seems incomplete..just attempts at something even if they are funny

[Nimras]

Starlight Invasion: Keeping Secrets - Part Two
byrainbow_daydreamer

Poor Maylaura! All she wants is a friend…

One sentence confused me…

For a pet that didn't look like she could ever be taught anything, she seemed almost too clumsy, too uncertain with the controls of the ship.

Did you mean, “For a pet that didn’t look like she ever needed to be taught anything…”? Maybe I’m just reading it wrong.

And poor Star, stuck in the middle and clueless to what’s going on.

[Nimras]

At the AstroVilla: Part Three
by kemppotatoe

"Listen," the Xweetok said, placing a paw on Cypher's shoulder, "I know skunk Kougras are exceptionally good-looking, but I'm sure you can find one with much more to his life than sprinkling food with grated cheese and washing dishes."

*dies*

That’s… that’s beautiful. *snickerfits*

She’s right though, they do spat like an old married couple.

[Nimras]

What Lies Hidden in Your Closet: Part Three
by puppy200010

Whoa, trippy house descriptions. Extra rooms, hidden about? Heck, I get lost in a house with just four rooms.

I do think I’d prefer the last paragraph split into two paragraphs though, but that’s just me being picky.

I like the journal parts though. ^^

[Nimras]

Needed Adventure: Part Nine
by tdyans

You’d think the fancy smamchy emergency system would have included a sprinkler system in case of fires.

"Whooter, would you relax? What could possibly happen?"

He should know better than to ask this question anymore…

I love the description of the fire…

[Nimras]

A Break in Memory: Part One
by appaloosa500

DiSoni!

"Year 2, of course. They only recently officially reset the Neopian Calendar to better reflect-"

I love how you manage to say that there was a reason they started the year system -- then don’t explain exactly what it was.

One of the herbs, an unusual one with blue leaves, small purple flowers, and vicious red thorns…

This wouldn’t be closely related to a plant that has blue flowers, red thorns and is a lot easier to see if you’re not colorblind? *grin*

The ending is evil.

[Dream]

nimras23 said:

Starlight Invasion: Keeping Secrets - Part Two
byrainbow_daydreamer

Poor Maylaura! All she wants is a friend…

One sentence confused me…

For a pet that didn't look like she could ever be taught anything, she seemed almost too clumsy, too uncertain with the controls of the ship.

Did you mean, “For a pet that didn’t look like she ever needed to be taught anything…”? Maybe I’m just reading it wrong.

And poor Star, stuck in the middle and clueless to what’s going on.

Thanks a lot for the review. Yes, that'd probably have been a better phrase to use...

And if I got it right, I think the last chapter is going to blow your mind.

[Tdyans]

Oh, you guys and your plot-hole-poking. The escape plans were not easy for me to figure out, so I'm not surprised they've got some problems. But let me try to waffle my way through them to make things a little more plausible (ha!) for you (in other words, you're right, they're problems, but here are some silly explanations anyway):

The objection about the front door not having a lock on the inside a couple of parts ago: I guess Jason had a special front door made for his house that he would be able to lock from the outside but that couldn't be unlocked from the inside-- in case his pets should ever escape "the room." Granted, this would keep him from being able to lock the door from the inside himself, but since he spends little time in the house anyway and probably wouldn't have any concern for his safety or anything like that, he probably wouldn't find that necessary.

The scary fire-causing ray being aimed at pets: I actually did think about this one, kind of. In my reasoning, the rays are designed to react with Neopet cells. Thus, while they're usually safe on pets (though, of course, there are exceptions, as Cambry demonstrates,) hitting any other sort of matter with them produces... unpredictable results.

micrody said:

Needed Adventure: Part Nine by tdyans
This began nicely, well, nicely is an understatement, actually, but I was soon confused by the following line:

She seemed to concede defeat, at least for the time being, not offering any struggle, but still refusing to look at all intimidated by the growling Gelert.

I get the impression that it is missing a comma, or maybe a "the"...or I am simply too dimwitted to understand what is trying to be said.

Though it's by no means a pretty sentence, it's not wrong as far as I can see. But it should have been edited better anyway.

What really gets me about this paragraph is that they just opened the door from the room where the fire started, and the room beyond is engulfed in flames. How did the fire pass through the closed door? Why did neither Enzo nor Whooter feel the heat on the doorknob, or on the door itself? It just doesn't make sense to me....

Well, if a fire needed an open door to spread to other rooms, it would be pretty easy to contain them. I see what you're saying, but I figured the fire just spread through the other walls and/or ceiling, leaving the door relatively untouched. In fact, it was probably a metal door. Which brings us to the heat question... for which I really don't have any good justification. My dad (a firefighter) would probably be ashamed of me for screwing up that detail. Well, I guess maybe the fire was spending more time on the other side of the room and the door was still relatively cool-- that's the best explanation I got.

Towards the beginning, you used the word "leapt." Later, you used the word "leaped." Though I have nothing against either, I think they were spaced far enough apart that you could have used them uniformly. Oftentimes, small things like that bug me.

It would bug me, too. But I just didn't catch it.

nimras23 said:

Needed Adventure: Part Nine
by tdyans

You’d think the fancy smamchy emergency system would have included a sprinkler system in case of fires.

Yeah... you'd think that, wouldn't you? But hey, maybe the "Neopian authorities" that made them install the system were actually wiser to what was going on at Neotech than they thought, so they figured that with a system that opened the cage doors but didn't put out the fire, (and let's face it, with tall guy and short guy working there, a fire was only a matter of time), the pets would be freed and the lab would be destroyed-- two birds with one stone.

Yeah, that's what happened....

Oh yeah, and this isn't a plot hole or anything, but Writingwolf, I remember you mentioning something a few parts ago about the introduction of Jonas and Cambry reminding you of the intro of the two pets at Jason's house. There was actually some parallelism intended there. You'll notice a lot of "pairs" in this story. It kind of developed (unintentionally at first) into a bit of a theme.

I've really appreciated you guys commenting on this series with every part. It's more than I expected and definitely more than I deserve. Thanks for pointing out the holes along with the highlights. It really helps me to look at my plots more critically.

[Nimras]

[glow=red,2,300]A Spooky Halloween, pt 3[/glow]
by ghostkomorichu

Poor Kamori, he’s having such a hard time of this…

I do find it odd that the bowl stuck on Claw’s head, instead of going though him… I know it’s kind of important for the joke, but since VonRoo went right though him earlier in the same series it just makes my brain itch.

I love Tombstone’s expression, pausing right before he sips his soup to stare at Kamori and Claw…

And just randomly, VonRoo’s ears are so cute!

[Nimras]

Mootix Itch
by autoc007

The funniest thing about this comic isn’t the comic itself -- it’s the look of horror on my sister’s face when I showed it to her. Mootix drop and Itchy invasion are her two favorite games. Combining them like this is just so perfectly morbid.

In my opinion, this comic might even be funnier without the last panel. Just show him descending… and then *ZAP*. Though that might only work if you really know both games. *debates*

The expression change on the Mootix’s face between panel one and three are really nicely done.

[Nimras]

The Pant Devil's Desire
by schefflera

I’m probably not the best person to give a review on this story… I accept full responsibility for any mental damage done to readers from reading this story.

I do think it’s managed to get people afraid to ask what we talk about though, Shefflera.

About the only problem this story has is that you have to know what a Pant Devil Attractor is -- although it should be obvious from the name.

Of course, I love the idea for this story. *brick’d*

[Nimras]

Werelupe Encyclopedia
by dark_goddess_rising

The "were" part in the name comes from an alternate spelling of "where." The tradition of calling them Werelupes arise from the first question most people think of when they encounter one: Where is the nearest exit?

Hee! It’s not true, but it’s funny.

Tourists like to wreak havoc and chaos in the Haunted Woods.

Isn’t that the truth. You’re really making me want to re-write my rejected Haunted Woods story now.

I also adore the running joke with the Sword of the Apocalypse. Number one, almost no one has one. Number two, the dramatic name really pushes home that it’s not something you want to mess around with.

[Komori]

Let's see, I usually just give a blanket 'Thanks' for the comments, but I figure everyone took the time to write me such nice things that I should probably show my thanks a bit more. ^^

rookina said:

A Spooky Halloween, pt 3 by ghostkomorichu
Heehee I love Count Von Roo's and Komo's expressions in the last panel

tambourinechimp said:

A Spooky Halloween, pt 3 - ROFL! I love this! The expressions in the last panel are priceless!

micrody said:

A Spooky Halloween, pt 3 by ghostkomorichu
HaHaHaHa and a fifth for good measure Ha! LOL. This was great, Komori! The joke was hilarious, and their expressions were all perfect! The more I look at this, the more wonderful it becomes! You're awesome.

:3 Thanks you guys! I really try to make sure the expressions are spot on, if nothing else. It can be really easy to neglect the images for a fun verbal joke, but making the visuals match the dialogue can be tough stuff.

schefflera said:

A Spooky Halloween, pt. 3 by ghostkomorichu

I always enjoy your comics. The artwork is neat and they're funny. I should reply more often. *sheepish* And I never would have guessed that von Roo liked tomato soup!

Thanks! And no point in being guilted into replying when you don't feel like it. It makes the times you do more meaningful. :3

dan4848 said:

Spooky by Komori
What needs saying? Amazing as always. Though one comment: don't you think the soup'd pass through the Ghost?

nimras23 said:

[glow=red,2,300]A Spooky Halloween, pt 3[/glow]
by ghostkomorichu

Poor Kamori, he’s having such a hard time of this…

I do find it odd that the bowl stuck on Claw’s head, instead of going though him… I know it’s kind of important for the joke, but since VonRoo went right though him earlier in the same series it just makes my brain itch.

I love Tombstone’s expression, pausing right before he sips his soup to stare at Kamori and Claw…

And just randomly, VonRoo’s ears are so cute!

Eeep, you two aren't the only ones who mentioned the bowl. Hehe, I was hoping nobody'd notice those. I considered using Tombstones as the target of the soup-spiling, but then I decided that this particular storyline was really between Claw and Komo, and that Tombstones didn't need to have a part in it.

But at the same time, thanks for noticing! That just shows me how much people pay attention to my comics, so I'm really flattered! ;D

autoc007 said:

A Spooky Halloween, pt 3 by ghostkomorichu
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=274371&issue=262

I would have to say...the only comics that appear in the neopian times that i regard as comics are those of komori.everything else seems incomplete..just attempts at something even if they are funny

Wow! I'm really flattered! I really appreciate that a lot! But really, I'm not the only good comicker in the Times. There are lots of us! n_n

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Thanks guys! I'll do comic reviews eventually! X3