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Post by Deleted on Aug 4, 2006 23:30:18 GMT -5
=) I'm not familiar with all the NTWFers usernames, so I was too frightened to make a list. xD
Reviews:
Continued Series
The Lost World of Stnaltia: Part Six by silentbutterfly
Hmmm, an interesting part. The parts about the history intrigue me. I am curious to learn more about how Stnaltia came about. ^-^ I thought the idea of the maraquan Skieth swimming in the air was a rather original thought. Once again, very nicely done.
The Mynci Squad: Part Three by costa_rican_girl
Ooh, I didn't realize this was the final part. =) I liked the amount of description and the plan was well thought out, however, I thought that the Shadow Clan members were convinced a little too-easily. Personally, I would have liked to see a bit more of a struggle to complete their final tasks, but nevertheless, it was a good story.
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Post by thegreenmooseofdoom on Aug 5, 2006 0:06:43 GMT -5
Poop, my comic didn't get in. Must be being held over, I haven't gotten an accept/reject letter.
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Post by Patjade on Aug 5, 2006 6:15:33 GMT -5
Wow, lots of new people this week.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 5, 2006 10:31:34 GMT -5
I didn't recognize any names...so here's the one thing that I know for sure is NTWF.
The Day 250 Struck: Part Two by puppy200010 also by plutoplus1
This was great. You continue the story perfectly. It is well-written and easy to read. It was just the right size, too. Kori's character is still well-defined and consistent. The other characters are solid as well and support the story nicely.
I've only got two problems with this and they're just me being nitpicky. But, since I've got the extra time, I'm going to be nitpicky.
In my opinion, the Techo should have said "unable to..." But again, here, I'm just being nitpicky.
I think this sentence is missing a word... a simple typo, though, one that I've committed many times before. The missing word, I believe, is "she" between the word "since" and "was."
Um...and...well...there was nothing else for me to be nitpicky about. ^_^ I can't wait for part three.
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Post by Strife on Aug 5, 2006 14:05:44 GMT -5
Indeed, a lot of newcomers in this issue... Well, I happened to make it in with my article Confessions of a Neverending Boss Battle Champ. Reviews would be much appreciated. ^^
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Post by Deleted on Aug 5, 2006 14:13:53 GMT -5
I didn't recognize any names...so here's the one thing that I know for sure is NTWF. The Day 250 Struck: Part Two by puppy200010 also by plutoplus1This was great. You continue the story perfectly. It is well-written and easy to read. It was just the right size, too. Kori's character is still well-defined and consistent. The other characters are solid as well and support the story nicely. I've only got two problems with this and they're just me being nitpicky. But, since I've got the extra time, I'm going to be nitpicky. In my opinion, the Techo should have said "unable to..." But again, here, I'm just being nitpicky. Saying "unable to" sounds more correct, but you're not supposed to end a sentence with a preposition... so I'm not sure which way is correct, to be honest. I'll try to find out.  You're completely correct about the second sentence. "She" is the word that is missing. Thank you so much for the review! More reviews would be greatly appreciated  . |
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Post by Deleted on Aug 5, 2006 14:20:38 GMT -5
In my opinion, the Techo should have said "unable to..." But again, here, I'm just being nitpicky. Saying "unable to" sounds more correct, but you're not supposed to end a sentence with a preposition... so I'm not sure which way is correct, to be honest. I'll try to find out. I believe it is correct at times to end a sentence with a preposition. In this example, it's taken that it would mean "unable to [help you]" and thus, be correct. This has a name...when not all the words are said but are inferred to be there...but I can't remember it right now. Strife, I'll try to get around tor reading your article today, though if I don't find time today, I will definitely read it tomorrow. |
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Post by Huntress on Aug 5, 2006 14:24:12 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Aug 5, 2006 15:56:36 GMT -5
...Wow. Six in all. Including continued series. 250 hangover is right.
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Post by costaricangirl on Aug 6, 2006 18:49:23 GMT -5
=) I'm not familiar with all the NTWFers usernames, so I was too frightened to make a list. xD Reviews: Continued SeriesThe Lost World of Stnaltia: Part Six by silentbutterfly Hmmm, an interesting part. The parts about the history intrigue me. I am curious to learn more about how Stnaltia came about. ^-^ I thought the idea of the maraquan Skieth swimming in the air was a rather original thought. Once again, very nicely done. The Mynci Squad: Part Three by costa_rican_girl Ooh, I didn't realize this was the final part. =) I liked the amount of description and the plan was well thought out, however, I thought that the Shadow Clan members were convinced a little too-easily. Personally, I would have liked to see a bit more of a struggle to complete their final tasks, but nevertheless, it was a good story. Thanks so much for the review, Choc! Definitely helpful. ^^; I think I'll do a review or two now... I've got nothing better to do. xD |
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Post by Strife on Aug 7, 2006 11:19:31 GMT -5
OMGWTF comic reviews!  Chatspeak by lauraklamotThis would have benefitted from a few more frames of chatspeaking, but I think it gets the point across nicely. Good. ^^ Why We Only Taunt the Pant Devil by arcanemon11This was pretty clever! xD Deep Hurting by nemoyGreat! I laughed out loud after reading this one. xD Terror Mountain fans might want to steer away from this. ^^;; DND: Do Not Disturb! by frogluverjkrClever, but I would recommend making the author's note a little smaller next time. It's as big as the regular text and could easily be mistaken for something the Quiggle is saying.  Invisible Paint Brush Problem by littlemisskirbyVery nice! xD Another laugh-out-loud comic (for me at least). Why is there so much dung in Neopia, eh? by voodoodolleeAwesome job! This one gave me a male gigglefit. x) It makes you wonder where the dung colour really originated for petpets... Only in Neopia... by aokajinSince i'm a Sloth Loyalist, i'm obviously going to love this by default. xD Of course, this is different from most of the other Sloth comics because the green genious actually thinks of a great plan. ^^ |
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Post by Tashni on Aug 7, 2006 12:11:19 GMT -5
Cuddly Catastrophes by pyrosquirrelx - Hah, I always like a good conspiracy flick. This was very well put together, with a good combination of real Neopian facts and kooky suspicions. Nice job!
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Post by Tashni on Aug 7, 2006 12:19:23 GMT -5
Confessions of a Neverending Boss Battle Champ by darkerstrife - Hah, this is a great way to write a game guide! You gave it a voice, humor, and even your minion self. I had a great mental image of the space faerie glowering at you in the end.
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Post by Strife on Aug 7, 2006 13:14:41 GMT -5
Thank you muchly! ^_^
I just spent the past few hours catching up on a very interesting series...
Encountering Resistance: Part Four by moosuem
As i've said countless times before, i'm a sucker for Sloth stories. I've read nearly every Sloth-related story, article, and series that Neopian Times authors have come up with... But THIS... This is the most emotional, gut-wrenching Sloth series I have ever read. I mean it. I don't think anyone could read this without feeling a sting of grief for what happens to Neopia. The story takes place many years into the future after Sloth has successfully conquered the entire planet, reshaping it in his image and causing many Neopet species to become extinct. The main characters are very well-designed and i've grown rather fond of them, and despite my loyalty to Sloth, I can't help but feel sorrow for their struggle.
I HAVE to extend a congratulations to the author of this series. It isn't over yet, but it looks like it's heading in the right direction towards a climatic struggle with Dr. Sloth himself.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 7, 2006 13:53:34 GMT -5
Confessions of a Neverending Boss Battle Champ by darkerstrife
This is an amazing article. First off, your grammar and spelling was flawless, and that is a great thing for all writers. Then, you had just the right amount of humor to keep it from getting boring or dull, and you never let the article get too long. Everything you said was in its proper place and nothing was prolonged unnecessarily. Finally, you gave it personality. You made this more than a game guide. That in its self makes this article great. By the way, did I mention that this was original, and that made it even better? Good job; I really enjoyed reading this, and it was helpful, too! I also loved the Space faerie... tehehe.
Cuddly Catastrophes by pyrosquirrelx
This article was well-written and flowed nicely from point to point. You bring together many seemingly unrelated points and weave them into one large conspiracy. Great mind to put it all together! Great writing skill to make it all fun to read! Good job, Pyro.
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