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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2006 9:33:07 GMT -5
Climbing the Snowflake Tree by doughnut215The beginning was cute and set the pace of the story, but there were a handful of awkward parts that were either too rushed or too vague. You could have added a twist or two to make things more interesting. The ending was quite unexpected, and on the whole, I liked the determination of Bordelian and the fact that he wanted to climb the tree instead of just flying. This is a very entertaining piece, and you did a good job on it. Thanks for the review Kat  *gets to work on writing a few reviews* xD |
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Post by Star on Mar 27, 2006 14:41:27 GMT -5
Lullaby by precious_katuch14
I loved the opening paragraph! It described everything so well without too much detail and I really caught the feelings of the characters well. It had a simple plot but I still enjoyed reading it. I think you have to have a talent to be able to write a story without much plot and make it interesting. J A really nice read.
Climbing the Snowflake Tree by doughnut215
I was immediately drawn into the story with the first few paragraphs, explaining the neohome and the situation. At first, I thought this was going was to be another clichéd story with Bordelian managing to climb the tree and has his dreams fulfilled etc but it wasn’t. It was really quite sweet, about the young Bori growing up and being determined and the ending was perfect. It wasn’t clichéd at all and it made me laugh J A lovely read and I loved the title.
The Adventures of Payne the Draik by frynr and goten__10
I loved this! It included so many lands in it without making it seem over-loaded. It was funny as well how wherever he went, Payne could never find a fire due to silly reasons. I loved the Spring Cleaning idea and the time zones.
That part made me laugh! I absolutely loved Fuhnah's character - it made the story much happier. Well done!
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Post by Kat on Mar 28, 2006 3:21:00 GMT -5
Thanks for the review, Star. j;D
The Shoyru Tamer: Part One by sammywalkers
Well, from the beginning, the dialogue got a little confusing - as in, you sometimes can't tell who's saying who, but the plot went along nicely, if a little rushed at some aspects. Perhaps you could've added some more events between the morning conversation to the discovery of the training place thingy. But the part was simple and easy to understand, and the ending leaves readers wondering what will happen next.
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Post by Tay - Sock Eater on Mar 29, 2006 19:42:07 GMT -5
I know I'm asking a little late, but I'd adore reviews for the continuation of my series. It's Now You See Me, Now You Don't: Part Two. There are six parts, so stay tuned in! +wink+
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Post by Tashni on Mar 30, 2006 2:29:03 GMT -5
GACK! I have GOT to finish my reviews! They're coming tomorrow, people! No, wait, tomorrow's bad. So is Friday. Erm, this weekend?
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Post by velveteen on Mar 30, 2006 5:28:06 GMT -5
ditto. I must do reviews...I haven't even finished reading last week's issue properly yet. silly plushie tycoon is eating my neo-time.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 30, 2006 10:21:08 GMT -5
Climbing the Snowflake Tree by doughnut215 I was immediately drawn into the story with the first few paragraphs, explaining the neohome and the situation. At first, I thought this was going was to be another clichéd story with Bordelian managing to climb the tree and has his dreams fulfilled etc but it wasn’t. It was really quite sweet, about the young Bori growing up and being determined and the ending was perfect. It wasn’t clichéd at all and it made me laugh J A lovely read and I loved the title. Thanks for the review! I don't have time for many reviews mainly because I left it too late, and also because I should be packing for my holiday, but still. Sorry if they're a bit short.. xD Having a Superlative Chomby Day by lassie_nikkiI like the style in which this was written, and it comes off very upbeat. It definitely conveys the chomby-day mood which you were mentioning! xD I love the title, too, it should be said. It flowed well and was a nice, entertaining read. There were a few phrases which seemed a little strange, and one or two bits where the grammar was a touch awkward, but not many at all. Overall, a really nice enjoyable piece. Well done!
Making Ex-tensions of Your Extensions by velveteenI have to say, I absolutely loved this. There were so many little jokes, and humorous style seemed very natural, not at all forced. I have to be totally honest, when I first read the title and surmised that it was about neohomes (not something I'm interested in  ) I thought it would be quite boring. But I was pleasantly surprised ^_^ The only thing I would say was that it seemed to jump too quickly from talking about the royal wallpaper to the end. The ending felt a little abrupt- in my opinion it maybe needed an extra paragraph of something there xD That's just me nitpicking though Good job! Something Fishy by ssjelitegirlOk, so comic reviews aren't my strong point. But I read this comic before I started doing reviews and wanted to comment on how much I liked it xD I love how the whole thing has been so carefully done, and the artwork is gorgeous. I like the way that in your comics, there are jokes within jokes- e.g instead of just the joke about the fish not being so edible, there was the panel where you said fishing required time and patience, and yet Shad caught a fish straightaway. I don't know if the way I've worded that completely makes sense, but it does to me xD The picture of the madfish is awesome, the expression and pose of it is excellent. Lullaby by precious_katuch14The attention to detail and the vividness of the scene portrayed here is beautiful. I was completely absorbed, and the use of language was wonderful. I really felt as though I could sympathise with the young Reuben, and the ending was just so sweet. Done in another way, it could have been cliched, but here it just seemed right. There's not really much else I can say about this xD Loved it ^_^ |
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Post by Scar on Mar 31, 2006 3:53:05 GMT -5
The Kreludan Conspiracy: Parts 1 - 5by azellica Firstly, I'd like to say that I love a good thriller, one where the protagonist is dogged every step of the way. Unfortunately though the plot in Kreludan Conspiracy, while it got off to a good start, dragged on for too long. The build up to the discovery of the conspiracy also seems to have been thrown at the protagonist instead of being revealed gradually to increase the suspense. The conspiracy itself was pretty simple and not the complicated 'web-within-webs' I expected. However, the characters is the story's redeeming point. Understandably, most of the story went to developing Roack's irritable and formal personality. The contrast between the prissy and rude Roack in beginning and the humble Roack in the ending was developed nicely IMHO. Irt and Davra were also great additions to the action: Irt's unswerving respect for Roack and quirky love for poetry and Davra's quick thinking were believable (although Davra's memory recovery could be said to be a bit sudden, but that's a minor point.) Although Hwex received too little attention and Sloth seems a little warm and fuzzy in the ending (uncharacteristic but he escaped being blown up after all  ) Oh, and did I forget to mention the technology in the series was perfect and fit the setting. Exploding watches?  Great descriptions on the tech Overall, I'd say it was a decent story. A few grammar mistakes and words that didn't flow properly but nothing major. I hope to see more of this type of storytelling Keep up the good work azellica
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Post by TC - Back From the Dead... on Mar 31, 2006 11:32:48 GMT -5
TC's Reviews...*GASPETH!* Can it really be?
Lullaby - Loved this from the outset, Kat. Once again you wonderful abilities to turn the simplest premises into a beautiful work of art not only astounds, but inspires. The characters were well thought-out and described, which is essential for a short story such as this. I've never read "A Hero's Journey" and, with the amount of time I can get to access the 'net, I doubt I'll be able to for sometime, but one doesn't need to have read that to get instantly aqquainted with the characters. Whenever I feel like everything in the NT has been done to death, and that there's no more reason to go on, just a read of one of your stories rekindles the flame. All in all, and excellent story for me to have come back to the NT to.
Plus, I didn't know the NT allowed mentions of families now...how long has this been going on?
More later...
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The Adventures of Payne the Draik - Heh...poor Payne. I hate it when that happens. Anyway, cute story, with the character's relentless and undying commitment to his job a nice touch to the story...the humor sprinkled thoughout was just enough to stop the story from dragging along. Good work.
Something Fishy - BWAH-HAH-HAH! 'nuff said.
Tailspin - Funny...but where's Baloo the bear? XD
Problems Only Neopian Goths Have - LOL! I wonder if there's any other PB's that look like they could be used on owners?
Neopian Insanity - I don't frequent the NT the often anymore, but I'm sure this has been published before.
Edna and the Expensive Items - What...The...Hooey? That's all I have to say.
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) I thought it would be quite boring. But I was pleasantly surprised ^_^ The only thing I would say was that it seemed to jump too quickly from talking about the royal wallpaper to the end. The ending felt a little abrupt- in my opinion it maybe needed an extra paragraph of something there xD That's just me nitpicking though 
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Great descriptions on the tech 
