Issue 307 Reviews

[Tashni]

Articles
A Wonderful Guide to a Wonderful Petpet by fuzzy_wuzzy210
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=359586&issue=307
Petey and the Word Search Puzzle by shamboo5
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=358936&issue=307
Ahnnilator's Guide to Lunch by cyneo_masters2
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=358927&issue=307

Short Stories
Without Friends by undeadfortune
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=358567&issue=307
Captain Cappuccino and Miss Mocha by playmobil_is_my_life
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=358668&issue=307
(Not Just Any) Day At The Park by psychopsam
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=357088&issue=307
A Time Before... by tootsiekitty_
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=357527&issue=307


Comics
Good Night? by pokemon_lunatic
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=359989&issue=307

New Series
The Mystery Behind Neoschool: Part One by zuziafruzia
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=362048&issue=307
The Partnership: Part One by pandabearb
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=361079&issue=307

Continued Series
Shad and Saura: That Other City - Part Three by Huntress
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=356806&issue=307
The Dark Faeries' Apprentice: Part Three by neo_star_queen
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=357737&issue=307
Star Power: Part Three by springsteen0991
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=358183&issue=307
Flight: Part Two by taipeiss
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=359037&issue=307
Deep Secrets: Part Two by extreme_fj0rd
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=361637&issue=307

Wow, LOTS of new people!

[kamikatze24]

fuzzy_wuzzy210 has two articles in the times but doesn't shop up if you search on Neopets (in the NT it says those two articles, namely "A Wonderful Guide to a Wonderful Petpet" and "The What Not to Do List", ar his/her only ones), it says the name doesn't exist.

Just wanted to point that out. I wonder what happened.

EDIT: Oh, and Dimi has a comic in.
EDITEDIT: "Good night?" by pokemon_lunatic www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=359989&issue=307

[Deleted]

Me! You missed me! I'm new to the NTWF, maybe you've seen me around. And I probably don't have an avatar. Well, just call me Sam. My story "(Not Just Any) Day At The Park" got in...

[Tashni]

Kami - That's weird! I'll add it anyway, just to be sure.

Sam - Welcome to the NTWF! I added your story to the list. Top of the short story page, too. Congrats!

[Deleted]

Hello, thank you, and yeah I noticed! I hope you liked my short story!

[Tk ∆]

You Missed me:
www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=357527&issue=307

It's my first ever *squeely-ness-ness*

[Sq]

You missed Anna's and Lillie's new series. =)

www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=361079&issue=307

www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=362048&issue=307

[Craig]

Shad and Saura: That Other City - Part Three
by Huntress

All right, this part had a lot of different things, some of which I loved and some of which I thought could have been done a little better. I thought the beginning was done pretty well, although since I was used to your beautiful descriptions in the first two parts I was a little disappointed with the introduction to Artus. I thought you described him physically very well; I could picture him easily, although perhaps that was more because of the illustration than the writing. However, his personality didn't seem to be developed very much, and even though I'm guessing we'll be hearing more from him later, the exchange of books seemed to start and end a bit too quickly for me.

I thought that things really got good when Nabile was introduced. You described her wonderfully; her personality was really well done. I thought the bit with all the servants was funny but that part I also thought could have been done better. It seemed to happen a little to fast, again, and before I knew what was going on Nabile had already made best friends with Shad and Saura and had invited them to stay. Perhaps it was supposed to be that way, but instead of coming off as quick and spontaneous it almost seemed rushed to me.

However, those were just little things that affected the mood of the story for me; overall I loved it. While the first half of Part Three had a few shortcomings, I really fell in love with the second half. To me, from the moment Nabile led Shad and Saura out of the library, your writing was flawless. The transitions were done perfectly, the dialogue was natural and believeable, and the description was succinct and nicely-done. I also really liked the confrontation between Nabile and Nightsteed, and you left me breathless for more at the end. Overall, your story keeps getting better and better and I can't wait to read more! ;D

Deep Secrets: Part Two
by extreme_fj0rd

I really liked how you used very short paragraphs in this part. It gave the feel of rapid action, and it felt like I'd only been reading for about a minute by the time I finished. It was really well-written and not a word was out of place, in my opinion, and I could picture everything that was happening. Overall a very exciting part. I'm not sure who to believe right now, or who to suspect! Can't wait to read more.

Oh, and the analogy of snowflakes at the end was pure genius. Really, really well done.

[Deleted]

Oh em gee, I am so freaking in love with my custom picture. It's... perfect. I mean, it seems that customs are hard to come by nowadays so I wasn't expecting too much, but aaah! *falls over*

Thankyouthankyouthankyou to whomever it is appropriat to thank for it!

Umm, I would like to get some reviews done this week as I haven't done any in a while. I'll put it on my to-do list.

[bag]

Reviews much appreciated:

www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=358927&issue=307

(I'll review later for once!)

[Deleted]

Noooo. D:

I found a "first person/third person" error. I started by writing the story in first-person and then switched to third and I forgot to change one measly little "I".

*crush'd* Darn it, I really need to watch out for stuff like that!

[Tk ∆]

I noticed some mistakes in mine too T_T, thats what I get for letting people who speak different types of english than me / Major personailtly clash edit ... I htought I had re americain english-nized it all*headwall*

[Lillie]

Yeah thanks, squiesh! I've found love, and it is in my custom picture. =D So any reviews for my new series, The Partnership would be appreciated. I'll definitely try and do some this weekend.

[Craig]

(I'll edit this post as I do more reviews, not a lot of time today)

Short Stories

Captain Cappuccino and Miss Mocha
by playmobil_is_my_life

Mr. Lynch held up his Styrofoam cup to toast us.
I nodded in agreement and faced forward.
Ohh, poor playmobil! I know that must be incredibly frustrating, finding these mistakes, but let me assure you that they in no way detract from the charm of this incredible story! I loved it!

I thought that the charcters were all very well described, despite the fact that many of them were introduced very quickly -- great job! I fell in love with our main character immediately, and the story captivated me the whole way through. The way the story moved along was flawless, and you really created the atmosphere of the shop perfectly. There were parts that actually made me chuckle out loud (very rare while reading!) and it was overall a very endearing short story. I wish I could read things like this more often.

(Not Just Any) Day At The Park
by psychopsam

Your pets are mean! Haha, just kidding, they were very funny and brilliantly described. ;D As far as this short story goes, the overall plot didn't do a lot for me: it was all in the details. Just little things you added in there turned an average story into a really good one, like your Zafara's halo getting brighter when he was happy, or your counting down "five, four, hoof in the eye, two." Just little things like that. I enjoyed reading it, and I think you have a great sense of humor. Nice job!

[Tyrannitar is Interentlesss]

So I go away for a month for piano and I'm forgotten again. Fetch by myfallenrevival4 is in this week. I'd love to do some comic reviews but I don't exactly have that great of an internet acess at the moment and it doesn't look like there are any?...