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Post by Tashni on Jun 22, 2007 15:25:59 GMT -5
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Post by kamikatze24 on Jun 22, 2007 15:28:28 GMT -5
Not a review, but interesting altogether:
Quote from the editorial:
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Post by Tashni on Jun 22, 2007 15:32:31 GMT -5
I have NO idea what website that editorial is talking about, does anybody else?
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Post by kamikatze24 on Jun 22, 2007 15:33:53 GMT -5
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Post by Tashni on Jun 22, 2007 15:41:13 GMT -5
Amikarashui by bluecloud - Nice art, very simple and no terribly original joke, but well executed. (I feel your pain. I've been getting the Random Event for YEARS. They really need to redraw the monocerous.)
Pirates vs. Ninjas? by togepi_forever - GO SHENKUU! NINJAS RULE!!!! Sorry. Anyway, I loved the comic! It was a great observation with cute art. It looks a little bare with that white background, but you don't really need a background, so no big deal. ^_^
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Post by retired on Jun 22, 2007 16:16:12 GMT -5
I'm trapped in another state, far from my beloved scanner and Photoshop, but at least I managed to locate a computer that has internet. Anyways:
Amikarashui~
Fabulous art, and though the joke was a bit cliche, it makes it's point very clearly, and got a chuckle out of me by the fact that your Zafara was standing so nonchalant with a GIANT monocerous crouched behind him. XP
Pirates Vs. Ninjas~
The irony is, I made the exact same observation when I joined Shenkuu. XD The art had a clean, simplistic feeling that made me feel all snuggly inside. ^_^
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Post by Psycho on Jun 22, 2007 16:25:27 GMT -5
Whoa, so there are so many new NTWF members coming in I hardly recognize who's NTWF or not  Yooyus in the Air: Why the Altador Cup was DelayedWolf, honey! You write so well but you write SO MUCH 0__0; It was difficult for my poor little pea-sized brain to keep up with your long sentences and large paragraphs without any sort of break. Breaking up large paragraphs would probably be your best bet Besides that, I found the article very professional - I especially liked the insight into the PPL and its resemblance to PETA xD Usually, however, the first paragraph in an article contains the most important information in the article, so that if you don't read the rest of the article, it's all there in the first paragraph. Mr. Mic Rody, this was a fabulous article  I love the humor: Sentence sort of confused me. Maybe "...unless it has been scored with before the ten seconds is up." or something like that, because it just seemed to me that "used to score with" isn't the same as "being scored"... if you get what I mean Wonderful work, Wolf, once again, congratulations |
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Post by Psycho on Jun 22, 2007 16:35:49 GMT -5
The Rise and Fall and Rise and Fall and Rise and Fall and Rise of the Bungee Jumping BlumarooHow entertaining Aside from having to look up what "abseiling" meant, I found this story truly amusing. The Green blumaroo finally learned something, hm? Puhahaaa Several instances where I laughed aloud - "Flock - Lennies?" (so I'm a sucker for puns ) "Crumpets? At a time like this? How could you!" And of course, the last scenario when the Kacheek realizes that the string is too long xDDD One thing that would have made it a little easier to understand - "“Oh, that’s okay then – no, wait a minute! Bungee elastic, under such pressure, could stretch to well over half their original length or so, right?”" Should be "could stretch to well over BY half their original length..." Otherwise, I have nothing to say about this story other than well done and thanks for the smiles!!!
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Post by Huntress on Jun 22, 2007 17:15:43 GMT -5
Tashni, the second comic link is incorrect. Directs to the Amikarashui comic x3 Does anyone else find this comic kinda sad? >> I mean, it has nice art and a decent joke and all, but the afternote about going for the avatar... whatever happened to 'hope you liked my comic' notes? Not that those are much better, but the intention is still something. Anyways, seeing my lack of presence on review threads lately, I'll make up a little of it by doing some comic reviews again for a change ^^ Amikarashui #4Thatzafaraishawt @.@ Well, I didn't find this comic particularly funny but it had a really good point nevertheless. Less mall-making, more redrawing, eh TNT? The art is really awesome, with the annoyed expression of the Zafara and all, though the Monocerous could perhaps have used a bit more... expressiveness or something. He just sits there, staring at the reader, while he could've been staring at the Zafara in a  -sorta way, which would've added to the joke as well. And the footnote >< Or footnotes, in fact. The comic would've worked just as well without them. Rule of thumb: thou shalt not add anything that isn't crucial. Footnotes, for the most part, aren't. But still, I liked that comic ^^ You don't see that good art in the NT that often. Pirates vs. Ninjas?(They're a NTWFer? o.o Shows how much I pay attention these days.) I still haven't gotten over that wussy pirates thing e___e Stupid TNT. Everyone knows that pirates pwn. ...as for the comic, I like the art ^^ Simplistic, sweet, yet works really well, even without a background, and I'm a known detail-obsesser around here. Xana's expression in the last panel (or scene) is confusing though. It looks like she's somehow contemplative/cynical or something, though the plotline would suggest happiness or confidence. Unless she's supposed to be sarcastic, in which case the expression could've used more emphasizing on that scale, with frowning and all. The joke itself could've been executed a bit better, right now a tad bit too much is left hanging on the reader's logic (and how would TNT's support for ninjas directly show in Yooyuball anyway, without rigging the game?) But now I'm getting nitpicky. I liked that comic :3 Despite the wussy-pirates thing, which shows a lot. I'ma see if I manage to get some story reviews done later that week. No promises though e.e I seem to be unable to keep them. |
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Post by Tashni on Jun 22, 2007 20:44:10 GMT -5
Pirates vs. Ninjas?(They're a NTWFer? o.o Shows how much I pay attention these days.) Like I said, I wasn't sure. ^_^" Does anyone know? |
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Post by Jade on Jun 22, 2007 21:35:07 GMT -5
Thank you all for critiquing my comic ;D I know the joke has been done before (in fact a comic just last issue was the same random event), but I've been trying to make comics on actual neopian events, and that one happens a lot to me  Huntress, the monocerous is looking at my zafara, or at least that was my intention I tried to make him as menacing as possible though. I really thought the answer to that random contest would have been 42  |
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Post by tulleskirt on Jun 22, 2007 22:00:08 GMT -5
I wrote "Two Days With Taelia." ^^ It's hideously, hideously sappy, but I figured that a site that won't let you type "myspace" would go for the cutiepie. |
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Post by Psycho on Jun 22, 2007 22:57:32 GMT -5
I wrote "Two Days With Taelia." ^^ It's hideously, hideously sappy, but I figured that a site that won't let you type "myspace" would go for the cutiepie. Droplet is the one who chooses pieces, and I daresay she has a soft spot in her heart also  Two Days With TaeliaHmmm this story itself was like drinking hot chocolate I wouldn't call it sappy, maybe a little sweeter than usual, but warming and comfortable. I normally prefer the tragic sort of tales but this was a nice change of pace. I couldn't find any fault with your writing - you write very well! I like the way you portrayed Taelia. She was openly friendly and very warmhearted - almost in a big sister sort of way for the little aisha. Though because Taelia has a habit of being nasty with her questers, in addition to her living in a cold climate, I went in predisposed to think she was naturally coldhearted or at least, cold natured. So throughout the story I was a bit incredulous to see how good natured she was - her loneliness was subtle and I liked that. You didn't come right out to say "Taelia was lonely" but hinted at it, which was perfect. I kept thinking she would turn around and be plotting something, or use the Aisha to help her find things, etc., but in the end I think I was glad to know that Taelia just wanted some company. If there was something sappy and cheesy and overdone, it would have been your ending line - "Thank you Netta" I don't know, I just didn't like that. That could just be me, though, because it's not illogical or out of character for Taelia (in the way you wrote her). Congratulations on yet another NT publication Keep up the good work ^_^ |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 23, 2007 5:40:07 GMT -5
I wrote "Two Days With Taelia." ^^ It's hideously, hideously sappy, but I figured that a site that won't let you type "myspace" would go for the cutiepie. Wow, that is SO TRUE. Either heartwarming or comedic stories tend to get the biggest reaction. *shrug* Lol. I hope to get some reviews in before my trip! I'll be reviewing the stuff on the list and possibly more if there's time. |
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Post by Deleted on Jun 23, 2007 11:32:15 GMT -5
Bluecloud300 is definitely an NTWFer, yes, I recall the previous comics in the series...
Togepi_forever...might be, but I don't recall their previous works at all, sooo... *shrugs*
Amikarashui #4 by bluecloud300
The art was good, yes. And the joke itself was funny. But the little green box saying some events aren't always good in mass just seemed anticlimactic to me... Nevertheless, I still liked the comic.
Pirates vs. Ninjas? by togepi_forever
This is certainly a funny comic, and the art is really nice, too. ^_^ lol.
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I love the humor:
-sorta way, which would've added to the joke as well.
