that hollow chocolate bunny thing

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i finished the first bit and started the second yesterday, do you want me to post the fist bit up so you can proof read it?

[Lappi]

Sure!! Me have time!! ;D

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ok, here is is:

Attack of the Demonic Angel Plushies: Part One
By Rishiy

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“And Good riddance to you too!” Yelled the teenaged Kyrri as the cab drove off with a patch from his shirt in its closed door.
The young neopet looked up and let the moon light shine on his red face. He was at an average height with a squeaky voice that reflected his years. He stared down from the freeway to his new home, Neopia Central.

As the youth walked for the streets looking for a place to lodge and begin his new life in the city, he heard a clatter in a nearby alley. A fat Bearog staggered drunk out of the shadows.
“Eloo lady… catch me.” It mumbled before slumping limply on the dusty pavement.
The Kyrri looked around shiftily. He didn’t know whether to pick the small creature up as it might be involved in the feuding guilds he had heard so much about in hi home town, then again, he was new and he didn’t want to make any enemies so he stowed the poor creature under what was left of his shirt and ran on.

A cold liquid dribbled over his face. He slowly opened his eyes. Six more were staring him in the face. As he sat up wiping the drool off his face, the Bearog slumped onto the bed on the other side of the room.

“Where am I?” He asked the three-headed dog.

“Isn’t it normally the one who gets saved job to ask that? By the sign on the door, I would say we were in the Neopia Central branch of the cockroach motel. I’m Cuddley-wuddley puppy-wuppy, your neighbourhood bum, and you?” He replied in a voice far too chirpy for someone, as he put it, who had just been saved.

He looked around the small room, it had two bed that he was sure had passed their use by date, a broken lamp, pile of wood that once probably looked something like a table and a small TV laying on its side.

“I’m Timmy.” He replied.

“Good, you can call me Cud. Well Timmy, I went through your purse and I concluded that your broke, more so now than then. The fastest way for no skilled no talented bums like us to make money is to enrol in the Defenders of Neopia.”
Timmy opened his mouth to defend himself against the bum remark, but then thought better of it.

The next hour found our two heroes outside the infamous Defenders building. Cud strolled casually up to the front desk as Timmy wondered whether he should be so cocky in a place that looked so expensive. But to his surprise, He was directed straight to Judge Hog’s office. They were seated in leather chairs and handed cups of hot coffee.

“You may be wondering why a bum such as Cud is being lead to my office, handed very expensive beverages and seated in the finest of furniture.” Judge Hog began. “Well it turns out he is our best customer, give or take if his means are a little…shall we say, unique.” Cud blushed. “So we send him on exclusive missions, the kind where his pure bumbling idiocy may well be used to his advantage, the kind we are planning to send you on today….”

“…Ummm, you? Why not him?” Timmy cut in.

“ State laws require for every mission to be under the name of a neopet, and with cud being a mere petpet he has had to find an owner for every mission he has under taken, even if the pet played no role in it at all. So will you sign?”

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Timmy wondered what it would look like if Cud got arrested for doing a mission on his own.

“Ummm…ok.”

Meanwhile, on the other side of town, a very important game of cheat was taking place.
“4!” Yelled the hooded character.

“Cheat!” Said Cappara practically screaming. A wide toothy smile lit up from under the hood.

“Very good! But let’s put a little bet on this next card. If I win, you never see day light again.”

“Ok,” She replied not knowing quite what that meant.

“Ace.” The Mysterious figure said calmly.

“Cheat.” Replied Cappara in the same tone, knowing she had gotten rid of all the aces earlier. Suddenly a sack plunged down over her head and two goons dragged her off. Only the Hooded figure was left in the room alone.

“Yes, it really is easier when you do.” He smirked, an ace dropped out of his sleeve.

“Well done.” Said Judge Hog clapping Timmy on the back after he signed the contract. “Now, down to business. We have had reports of the disappearance of the celebrity Balthazar; apparently, he was literally hunted down in his mansion in the haunted woods. Some of his recently captured faerie onlookers say it was a gruesome ordeal but some magic prevented them from seeing the kidnapper. We need you to investigate it and prevent any other celebrities from being kidnapped…” Suddenly the phone on the office table rang. Judge Hog slowly picked it up and put it to his floppy near as the front desk spoke at him. He put the phone down with a grave look on his face.

“That was front desk. Apparently, Cappara’s cleaning staff just phoned in with a distressed message. It appears that she too has been kidnapped. You better go and stop this before any more celebrities are snatched. Oh and do not let this get out!”

When they got back to the grubby room, Cud switched on the small TV. They watched as the Neo News Source logo flash up on the screen. As it faded down, the reporter stood in front of an odd group of Bruces, Quiggles and Usuls all dressed in expensive looking uniforms.

“And now, I’m here live with the distraught cleaning staff of the recently kidnapped Cappara.” The reporter began. “Oh! Oh! And this just come in, Ferny Poo is now officially the next victim. Her security guard says he came back after his 10 minute break and she was gone. Residents of the neighbourhood claim to have heard rumbling and groaning.”

“Well that’s not good, is it?”

[calvinseviltwin]

it's gotta be longer I can tell you that right now.

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IT does? ok. It got up to the 1000 word target.

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thats only the first bit, you know that right.

[Lappi]

Yep. Sounds good so far =)