Seeking CC for rejected short series

[Sunny]

Hello!

Thanks in advance to anyone who has the time to read this. I received a TMGE rejection message yesterday afternoon for this three-part series ("Lab Pet"). I haven't written anything creative, much less Neo-related, for some time so I figure I am a bit rusty.

I was wondering if anyone might be able to glance over and provide constructive criticism or tell me outright if this story just isn't very interesting or worth telling... I thought it was pretty good, at least on par with my older submissions, so I'm a bit uncertain what I should do with it (i.e. work it and resubmit or abandon altogether ).

Thanks again very much!

**update** posted a revision to a google doc docs.google.com/document/d/1oik9WaGb-k0eBhN282WIBz8O1vPOSz3psR8WoDINBwQ/edit

[June Scarlet]

Hey Sunny, I read the first part. I think the story is an interesting concept, I enjoyed it and want to read more. However, there's a few typos that could be holding you back from being accepted. Stuff like saying "Baby Blue," instead of "Baby Blu," or not capitalizing the first word in a paragraph.

I would maybe suggest printing out the story if you have access to a printer, and pouring over it with a pencil or something, to catch these typos.

I would also suggest putting it on a google doc if you have access to a google account, and then putting the access settings to anyone with a link can comment, though not edit. That way, as someone reads it, they can point out exactly where they find the typo, when they find it.

Good luck!

[Sunny]

Thank you so much!

I didn't even realize there were typos like that... I read it over several times and thought Id caught them all but you're correct the best way is often to print it out.

I apologize, I'll give it another read over and fix those more minor issues and repost on a google doc.

Thanks again!

[Sunny]

I've reposted it to a google doc and fixed the issues that June already identified docs.google.com/document/d/1oik9WaGb-k0eBhN282WIBz8O1vPOSz3psR8WoDINBwQ

Thanks again to anyone who has time to take a look! I really appreciate it.