Cockney accents are hard

[thatgirlwhowriteshar]

Hi! So I'm writing a fanfic and the main character has a really strong Cockney accent, but I don't know if it's too strong if you know what I mean. Here are some examples of what she says...

"Any lads bin boverin' me cousin?"
"Oi yer, four-eyes! Bugger off, will ya?"
"Woss yer name?"
"Leave me cousin alone and cop out of our compartment. Take cocky-grin wiv yer!"
"Yer shut it! I weren't goin' on ter yer!"
"Don't start sumfink yer can't finish, luv. God yer like a dog wiv two d*cks."
"Right, get out of our compartment, will ya. Yer killin' off our brain cells just standin' there."

I don't know if it's too obvious, but like I said, she has a really prominent accent, so....

Does anyone have any advice?

[Celestial]

First up, hello and welcome to the NTWF.

Secondly, those are readable to me. I don't quite know if it's Cockney, because it reads like generic lower class British to me, but the only thing that makes me clock Cockney is the actual rhyming slang. Which would probably be far too obscure for the average reader. If you say it's Cockney, it should be fine for 95% of people, unless you get someone who is actually Cockney and goes "'ang on, you're telling Porkies!"

Then again, those might just be readable to me because I can hear them, being from the UK myself. And I deal with Scottish people on a regular basis, so I've gotten used to parsing through accents that are traditionally thought of as "unintelligible".

But those should be fine. Come to think of it, I've seen Fallen London use similar spellings for their characters, and nobody seems to have trouble with it.

EDIT: Also, I have noticed where your topic is, and feel it better suited to Work Reviews and Advice. So I've moved it there, if you don't mind. ^^