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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 15:48:40 GMT -5
It's true! I feel bad for filmmakers because they have the same problem, but they actually have to orchestrate all of the little details.
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Post by Liou on Mar 27, 2014 15:55:36 GMT -5
(I shall ramble some more about fight scenes. Hope you don't mind.)
(No I am not obsessed.)
Do you watch fight scenes for inspiration? Do you have some experience yourself, perhaps?
I'm not sure exactly what to watch.
Asian martial arts are gorgeous, but so fast, and very hard to explain to anyone who's not an expert.
*is obsessed with one particular scene between Jet Li and Jackie Chan*
I've actually been watching old WWF matches (from the 90s). It's slower and it gives me an idea of what's physically possible, so that I don't go into ridiculously impossible things, like some anime. Unfortunately, professional wrestling can't exactly be counted as realistic. XD
I just get obsessed with some moves sometimes. Like drop kicks. Drop kiiicks.
I haven't even attempted to use weapons yet. Just sticking with the human body, because that's what I know best.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 16:11:21 GMT -5
Haha, ramble away. xD
I don't watch a whole lot of fight scenes, but I have some experience in martial arts, and enjoy researching historical weapons, so it's kind of a mix of what I know from that and what I've seen in movies. I figure that might give my combat scenes a good balance of realism and dramatic impact. Especially if I'm writing in a fantastical context like my Neopets stuff, where I feel like there can be a little suspension of disbelief (since most of the characters aren't human and there's sometimes magic involved).
But I generally stick to what I know and try not to go into detail about what I don't. For example, I've studied a little bit of kendo, so my Grundo is a swordsman whose combat style resembles kendo.
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Post by Shinko on Mar 27, 2014 17:51:04 GMT -5
Fight scenes in writing in general are hard to pull off, because if you aren't careful it ends up reading like "So and so struck. So and so dodged. So and so parried. So and so caught the sword on his shield." And reader's eyes just sort of skim over it. Fight scenes work best in visual mediums like comics and movies.
Don't get me wrong, they're not IMPOSSIBLE to do in writing. Just tricky.
Also, I'm a bit busy just now but in forty-five minutes or so I'll be free if anyone wants to war then.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 18:04:11 GMT -5
I find that varying sentence structure helps, so you're not just listing events. If you're deep enough into a character's POV, utilizing stream-of-consciousness is a good trick, too.
I might be game. Depends on whether or not I go to run an errand, but I'll see what I can do.
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Post by Kiddo on Mar 27, 2014 18:05:35 GMT -5
Fight scenes in writing in general are hard to pull off, because if you aren't careful it ends up reading like "So and so struck. So and so dodged. So and so parried. So and so caught the sword on his shield." And reader's eyes just sort of skim over it. Fight scenes work best in visual mediums like comics and movies. Don't get me wrong, they're not IMPOSSIBLE to do in writing. Just tricky. Also, I'm a bit busy just now but in forty-five minutes or so I'll be free if anyone wants to war then. So I have been told I write good fight scenes. Would a write-up of how I do it be of interest to anyone? |
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 18:08:49 GMT -5
So I have been told I write good fight scenes. Would a write-up of how I do it be of interest to anyone? I would appreciate the pointers, yes. |
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Post by Shinko on Mar 27, 2014 18:14:50 GMT -5
Kiddo I'm never averse to getting advice~ @surfersquid Alrighty, hope you can make it.
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Post by Kiddo on Mar 27, 2014 18:19:53 GMT -5
I will see what I can do after homework. Homework first.
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Post by Shinko on Mar 27, 2014 18:41:08 GMT -5
I'm good to word war now, if anyone is free~
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 18:45:25 GMT -5
Awesome! Want to go from :50 until :05?
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Post by Shinko on Mar 27, 2014 18:46:51 GMT -5
^^ Sure thing! Good luck to you! 378 words. Not bad, not good. XD But words are words.
There was a faint knock on the door, calling Ayame’s attention from the documents she’d been hunched over. The Halloween kougra rubbed her eyes and blew a lock of dark brown hair away from her face.
“Come in,” she said. The door opened, and a familiar blue furred face poked through the portal.
“Hullo Miss Ayame,” Gary said with a polite nod. “Master Valrigard sent me to report to you on the results of this afternoon’s outing.”
The kougra swallowed a sigh. As the stewardess of the Brightvale holding of Abyssal Acres, she was the overseer of everything that went on in the fief. Which, of course, meant hearing reports, and lots of them. The reports were seldom good, but at least Duke Valrigard’s squire was a good friend and pleasant company. She just wished he had more time for casual visits.
Ayame looked over the bori critically. Though he often hid his thoughts behind a polite mask, she’d known him long enough to be able to pick up on little cues others might miss. The slight downwards droop of both ears, the way his tail hung limp, a faint tremor in the hand he was clutching the door with- he was ready to drop.
“Sit,” she ordered sternly, pointing to a cozy chair opposite her desk. “Honestly, this could have waited until you were all properly settled and rested.”
“But what if it was bad news?” he asked, smiling as he obeyed. “You’d want to know right away. Seems the word should get to you as soon as it can, either way.”
She shook her head. “A servant can carry a message. But come on then, you trudged up all those stairs to report to me in person so you might as well now that you’re here. Out with it! What happened?”
“We cleaned out that nest,” he replied. “Caught nine, in all. Six of ours were hurt, three hurt bad enough that they’ll be out of action for a while. The prisoners are being taken to the dungeons to wait for the magistrate.”
Ayame rubbed her temples wearily. Three warriors out of action. Though that should not have seemed so high a number, as tiny as her fief's fighting force was it constituted a harsh blow.
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 19:05:33 GMT -5
353! I like these odds. “Are you still doing your chore?” the Zafara continued, bounding into the armoury. “I already finished mine. Did you know that counting Bluchard Roots works the same way as counting potatoes? Ooh! Can I help—“
“Absolutely not,” Hyren replied, thrusting out a hand to stop her. “You are not allowed to touch anything in here. Go get your slingshot and go check on Gwyneth. I’ll be there in a minute.” He reached into the medicine pouch and broke off a small chunk of the compacted cake of herbs. “And give her this to eat. Hopefully it won’t taste too… what are you doing?”
Blynn stood next to the table, paws hovering over her slingshot, tongue sticking out in concentration. “You said not to touch anything in here… but you also told me to get my slingshot… conflicting commands… does not compute!” she grunted.
Hyren slumped. “You can touch your slingshot.”
“Thank you!” The Zafara snagged her weapon and strapped it around her waist. “I’ll meet you on deck, swabbie!”
“Wha—I am not a swabbie!” Hyren insisted as she left.
Kentari laughed. “Well, she’s a charmer.”
“Isn’t she,” Hyren seethed through clenched teeth.
While Hyren finished the rest of the weapons, Kentari read him the weapons master’s latest poetry, pieces about peach blossoms, the Green River in winter, and the way the sea looks after a storm. Hyren, in turn, regaled him with tales of meteor showers, giant gas planets and their endless clouds, and rusty desert worlds whose iron-rich sand had oxidized and turned the entire planet a cinnabar hue.
When he finally emerged above deck, Blynn was there waiting for him with Gwyneth. The Ganuthor had her fair share of bandages, and one of her wings had been carefully wrapped and secured to her side.
Hyren’s countenance fell seeing her like this. He didn’t know how Pharazon would ever forgive him. If they ever saw Pharazon again. “Gwyneth, I am so sorry,” he sighed, striding toward her. “I was an idiot, and—“
The Ganuthor stretched out her pink tongue and gave him a big, slobbery lick on the face. |
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Post by Shinko on Mar 27, 2014 19:09:03 GMT -5
= D You're getting faster!
Ahaha, nothing makes for a better moodkill then a big slobbery puppydog kiss. XD
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Post by Deleted on Mar 27, 2014 19:15:14 GMT -5
Writing Hyren and Blynn goes quite quickly, I find. They're a fun duo. And Gwyneth is quite forgiving. And affectionate.  She's actually pretty immense for a Petpet, large enough to carry the entire family on her back. (Admittedly that family consists of a human and three smallish Neopets, but still.) This AG entry perfectly captures how I imagine her, all massive and furry and like a winged Great Dane. Ooh, Ayame sounds cool! Poor stressed-out gal. xD I'd love to go again, but I'm actually exhausted, and probably leaving for errands soon. I may be on later. |
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She's actually pretty immense for a Petpet, large enough to carry the entire family on her back. (Admittedly that family consists of a human and three smallish Neopets, but still.)