Your First Sentence

[Sock]

"It was Jason Almond's fifteenth birthday, and already it wasn't going quite as he expected it to."

[Jayeee]

"The deep sunlight blasted down upon the glimmering Kingdom; the cloudless sky surrounding it was full of a faint hum that permeated the air as far as anyone could hear."

I have a terrible habit of always starting with the weather. XD

[Strife]

"Violet's eyes narrowed with determination, glistening from the bright lights at the end of the tunnel."

I decided not to do any fancy worldbuilding yet and just get straight to the point. xD;

[♥ Lulu]

"It was almost two pm when he arrived; the heavy thud of his wife's old hover car, a 3045 Renard, landing on the pad just outside the block of flats alerted her to this."

It's a long, tedious, awkward sentence. It'll get cut down in editing. I just like my long sentences when I'm banging out words.

[Jove]

"Adrian Zrebny was fifteen years old and he had never kissed a girl in his life. He was also about to die."

Boy oh boy.

[Omni]

"You know something?" Aizen said. "We've been roommates for... maybe a month, and I don't think you've really got mad at me once."


Not doing stuff in any particular order at the mo', but that's what I first wrote.

[PFA]

The day had finally arrived.


I seem to have this tendency to start off with random, vaguely dramatic sentences. XD Of course, I think my first year it was something about fire, so.

[Stephanie (swordlilly)]

"Where would I place the beginning?"

Could strike the reader as either boring or intriguing. But... that's what it is.

[Deleted]

"When I was younger, I used to think the traintracks went on forever."


Subject to change. It's the first sentence I wrote, but my beginning isn't so much a beginning as it is rambling conversations. x)

[Terra]

"Pickles."

...Can you tell that I started this completely on a whim? XD

[Cow-winkle]

"I'm having trouble focusing on anything," thought the leaf, as it was in the process of being eaten by a worm.

...

[Speck]

Techincally, this is the first sentence of my script. It's not particularly flowery at all, since I'll be drawing this later:
"We start with an aerial shot of Henry’s neighborhood, and zoom in on Henry’s backyard."

This is the first bit of dialog:
"PETE: You threw it, you get it."


Eh... meh... eh.

[Poldon]

Nov 1, 2010 23:22:41 GMT -5 Cow-winkle said:

"I'm having trouble focusing on anything," thought the leaf, as it was in the process of being eaten by a worm.

That made me burst out laughing and yet strangely curious about the world the leaf is in, rather than the leaf itself. I'm going to keep that kind of approach in mind from now on, I think. Even if it isn't what you intended I like it.

[Ebil]

There is an artistry to making a good sandwich not unlike the artistry of assembling a perfect democratic government.

Er, it was funny at the time...

[Deleted]

“As it is, I feel most competent decapitating the little gelatinous prats.”

It was probably a bad idea to start off with a Seinfeldian Conversation. =S