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Post by Deleted on Oct 29, 2010 18:57:56 GMT -5
I've been lurking your thread for quite some time now, so I figured I should finally get around to posting something... xD;
Your characters are so great! =D I love... well, all of them, really. They look like they're quite fun to write. And their names! @___@; They have the best names.
Also - stalking up on Dr. Pepper seems like an excellent thing to do pre-Nano. I think I might just steal that idea.
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Post by Rikku on Oct 29, 2010 20:11:02 GMT -5
I've been lurking your thread for quite some time now, so I figured I should finally get around to posting something... xD; Your characters are so great! =D I love... well, all of them, really. They look like they're quite fun to write. And their names! @___@; They have the best names. Also - stalking up on Dr. Pepper seems like an excellent thing to do pre-Nano. I think I might just steal that idea. xD It is appreciated! ... I hope they'll be fun to write. >.>; As of this point, I have no idea. We'll fine out on Monday? But the names, yes! =D I am happy with the names. See, see, delicious bizarre ridiculously-sweet energybeverages are better than coffee or tea, because coffee or tea take at least a few minutes to prepare. *nods seriously* A few minutes that could be spent writing! |
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Post by Rikku on Oct 31, 2010 14:21:53 GMT -5
=D! Yay! NaNo is awesome! I have written like two thousand words already and I'm not even late for school (yet, ha, I probably will be. xD Oop!) and things are sort of different than I was expecting. I was half-planning to open on this graveyard where Riff works, but then I was all, 'No! I should start off showing Bless's ambience, they should be on a beach,' so I started on a beach and yes. Listening to 'Summersong' repeatedly helped with the whole beach thing, I think. xD ... Want a dialogue-snippet? =D You can have a dialogue-snippet! It is a nice dialogue-snippet. I enjoyed it. The incubus shrugged. It was astonishing how calm he was when he was pinned to the sand, but then, this sort of thing happened to him a lot. Just generally in a different sort of way. “I was hungry.”
“He was hungry,” Riff said to the world in general, as though expecting it to share his outrage. He glared at the incubus some more. “I bought you,” he said, “a sundae.”
“My sundae,” said the incubus, irritably, “melted.”
The girl was looking thoroughly confused, by this point. “Do you know each other?”
They both looked at her. The incubus said, “Never seen him before in my life,” smoothly, at the same time as Riff said, “Unfortunately.”
They glared at each other some more.
“Oh. Um,” said the girl, and blinked. “I was going to say something like ‘how can I ever repay you’, but—”
Riff wasn’t paying attention. “Your ice-cream melted and … what, that’s enough reason to eat people now?”
The incubus scowled at him. “I was hungry,” he said. “Half-starved. Mortal food can feed me, but only barely, and it’s not the same as the real thing. Anyway, she would have enjoyed it, would she not?”
“—you seem kind of busy, so I think I’ll just—”
“You do this whenever we go out in public,” said Riff. “Really, Xochie, I’m embarrassed to be seen with you sometimes.”
Xochie chuckled. “Oh, don’t go trying to play that angle. You earn far too much embarrassment doing the ridiculous things you do to complain of the insignificant amount I bring you.”
“Besides!” said Riff, annoyed. “The! Point!”
“—leave without pledging you my undying love, which I would’ve otherwise,” the pretty girl finished, and then, still meeting no response, rolled her eyes and wandered away.
“And anyway,” Xochie added, “I bring a glamour and charm into your everyday life.”
“You do not.”
“And you’re secretly in love with me really.”
“I am not!”
“Care to explain why you haven’t moved, then?”
“You might, uh,” said Riff, losing his momentum somewhat, “attack that girl and … she’s already left, hasn’t she.”
“A while ago. Yes.”
“Did I miss anything important?” said Riff, sadly.
Xochie considered. “Nothing of interest,” he said cheerfully.
Riff glared at him. “You know how much trouble I have finding girls, Xochie.”
“Odd. There’s such a lot of them out here.”
Riff glared at him.
“Perhaps,” suggested Xochie, “if you didn’t spend so much of your time tackling me …?”
“Oh, hush,” said Riff, continuing to glare at him. “You would’ve eaten her.”
Xochie considered this. “Only a bit.” |
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Post by Shadaras on Oct 31, 2010 14:34:23 GMT -5
=D
... =D
xD
<3
...yes. xD Um. Can I 'ship the two of them? Please? =D
... *is still laughing gleefully*
And now NaNo has officially begun, for you are posting bits and pieces of glee-inducing writing and yay. ^_^ Even though I can't start writing yet. xD
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Post by Zylaa on Oct 31, 2010 16:45:17 GMT -5
... <3
<333
This is so FUN. =D
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Post by Schoolrikku on Oct 31, 2010 20:34:49 GMT -5
*really ought to be schooldoing* ... See, my cunning plan is to spend this period doing the revision that I'd otherwise do at home. This means I'll have ohmigosh more writing time! This may not be the wisest of ideas, though, as my plot is a bit of an incoherent jumble even to me at present. xD What I am going to do is think of stuff that I want to happen to the characters, and then see if that stuff fits together at all, and then write it. Probably the writing bit will happen before the seeing-if-things-fit-together bit, which is probably bad but I don't care 'cos NaNo! =D ... =D xD <3 ...yes. xD Um. Can I 'ship the two of them? Please? =D ... *is still laughing gleefully* And now NaNo has officially begun, for you are posting bits and pieces of glee-inducing writing and yay. ^_^ Even though I can't start writing yet. xD ... xD If I didn't intend these two to be a 'ship, would I really have their first scene involve tackling and somewhat-flirtish banter and such? Actually, yeah, probably I would. Oops. But anyway, any Riffxo (... bwahaha that is a terrible name) 'shipping is most welcome and will be delighted at. ^_^ Seein' as I'll probably forget that plot I'm trying to have and just be like 'ooh! Arguing! Ooh, tender scenes! Ooh wings pretty yay!' ... *is really entirely too delighted by your enthusiasm but doesn't mind 'cos that makes mind go all ooh-NaNo-yay!* ... <3 <333 This is so FUN. =D =D *further delight!* I really am delighted that these two are fun. It is good that they are fun. It means Good Things. *bounces around happily* ... *does revision* |
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Post by Shadaras on Oct 31, 2010 20:42:49 GMT -5
xD I'd call them Riffchie maybe? Or Xoriff, which is much funnier and sounds like an alien's name or something and yes.
And your distracted-plot-forgetting would be fun to read so that wouldn't be a bad idea of what to do, really. ^_^
And your enthusiasm is making me be even more gleeful than before and I want it to be NaNotime here sooner than it will be.
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Post by Tam on Oct 31, 2010 21:23:45 GMT -5
My vote is for Xoriff, and I will enthusiastically endorse this pairing. ^___^ <3
I love reading your snippets. Banter. =D ...This actually inspires me quite a lot for the banter that I'm planning to put in my own story, which is probably bad because I already stole Tanglewood from you and I should probably be careful not to be any more of a thief.
But, um. Yay for more-than-1667-word days already! =D Go Rikku! Be awesome!
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Post by Rikku on Nov 1, 2010 0:14:32 GMT -5
xD I'd call them Riffchie maybe? Or Xoriff, which is much funnier and sounds like an alien's name or something and yes. And your distracted-plot-forgetting would be fun to read so that wouldn't be a bad idea of what to do, really. ^_^ And your enthusiasm is making me be even more gleeful than before and I want it to be NaNotime here sooner than it will be. xD But that looks like the -chie should be pronounced - chee. So yeah, I'll go with the hilarious one. To me it sounds like some kind of odd hairstyle. I shall take encouragement from that when I am floundering in the mess of how-on-earth-does-this-causality-work. xD =D Yay! My vote is for Xoriff, and I will enthusiastically endorse this pairing. ^___^ <3 I love reading your snippets. Banter. =D ...This actually inspires me quite a lot for the banter that I'm planning to put in my own story, which is probably bad because I already stole Tanglewood from you and I should probably be careful not to be any more of a thief. But, um. Yay for more-than-1667-word days already! =D Go Rikku! Be awesome! =D Yay for banter-being-good! And I am far too happy (and egotistical) at being mildly inspirational to be irked by that, and wouldn't be anyway. (Particularly seeing reading your thread makes me go '=D Ohmigosh NaNo yes! Wouldn't it be cool if I did a cool thing with my characters like these cool things that these characters will be doing.') And. And your story's about a thief. It's research! =D I will be! And at this point I realise, with horror, that I seem to sort-of-vaguely intend to try and go into competition against Shade re: wordcount, which is at once both mildly suicidal and awesome. But yeah, if I manage to keep up this momentum after the first few days I will be very much surprised. xD |
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Post by Rikku on Nov 1, 2010 2:37:10 GMT -5
Because I am completely enamoured with this story, and rather startled by that. xD I was expecting to tolerate it at best. And I don't want to gloat over my wordcount or anything. (... Nearlyfivethousand! =D Heheheheheh.) So I am going to talk about the music I am listening to.
The theme for Bless is 'Lucky', by Kat Edmonson. *pokes signature* When I was staying at Mt. Maunginui, where I stole my ambience from, this was what was mostly running in my head. I'd sprawl in the sunlight and play bits of it over and over and smile. It fits Bless, because it's dreamy and sweet and pretty. And for the line there's a place in time and space where we can all be free. xD That's how I thought of Bless, I think. I mean, I hope that's how I thought of it. A sentient country isn't something that'd just occur to you out of the blue.
And Xochie's theme is 'Viva la Vida' sometimes, because I was listening to it vaguely while somewhat-planning one day and it was like 'oh, okay, there's that bit of his character that was missing'. Doesn't fit him, but it's an awesome song, grand and sad.
And I declare that Xochie and Riff's theme together is Something In The Water, by Brooke Fraser. Again, it doesn't fit them - heck, it'd probably fit Hush and Olly just as ... okay, Something In The Water is my 'shipping-song for this book. =D Yes. Because I totally needed one of those.
See, I was vaguely angsty one day, and we went for ice cream, and then this song started playing on the radio there ... I don't think I can describe this properly, not really. Imagine being sad, restless and irritable for no real reason; and then imagine kinfolk around you, and sunlight hugging you, and really nice ice cream, and this song playing, and suddenly you want to dance or bask or just lean there and grin and savour it. And I more or less forgot about this song's existence until about five minutes ago, so I'm gleeing over it a little. xD
And yeah. =D That is the music that fits this book, currently.
I've got halos made of summer, rhythms made of spring -
What she wears, what she wears, what she wears!
I got crowns of words a woven each one a song to sing
Oh I sing, oh I sing, oh I sing ...
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Post by ♥ Lulu on Nov 1, 2010 12:38:36 GMT -5
Your excerpt XDD It is awesome. I'm shipping them very hard already - and I warn you, I am a bit of a rabid shipper >_> I love that you have a shipping song for them already too XDD
I cannot wait for more of this, and why I haven't commented in here before when I've been lurking, I do not know D: Forgive me. But I am glad you are enjoying writing it, and congrats on five thousand ^_^
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Post by Rikku on Nov 2, 2010 3:05:00 GMT -5
Thank you! ^_^ Have an excerpt! =D It's not a happyfun excerpt, though. This is part of Olly's arc, which is kind of utterly different in tone. (I figured out that Voltaire's 'To The Bottom of the Sea' was the awesomebest song to listen to when writing this particular scene, but by the time I figured that out I was pretty near finished with it. Ah well.) They're so different, actually, that readjusting to write Xoriff for the last handful of words I needed to catch up to Shade ( ha! =D Though I know you will get ahead of me again fairly quick. But that's the fun) was really quite tricky. Olly is a jerk. xD But we know this already, so have an example of him being all badass and awesome. (... In warning? Much darker than the other bit. xD I made sure not to choose the worst of it, but it's still pretty gory, I think? So, y'know. Careful.) Olly was being attacked by three golems at once, two massive and hulking and near-identical in appearance, one lean and quick as a whippet. He ducked beneath a blow from one of the huge ones, but that gave the quick one a chance to get close to him, close enough to … oh, Bless. It was trying to get its face close enough so it could cut at Olly’s face with the deadly-sharp flakes that were its eyes. Olly danced nimbly away, but then had to dodge again as the other huge one swung at him, which meant that the lean one got within an inch of his face –
At which point Olly gave his charming, impish smile, opened his mouth, and let out a blast of fire.
It was red and roaring and burning-bright, and Hush could feel the heat of it even from when he stood, at least ten metres away. The golem let out a thin, shrill scream, stumbling away. Its face was on fire, the whole upper half of its body was on fire, its eyes were pools of darkness in the midst of the mad inferno.
Olly flung back his head and laughed at the sky, then drew his rapier and dived at one of the larger golems, stabbing it through the heart. He whirled in a flair of coat, running at the other large golem – it was stepping backwards, trying to get away. Olly stopped running and gave another blast of fire, but the golem sidestepped –
Right into the blast. Olly wasn’t an idiot.
Well. Not at fighting.
Olly, laughing again, kicked the flaming golem in the centre of its scorched chest, sending it stumbling back and overboard. It splashed into the sea. |
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Post by Tam on Nov 2, 2010 13:42:56 GMT -5
=D ...You are good at writing action sequences. Lots of motion and cause and effect and pretty ways of describing things that don't detract from the flow of action but add a kind of sparkle to everything. And you make things just confusing enough, if that makes any sense. It's not like the reader has no idea what just happened, but they do get a sense that they're getting swept up in a flurry of movement. I like it. Even if I make no sense when I try to explain why! =D
...The sea does seem to be Olly's favourite place to dispose of unwanted persons/things, doesn't it. xD
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Post by Rikku on Nov 2, 2010 14:25:29 GMT -5
=D ...You are good at writing action sequences. Lots of motion and cause and effect and pretty ways of describing things that don't detract from the flow of action but add a kind of sparkle to everything. And you make things just confusing enough, if that makes any sense. It's not like the reader has no idea what just happened, but they do get a sense that they're getting swept up in a flurry of movement. I like it. Even if I make no sense when I try to explain why! =D ...The sea does seem to be Olly's favourite place to dispose of unwanted persons/things, doesn't it. xD =D! Really? All that is exactly what I was going for! I mean, partly I was trying to get the flurry-of-movement thing because I know I don't know terribly much of combat so giving a general idea seemed a nice easy way out, but partly because that's the right sort of thing and eee! *happyhappyhappy* ... And yes. xD Yes, it rather does. "Er, excuse me, sir, I was wondering if perhaps you wanted to buy some insura--" "Certainly! Come look at this nice view, will you?" "Well, I - aaaargh splash." ... Anyway. >.>; I think this thread could use an Awkward Moment. =D Have an Awkward Moment. “Anyway,” Riff said, watching him, “didn’t you want to go wingless when there were a lot of people around? Y’know, so they won’t make judgments and run you out of town or anything.”
“That only happened once. And the leader of the mob turned out to be a delightfully persuadable fellow, as it happened.”
“Still.”
“It’s the principle of the thing, mainly.” He realigned his braid, tilted his head to one side, birdlike, and looked at Riff with gleaming eyes. They were green right now – no, grey. It was always harder to tell with only candles to see by. Riff had used to make a game of trying to tell his moods by his eye colour, but the colour always changed too fast, a rainbow of colour like his wings. “How do I look?”
The sombre colours of the suit brought out the colour of his skin and matched his hair; he looked enigmatic, exotic, alluring. “You look good in anything,” said Riff, in envious disgust. “Hells, you’d probably look good even if you wore nothing at—”
He stopped and turned red, realising how that sounded. Xochie, laughing softly, shook his head in mock disapproval.
“Raphael!” he said, eyes glinting in the candlelight. “You make this far too easy.”
“I didn’t mean it that way!”
“Which,” Xochie said, “is why it’s hilarious. How’s my cravat?”
“Impeccable,” Riff informed him hastily. “The model of superb cravat-ness.”
“Naturally." |
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Post by Kathleen on Nov 2, 2010 23:11:53 GMT -5
I like your awkward moment. It amused me greatly. =D 'Specially the bit about the cravat.
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