Post by Deleted on Jun 2, 2007 18:30:06 GMT -5
A Thousand Years by Hunty and Dan
The custom looks really nice. ^_^ And the illustration was breathtaking. The fact that her face was drawn so rigidly, not possessing the usual softness and suppleness that Fyora is often pictured with, really accentuated her distress, and that added to the tone considerably.
That "raise" should be "rise," actually.
This was a really well-written story and it flowed very nicely, the fact that this had been written by two people definitely not noticeable one bit. I enjoyed reading it, though only mildly. I've never been fond of Maraqua much, ergo I know little of it (I didn't even know Kelpbeard was a Koi until I put the two together in this), and I know only as much of the Darkest Faerie as is given in the Altador plot.
The use of flashbacks was nicely done, and Fyora's recovery and needing to focus herself more on her tasks at hand was nicely executed. Instead of simply having the flashbacks cut into the narrative, you wove them throughout it, and that added much quality to this piece.
The ending was also nicely done, skillfully written to have a heavy weight, one able to seed shudders and goosebumps. It served as a good ending, indeed.
In all, though I may not have enjoyed this greatly, I do believe this was a great story.
Of Faerieland and Flying by Playmobil
That was a really sweet story. It began rather upbeat, so when Mr. Cullen began recounting his story more heavily, his monotone attitude made it almost tiresome to read. I still read on, though, it just felt rather...monotone. Yet, despite that monotony, the story was full of vividness and that made it much easier to read.
I almost regretted when the ending came so soon. The story really picked up when the white Xweetok was found. Then, the story had a visible conflict, and it felt more powerful and enthralling because of that. The swiftness with which that focal point of the story came to an end was disappointing, as that was what I truly found interesting in this story, much more interesting than the monotone carriage ride preceding it.
However, the long buildup did make the character growth apparent at the end more meaningful, so from that vantage, it was alright. If the change hadn't been so meaningful at the end, I don't think I would have enjoyed this story as much as I did. Good job.
The custom looks really nice. ^_^ And the illustration was breathtaking. The fact that her face was drawn so rigidly, not possessing the usual softness and suppleness that Fyora is often pictured with, really accentuated her distress, and that added to the tone considerably.
"Maybe," said Fyora, feeling a sudden burst of anger raise inside her.
That "raise" should be "rise," actually.
This was a really well-written story and it flowed very nicely, the fact that this had been written by two people definitely not noticeable one bit. I enjoyed reading it, though only mildly. I've never been fond of Maraqua much, ergo I know little of it (I didn't even know Kelpbeard was a Koi until I put the two together in this), and I know only as much of the Darkest Faerie as is given in the Altador plot.
The use of flashbacks was nicely done, and Fyora's recovery and needing to focus herself more on her tasks at hand was nicely executed. Instead of simply having the flashbacks cut into the narrative, you wove them throughout it, and that added much quality to this piece.
The ending was also nicely done, skillfully written to have a heavy weight, one able to seed shudders and goosebumps. It served as a good ending, indeed.
In all, though I may not have enjoyed this greatly, I do believe this was a great story.
Of Faerieland and Flying by Playmobil
That was a really sweet story. It began rather upbeat, so when Mr. Cullen began recounting his story more heavily, his monotone attitude made it almost tiresome to read. I still read on, though, it just felt rather...monotone. Yet, despite that monotony, the story was full of vividness and that made it much easier to read.
I almost regretted when the ending came so soon. The story really picked up when the white Xweetok was found. Then, the story had a visible conflict, and it felt more powerful and enthralling because of that. The swiftness with which that focal point of the story came to an end was disappointing, as that was what I truly found interesting in this story, much more interesting than the monotone carriage ride preceding it.
However, the long buildup did make the character growth apparent at the end more meaningful, so from that vantage, it was alright. If the change hadn't been so meaningful at the end, I don't think I would have enjoyed this story as much as I did. Good job.
And since when did fridges exist in Neopia? Anyways, that was quite funny. Fyora almost looked like Avril Lavigne at the end, which made it even funnier for me.
I'm glad you found it funny! =D Thanks for the review!
