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Post by Kat on Apr 26, 2007 21:58:39 GMT -5
C.H.A.O.S. by Kat and M3rcuri:The art is really, really nice. But the joke went completely over my head. [shadow=purple,left,300]Thanks for the review, Wolf! I guess you probably figured out by now that the Anubis didn't fetch the stick, but an Abominable Snowman's arm? ^^; [/shadow] C.H.A.O.S. is by Kat and M3rcuri:The art is lovely! It looks almost just like actual Neopets art! The script too had me grinning a little maniacally. Great work. [shadow=purple,left,300]Thanks for the review! ^_^ I wish I knew how to draw like that, too. XD[/shadow] C.H.A.O.S. is by Kat and M3rcuri:That lazy anubis! XD But very cute as well... [shadow=purple,left,300]XD Thanks for the review![/shadow] |
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Post by sarahleeadvent on Apr 26, 2007 22:03:45 GMT -5
Outsider Within: Web of Deceit: Part Two
Good job on this part- I like how D.A. quietly and cooly dealt with the reporter, and it'll be interesting to see how this latest development pans out. I'd especially like to see some D.A./Darigan interactions, to get a feel for why he places so much confidence in her, and gives her such a long (or nonexistant) leash. If it happens in front of Henka... *dreamy look*
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Post by Tashni on Apr 26, 2007 22:20:58 GMT -5
Outsider Within: Web of Deceit: Part Two Good job on this part- I like how D.A. quietly and cooly dealt with the reporter, and it'll be interesting to see how this latest development pans out. I'd especially like to see some D.A./Darigan interactions, to get a feel for why he places so much confidence in her, and gives her such a long (or nonexistant) leash. If it happens in front of Henka... *dreamy look* Haha, well, I'd rather not tell you much about the next parts, but I don't think you will be disappointed. ^_^ |
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Post by saffy on Apr 27, 2007 17:21:56 GMT -5
I don't like all these articles on avatars, it seems like there is one with that same picture every week.
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Post by Deleted on Apr 27, 2007 19:19:23 GMT -5
C.H.A.O.S. by Kat and M3rcuri:The art is really, really nice. But the joke went completely over my head. [shadow=purple,left,300]Thanks for the review, Wolf! I guess you probably figured out by now that the Anubis didn't fetch the stick, but an Abominable Snowman's arm? ^^; [/shadow] Well, then, now I'm cracking up! Seriously, I didn't get that. Pity me. -_- |
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Post by Nut on Apr 29, 2007 2:59:13 GMT -5
[glow=blue,2,300]Easy as “Pyramid Pot”[/glow]
Aww, Luau, that was a really sweet story. ^^ The title intrigued me, and the opening paragraph with Dee talking to the clay got me interested right away. It was a really cute image, her sitting there begging the clay for cooperation. I’m not usually a fan of notes at the beginning of a story, but it was nice to see those pottery terms defined, even though I already had a basic idea of what they were from reading about pottery and whatnot.
It surprised me when Lady Osiri called her name right at the beginning, and I wasn’t sure who was speaking, but I actually liked the effect—it gave me the feeling of being lost in concentration on the clay like Dee was. I loved the description of Lady Osiri at the potter’s wheel; I almost felt like I was watching in amazement as she worked. That was one thing I liked throughout the story; I could relate to Dee and felt I was there with her for the whole time.
Returning to something that she knew she could do well was a sweet solution. I liked how Dee got upset when Osiri reminded her that she’d asked for a Pyramid Pot, and the ending was really cute.
Like Wolf, I was wondering about the “Osiris” vs. “Osiri’s” issue. And this could just be me, but I wasn’t really sure why the title had “Pyramid Pot” in quotations; it seemed a little odd. It was still a fun title, though, and on a whole, this was a heartwarming, enjoyable story. ^_^
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Post by Nimras on May 4, 2007 12:34:20 GMT -5
Okay, now that I’m not completely bogged down by midterms, I can catch up on reviews! Princess of the Peaksby squire_genevieve … I want to read that one.  I found it interesting that you didn’t give her a name. It’s like some deep dark secret or something… though it makes me wonder if the Emperor only has one daughter, because a three girls all called “princess” would be a pain in the neck.   You’d think they’d need more, because they’ve got lots of stuff to steal… Hehehe, the ending, with the author stuck on the top of the mountain, makes me giggle. Easy as "Pyramid Pot"by literalluau I feel special, I knew all the vocab terms already! Wow, working a pottery wheel is hard, I love stories where people are doing actual necessary jobs that aren’t “glamorous” or “famous”… (Err, you know, like mine with knights. ) *dies of laughter* Oh, the mental image. *cackles* I’ve known a couple people who made the mistake Dee made… trying so hard they were keeping themselves from being able to do what they were trying to do. Wingoballby scarvogue *snicker* I knew I couldn’t be the only one intentionally hitting some of those gnomes. Oddly, I think my favorite part of this comic is the X’d eyes of the pink gnome. It makes me wonder just how hard you hit him… Dr. Wockovsky and the Cure for Chickarooby manda314 Ba’cock! …sorry… Completely off topic, but for one of my biology classes, we imprinted chicks, and one of my classmates taught her chick to eat chicken nuggets. Its name was “Killer.” (Mine was named the highly imaginative name of “Chick-chick”) Eww… He had the Herbal eggs in his back pocket? *gags* I’m with the Chia for once on this one.. Love the “I’m heroic!” pose with the pink background. *snicker* The Gallion Ranchby pacmanite *snorts tea out nose* Just… his little greenish face… It’s too adorable! Those pets are obviously abusing him, and he needs to come live with me… *steals petpet* C.H.A.O.S.by m3rcuri *snicker* The skidding stop is brilliant. About the only thing I would have added, is (that since the sticks look similar) having the snowman in the background missing an arm, and maybe an exclamation mark or something over his head. The way it’s now is very cute, but it took me a minute to catch… …he does just look so *proud* of himself for finding the stick… Random Somethingby silvermare200 The Revenge of the Pets. …sounds like a B rated horror movie. I’d like to think my pets don’t want to do that to me. Oddly, my favorite part is the very last line. “Just keep thrashing…” COMIKAZEby bird_brain312 Victory dance? Oh… I can so see someone doing that. Love the expressions in this one, especially during the victory dance. The Bunker
by hubadawaha “If you pack it right, it all fits”… is that guy by any chance related to my father in law? You wouldn’t believe what he can fit into the back of that bronco of his… I think I actually would have liked this comic better had it ended at “If you pack it…” punchline. The whole Termy thing seemed… out of nowhere and off to the side, if that makes any sense. Same with the bit of exposition with the random tied up Grarrl at the end. I love, love the “How many miles did you walk on stubby legs” bit. The idea of a Chia named Goliath tickles me. Meow?by edddibgaz Hey, it’s the guys from the background of the new plot! *smack’d* Mess not with the very big, buff Hissi. The expression on the Eyrie is adorableness… |
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Post by Nimras on May 4, 2007 14:09:24 GMT -5
Running Faster than Destiny: Part Oneby tj_wagner …Because we all know Destiny’s slow anyways… *snickers* I confess, if I wasn’t reviewing this as an NTWF piece, I probably wouldn’t have made it very far. I couldn’t get any emotional attachment to Gar and his granddaughter, they seemed a little… flat, and I’m not sure why. Especially since Twitch jumped out at me right away. He may be in the past, but he seems 100 times more “alive” than the first two. Though I can’t be the only one getting the feeling that “Twitch” is merely a younger, unpainted Gar.. Dark Friend: Part Oneby petfriendamy Hmm, getting wings all of the sudden would make it harder for clothes to fit. I can tell you’ve got a very clear image as to what all your characters look like, but describing all their clothes in minute detail kind of made the story drag in places. Maybe instead of all that, simply put, “Wanda was startled by the Air Faerie, who instead of wearing the elegant dress the Faerie Wocky expected, wore practical, worn clothes and a sword.” I mean, unless the fact that her shorts have Velcro on the bottom is important to the plot… Dina is so cute, she steals the show whenever she’s in a scene. *coos* Catching Up: Part Elevenby extreme_fj0rd *snicker* “Darn it, if our teacher isn’t going to show up to class, our class is going to show up at the teacher!” Darn it, I was rather hoping for a dramatic scene of them storming some trial. Revenge and Resistance: Part Threeby dan4884 At first, I was afraid the whole chapter was in italics by mistake. Yey Gormos! I like him. ^^ I do, however, gloat. Having never once mocked, nor even mentioned Sloth in one of my stories, I am uncaptured, and can feely frolic about Neopia and in the NT without competition from the rest of you. Outsider Within: Web of Deceit - Part Twoby tashni Mmmm, chamomile. I must go brew some after I review this… That sounds really good. Sally! Drat. Hope spring eternal. Poor Henka, he’s trying so hard.
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Post by PFA on May 4, 2007 14:16:53 GMT -5
Dark Friend: Part Oneby petfriendamy Hmm, getting wings all of the sudden would make it harder for clothes to fit. I can tell you’ve got a very clear image as to what all your characters look like, but describing all their clothes in minute detail kind of made the story drag in places. Maybe instead of all that, simply put, “Wanda was startled by the Air Faerie, who instead of wearing the elegant dress the Faerie Wocky expected, wore practical, worn clothes and a sword.” I mean, unless the fact that her shorts have Velcro on the bottom is important to the plot… Dina is so cute, she steals the show whenever she’s in a scene. *coos* Thanks for the review!  Yeah, I kind of went overboard with my descriptions there. >_>;; I'll try not to do that so much next time. Yay for Dina!  |
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Post by Nut on May 4, 2007 16:08:23 GMT -5
Comics[glow=blue,2,300] Wingoball[/glow] Haha, that’s a really cute comic. XD The idea of someone actually trying to throw the ball at the gnomes is a fun one. I can see a frustrated player trying that… XD I like the gnomes’ faces; they’re really cute. ^^ The Mynci looks really cute, too. His expression is great. I just wish you’d changed his expression and pose in the last panel, since you’re obviously a good enough artist to do so. ^^ It really adds a lot to a comic to have the characters’ faces reflect their reactions to the events. The ball hitting the gnome in the second panel doesn’t quite have the effect of a strong impact; it’s more like it’s drifting down on the gnome’s hat. Maybe experiment with the motion lines a bit—I find that having them straight and connected to the ball can make it look like it’s moving faster. But this is me being nitpicky, because you can understand what’s happening just fine. On a whole, the joke and the art are really cute. ^^ [glow=blue,2,300] Dr. Wockovsky and the Cure for Chickaroo [/glow] Heehee, that was quite a cute comic. x3 I thought it was funny. It did take me a moment to remember that the cure for Chickaroo is scrambled eggs, but when I did I found the Chia’s cannibalism comment entertaining. …You know, I think this is one of the first times I’ve ever seen a big Chia. 0_0 It’s scary how he’s actually bigger than the doctor. In the last panel especially, I get the idea he could take out that quack if he got ticked off enough… I love the panel with the pink background… perfect dramatic effect for that character. I wouldn’t have minded seeing some of the Chia’s symptoms so that we could see why the doctor diagnosed him with Chickaroo (or why his diagnosis is so incompetent). But I enjoyed the comic overall. ^^ [glow=blue,2,300] The Gallion Ranch [/glow] *cringe* The poor guy… I feel sorry for the little… um… I-know-I’ve-seen-this-Petpet-before-*looks-up-the-name*-UKALI! *cough* Anyway, this is an awesome one-panel comic. Perfect layout… the reader sees the word balloon, then the poor little green-faced Ukali over the bucket, and then glances around at the Turmac Roll landscape and understands what the Krawk’s talking about. I love the angle you’re looking at the Turmac Roll hills. It’s fun to see them looking three-dimensional and not flat like they are in the game. The background really adds a lot to the comic, making the joke clear in case there was any doubt. I can’t help thinking that the poor Ukali is going to get knocked off the hill by the next Turmac to come along, though… >> The joke is really clever and amusing, and executed perfectly. ^_^ Great work! [glow=blue,2,300] C.H.A.O.S.[/glow] To be honest, I didn’t get the joke when I first read this. But I did get that the art was really nice; I especially like the Ruki’s pose in the last panel. ^^ It looks almost like TNT’s art, actually. Very lovely. Now, the joke. I really had no clue what had happened at first, but after I read Kat’s explanation, it was suddenly really funny. It was an excellent joke, and I love how it was executed with almost no dialogue, but it needed an extra push to make it understandable. Like Nimras suggested, it would’ve worked to have the Abominable Snowball in the background of the last panel, minus an arm. Love the Anubis’s poses and actions… It’s so perfect how he skids to a stop in the second panel, and looks so proud in the last one. And the running start in the first one is just so right… all his poses feel so natural. ^^ Really cute comic. [glow=blue,2,300] Random Something[/glow] Yikes. The punchline is kinda scary. Especially since I do nearly all the things mentioned here… except the lab ray! I keep my pets beautiful, yay! I like the line about thrashing and giant squid; it rounds out the owner’s exclamation with a less high-key punchline. I like the girl’s expression, too. I have to say, though, I really love the Lab Ray panel. XD Just the sight of that huge ray gun pointing at the Flotsam sitting on that target… and the expression on her face… XD Love the “I like being beautiful!” line. I like the Geraptiku Tomb panel, too. The owner just looks so… unperturbed, and the pet’s stunned expression is perfect. All in all, very amusing. ^^ [glow=blue,2,300] COMIKAZE[/glow] XD I love the expressions. The second panel is great, with everyone looking so serious on the dark background… perfect setup for the Bori to launch into his victory dance. The victory dance itself is great. He just looks so happy and triumphant. Utterly perfect. And then Capara’s face as she calls him on it… I love that “Uh, okay…” look. XD The black background was a neat choice. All the somber colors and stern expressions make the Bori’s victory dance stand out all the more, and that’s the most fun part of this comic. XD Love his “uh-huh, uh-huh, uh-huh” pose, with the arms thrown back. Really lovely action. And the punchline… seems to just tie everything up. I think the gold really came in the middle of the comic, but it was still great, and the Bori’s face in he last panel is perfect. ^^ [glow=blue,2,300] The Bunker[/glow] I knew that little Chia dude was going to play a part in this comic! I so called it… Oh gosh, I love your comics. XDXD I adore the whole Goliath exchange. Phil’s such a perfect name for that guy. Love the stubby legs bit… I can see this guy is a real character. XDXD I adore the little Huggy. *is a sucker for cute characters that mindlessly scream one sound over and over* I love how Phil looks so indifferent as he stands in front of the giant pile of stuff… “If you pack it right, it all fits”… *snerk* That line is gold. I have to agree with Nimras, though. That panel felt more like a punchline than the actual one. You manage to fill your comics with a lot of jokes, and I really admire that, but it does create the danger that one of the subgags will outshine the main one. I like the little image of the Chia going into the house, and the “Next to the Turmaculus?” line is quite clever, but it seemed to drag the comic on a bit too long. As for the black abyss through which the Turmaculus seems to be falling… what happened to their house? o_0 I did like the bonus panel at the end, though. Love the Evil Genius Pose. *snerk* [glow=blue,2,300] Meow?[/glow] …That Hissi looks awesome. XD Love all the different expressions and movements in this comic. So colorful and fun. It’s really nice how you drew out the game board and showed the Eyrie rolling the dice and everything. ^^ Despite the multiple panels of art drawing out the storytelling, the joke is quite simple. It wouldn’t be nearly as amusing without all the extra background in the art, though. ^^ Stay away from the intimidating Hissi that’s easily offended… All in all, a really cute comic. ^^
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Post by troublems03 on May 4, 2007 23:01:09 GMT -5
Princess of the Peaksby squire_genevieve … I want to read that one. I found it interesting that you didn’t give her a name. It’s like some deep dark secret or something… though it makes me wonder if the Emperor only has one daughter, because a three girls all called “princess” would be a pain in the neck. You’d think they’d need more, because they’ve got lots of stuff to steal… Hehehe, the ending, with the author stuck on the top of the mountain, makes me giggle. Hehe. Thanks so much for the review Nimras. I may write about the "Amira Affair" in the future as I'm something of a conspiracy theorist. If you liked this one you should like the article I have currently held over: "Unraveling the Mysteries of the Unlabeled Tin Can", hopefully it will be in the NT in a couple of weeks. As for the Princess, I do see her as a real "Daddy's Girl". For me, she is probably the youngest child and only daughter of the Shenkuen Emperor, as such a real "Princess." Shenkuu's need for warriors is indeed because of their trade industry, I think. However, I like to entertain the notion of "if you steal from us we'll break both you legs and put you on our international thief registry". As such, crime in Shenkuu is not that prevalent. |
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Post by retired on May 5, 2007 5:24:30 GMT -5
The Bunker
by hubadawaha “If you pack it right, it all fits”… is that guy by any chance related to my father in law? You wouldn’t believe what he can fit into the back of that bronco of his… I think I actually would have liked this comic better had it ended at “If you pack it…” punchline. The whole Termy thing seemed… out of nowhere and off to the side, if that makes any sense. Same with the bit of exposition with the random tied up Grarrl at the end. I love, love the “How many miles did you walk on stubby legs” bit. The idea of a Chia named Goliath tickles me. This whole comic is out of nowhere and off to the side! XD But, honestly, I have so much planned that I have to fit in as much plot advancement as I can into each comic. The random grarrl IS Goliath (HOSTILE corporate take-over), the chia is Phil. Phil the mover guy! Don't mind the part at the bottom, that's just the bonus section. It's has no application to the actual plot, it's just a fun little extra like they have at the back of most manga books. :3 And, yes, the stubby legs is my favorite line from this one too. X3 [glow=blue,2,300] The Bunker[/glow] I knew that little Chia dude was going to play a part in this comic! I so called it… Oh gosh, I love your comics. XDXD I adore the whole Goliath exchange. Phil’s such a perfect name for that guy. Love the stubby legs bit… I can see this guy is a real character. XDXD I adore the little Huggy. *is a sucker for cute characters that mindlessly scream one sound over and over* I love how Phil looks so indifferent as he stands in front of the giant pile of stuff… “If you pack it right, it all fits”… *snerk* That line is gold. I have to agree with Nimras, though. That panel felt more like a punchline than the actual one. You manage to fill your comics with a lot of jokes, and I really admire that, but it does create the danger that one of the subgags will outshine the main one. I like the little image of the Chia going into the house, and the “Next to the Turmaculus?” line is quite clever, but it seemed to drag the comic on a bit too long. As for the black abyss through which the Turmaculus seems to be falling… what happened to their house? o_0 I did like the bonus panel at the end, though. Love the Evil Genius Pose. *snerk* You so did! XD Booyah! I heart Phil. And Burly (the Huggy, who's named after my kitty ;3) Phil's line just SOUNDED like something a mover guy would say, so I wrote it down, and when I read it back I realized it was actually kinda funny. ^_^ I'm not really sure if I have main jokes, per se. :/ I just try to fit in as much funny and plot thickening as I can. X3 As long as at least one of them makes you laugh outloud, Huba is content. The abyss is a side -effect of Aranane's magic. X/ I guess I didn't convey that well enough, sorry. My bad! ^.^' *evilgeniuspose* Yessssssssssss, feeeeeeeeeeel the eviiiiiil! P.S. Please forgive the lateness of my replies. I've had a rough couple weeks. XP Not much time to chill and surf the web. |
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Post by ohmandoh on May 7, 2007 13:23:59 GMT -5
Dr. Wockovsky and the Cure for Chickarooby manda314 Ba’cock! …sorry… Completely off topic, but for one of my biology classes, we imprinted chicks, and one of my classmates taught her chick to eat chicken nuggets. Its name was “Killer.” (Mine was named the highly imaginative name of “Chick-chick”) Eww… He had the Herbal eggs in his back pocket? *gags* I’m with the Chia for once on this one.. Love the “I’m heroic!” pose with the pink background. *snicker* Thx Comics[glow=blue,2,300] Dr. Wockovsky and the Cure for Chickaroo [/glow] Heehee, that was quite a cute comic. x3 I thought it was funny. It did take me a moment to remember that the cure for Chickaroo is scrambled eggs, but when I did I found the Chia’s cannibalism comment entertaining. …You know, I think this is one of the first times I’ve ever seen a big Chia. 0_0 It’s scary how he’s actually bigger than the doctor. In the last panel especially, I get the idea he could take out that quack if he got ticked off enough… I love the panel with the pink background… perfect dramatic effect for that character. I wouldn’t have minded seeing some of the Chia’s symptoms so that we could see why the doctor diagnosed him with Chickaroo (or why his diagnosis is so incompetent). But I enjoyed the comic overall. ^^ Never really thought of how big Chias are supposed to be. Hehe. I've always thought of the Neopian Times Chia dude as a chubby older kid. :/ When I made the comic, I was thinking he just came in for a checkup. There were no symptoms except for perhaps him being shaped like a big egg. |
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You’d think they’d need more, because they’ve got lots of stuff to steal…
