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Post by Nimras on Jan 26, 2007 21:30:09 GMT -5
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Post by Goosh on Jan 26, 2007 22:18:27 GMT -5
Dan, Fj0rd, loved Morguss: Behind the Ugly. I haven't read alot of your works but it was a great collab! You took us to an ugly character behind the scenes and made her... less ugly. ^_^ And "Dan: Hey hey, if not for me yelling like a little girl, that Air Faerie wouldn't have saved us! So I saved you!" Best line in the article! Terrific work, guys!
Best line in the article!
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Post by Tashni on Jan 26, 2007 23:43:36 GMT -5
CCR: Jealousy by nimras - A very interesting chapter. Lots of character and plot development. I like where you're going with Jules, although I'm not sure where you'll end up. Can't wait for the next chapter! You should know that so far I'm being a good girl and not peeking ahead.
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Post by kamikatze24 on Jan 27, 2007 5:14:20 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Jan 27, 2007 11:40:17 GMT -5
It's not much, but "Underworld" is a short story, not an article.
I'd really appreciate reviews for it if anyone has the time (I know it's limited this time of year).
The Happiest Quiggle by nut862
That was incredibly funny! And the art was just...fantastic! I just love the Shoyru's expression. At first, though, I have NO idea why, the smile on the Quiggle's face looked like a frown. Like I said, I don't know how or why. I really enjoyed this, though, good job.
Cheesecake idea by allyssa_renne, art by KamiKatze24
I've had that happen to me plenty of times, so I sympathize with Fire. -_- The art was wonderful, and the story was great. I'm not that fond of the author's note, but in comics they do seem to stand out a bit... A great comic overall, don't get me wrong; I liked it. (By the way, is that a real cheesecake at the top? Because I wasn't sure if you could use real images in the NT.)
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Post by Kat on Jan 27, 2007 11:55:09 GMT -5
[shadow=purple,left,300]Before I go to bed...
The Happiest Quiggle by nut862
One-paneled comics are the simplest and the funniest, and yet they can be quite hard to pull off. And this one was just hilarious. XD That should be an easy New Year's resolution to keep. Plus, the art is simply lovely. ^_^ Not too flashy.
Cheesecake by allyssa_rene and kamikatze24
XD The punchline was priceless. And the art was beautiful. You two make a good team.[/shadow]
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Post by Deleted on Jan 27, 2007 12:40:18 GMT -5
Morguss: Behind the Ugly by dan4884 and extreme_fj0rd
I'm not the biggest fan of script-like works, but this was actually enjoyable and really funny, so I quite enjoyed it. The personalities of Dan and Fj0rd were well-balanced and accentuated each other, and I bet there's no wondering what that means now. ^_^ Heheh. Good job with this, you two.
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Post by kamikatze24 on Jan 27, 2007 12:51:46 GMT -5
Cheesecake idea by allyssa_renne, art by KamiKatze24I've had that happen to me plenty of times, so I sympathize with Fire. -_- The art was wonderful, and the story was great. I'm not that fond of the author's note, but in comics they do seem to stand out a bit... A great comic overall, don't get me wrong; I liked it. (By the way, is that a real cheesecake at the top? Because I wasn't sure if you could use real images in the NT.) Thanks for the Reviews, Wolf and Kat  Yeah, we know Author's Notes are not very appreciated, but she said she needed them for pointing out some things, who's who. *shrug* I'm just the artist ^_^ And yeah, it IS a real cheesecake, but I put a filter on it to make it look less detailed and more drawn. Besides, I made Taylor hold it, so it's enveloped into a drawing and slipped through ^^ And there was a modelling clay comic somewhere in the Times with real images, too... |
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Post by Sq on Jan 27, 2007 13:18:31 GMT -5
In This Together: Part Nine
Aw, I loved how this all turned out. I thought it was really clever, how Novella was the 'key' to why Voltare was acting the way he was. I also liked how Voltare saved the evil dark faerie from... uh, dying-- that just shows how kind he really is. ^^ Aw I love Voltare. x33
And the ending was perfect. Again, I loved how this all turned out. Good job, Dream, your series was really great!
Oh, I went back and read the earlier chapters to try and find a clue about what Ricky's sister's name is... but I haven't a clue... XD
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Post by Deleted on Jan 27, 2007 13:27:59 GMT -5
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Twelve by ssjelitegirl
I like to end series reviews with something big, a great-sized review that sums up my feelings about the story. Yet, though I'll still do that, I don't think it'll be too long. Not because this wasn't great, because it was, but just because I can't think of the words to use. I've spent hours reading this series, and I loved it. It was comical and serious and had great characters that were well-defined and it had a wonderful plot that was full of mystery and suspense and just plain greatness. But I can't really think of anything to say I haven't said before, and that's probably a good thing.
Which brings me to the ending, the one place I haven't said much of. It was simple. It was... refreshing after everything that had gone on. I quite enjoyed its simplicity, and it fit perfectly the story. This ended wonderfully. You really, really did a great job with this series, and I quite enjoyed reading it.
That was some great bit of imagery there and I loved it! I can't wait for more. ^_^
In This Together: Part Nine by rainbow_daydreamer
This was just a wonderful ending to a wonderfully touching story. It was quite well-written and all of the characters were their own beings. The love between Novella and Voltare was simply wonderful, and I loved the first-person perspective with her; it really told the story well. I quite loved this, and I really enjoyed it, all the way from part one to part nine.
The way you ended this gives me mixed feelings. On the one hand, it ended with a positive light and hope. Then again, it ended with the evil hardly defeated and Fiona's reactions completely unknown. It leaves a sense that there's more to tell, which is nice, though it made the ending not just all kittens and rainbows. That's a good thing, too, because if everything had a fairytale ending, there'd be no point to reading anything. To be honest, I see a lot of room for a sequel, so I'm wondering, is one planned, or did you just want a more open ending?
As for Ricky's sister, I don't know. I want to say her name is Baby, but I don't even know why the name comes to me. I'm sure I'm wrong, but whatever. lol. ^_^ I liked the story, and that's all that matters.
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Post by Dream on Jan 27, 2007 13:57:50 GMT -5
I'll reply to my reviews later, but for now can I just say: I thought people would be able to figure out who Ricky's sister is, but nobody is. I've had about ten different Neomails.
She isn't called Rachel, Ladorna (some bad reading there?), Baby, Sissy or Siscelia (though I like that Neomailer's logic), or Shari. If you're keen to figure it out, though, think about me rather than just this one story, and check back for anything that might give it away (particularly Ch4).
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Post by Deleted on Jan 27, 2007 14:03:02 GMT -5
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Jealousy - Part Four by nimras23
I absolutely have fallen in love with this series, Nimras. The characters...for all intents and purposes, are human. Forget they look like Lupes and Kougras, forget it all: they're human. My biggest thing with writing for Neopets is that they're not human, yet for you, that problem seems not to exist. I not only admire that, but I am awed by it. The first scene with Mareian and Rolan was just beautiful and I loved it.
Then, how DO you work in such romantic scenes? It astounds me how you do that, because it's so obvious so I'm certain that the editor(s) catch onto it, too. Then again, you write it so well, it's not hard to see why they can't not let it get through.
I have to ask, did Jules' name come from, perchance, the word "jewels"? It certainly fits him. Though as a person, I can't say I like him, as a character, I certainly do; his description of the diamond was just so poetic and I adored it. And the way Mareian just played him? It was perfect!
And then... it was over, much too soon, I feel. Though there's no denying that this series began slowly, now that it's pace has quickened, it goes by too soon. I guess it just goes to show, you are a master of writing. And I mean that quite seriously, I do.
I love that line, though I think perhaps it would have sounded more menacing had it gone something like "taken to the tallest tower and defenestrated." Such a way to QM a harmless word, yes? lol ^_^
I shall patiently await the next part for, in truth, I don't have time to look ahead (else I'd consider it).
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Post by Deleted on Jan 27, 2007 15:20:30 GMT -5
Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part Two by yatomiyuka
This part flowed quite swiftly and quite...seamlessly, I guess works. One part simply flowed into the next, and each new part built upon the last, even when they each seemed to be about different people and told from different points of view. It all worked out wonderfully. To be honest, I was surprised that the first scene wasn't a dream. Poor Pemero, though, I hope he is alright. I also have to comment on the three Faerie sister; for their being Fire Faeries, which initially made me assume they would all be similar, their personalities are vastly different and each is well-defined. I'm also beginning to like Jen more, and I am eager to see what she will do now that she's being exiled from Meridell.
So, I assume he returned the curtsy? :)
Another Hero's Journey: Part Three by precious_katuch14
A lovely part, Kat, and it really drove the story onwards. Some of the bits in the storm seemed to last for too long, but it was all written incredibly well and was all still pleasurable to read. I particularly found the earlier parts amazing, as I can recall times when people were sleeping and I didn't want to wake them, and then how every noise seemed like thunder. You recreated the feeling flawlessly and realistically and that was just wonderful, I think.
I'm just curious... how is a note tucked under a pillow easy to see?
And I must also ask you to explain a few things. I know Rohane is from NeoQuest II, yet the enemy in this, Ramtor I believe, is from NeoQuest I. Also, as was proven in NeoQuest II (spoiler coming up, if anyone hasn't played it), Rohane's time in Meridell was just an illusion of the spacecraft's malfunctioning computer. Ergo, I have found myself suddenly confused as to where this sits betwixt the two epics.
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Post by Kat on Jan 27, 2007 19:36:04 GMT -5
Another Hero's Journey: Part Three by precious_katuch14A lovely part, Kat, and it really drove the story onwards. Some of the bits in the storm seemed to last for too long, but it was all written incredibly well and was all still pleasurable to read. I particularly found the earlier parts amazing, as I can recall times when people were sleeping and I didn't want to wake them, and then how every noise seemed like thunder. You recreated the feeling flawlessly and realistically and that was just wonderful, I think. I'm just curious... how is a note tucked under a pillow easy to see? And I must also ask you to explain a few things. I know Rohane is from NeoQuest II, yet the enemy in this, Ramtor I believe, is from NeoQuest I. Also, as was proven in NeoQuest II (spoiler coming up, if anyone hasn't played it), Rohane's time in Meridell was just an illusion of the spacecraft's malfunctioning computer. Ergo, I have found myself suddenly confused as to where this sits betwixt the two epics. [shadow=purple,left,300]Thanks for the review, Wolf. I guess part of it was sticking out from under the pillow? ^^; I think that was what I was going for, but missed it when I was editing. Ramtor IS from NQ2. He is the final boss of the Meridell chapter. Having completed NQ2 four times (and LIVED XD), I did know the real plot behind the chapter cutscenes of the game, but I couldn't resist writing about Reuben after having introduced him in AHJ, which is like my version of the NQ2 prologue. Maybe I'll spin more series about him, but Rohane's role as protagonist ends in AHJ, because that's where the NQ2 proper begins. ... I ramble, don't I? XD I guess I toyed with the assumption, 'What if it wasn't all just a simple computer simulation? What if it had actually been real, and the computer actually went kapooey for this purpose, to somehow prod the four spacemen to go save Neopia from utter chaos, destruction, and four-armed red Draiks? [/shadow] |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 27, 2007 19:56:55 GMT -5
The Mirror of Memories: Part One by sytra
The beginning felt long-winded and slow. But that lasted only a few paragraphs, and then I really got into it. At first, Aina came off as a brat, but once she was with her friends, she didn't seem so conceited, so I really can't say what my first impression is of her, but I expect she'll be getting into trouble with that mirror. I think she has a good bunch of friends, and I like how you introduced her being orange and Lawne's name's pronunciation; it just felt real for the story.
I think the custom is cool, and that's definitely how I imagined Aina, it's just a shame that the mirror isn't oval like you described it.
Also, the first-person narrative was, for all I could see, without flaws, so congrats on that. ^_^
And so, while I wait for part two, I must wonder...why is she needed downstairs?
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