275 Reviews

[Tashni]

Oh, man, I'm so behind in reviews! I'm trying to finish up my NTA nominations. I AM going to R&R "Another Hero's Journey," and there are a few others I really want to read. Slap me if I don't!

[Dream]

Love Will Find A Way

I love this story so, so much. It reminds me of a film I saw years and years ago about a man and his cat... I don't normally read comedy, but for some reason the preview came out looking as though it was on the straight-up, so I ended up reading.

But true love will find a way. Even if that way is up a guard’s sleeve, out his pant leg, into the ventilation system, through the waste management unit, out a vent, across every button on an active console, back into the ventilation system, and out through another vent resulting in a short drop into the lap of the beloved, love will find a way.

This had me falling off my chair. I don't know how the Gruslen kept managing to be so persistent, but the practicalities don't really matter in a story like this one.

[ngc_5128]

Love Will Find A Way by sarahleeadvent

What a great story. This reminds me so much of the daily battle between my cats and my wife I usually get a kick out of well written Slothy stories, and this was no dissapointment. I loved seeing him just a little vulnerable

[Tashni]

Love Will Find A Way by sarahleeadvent
This is such a fabulously written humorous story! I bow at your feet. It is really, really hard to find a well-written humorous story. "Love Will Find Away" does not just rely on silly events to get a laugh. Your narration and execution is what makes it so amazing.

I absolutely adore this paragraph:

The Kacheek whimpered piteously as the Gruslen sprang off the table, landed flat on its face, hoisted itself up onto its newfound spider legs and scuttled toward the trembling prisoner. It sat down in front of its prospective victim, who shivered at the sight of that steady, smiling pair of eyes. It rose to its feet, and the Kacheek shrank away from the small bundle of cotton fluff that meandered around it in a circle. And the poor little Neopet was visibly at a loss as to how to respond when the Gruslen paused beside a mutant Grundo’s foot, lifted a leg, and quietly proceeded to mark the huge green tower of muscle as its own.

Right there you show your skill. You did not just say, "The gruslen proceeded to pee on the giant mutant Grundo's leg," which would have been a little amusing. You use this prisoner to show utter terror at the sight of this little fuzz ball who marks the guard the prisoner is being carried by. Brilliant!

And what a great addition is this:

Sloth had even found one stretched across the interior of his toilet, the discovery having been made in a decidedly unfortunate fashion.

I liked that you didn't make Sloth go all soft on the Gruslen and start to like him. The tone of this story was perfect for the humor you used. Fabulous job!

[Tashni]

Rules of the House by micrody
Okay Wolf, I'll be honest. I don't think most people would have thought the hook was very good, or that the story was very gripping. I think most people would find it a charming story, though, filled with cute pets and a very normal Neopian anyone can identify with. Those are all good things.

I loved it. I am so you sometimes!! Only in real life, the interrupting people are not kids or even siblings, it's my parents. ANYWAY. This story does not have a solid conflict/resolution, but it is so very much how I live sometimes that I loved it. It makes me realize for a while that I am not the only writer in the world who has a hard time getting to write in quiet.

Your characters were all well-written. I could even hear different voices for the different Neopets, which can be hard to pull off with so many characters in a short story. I was worried that I would get bored with Micro's story-being-written, simply because the action in the story had nothing to with the real story. (That's confusing.) But I didn't, and I credit that to your skill in not putting in too much at a time.

I also like the ending. It's not overly dramatic or sad, it's just how life works: you have unfinished projects. I think everyone does, even if those projects aren't writing. So maybe your story would have a larger audience than I give it credit for. Who knows. Good job!

[Tashni]

Another Hero's Journey - Parts 1 & 2
It's a funny thing. When I saw the title of this story, I thought it meant "Another Journey of a Hero," not "A Journey of Another Hero," but I did notice that the title could mean either one. I am pleasantly surprised that the hero of this story is not Rohane, but Reuben.

I forgot how great your first series was. The emotions you portray are so deep, so engulfing that I can't stop reading. I am really going to enjoy this!

Reuben is at a cross-roads in his life and his relationship with his brother and mother. You are handling this in a very mature way, and NOT as a plot device. That is really good work. Can't wait to see more!

[Kat]

tashni said:

Another Hero's Journey - Parts 1 & 2
It's a funny thing. When I saw the title of this story, I thought it meant "Another Journey of a Hero," not "A Journey of Another Hero," but I did notice that the title could mean either one. I am pleasantly surprised that the hero of this story is not Rohane, but Reuben.

I forgot how great your first series was. The emotions you portray are so deep, so engulfing that I can't stop reading. I am really going to enjoy this!

Reuben is at a cross-roads in his life and his relationship with his brother and mother. You are handling this in a very mature way, and NOT as a plot device. That is really good work. Can't wait to see more!

[shadow=purple,left,300]Thanks so much for the review! ^_^ AHJ was an in-depth prologue of NQ2, so of course, Rohane's next journey would be the NQ2 game proper. And I wanted another shot of his older brother, not as an antagonist like last time but a hero in his own right. [/shadow]

[Huntress]

Look who's finally back to writing reviews. Whoot. And thanks for the reviews, Wolf and Nimras ^^

nimras23 said:

Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Eleven
by ssjelitegirl

(First off… OMG THANK YOU FOR THE STATUE!!!!)

*cough*

Saura + Crossbow…. Mmmm…. *is happy*

The whole thing seems too…. Simple. Though with the ending of the chapter, it’s nice to see that it’s apparently not. It would take a lot more than a:

“Really, I swear I’m not an evil monster out to eat your children.”

“Oh, okay then.”

Poor Shad and Saura… in trouble for doing the right thing…. Again…

I take it that I can now add that statue to my Deviantart, ey? x3

The only reason why the fortress people signed the truce was because the Faeries were all of a sudden a lot stronger than them. Not like they had much choice. I only added the last chapter because I don't like ending stories with a culmination, but yeah, this won't have a happy-happy ending with peace and glory and trumpets, this I can tell.

The Gallion Ranch

Really good artwork, even though the background was a little bland - yes, this is once again the detail-obsessed maniac speaking - and the shading is great. Love the angle in the fourth panel, though the background is a little off in that one. Actually the third and fourth panels could've been one single panel, seeing that the speakers don't switch, but for the sake of expressions I can see why those are two separate panels... The expressions are simply awesome, even though I got the feeling that the Scorchio could've been looking at the Draik in the fifth panel, not completely aside. But still, all in all, loved that comic ^^

[Dream]

I know it's a bit greedy of me to ask, but I'd love reviews on ITT *smile*

[Nimras]

In This Together: Part Eight
by rainbow_daydreamer

Suddenly, as it began to become unbearable…

It might be useful, since last part was a whole week ago, to remind everyone what ‘it’ was. Painfully bright purple lights? Stings? A pressure in the head?

It would take someone as brave as they were stupid to distract a lethal, brainwashed Darigan Kougra who was in the process of receiving the power boost of his life.

Hee! This line cracks me up. Fortunately for us, the world seems to abound with that kind of people.

The way you’re wrapping this up, and the way you ended this chapter, seems like it’s going to be the last one. :S

[Nimras]

The Petpet Detectives: Case of the Disappearing Deaver - Part Six
by playmobil_is_my_life

“We’re detectives,” she said hotly. “Which means we’re doing a job.”

Ohhh… Mess not with the annoyed woman.

…and don’t name/call/describe/assicate ships with the word Unsinkable. It jinxes them.

It looks like it was a good thing Jack and our Eyrie friend stayed behind….

[Nimras]

Revisited: Part Six
by puppy200010

“You’d be grouchy too! It’s been raining, and all the worms are trying to wiggle their way through the ground to the surface. Makes for a very uncomfortable nap.” Jenny and the Gelert shuddered at the thought.

I am such a morbid person, that statement made me laugh.

Thundar roared ...

Thunder.

I do find it a little strange that we went from a ‘RUN FOR YOU LIVES!!!’ to a ‘Oh… let’s chat with the ghosts and find out a lot of back-story’. Though now that they’re out of the house I can understand that they want to take a moment to recover.

And the vain Usul suddenly seeing herself as a Mutant… Classic. *snickerfits*

[Nimras]

Another Hero's Journey: Part Two
by precious_katuch14

Why is your part two above all the part threes? (Not that you have any way of knowing, it just made me boggle.)

I simply have better things to do than come knocking on Ramtor’s door and ask if I could slay him.

Oh, I could so see someone doing that. “Pardon me, Evil Villain, but would you mind too terribly much if I slay you?” *snickerfits*

I am a little confused that his mother didn’t notice people throwing rocks into her own house.

[Nimras]

Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part One
by yatomiyuka

Love the custom. ^^

Oh good, Jen lives!

All in all, this was a nice set up chapter for the rest of the series. Not a lot of ‘action’ as far as I could see, but coming from me, Madame as slow as molasses for getting stories started, that’s not saying much. *grin*

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sytra said:

Rules of the House by wolf

Ah, the joys of being a writer with a house full of pets... XD... This was a fun little read. I found myself feeling more sorry for the pets rather than Micro. Hehe. I was glad when he (er... you?) finally went to make his pets dinner. Yay. ^^

Yep, those are joyous times, aren't they?
No matter, I'd have it no other way!

Thank you for the review, Sytra. Yep, Micro was inspired by me, if I were to live in Neopia... as it should be in a Neopian Times story. ^_^ It was meant to be a short, fun read, so I'm glad you liked it.

tashni said:

Rules of the House by micrody
Okay Wolf, I'll be honest. I don't think most people would have thought the hook was very good, or that the story was very gripping. I think most people would find it a charming story, though, filled with cute pets and a very normal Neopian anyone can identify with. Those are all good things.

I loved it. I am so you sometimes!! Only in real life, the interrupting people are not kids or even siblings, it's my parents. ANYWAY. This story does not have a solid conflict/resolution, but it is so very much how I live sometimes that I loved it. It makes me realize for a while that I am not the only writer in the world who has a hard time getting to write in quiet.

Your characters were all well-written. I could even hear different voices for the different Neopets, which can be hard to pull off with so many characters in a short story. I was worried that I would get bored with Micro's story-being-written, simply because the action in the story had nothing to with the real story. (That's confusing.) But I didn't, and I credit that to your skill in not putting in too much at a time.

I also like the ending. It's not overly dramatic or sad, it's just how life works: you have unfinished projects. I think everyone does, even if those projects aren't writing. So maybe your story would have a larger audience than I give it credit for. Who knows. Good job!

Thank you, Tashni, for your review. I know honesty can sometimes hurt (which it did not, by the way), but lies won't teach me anything, so thank you for being honest.

Charming, simple... that's what I was going for (though I never considered the word "charming"). "A day in the life of" kinda story that's just... reality Neopia? lol. As for you being me sometimes... I think that's just included in the whole writerly lifestyle as I am sure plenty of other writers feel the same way. Or perhaps interruptions just occur to everyone. ~_^

I don't know what I do, but I do get comments on my characterization a lot, so I must be something right. Thank you. So, I take it, the story-within-a-story went well? I happen to do that a lot, so it's good to know I can write it without making things confusing.

Thanks again for the review. :)

* * *

I don't really find it surprising, but everyone who's read this has missed my devilishly-sneaky reference to Chet Flash. Unless... no one has said anything? Anyways, here it is (in a fancy spoiler-thing just because they're fun ^_^):

SPOILER: Click to show

If you line up the first word of each paragraph of the story-within-a-story (what Micro is writing), you have:

Carabelle
Hurrying
Eyes
Thinking

Flipping
Laughing
Accepting
She
Hello

What
Under
Zealously

Heaving
Eager
Right
Entering

When read downwards, it becomes Chet Flash was here. Then, when Micro looks out the window, he sees "a fuzzy blur" that quickly jumps away.

So, aha, Chet Flash was here!