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Post by Tashni on Jan 19, 2007 23:33:58 GMT -5
- Articles -
- none I recognized
- Short Stories -
Unforgotten by czenko28
Rules of the House by micrody
Love Will Find A Way by sarahleeadvent
- Comics -
The Gallion Ranch by hakuryu_86 & pacmanite
- New Series -
Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part One by yatomiyuka
- Cont. Series -
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Eleven by ssjelitegirl
In This Together: Part Eight by rainbow_daydreamer
The Hoarders: Part Seven by ruff_zette
The Petpet Detectives: Case of the Disappearing Deaver - Part Six by playmobil_is_my_life
Revisited: Part Six by puppy200010
Another Hero's Journey: Part Two by precious_katuch14
CCR: Jealousy: Part 3 by nimras23
*** Let me know if I missed anyone!
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Post by Tashni on Jan 19, 2007 23:44:10 GMT -5
CCR: Jealousy by Nimras
*bug eyes* How DO you get away with stuff like that? Droplet must be a fan, and I can't blame her. That's THREE romantic innuendoes in a few short lines. You're my hero.
The plot thickens in this episode! I'm really excited to see what happens. And as cool a villian as Jasagh was, I'm glad to see a new villain in the mix.
I also really enjoy the hinting to the other CCR series. It was just enough to get old readers to think, "Oh, I remember that." At the same time, I don't think it would confuse new readers, instead I think it would add some clarity to Mareian's situation and background.
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Post by Dan on Jan 20, 2007 0:22:37 GMT -5
You forgot Yuka's new series, Legend Seekers. ^_^ CCR-- A good part that furthered the plot.  That Jules is devious. XP Though I'm not sure, does it really matter that they have the real relics to perform the coronation? I'm sure you'll expand on that later. I liked Mareian's transformation when they left the castle, very nice. Can't wait till next week. |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2007 12:09:03 GMT -5
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Post by Yuka on Jan 20, 2007 12:14:36 GMT -5
You forgot Yuka's new series, Legend Seekers. ^_^ Thanks for remembering me.  I will do some reviews this week. I've been unable to recently because of college and stuff, but it's easing off... at least for now.  EDIT: Short stories first. UnforgottenHey, I remember reading this in Work Reviews and Advice. ^_^ It's one of those easy-to-read stories - in a good way, of course. The writing has a nice flow to it. I felt kind of sorry for Silver in the beginning. XD The ending was sweet and touching--bittersweet, almost. I'll have to go back and read 'Forgotten' at some point.  Keep up the good work! Rules of the HouseThis was a very enjoyable read. I definitely sympathize with the character of Micro (based on yourself, I assume  ) here - I have a lot of unfinished things lying around in spare folders. Could this be foreshadowing a future story featuring the pets?  I'll be keeping my eyes peeled. Love will find a wayI love your writing style. But aww! That poor little gruslen! Sloth is a big meanie. x( It sounds just like something a real feline might do, by the way... they're tricky little things. My Misty is, anyway. The first paragraph drew me in and made me smile, and the last line was awesome. xD I want a purring pillow! Keep up the great work! |
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2007 12:46:28 GMT -5
Unforgotten by czenko28
This was a really sweet story, and I enjoyed reading it. It was simple, and it really didn't have much of a plot, though it was straightforward and really fun to read. I liked it a lot; it was easy to read and, though I've already said it, really enjoyable.
I did, though, notice a few things on the grammatical side of this that probably could have used a touch of improving. I know, though, that in first person, grammar and usage often helps to define the character, so perhaps these were intentional, I do not know.
As an appositive, I believe "Jinx the white Anubis" should have a comma after it.
"I had never" what "him before"? I think it's missing a word here...
I see this so frequently, honestly. This being said in the subjunctive mood, the "was" should be "were," though with it being narrated by Silver, I could see how this would definitely help his characterization.
I think I noticed a few breaks in tense, but, again, that all could have been mere characterization.
Overall, I really enjoyed reading this.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2007 13:22:53 GMT -5
Love Will Find A Way by sarahleeadvent
I like to use unique colors for each piece, and this green happens to be called Asparagus. ^_^ lol. I find that funny.
What to say? There are so many things to say, but what to say? I'll just jot down a few things and let you decide: that-- was amazing. hilarious. fun to read. easy to read. amazing. left me speechless. left me dying in laughter. left me 'aww'-ing at the poor spider Gruslen. left me laughing at Sloth. ^_^
I loved that story. First, it was grammatically flawless, and that's something anybody who knows me knows that I find admirable. Second, it was just a plain and simple, no need to use fancy words, great story. Third, it was drop-dead hilarious! The poor Gruslen, and then even-poorer Sloth.
Then... your style, was awesome. It was so very unique, and your metaphors and similes and hyperboles (or hyperbolas? I always confuse the two) were just amazing. They were often so unexpected and so random, but so fitting at the same time, that I could do little but take a moment to breathe after laughing so hard that I couldn't continue reading.
At times, I was reminded of old cartoons, like Tom and Jerry (not the new ones, though, those are horrible and aren't any fun at all). But those classic ones, that no matter how many times you see, you can always still laugh at.
And I know Gruslens are felines, but I was reminded of a dog, just a little cute wubbly-dubbly puppy! I have a rat terrier, a small dog, and she's just so cuddly and expressive and cute, and I kept being reminded of her by the Spider Gruslen. Yep, somethings were just not like her, but, aww, the Spider Gruslen's cuteness just reminded me of her so much! rofl. (And, lol, I misspelled "Gruslen's" and my spellcheck wanted to change it to glycerin's.)
The beginning was awesome. The middle was flawless. The ending was just, AWWW!
I loved this story. Great job, you deserve a cookie!
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2007 15:15:17 GMT -5
I once recall a time when there were more short stories than series, hehehe.
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Eleven by ssjelitegirl
Awesome illustration! Way cool, how very... Bond-ish, maybe? I don't know. I've never seen any Bond. ^_^ Cool, though, way cool.
Another lovely part< Huntress. But I am confused! It startled chaotically, then smoothed out, and it ended with such a cliffhanger I haven't a clue what to look forward to! But it's all good. I enjoyed it.
I await the final part. dun dun DUN! ... sorry. ^_^
In This Together: Part Eight by rainbow_daydreamer
This was an amazing part, Dream! Often times, exposition is dull and hard to take in, but how you did it here was just splendorous. I loved the flashback scenes and their incredibly unique flavor; was the first even a remnant from the time of Meridell's war with Darigan? Then, Novella's putting it all together was just incredible. I like how you worked everything into this; it's a good reason why, and I admire that.
Now, to wait for part nine... *shivers*
Another Hero's Journey: Part Two by precious_katuch14
If I am not mistaken, in bed, Reuben was speaking with himself, yes?
That aside, this part was... wow. I love how you have created Reuben. He is so... real, not just a character, but a living, breathing being. The other characters are equally as real, equally as... as "human," maybe, I don't know the right word, but they are so well-defined that I am stunned by them. And that is a good thing. The other villagers, however "real" they are, are just rude and horrible to Reuben, and I feel sorry for both them and Reuben. They should be pitied, being so careless about a noble guy like him.
I think... that his adventure is only just beginning. I quite enjoyed this and I await part three.
Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Jealousy - Part Three by nimras23
This was awesome, Nimras. The moment I opened the page, I was drawn into this, and then until the end, my thoughts hardly wavered. It was so smoothly written, with such perfect pace and perfect... everything. I can see why this series is so popular! I quite loved this part, and I seem to grow closer to your characters with each new part. They are quite well-rounded and very well-defined.
I await the next part. I can hardly wait to see where this goes.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 20, 2007 16:33:39 GMT -5
Thanks for the review, Yuka! I really, really appreciate it. And, yep, that's a bit of foreshadowing. Actually, there was a lot of foreshadowing in that story, hehehe. Now, to have Hyperion be accepted... I do have some stories planned for my pets, but my folders contain ideas, not unfinished works (well, there are those, too...), and so I have a few other things I have to write first.
And since I know that at least one of the series I'm reading will end next week, I'll start reading yours. It looks really good, and I've always liked your short stories.
Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part One by yatomiyuka
Thank you for the synopsis! It was so helpful! If not for it, you would have gotten a PM requesting one. :)
This was awesome! I was amazed by it! I was confused for brief moments here and there, but things quickly alleviated my confusion as the story progressed. I may not have read the first Legend Seekers, but I quite like where this one is heading.
I look forward to the next part.
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Post by Czenko lazy about logging in on Jan 20, 2007 17:48:21 GMT -5
Unforgotten by czenko28This was a really sweet story, and I enjoyed reading it. It was simple, and it really didn't have much of a plot, though it was straightforward and really fun to read. I liked it a lot; it was easy to read and, though I've already said it, really enjoyable. I did, though, notice a few things on the grammatical side of this that probably could have used a touch of improving. I know, though, that in first person, grammar and usage often helps to define the character, so perhaps these were intentional, I do not know. As an appositive, I believe "Jinx the white Anubis" should have a comma after it. "I had never" what "him before"? I think it's missing a word here... I see this so frequently, honestly. This being said in the subjunctive mood, the "was" should be "were," though with it being narrated by Silver, I could see how this would definitely help his characterization. I think I noticed a few breaks in tense, but, again, that all could have been mere characterization. Overall, I really enjoyed reading this. Thank you very much. Thanks for reviewing. Most of that was my own mistake. I did notice the missing word after looking it over. "Seen" I think was supposed to be there. Yep. No plot really. Just putting my characters in a house and letting them act like themselves only thing I planned was that Naninhah was supposed to appear sometime in the story. Other than that, it was completely typing what came to mind throughout the whole story. I have a small vocabulary. Lack of description. A two year old can read the junk I write, but...um...wait. It's Silver that wrote it. Excuse me for taking credit for such a short story, but thanks for the review anyway. It is appreciated. |
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Post by Birdy on Jan 21, 2007 16:14:35 GMT -5
Love Will Find A Way by sarahleeadvent Awww! I really liked it! ;D That's a cat for you! (NOTE: NOT insulting cats here!) I also really liked the ending! The Gallion Ranch by hakuryu_86 & pacmanite GREAT artwork! *wishes she could draw like that* CCR: Jealousy: Part 3 by nimras23 Ooh, someone's not jealous, are they? *looks at the title* Oh, wait... |
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Post by Nimras on Jan 21, 2007 22:47:06 GMT -5
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Eleven
by ssjelitegirl
(First off… OMG THANK YOU FOR THE STATUE!!!!)
*cough*
Saura + Crossbow…. Mmmm…. *is happy*
The whole thing seems too…. Simple. Though with the ending of the chapter, it’s nice to see that it’s apparently not. It would take a lot more than a:
“Really, I swear I’m not an evil monster out to eat your children.”
“Oh, okay then.”
Poor Shad and Saura… in trouble for doing the right thing…. Again…
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Post by Yuka on Jan 22, 2007 0:21:24 GMT -5
Thanks for the review, Yuka! I really, really appreciate it. And, yep, that's a bit of foreshadowing. Actually, there was a lot of foreshadowing in that story, hehehe. Now, to have Hyperion be accepted... I do have some stories planned for my pets, but my folders contain ideas, not unfinished works (well, there are those, too...), and so I have a few other things I have to write first. And since I know that at least one of the series I'm reading will end next week, I'll start reading yours. It looks really good, and I've always liked your short stories. Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part One by yatomiyukaThank you for the synopsis! It was so helpful! If not for it, you would have gotten a PM requesting one. :) This was awesome! I was amazed by it! I was confused for brief moments here and there, but things quickly alleviated my confusion as the story progressed. I may not have read the first Legend Seekers, but I quite like where this one is heading. I look forward to the next part. Thanks for the review. :) I'll do some series reviews later in the week. |
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Post by Kat on Jan 22, 2007 5:08:23 GMT -5
Another Hero's Journey: Part Two by precious_katuch14If I am not mistaken, in bed, Reuben was speaking with himself, yes? That aside, this part was... wow. I love how you have created Reuben. He is so... real, not just a character, but a living, breathing being. The other characters are equally as real, equally as... as "human," maybe, I don't know the right word, but they are so well-defined that I am stunned by them. And that is a good thing. The other villagers, however "real" they are, are just rude and horrible to Reuben, and I feel sorry for both them and Reuben. They should be pitied, being so careless about a noble guy like him. I think... that his adventure is only just beginning. I quite enjoyed this and I await part three. [shadow=purple,left,300]Debating with himself in bed, yes. XD Thanks so much for the review. ^_^[/shadow] |
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Post by Sq on Jan 22, 2007 20:57:57 GMT -5
Heeh, I haven't reviewed in like, two weeks. XD I'm so lazy. *ahem* Anyway...
Rules of the House by wolf
Ah, the joys of being a writer with a house full of pets... XD... This was a fun little read. I found myself feeling more sorry for the pets rather than Micro. Hehe. I was glad when he (er... you?) finally went to make his pets dinner. Yay. ^^
Legend Seekers: Mysterious Magic - Part One by yuka
I never read the previous stories in the series, and I'm really glad you gave that synopsis at the beginning. Anyway, I'm liking the idea of this so far. Nice first chapter. Will be reading more! ^_^
Oh, and I really like your style, by the way.
Aaaand... I'll do the series I've been reading the past couple of weeks (Dream's and Puppy's) later. ^_^
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That Jules is devious. XP Though I'm not sure, does it really matter that they have the real relics to perform the coronation? I'm sure you'll expand on that later. I liked Mareian's transformation when they left the castle, very nice. Can't wait till next week. 
neo username - dan4884 
hehehehe. Lovely art, great comic! I enjoyed it.
Keep up the good work!
) here - I have a lot of unfinished things lying around in spare folders. 
I'll be keeping my eyes peeled. 
