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Post by Nimras on Nov 22, 2006 20:01:11 GMT -5
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Post by Tashni on Nov 22, 2006 20:05:05 GMT -5
Wow! I didn't even get to gloat in the previews thread. *sulks* Well, I'll tell you here. "Orbulon and the Founder of Symol Hole," my first series, was held over. ^_^ Oh, and Nimras,
CCR: Instincts P5 by Nimras -
Awww, so sweet. All of it is described REALLY well. I might say that in the past, I often found your descriptions to be a little unbalanced, but this is excellent.
HOLY &%#$ SHE'S NOT THINKING OF LEAVING HIM THAT WAY, IS SHE?!?!?!
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Post by Ebil on Nov 22, 2006 20:20:41 GMT -5
But... but it's WEDNESDAY! *is confused*
H'okay..... useless review time....
Something Has Happened! by frostcrystal and Tdyans
HAHA! I love it! Poor Julynea... that Kougra was positively vicious-looking!
I like the idea that it's supposedly something so evil that the Defenders of Neopia are looking into it, and they think it might be Sloth. And the doctor looks just plain huggable X3 *hugs* you koot wittle gelert you! *stabbed to death with syringe*
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Post by Psycho on Nov 22, 2006 20:46:39 GMT -5
CCR: INSTINCTS PART 5
I'll do this as I read because... well, just because. I don't know about you, but I like knowing what people think when they read.
Illusen rants about Jeran's mischief as a cub... she takes the time to complain about a werelupe's history of trouble while the werelupe himself is possibly rampaging through the forests?
And then she gets down to business. 0.o
I love Danner's character. I really do. Even more than I <3 Jeran. Amazing, really. I mean, you've turned Jeran into such a hunk - oh wait. I never said that. >.>
I like the "encouraging" Danner to sleep thing. Poor guy.
Somehow I think the whole "cure" thing seems to easy to be true. We'll see, eh?
"Perhaps she was also hunting for breakfast, Jeran hoped she was having better success than him. " Shouldn't that be, "having better success than HE WAS."?
I'm really pleased with the gentleness Jeran shows with regard to Mareian - even as a werelupe, he thinks nothing but of how to make her happy. Say goodmorning to closet-romantic Psycho.
Drat - the conflict has to be with *Mareian*?!?! You *had* to make her doubt herself. UGH!
Overall comments -
I like the pace. There was just enough suspense for me as I was reading - while I didn't make a conscious comment about it, it was there. I am really enjoying this series, Nim. Don't really have much else to say. What sort of review are you looking for? I can make a conscientious reader when I like the story.
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Post by Psycho on Nov 22, 2006 20:48:18 GMT -5
SOMETHING HAS HAPPENED! Who is Frostcrystal? I don't recognize the name. I really love the artwork  Especially the four frames that show each part of the "menace"  This sort of joke has been used a lot, I think, but the way it was presented made it humorous and enjoyable to read (over and over again). |
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Post by Dan on Nov 22, 2006 21:12:19 GMT -5
SOMETHING HAS HAPPENED! Who is Frostcrystal? I don't recognize the name. I really love the artwork Especially the four frames that show each part of the "menace" This sort of joke has been used a lot, I think, but the way it was presented made it humorous and enjoyable to read (over and over again). Crystal, the mod. |
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Post by Dan on Nov 22, 2006 21:33:39 GMT -5
CCR Instincts Parts 4 and 5-
I feel bad for not reviewing last week's installment, so I'll combine them here. ^^ Sorry!
I love how easy it is to read these, it's like reading from a book. Your pacing is wonderful, and Part 4 was so tense I couldn't stop reading it. I love how you switched POV to Jeran at the end and his instincts. Those paragraphs were wonderful. The whole thing was. ^^
Part 5-ZOMG, she wouldn't let him be a Werelupe forever, would she? Hmm...I thought the instincts of Jeran in this part were a little too...human, but that's ok. This story's still amazing nonetheless.
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Post by Dan on Nov 22, 2006 22:00:43 GMT -5
I'll do the same for your story, Pam. ^^ Sorry about not reviewing last week. "Can't you leave the arkey-lology for later? We need to get out!" Arkey-lology. XDD Love it. This part was exciting and the introduction of the two Tonus are nice. I like how you managed to give them both different personalities even though they have generally the same job. As for Part Five, GREAT cliffhanger. This part was so cool, though I do have one nitpick--you'd think Sarina, being a world-class archaeologist, would know not to touch the scarab. |
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Post by Dan on Nov 23, 2006 0:45:05 GMT -5
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Post by Psycho on Nov 23, 2006 0:52:14 GMT -5
...Ferreal. 0_o I daresay Droplet has an eccentric sense of humor, or she's more liberal an editor we thought she was o_0 |
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Post by Tashni on Nov 23, 2006 1:38:07 GMT -5
...Ferreal. 0_o I daresay Droplet has an eccentric sense of humor, or she's more liberal an editor we thought she was o_0 *eyebrow raise* Not quite as crazy as last week's comic shocker, but still extremely odd. |
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Post by Dan on Nov 23, 2006 1:40:28 GMT -5
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Post by Tashni on Nov 23, 2006 2:15:43 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Nov 23, 2006 9:35:09 GMT -5
Card Collections - Shoonee by iwantyours and yatomiyuka Good story, although I found it a bit confusing when you were describing the fighting. Something Has Happened! by frostcrystal and TdyansI love the way this is drawn. The joke's been a bit overused I think, but I still liked it A Question of Worth: Part One by extreme_fj0rdI like general idea of the story, but I do have a couple of nitpicks. First: He's really excited, then the idea is 'looking worse all the time'? It didn't quite read right. My only other nitpick was that if Christopher was in the habit of throwing furniture around regularly I would have expected his owner to do something about it or at least mention it to him before it reached that stage! Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Instincts - Part Five by nimras23Ooh... She can't leave him like that can she?!?!?! Very good Nim  "Can't you leave the arkey-lology for later? We need to get out!" Arkey-lology. XDD Love it. This part was exciting and the introduction of the two Tonus are nice. I like how you managed to give them both different personalities even though they have generally the same job. As for Part Five, GREAT cliffhanger. This part was so cool, though I do have one nitpick--you'd think Sarina, being a world-class archaeologist, would know not to touch the scarab. Thanks Dan I did think about making Tomek being the one to touch the scarab but I wanted him to get out of the room so it couldn't be him. I'd love any other reviews on Aubrise and the Gebmid Mystery: Part Five if anyone else has the time
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Post by Kelly on Nov 23, 2006 12:14:43 GMT -5
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Especially the four frames that show each part of the "menace" 
This sort of joke has been used a lot, I think, but the way it was presented made it humorous and enjoyable to read (over and over again).
neo username - dan4884 
