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Post by Nimras on Jan 6, 2007 13:55:53 GMT -5
Food Scienceby kamikatze24 and Tashni Awwww…. His expression in the last panel is so ….. awwww. …now I’m hungry. *shifty eyes* The “Ray’o’matic 3000” written in what seems to be permanent marker is a very cute touch. Fear of being eaten seems to be a big problem for a lot of the petpets… *eyes Florg* Don't Blame MEby choclated  It’s hard to be a baby Pteri. The floor seems a little… weird to me in the perspective. It’s not that bad in the first couple of panels, but in the last one for some reason I was thinking it was a tablecloth until I realized it was the same color as the floor. I love how Heartflower is totally oblivious as to what’s going on with Jacob -- even though he’s right here. Follies Follies!by manda314 No wonder the Yurble is so irritable all the time. He spends all day running in the hot sun, then the inanimate object gets all the credit. And the first panel under the title made me laugh, how he’s just got that crazed expression on his face.  The white pupils make him look even more unbalanced, I think. Game Overby m3rcuri Weepit was here! I like how you have the picture continue outside the panels, it gives it more of that coming out (or sucking you in…) feel, which really matches the feel of this comic. I’m absolutely horrible at that game, unfortunately, so I don’t even need the excuse of a graffitiing Meepit to crash into something….
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Post by Nimras on Jan 6, 2007 14:04:43 GMT -5
Brothers and Kingsby dan4884 First things first, very cute picture Ginz. ^^ Yikes, Ryoran gets on my nerves immediately. Which I’m sure is the point. You get the feeling that he’s not exactly very bright, but he thinks he’s the smartest person in the world. I was a little confused at the ‘years later’ transition the first time I read it. Maybe it would have been a little clearer if we’d been given a better glimpse of their ages at the beginning… or a “Seasons came and went, and some things changed… while others did not. “It’s not fair!”…” If that makes any sense? Skarl in your story is creepy. It's nice to see him as something other than the greedy, stupid fat king so many stories make him out to be. 
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Post by Nimras on Jan 6, 2007 14:13:26 GMT -5
Charity is Like a Rotting Shoeby nut862 The picture you got for this is absolutely perfect. I love how the tree has a clothspin on his nose for the smell. *snicker* Blame Maraqua. ^^ I rest my case. I love how this series manages to balance being both serious and sarcastic. There are a lot of times where one isn’t entirely sure which one you’re being, which is perfect for satire.
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Post by Nimras on Jan 6, 2007 14:34:12 GMT -5
SQUUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE! *becomes engrossed in CCR: Jealousy* How DO you always get such insanely amazing custom pics? I think you have fangirls in the art department. CCR: Jealousy by Nimras - This beginning is pretty good. I do not expect fast beginnings of CCR, and this one seemed very well paced to me. You set up all of the characters, hinted at the antagonist, and brought up two subplots--Countess Mareian and Lisha/Rolan shipping. That's what I got out of it, anyway. This beginning I really tried to make it pick up faster, I know a lot of people don't like really slow starts to stories. It was hard too, I naturally want a slow start to my stories for some reason. Yeah, I went a little Rolan/Lisha crazy on this one... expect to see a little more of that. And I really don't get more 'good' customs than anyone else I think. You're forgetting these ones:   and that I've gotten a repeat of my own customs for the last one.  [shadow=purple,left,300]I can make reviews! =D Actually, review. Stupid connection. Chronicles of the Court Rogue: Jealousy by nimras23More CCR! I like how you presented the first few characters in such a way that they were already well-rounded, and at the same time didn't rush the beginning. And it seems that there may be more than just one plot in this series...my 'shipping senses are tingling. Rolan and Lisha? I support Lisha/Morris myself, but I'll have to see how it turns out. Overall, very good first part, and OMG SHINY CUSTOM PICTURE.[/shadow] Come on, since when do I only have one plot? (Err, Instincts doesn't count...) I either have at least two, or none. Unfortunately, 'none' seems to be the one I'm getting to work with lately. *glowers at stack of started then stopped stories* I'm glad people seem to be able to follow my characters in this one. As I get further along in the story, it's harder to juggle the keeping them as constant and growing characters without utterly confusing new readers. Thanks Kat for the review. ^__^ CCR by Nim I cannot tell you how I excited I was to see this when I previewed earlier this week. And I love the custom pic. <3 Anyways, the story: I like how the setting seemingly will be different; a change of scenery is always nice. Rolan is a cool character (has he been in CCR before? I can't remember), and although he apparently has the hots for Lisha, I still picture her as a girl. XD Nevertheless, I think it's awesome how you're able to sneak that much in. I'm not sure I understand the countess thing, but I don't really understand the whole feudal system anyways. XD Anyways, Mareian as a countess has plenty of possibilities. Awesome start, can't wait for next week. Rolan has appeared before. *grin* He's introduced in "Rivalry", and Jeran and Lisha have a conversation about him in "Treachery". *laughs* My stories take place a couple years after the Meridell plot, and Lisha certainly doesn't stay 15 forever... And the possibilities for Mareian to have fun with the whole nobility thing was just too much fun to pass up. ^^ |
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Post by costaricangirl on Jan 6, 2007 15:11:49 GMT -5
Quick reviews while I avoid cleaning my room and doing my homework... Charity is Like a Rotting Shoe by Nut I like this article! The frequent mentions of the rotting shoe (a motif, one might say) keep me chuckling throughout. I love how it is both funny AND informative, since sometimes humorous articles just get completely goofy. But yours did not. Overall very clever and well-written, and quite enjoyable to read. ^^ |
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Post by costaricangirl on Jan 6, 2007 15:28:17 GMT -5
Brothers and Kings by Dan
Oooh, I like this! It's like a back story of how King Skarl came to power. It started out quite innocently, so I suspected it would just be about the two brothers fighting over power and whatnot... But then Skarl came into the picture, and I was quite confused for a while. That is, until the last few lines. It sometimes seemed a bit rushed and perhaps a bit TOO short, but at the same time it was nice to read such a quick story. Good job!
EDIT: I forgot to mention that I looove the names of the brothers. *nod nod*
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Post by Dan on Jan 6, 2007 17:32:56 GMT -5
Thank you Rose and Nim. =D
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Post by Deleted on Jan 6, 2007 17:56:44 GMT -5
Shad and Saura: The Story of Elversti - Part Nine by Huntress
Another great part, Huntress! This had wonderful descriptions and great humor mixed perfectly with utter seriousness and a lovely illustration. I love your... "debate" about light and shadow. It was very philosophical, I think (if I'm thinking right), and I quite liked the argument. To be honest, I have made the same elsewhere, but you portrayed it more beautifully than I ever have.
Two things, though, kinda bugged the grammar bug in me:
I would have changed this part a bit, because the punctuation seems a little off to me. First, I think a colon would have been more suitable than a semi-colon, and then I think "it" should have been capitalized.
Nothing really is wrong with this, but I have always been taught that if you are quoting within quotes, you use single quotation marks (that is, apostrophes :) ). Thus, it should have been 'soul', not "soul". (Then again, if you are quoting within a quote within a quote, you would end up with double quotation marks...)
Finally, I await the next part. I sense spyder-squishing coming up! lol
Well, that's my only idea for destroying the "soul' of the matter...
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Post by Deleted on Jan 6, 2007 18:17:01 GMT -5
In This Together - Part Six by Dream
I read that line twice. The first time I read "a million years before," for some unexplainable reason, I got the impression that the star was crashing onto the floor a million years before it had been dropped.... But, that aside, your dream sequence was quite well-written. Having delved quite deeply into the symbolism of dreams, I can truthfully say you nailed everything. The symbolism, the way things happened, all of it... it was all done wonderfully.
Beyond that, though I mean this with no disrespect, it wasn't anything amazingly extraordinary. It was all written well, quite true, and easy to read and enjoyable to read, but I've spent all day reading, I'm feeling ill, and I have only a third of the time I need today, so I'm feeling a bit lackluster, one could say. I quite enjoyed it, like I said, but it wasn't anything overly amazing.
Your dream sequence, now that was amazing!
However, you've led nicely to the next part, and in a series, isn't that half the battle? If it is, you've certainly won it.
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Post by Deleted on Jan 6, 2007 19:11:40 GMT -5
Hissi, Come Blow Your Horn!: Part Five by Bitsy
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I have to agree with Nimras here-- there's just so much to be said, and no words to say it (or, at least, that was the impression I got form Nimras...).
This was written awesomely well, and it was just, twist after twist after twist! Everything was good, good, goo, then bad, then good, then bad, then kinda good but not really not bad (but really happy 'caused they Kissed! ^_^ ), then good, and that was how it ended! It was a tumultuous ride, I think, but it was an awesome ride!
I really enjoyed this series. It had great humorous bits and at the same time it was incredibly gravely serious at times, but it always kept with the story, and it was written really well with great characterization. Some of the earlier punctuation was a bit awkward, yeah, but it was all correct, so nothing can really be said there. But, truthfully, this was an awesome series.
And, considering how I know nothing of music and this made sense to me...it's even better!
As for the song... I don't know if you had this in mind or not, but the first...group of lyrics fit really well with the song "Run 2 U," sung by Jewel. Of course, I've never been a fan of jazz, so I really don't know how a jazz tune would normally be carried...
Still, though, this was an awesome ending and an awesome series!
This really did have all that jazz! ^_^ (pun, of course, intended :) )
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Post by Deleted on Jan 6, 2007 20:40:09 GMT -5
Charity is Like a Rotting Shoe by Nut
As much as I'd love to say I loved this, I didn't find it that amazing. The humor wasn't really great, and the facts were all things I already knew.
Bear in mind, though, I am not in the greatest mood, and with what little mood I have left fast deteriorating, I seem to feel a bit critical at the moment.
Nevertheless, despite my not being much interested in this at all, I must applaud your style. This was, in truth, quite an easy piece to read (and that is always a good thing). Going on, all of your spelling and grammar was flawless, and that's always something that should be strived for (and it's always something that lightens my mood my mood).
So although this wasn't my favorite piece, it was still a good piece. :)
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Post by Deleted on Jan 6, 2007 21:15:43 GMT -5
Brothers and Kings by Dan
This was a shocking story, wow...
I don't know where to begin, exactly.
First, I was only mildly interested in this as it began. I like knights and kings and castles and stuff, so I was enjoying it, but it felt...cliché almost. But then, Skarl entered and I was like, "What?" I had figured, till then, that this took place after Skarl. I was wrong, obviously. Then, when Skarl had told Ryoran that Quentin was dying (great names, by the way), I had felt things get suspicious and was pulled further through the story. Then, the end, I... I can't believe such a blatant murder (if it truly was so, as I am led to believe) was allowed in the NT, especially when the killer was, by plenty of fault lines, King Skarl himself!
Like I said, I found this shocking, wow...
Getting into the dirt, this was mechanically flawless. Not much else to say there, though.
I enjoyed this. I really did. Great work.
And, yes, Ginz, awesome pic. I liked how it had such soft lines.
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Post by Dan on Jan 6, 2007 22:15:13 GMT -5
Brothers and Kings by DanThis was a shocking story, wow... I don't know where to begin, exactly. First, I was only mildly interested in this as it began. I like knights and kings and castles and stuff, so I was enjoying it, but it felt...cliché almost. But then, Skarl entered and I was like, "What?" I had figured, till then, that this took place after Skarl. I was wrong, obviously. Then, when Skarl had told Ryoran that Quentin was dying (great names, by the way), I had felt things get suspicious and was pulled further through the story. Then, the end, I... I can't believe such a blatant murder (if it truly was so, as I am led to believe) was allowed in the NT, especially when the killer was, by plenty of fault lines, King Skarl himself! Like I said, I found this shocking, wow... Getting into the dirt, this was mechanically flawless. Not much else to say there, though. I enjoyed this. I really did. Great work. And, yes, Ginz, awesome pic. I liked how it had such soft lines. Thank you very much. =) Originally, the murder was much much more blatant (I used knives XD) and I actually had Ryoran die instead, and obviously that was too violent. I'd venture a guess to say that Droplet took the lesser of two evils. But thank you for the review. I appreciate it. |
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Post by Belle on Jan 6, 2007 23:07:24 GMT -5
Article Review
Charity is Like a Rotting Shoe
by nut862
Interesting article, Nut. p:p This is your established article-writing style...the somewhat serious but humorous tone that makes the reader almost believe that what you're saying is true! pXD Nicely paced although a teeny bit longer than I expected.
One last thing, excellent custom pic, Nut! I should hire you to make custom pics for some of my work (future work, anyway). p;)
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Post by Belle on Jan 6, 2007 23:19:45 GMT -5
Short Story Review
Brothers and Kings
by dan4884
Dan, I loved your story! p:o I like your characterization of Ryoran. You gave him plenty of faults yet it seems he sincerely wants Meridell to be ruled the right way. I thought Quentin would turn out to be more than just a lazy king. I didn't feel sorry for him when he died but I sure felt Ryoran's pain (and he sure is a clueless, innocent, whiny Draik p:p Which is part of why I like him). Your characterization of Skarl I found very interesting. I always thought of him as a slob of a Skeith who made fools of people for not being able to make him laugh. pXD Looks like he's smarter than I gave him credit for (at least, in your story).
Your pacing was slow in the beginning. I was knitting my brows together in the first parts. Now when Skarl was mentioned, things started to get more interesting. p;) It was like a lightbulb flashed in my head..."Aha! I know what's going to happen now." From there, I expected the chain of events that followed but that did not keep me from dreading what was going to happen.
I love stories like these. The predictable, unpredictable kind. pXD Hope that made sense.
And, Ginz, purdy custom pic. p:)
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It’s hard to be a baby Pteri. 
The white pupils make him look even more unbalanced, I think.
neo username - dan4884 
