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Post by Nut on Aug 18, 2006 17:35:33 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Aug 18, 2006 19:56:02 GMT -5
Little Orby by tashni
Once again, Tashni, I love Little Orby! This one seemed shorter than the others... but maybe that's because I've been Little Orby deprived for a while. Keep it coming; it's good work.
The Teams Who Couldn't Be There by rookina also by hello5346
Though I did notice a few errors in grammar and spelling, it did not affect my enjoyment of this article and I still think it was pretty good. You gave good reasons why the teams never showed up and you really defined their team players. Good job.
You also said Yen's twin was Yen...but I understood what you meant. Still, you both did a good job and this was easy-to-read and fun-to-read.
Due to a possible lack of internet soon (I do not know how long I will have the internet at my house), I might not be able to do many reviews in the future. Sorry, guys. I'll try to do as much as I can, though.
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Post by Tee Babysitting on Aug 18, 2006 22:04:39 GMT -5
I know, Iaw that too and I felt so dumb. Sometimes I wish the NT would just fix some of your mistakes for you....
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Post by Tashni on Aug 18, 2006 22:28:05 GMT -5
Thanks Writingwolf! It's not my fault it's been so long. I submitted it the instant the comic before it was accepted. Comic #4 should be submitted in a few days, I forgot I had one more panel to do before I can put it all together.
Anyway, more reviews are always appreciated!
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Post by Deleted on Aug 19, 2006 1:53:27 GMT -5
Little Orby - This was hilarious. I truly loved it! Very, very funny, haha!
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Post by mats77 on Aug 19, 2006 2:22:49 GMT -5
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Post by Deleted on Aug 19, 2006 3:07:25 GMT -5
On the Impossibility of a Jelly World by mats77 That's brilliant, especially for a first publication  I thought it was really easy to read, entertaining, funny, and it held my attention all the way though Little Orby by tashni Very funny, but poor Little Orby! What could go wrong for him next...  How did you find the Orbulon in the first place Tashni? Aside from the one in your gallery I'd never seen one before.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 19, 2006 3:11:44 GMT -5
Ooh, Tee, I just noticed we're on the front page of the NT!!!!!  |
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Post by Deleted on Aug 19, 2006 12:15:48 GMT -5
On the Impossibility of a Jelly World by mats77
I had to scowl when I saw the title of this article, because I have been trying to get an article entitled "On the Nonexistence of JellyWorld" into the NT for weeks unsuccessfully, but after reading your article, yours and mine have nothing in common. I won't take up your time by describing my article, so instead I'll just talk of yours.
This was wonderful. I saw absolutely no errors in grammar or spelling, which is awesome for a first publication especially. Plus, your writing style is well-defined and consistent. Further, your use of scientific evidence (or, evidence as scientific as Neopets can get) was great and really provided great insight into why JellyWorld cannot exist. Even if we all know that it does. But that is besides the point; this article was great and I am sure we'll be seeing plenty more of your work in the future.
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Post by lunariiku on Aug 19, 2006 14:11:03 GMT -5
"Greed and Gold" by orangeorge62
This was short story that I just read. Obviously attracted by the name and the pirate caption. I really think this is wonderful. To my dismay, the NT had been losing me for the past few weeks. Nothing was interesting anymore. But when I read this, it just brought me back into the world of pirates, writing, and even a tiny bit of that Neopian Spark that is missing. The dialogue was great, all written in pirate talk which is easeier said than done. To my great satisfaction there were no spelling or gramatic errors to take away the wonderful enjoyment of this story. I encourage all to read. Yes, even the ninjas.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 19, 2006 14:36:11 GMT -5
Ooh, Tee, I just noticed we're on the front page of the NT!!!!! I know, it was awesome! Now I feel all famous... Yay! But then, you get loads more junk mail. I already had three letters asking if they would like to be their friend. You must be getting tons more. |
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Post by Deleted on Aug 19, 2006 14:52:47 GMT -5
I already had three letters asking if they would like to be their friend. You must be getting tons more. Not too many so far actually - this was my 5th Yooyuball-related article so I suppose a lot of the people who would be asking to be my friend have already asked?! |
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Post by Tashni on Aug 19, 2006 22:50:07 GMT -5
Thanks, Tee and Pam for your reviews! Pam, I found out about Orbulons while looking through neoitems.net. Funny story how Orbulon started, actually. (Anecdote time!) I'd been wanting to do some sort of series of articles centering around my oldest pet, Zaf. It was going to be like a culinary tour of a different world each week, but on a budget. (Kind of like Rachel Ray's "$40 a Day," even though I don't really like Rachel Ray.) I was working on the rough draft when I thought "hey, this is kind of boring." I thought of doing a sidekick, but that's so common. Then I thought it might be kind of funny to have some bumbling idiot going around in the background doing silly things Zaf is totally unaware of. A petpet would work great, so I went looking through ALL the petpets on neoitems, and eventually settled on Orbulon. (I was THIS close to picking the Roburg 3T3.) As I started writing Orbulon into the plot of the article, I realized he had a lot more potential than I'd initially thought. I started writing a whole story about him, and the rest is history. (That is 2 short stories, 3 comics, and no Zaf-related stories so far.) Nar, my Krawk, ended up in the first Orbulon short story instead of Zaf since Nar can swim easier.
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2006 11:06:20 GMT -5
Not a lot of people are reviewing this week...
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Post by Deleted on Aug 20, 2006 15:16:05 GMT -5
Not a lot of people are reviewing this week... Not a lot of people reviewed last week either... I think everyone's busy going back to school...or getting ready to... And I think the more people in an issue, the more they reviews... Guess we have the no-review blues.... |
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I thought it was really easy to read, entertaining, funny, and it held my attention all the way though 
How did you find the Orbulon in the first place Tashni? Aside from the one in your gallery I'd never seen one before.