Issue 227 Reviews

[Dream]

Reviews for Sunbeams, please. I'm not getting any fanmail... was it really that bad?

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rainbowdaydreamer said:

Reviews for Sunbeams, please. I'm not getting any fanmail... was it really that bad?

It was wonderful! I loved the way you portrayed the sunbeam pets and how they rejected the single abnormality of the one who had glanced below. Very powerful, and it rocks Dobby's socks. >

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Reviews for my article collab, 20 Valentine's Gifts of Not-So-Ultimate Doom, and As the Clouds Clear: Part Four would be awesome! I'll try to do some later in the weekend.

www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=181765&issue=227

www.neopets.com/ntimes/index.phtml?section=169014&issue=227

[hmlanden]

I'd like informal reviews for "Noelk's Valentines Day". I didn't really write it based on literary value or excellence, so I'd just like to know if anyone liked it besides me...

[hmlanden]

Sunbeams was beautiful. I loved it. *huggles story*

[Huntress]

My series, Treasure of the Caves, got no reviews last week, I'd really appreciate it if I saw some this week *hopeful grin* The third part is out now.

Another Shad and Saura comic is in too, called The Worst Day. I'd love to get some feedback... ^^

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Here are a couple reviews. I have no school all week (yay xD) so there will definitely be more to come ^_^

No gift too small

I thought this was a really sweet story, and nicely written too I have to say, I loved the fireworks at the end! It was an enjoyable read, and in particular you managed to portray Jeran's emotions well- it felt believable to an extent, rather than cutesy and cliche. The twist on the gem being a delivery rather than a gift was also a rather nice touch, as was the detail you went into regarding the gift- the way the sweets were made, and so forth. This helped them to seem more important and showed the amount of time that Jeran spent on the gift, rather than just telling the reader how much time.

Why do we need Valentines Gifts, anyway?

Danus's friend

Should this be Danus' friend? Or is that just an opinion ruled punctuation thing? xD

This was such a cute story The characters were very quickly brought to life for me, and I loved the fact that there was so much showing, rather than telling. The twist at the end with Nieve playing a joke on Danus rather than being crushed was so funny! Or at least, I thought it was =) It was certainly very original. As with the last piece I read by you, the pace of the story was excellent, and there was a nice balance. I quoted the only mistake that I found above, although that is questionable I believe

Sunbeams

weighting down the sunbeam

Should be 'weighing down', I think? That was the only error that stood out to me.

How sad The concept and idea is great though. You describe the 'idyllic' life of the sunbeam pets beautifully, and the very last paragraph is wonderful. Sad, but wonderfully written.

Great job

The Worst Day

This made me laugh xD It's all the funnier, because no one actually does show up. On an artistic level, I can say that I loved the shading on the petpet, and Shad's pose when he's in the fridge. The overall effect is awesome too- I like how it's 'full' if that's the right way to put it; there aren't any random gaps or anything, the entire background is detailed.

Mootix Madness

Nelly's poses and the 'splodge' look superb I'm not an artist, and therefore, really can't review comics... But I can say that I liked it, and it made my laugh I really like your shading technique, it looks great ^_^


*fails at reviews* I think I use the word 'really' far too much ^_^;; More reviews tomorrow =)

Any reviews for my short story 'Jhudora's Valentine' would be much appreciated

[Komori]

Mkay, as promised, some comic reviews!

... You know, I just noticed. I only seem to review the issues that I have a comic in. Huh. XD But aaaanyway...



Some Days You Just Need One

Heh. This one will be tough to say a lot about. It's really a simple, straightforward comic, but one that's more of a cutesy picture than an actual humorous comic. ... Unless I'm missing a joke here. Which would also not be a good thing, ne?

So I suppose the thing to review would really be the art. I think the composition is quite nice, though the halftone effect on the trees is really distracting, because it's nowhere else on the pic, and because the trunks of the trees by comparison is completely untextured. I'd have to say the same goes for the grass. But otherwise, it's quite a pleasant image. It's got a nice cheerful colorscheme, but it's not overbearing. And the sun's a nice touch.


Mootix Madness

Hehe, nice continuing storyline you've got going there.

First thing I noticed... .... an afternote. Om-bom, shame on you! Putting a valentines day afternote just so your comic could be valentines themed! *wags finger at you* My opinion about afternotes still stands. It's a bit distracting to the comic and the punchline. And it falls nowhere in your color scheme for your comic. I understand you wanting to fit your comic into the Valentines mood, but if your comic has nothing to do with the holiday, I say just skip it.

The joke, however, was quite cute. ... Or should I say jokeS? :3 I love the double joke with the double setting. Truthfully, I liked the visual joke of Nelly struggling with the bottle more than the mootix joke. But still, both were nice. Nelly's expressions were so very priceless, especially the third one. XD The sound effect words added quite nicely to the comic. They were very artfully rendered. You didn't rush through them, since they were quite vital to the work. I'm also quite fond of the subtle curly change to 'Nelly-land'.

I think my biggest complaint would be the first panel. It says the population was 4,000,000+ bugs, yet you drew three. XD I understand fully that it would be much more work to draw more bugs. *nods* Yep, it probably would've been a pain in the butt, so I understand why you chose not to. But still, it might've added to a feeling of overcrowded, rather than relying on the signboard and the mootix's dialogue to explain to the audience that the place was crowded.

Also, I have a question. I have seen the word 'Splodge' used on someone else's comic, which leads me to believe it must've come from somewhere. It's not exactly the first word that comes to mind when someone gets splashed. I'm not exactly fond of the word, because to tell you the truth, it's one letter away from being a pretty dirty innuendo word... :/ ... ... ... Though I guess few people here probably know that. ... Which doesn't really say much about me, huh? But still. I just wanted to know where 'splodge' came from...

Anyway, I can't wait for more of this story. ^_^


The Worst Day

Firstly, I would like to applaud you once again for the time you take in drawing your comic's backgrounds. They add a lot to the character of the comic, and somehow still avoid being too cluttered.

The dialogue's cutting it pretty close, though. I like how you've managed to have so much dialogue, and still have it flow logically. None of the bubbles are read out of order. (Speaking of bubbles, I noticed the edges are less fuzzy than they used to be. Yay!) But I can't help but think that there might be a little bit too much extraneous dialogue in the comic. Perhaps the conversation of Saura and Ace is a bit distracting. It might have been trimmed just a little. ... Though I do enjoy Ace's hissing and Saura's seeming ability to understand him.

I really love the compositions of the panels. Aha! And especially the one where Shad wanders off. You turn the comic around 180 degrees, but you still kept the characters in the same locations in the panels. *nods* Bravo, that works so very well. Mmmm, and I like the little bit of purple refridgerator you introduce two panels before Shad is found instide it. It's a great advanced comic technique.

Oh, and one other thing... :3 Recipes don't call for glasses of milk. ... XD

Anyway, great comic, looking forward to many more. ^_^

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doughnut215 said:

Mootix Madness

Nelly's poses and the 'splodge' look superb I'm not an artist, and therefore, really can't review comics... But I can say that I liked it, and it made my laugh I really like your shading technique, it looks great ^_^

Thank you so much! I appreciate your review
In my oppinion, you don't need to be a comic artist to be able to review comics. You just gave your oppinion - that's enough to make it a review ^_^

ghostkomori said:

Mootix Madness

Hehe, nice continuing storyline you've got going there.

First thing I noticed... .... an afternote. Om-bom, shame on you! Putting a valentines day afternote just so your comic could be valentines themed! *wags finger at you* My opinion about afternotes still stands. It's a bit distracting to the comic and the punchline. And it falls nowhere in your color scheme for your comic. I understand you wanting to fit your comic into the Valentines mood, but if your comic has nothing to do with the holiday, I say just skip it.

The joke, however, was quite cute. ... Or should I say jokeS? :3 I love the double joke with the double setting. Truthfully, I liked the visual joke of Nelly struggling with the bottle more than the mootix joke. But still, both were nice. Nelly's expressions were so very priceless, especially the third one. XD The sound effect words added quite nicely to the comic. They were very artfully rendered. You didn't rush through them, since they were quite vital to the work. I'm also quite fond of the subtle curly change to 'Nelly-land'.

I think my biggest complaint would be the first panel. It says the population was 4,000,000+ bugs, yet you drew three. XD I understand fully that it would be much more work to draw more bugs. *nods* Yep, it probably would've been a pain in the butt, so I understand why you chose not to. But still, it might've added to a feeling of overcrowded, rather than relying on the signboard and the mootix's dialogue to explain to the audience that the place was crowded.

Also, I have a question. I have seen the word 'Splodge' used on someone else's comic, which leads me to believe it must've come from somewhere. It's not exactly the first word that comes to mind when someone gets splashed. I'm not exactly fond of the word, because to tell you the truth, it's one letter away from being a pretty dirty innuendo word... :/ ... ... ... Though I guess few people here probably know that. ... Which doesn't really say much about me, huh? But still. I just wanted to know where 'splodge' came from...

Anyway, I can't wait for more of this story. ^_^

You know what Komori - I do agree with you on the afternote thing -_- The thing is, that I DID put it there to make it fit into the issue, since I was doing this story along with Nina, and I really needed this one to be in the Valentines issue, so that Nina could continue the story afterwards - adding the note, was my way of raising the odds of it getting into the V-day issue. Tame yes, but it worked, and I shall nevermore use those horrid afternotes ^_^;

The amount of bugs... yes... I was actually thinking about the numbers I needed to draw, but the reason I only drew three, was partially because I didn't have the patience to make so many, and partially because I didn't want to take too much of the focus away from the Mootix. Nelly is quite big, and the bugs are quite small.... the population is scattered all over the poor Kacheek xD

Splodge you say? I wasn't aware of that. Could I get you to PM that 'word' you were referring to?
It was the only word that came to my mind when I thought the story up. I don't know exactly where I've seen it. Which would you've used instead?

Thanks for your review - so nice of you to be so thorough :3

[Dream]

Quickly stopping by to deliver some reviews.

Some Days You Just Need One-- I couldn't stop my initial "awww" reaction as soon as I saw this. Wonderful. Beautifully made too.

Mootix Madness-- I love the ongoing joke in this comic, and I like the way it's drawn. Curls, heehee :-P

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rainbowdaydreamer said:

Mootix Madness-- I love the ongoing joke in this comic, and I like the way it's drawn. Curls, heehee :-P

Thank you so much ^_^
Last part coming up (plus a part from Nina as well)

[Nina]

Some Smelly Nelly reviews would be wonderful ^_^;. Sorry for the lateness, guys!

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Smelly Nelly
by i_hate_backstabbers

You have a thing with details Nina... I simply love the background and all those flowers!
You used the female character from the NTWF banner! That's so cool! And she does look like a sweet girl.
The fact that she only appears in Nelly's fantasy, doesn't give the reader any expectations about seeing her again - she's very anonymous. I like that

That flower is wicked! I like how it's facial expressions change from each petal Nelly plucks - priceless! x3

I am curious though - what is that green goo/slime that comes from the flower in the last panel? It's not something that takes away the understanding, but I was just wondering

Also I like how Nelly seems to move around, that's a very nice detail as well.

Great comic Nina! The story was so cute, but ended with a laugh. Poor Nelly xD

[Nina]

leoness said:

Smelly Nelly
by i_hate_backstabbers

You have a thing with details Nina... I simply love the background and all those flowers!
You used the female character from the NTWF banner! That's so cool! And she does look like a sweet girl.
The fact that she only appears in Nelly's fantasy, doesn't give the reader any expectations about seeing her again - she's very anonymous. I like that

That flower is wicked! I like how it's facial expressions change from each petal Nelly plucks - priceless! x3

I am curious though - what is that green goo/slime that comes from the flower in the last panel? It's not something that takes away the understanding, but I was just wondering

Also I like how Nelly seems to move around, that's a very nice detail as well.

Great comic Nina! The story was so cute, but ended with a laugh. Poor Nelly xD

Thank you so much for your review, Ms. Leoness!

Yeah, those flowers took a good few hours on their own . They've each got three separate shades of blue on their petals. -crazy-

You actually gave me the idea to use her ^_^. And I agree--this means that I don't have to use her in the future if I don't want to .

It's, uhh... flower drool? xDD

Again--thank you for your wonderful review, Ms. Leoness.

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nina said:

leoness said:

Smelly Nelly
by i_hate_backstabbers

You have a thing with details Nina... I simply love the background and all those flowers!
You used the female character from the NTWF banner! That's so cool! And she does look like a sweet girl.
The fact that she only appears in Nelly's fantasy, doesn't give the reader any expectations about seeing her again - she's very anonymous. I like that

That flower is wicked! I like how it's facial expressions change from each petal Nelly plucks - priceless! x3

I am curious though - what is that green goo/slime that comes from the flower in the last panel? It's not something that takes away the understanding, but I was just wondering

Also I like how Nelly seems to move around, that's a very nice detail as well.

Great comic Nina! The story was so cute, but ended with a laugh. Poor Nelly xD

Thank you so much for your review, Ms. Leoness!

Yeah, those flowers took a good few hours on their own . They've each got three separate shades of blue on their petals. -crazy-

You actually gave me the idea to use her ^_^. And I agree--this means that I don't have to use her in the future if I don't want to .

It's, uhh... flower drool? xDD

Again--thank you for your wonderful review, Ms. Leoness.

Flower drool?
That's what I was thinking, but I just had to be sure xD
Must be a very MOIST flower x3

You're welcome Nina ^_^