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Post by Nut on Oct 11, 2005 0:32:39 GMT -5
The EnsorcellatorThis is a funny story. I would have liked to see what Vivian, Missy, and Kate thought when they snapped out of their trance and found out what they'd been doing that day! I liked the ending. That would have been exactly my reaction. After all, what is there to do if you accidentally get a powerful artifact, but to sell it for a huge profit?  Before the DanceThis is an interesting story, and it gave personality to characters that I had hardly thought twice about before. I never would have pictured the Court Dancer as being unwilling to serve Lord Kass. She almost didn't seem evil for a while, but in the end she made the choice that would decide which gallery she was placed into. This Article is a Part of Your Balanced BreakfastThe title is very amusing, though it didn't give any indication that the article was about cereal. I was expecting something about eating a proper diet, and instead found myself reading about a popular breakfast food. All through, this is a pretty funny article, looking into the history of Neopian cereal in ways I never thought of. I think I would've preferred it if "Ok" was spelled out at the couple of times it appeared, but that's a minor detail. I thought the "see real Al" definition was very funny. The article was funny, and the subject matter was original, if bizarre. You're clearly very...enthusiastic...about cereal. Again, would anyone like to review Cheeriness Planted or the final section of my series, The Faerie Pet: Part Six? I'd really appreciate it. I'll even give you cookies. You reviewers like cookies, don't you? *holds up a virtual cookie*
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Post by Nina on Oct 11, 2005 9:57:33 GMT -5
Oooooo! Thanks for that thoroughly review Nina! I really appreciate that you took your time to review it, being ill and all  I do hope that you will get better soon  About the mootix thing you're trying to draw, I actually wanted to talk to you about that. So if we could chat on MSN when you feel better, before you enter your comic with them, that'd be soo cool I also need your help on the next part But again, I'm very honoured that you sat down and wrote so much for my comic, and I will take not of all you said. Don't worry about being too critical... I can take it Besides, noone forces anyone to use the tips you get in a review, and it's really only a matter of taste I think. But I think you're right in most of the cases, and will look out for that in the future. *hugs* No problem ^_^. I had nothing to do, but felt like doing nothing, sort of, because I was sick. But still, I wanted to do something productive, so I reviewed your comic. I need to do a few others today. And thank you for the card, Ms. Leoness ^_^. It'd be great if we could talk on MSN. I'm actually really curious as to what you need to tell me. I tried to catch you on last night, but you were away, I believe. I'll try to be around today if you can be on. Yes, I was worried that I was being too critical, because I wasn't in the greatest of moods, so I was hoping my mood wouldn't influence my review. I think that it was a fair review, though. I still stand by all of the things I said, but it's always your choice. I know that you can take criticism, which I think is important in order to be able to improve on your comics, and that goes for all artists and writers. |
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Post by Deleted on Oct 11, 2005 10:36:42 GMT -5
W00t! REVIEW'D!! Thanks! =D
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Post by Deleted on Oct 11, 2005 10:59:30 GMT -5
Don't worry Nina... no matter what you write, you will always rock my world You are a very talented artist and reviewer, and I fully understand if your mood would affect your reviews - but I still think it's constructive. |
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Post by Nina on Oct 11, 2005 11:05:39 GMT -5
A Spooky Halloween, part 1I would have capitalized "Part", just because that's me o.o But that's a tiny detail, so it's okay. Ooh, are you making fun of the Pant Devil when Komori says "Pant s Devil"? Also, I think it's awesome that you don't keep your characters in boring old poses. It's cool that you're not afraid to try to draw them in different positions, even though it's probably a lot harder to do than the standard standing up. I think that that adds a lot to your comics. I think that HauntedClaw looks sort of different in the third panel. It has something to do with his mouth region -nodnod- The Pant Devil in that panel is priceless, though xDDD. Like, just that picture, him stuffing his face greedily. That makes me laugh on its own xD. Great job on that, Komori. The ending joke wasn't extremely original, but I think that it worked well with the way you drew it all out and paced it out, and the expressions. Also, I like the decorations ^_^. Also, I'm jealous of you and how you can do the layout for your comic and it still looks awesome even when some of the panels have spaces between them, some don't, and some have borders, and others don't. I think that it actually adds to the comics. If I tried to do it, it woudln't work for me =P. It'd just look messy and disorganized ._. Great job, Ms. Komori ^_^.
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Post by Star on Oct 11, 2005 15:34:01 GMT -5
I know they're very short, brief reviews but I have so much school stuff to do so here ya go! ^_^ The Ensorcellator by cosmicfire918 I found this slightly confusing at first with all those pet names but then I got into the story and I enjoyed it. It was entertaining and I liked Kate because all she thought about was food! I liked the ending - it was funny!  Before the Dance by precious_katuch14 I really enjoyed this! Three words: short and sweet. I didn¡¦t expect Callista to have ever been good and I thought it was original and unexpected. I liked the style of writing too if that makes any sense to you¡K =D Anyone else want reviews I'll do that tomorrow. |
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Post by Deleted on Oct 11, 2005 15:38:50 GMT -5
This Article is a Part of Your Balanced BreakfastThe title is very amusing, though it didn't give any indication that the article was about cereal. I was expecting something about eating a proper diet, and instead found myself reading about a popular breakfast food. All through, this is a pretty funny article, looking into the history of Neopian cereal in ways I never thought of. I think I would've preferred it if "Ok" was spelled out at the couple of times it appeared, but that's a minor detail. I thought the "see real Al" definition was very funny. The article was funny, and the subject matter was original, if bizarre. You're clearly very...enthusiastic...about cereal. Thanks for the review! Heh, I was in a... random... mood the night I wrote that article. You wouldn't believe how many people neomailed me this weekend and wanted to have conversations about cereal! |
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Post by Deleted on Oct 11, 2005 18:42:37 GMT -5
I was wondering if anyone could do a review of Employment Agency: What is really going on? Its my first article so I'm kinda wondering if its okay and whether I should write more or not... I appreciate it!
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Post by Tdyans on Oct 12, 2005 0:59:10 GMT -5
Thanks, Leoness. Any more reviews for "All Ears" would be much appreciated.
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Post by Komori on Oct 12, 2005 1:34:07 GMT -5
A Spooky Halloween, part 1I would have capitalized "Part", just because that's me o.o But that's a tiny detail, so it's okay. Ooh, are you making fun of the Pant Devil when Komori says "Pant s Devil"? Also, I think it's awesome that you don't keep your characters in boring old poses. It's cool that you're not afraid to try to draw them in different positions, even though it's probably a lot harder to do than the standard standing up. I think that that adds a lot to your comics. I think that HauntedClaw looks sort of different in the third panel. It has something to do with his mouth region -nodnod- The Pant Devil in that panel is priceless, though xDDD. Like, just that picture, him stuffing his face greedily. That makes me laugh on its own xD. Great job on that, Komori. The ending joke wasn't extremely original, but I think that it worked well with the way you drew it all out and paced it out, and the expressions. Also, I like the decorations ^_^. Also, I'm jealous of you and how you can do the layout for your comic and it still looks awesome even when some of the panels have spaces between them, some don't, and some have borders, and others don't. I think that it actually adds to the comics. If I tried to do it, it woudln't work for me =P. It'd just look messy and disorganized ._. Great job, Ms. Komori ^_^. Wewt, another wonderful review from teh Nina! Thank you very much! ... His name is the Pant Devil? *shifty eyes* I could've sworn he was the Pant s Devil... *checks the Gallery of Evil* Nope, you're right. ... Heheh. Whoops. You're right about Claw's mouth looking different in the third panel. I s'pose it was because his mouth actually opens like a real creature, rather than sticking on the usual anime mouth on the side of his snout. I wonder if I did that with the other comic parts, I don't recall. But that's a good eye, I didn't even notice that. XD I always appreciate your critiques, they're so well thought out and honest. |
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Post by Tiger on Oct 12, 2005 13:55:39 GMT -5
*Is late* Thanks!!
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Post by hmlanden on Oct 12, 2005 14:19:35 GMT -5
ALL THE STORIES WERE HORRIBLE AND I HATED THEM ALL.
Juuuuuust kidding. I don't have time to even do my not-so-in-depth reviews, so I'll just say that the ones I read were pretty good. *claps and hands out wooden badger trophies and moofins*
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Post by Nut on Oct 14, 2005 0:56:23 GMT -5
You're welcome. I doubt I'll get my stuff reviewed at this point...  But here are some cookies anyway! *hands around virtual cookies* |
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Post by Scar on Oct 14, 2005 4:09:45 GMT -5
Thanks for the review Sparky ;D Anyway, I decided to burn some free time reviewing some stories. Here they are: Cheeriness PlantedAn engaging and interesting story! You took a small, easily overlooked plant and gave it personality as befit its nature. You even managed to insert a little moral at the ending. The only problem I saw was that you sometimes shift between past and present tense when only past or present tense is necessary. But overall, good job, Nut! Fixing ItAn interesting and very well written story, especially how you developed the characters in the story: the bossy but caring Lapis and the timid but sensible Seth. There was a tiny mistake where you mixed up the 'he'and 'she' but it's easily overlooked. Overall, well done! Phelix Gets the ScoopHeh, I loved this piece. A well written take on the unappreciated reporter out on the quest for hard facts and sensational scoops. Phelix and the rest of the motley crew in the Newsroom really bring the story to life. A great read! Rhyme Time!A nice read. The writer really took a lot of effort to make this story, especially the poems, I can tell. And Ember's personality and realistic reactions make the story even more enjoyable. My 'well-done's to the writer |
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Post by hmlanden on Oct 14, 2005 10:14:11 GMT -5
Landen's finally gotten the time to do a few not-so-in-depth reviews! Yay!
The Ensorcellator--Spiffeh! I loved it! It was very original, well-written, and just plain spiffeh.
Fixing It--*giggle* Exceedingly spiffeh, Fj0rd. I can't put it any other way. WRITE MORE.
Rhyme Time--*sniff**sniff**sniff* Awesome stuff.
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But here are some cookies anyway! *hands around virtual cookies*
