Two Wockys and a war

[Random Cameo Neotomi]

I am currently working on a story featuring mainly Braylo, my Wocky, Yollie, his girlfriend, Meridell and Darigan.

It is edited by Adoribleapin
Take a bow Lapin!
Tho she keeps forgettign to fix some typos *HMPF*

I am currently not at home, so I cannot post the story so far, but what do you think of what you heard about so far?

It has:
Action
Romance
And betrayal

[Lappi]

Oh! I'll post it for you!

And you spelt my name wrong... it's adoriblelapin

Err... I couldn't send it back to you because of my firewall. Meep.

[Random Cameo Neotomi]

'Sokay, I'm at home now.

Here's just a part fo the story:

“N… No… you’re kidding,” mumbled Braylo. “They couldn’t have!”
There was silence around the neohome. Braylo ran upstairs to his room
“Braylo!” Called Neo_tomi after Braylo. He went after Braylo, when he got up, Braylo was lying on his chair, facing the wall, apparently crying. “Braylo, I know, it’s hard, but, well, you win some you lose some.”
Braylo kept staring at the wall, sobbing.
“I know how much you love Meridell, but the orb did belong to the Darigan citadel…”
Braylo, furious, rushed downstairs with tears in his eyes, went out of the nehome and slammed the door after him.
“BRAYLO!” shouted Neo_tomi after him.
“No offense dad, but I don’t think that’s what he wanted to hear…” said Gella, the Yellow Kyrii.
“Well then what should’ve I told him?!” spat Neo_tomi.
“I don’t know, maybe something about that Meridell will still be okay.” said Gella and headed for the kitchen.
“But that would be lying.” Said Neo_tomi sadly.
“It’s called a white lie dad, he would’ve figured it out on his own eventually!”
“I guess you’re right,” sighed Neo_tomi and went to join Gella with a snack.

“It can’t be… IT CAN’T BE!!!” cried Braylo as he ran crying through Chia Close Street.
Braylo was a yellow Wocky, and a huge Meridell fan; he just could not accept the fact that Meridell has lost.
Braylo just kept running, untill he reached Neopia Plains; he just sat there for hours.

“Where can he be?” Asked Neotomi worried and turned away from the window that he was watching for a while now.
“I don’t know,” said Gella in a calm voice, even tho she was preety worried herself.
Neotomi opened the door. “I’m going to look for Braylo, you wait here in case he comes back.”
“Gotcha, dad,” said Gella and sat on the red beanbag chair.

It was already evening and Braylo was still sitting in the plains, wondering what will happen to Meridell.
After a while, Braylo got up. And started walking in the street again, though he wasn’t heading for his neohome.
After about 15 minutes he got to the shuttle to Mystery Island.
He took it, and when he got there, he went straight to the village, he then reached a two-story house and knocked on the door.
“Yollie, will you get that please?” he heard from inside. “Yes mom… What are pets for if not doing your chores?” said another cynical voice.
The door opened and a gold Wocky stood at the door.
“Hey! Braylo!” said Yollie surprised.
“How are you Yollie?” asked Braylo, not really waiting for an answer. “Listen, Meridell lost, and I feel so mad and confused! I just can’t stand by and watch all this happen.” said Braylo enthusiasticly. “I feel llike I just gotta do something, and I really do wanna do something. And I need help… Please, you gotta help me...”
“But Braylo, I’m a Darigan…” said Yollie and looked at him in a helpless face.
Braylo looked back, in a shocked face, and walked back a step. “Oh no, I should’ve remembered, I should’ve remembered!!!” As he said that he started running through the street.
“Braylo!!! Wait!!!…” called Yollie after him, but he was already far away.

[calvinseviltwin]

it sounds OK so far... but you have to be lax on the romance... and death vs. destroy too.

[Random Cameo Neotomi]

Yollie closed the door and sighed sadly.
“Who was it?” called Yollie’s owner, Faylinn, from the kitchen.
“Braylo, he was on his way to the tombola and wanted to ask me tips about getting a good ticket,” shot Yollie.
“Okay, now hurry up and eat your dinner, SHOO! Angesso is trying to eat it all up. Shoo you crazy Meowclops!”
“She ain’t crazy!” grunted Yollie as she entered the Kitchen, pretending everything was okay.
“I heard you two talking about Meridell,” said Faylinn and took a bite out of her omelette.
“Ya, he just told me about the loss, that’s all.” sighed Yollie.
“Why the sighing?” asked Yollie’s sister, Orisa. “You should be thrilled, you supported Darigan.”
“Hmm, yeah… I dunno…” said Yollie and took a bite out of her own omelette.
“Why can’t you support Meridell like the rest of us?” asked Kaira.
“They stole that orb! That’s why!” shouted Sybian. Sybian and Yollie were the only Darigan supporters in the family.
“You stay out of this!” shouted Kaira.
“No you stay out of this, you lab ray freak!!!” spat Sybian almost tipping over the table with her fist.
“I AM NOT A FREAK!!!” slammed Kaira.
“Then why does mom keep wanting to change you?!” said Sybian, victorious.
“Mom! Tell them something!” said Orisa and looked at Faylinn.
“What’s the use, you know it’s not gonna help,” said Faylinn and took another bite out of her omelette.
As the fight went on the other pets kept eating.


~


Braylo ran to the shuttle, took it, and went towards his home. He saw from outside that lights were still on on ground floor. Then he went over to the garden and peeked through the window carefully.
Gella was sleeping on the red beanbag and Neo_tomi on the green one.
Braylo slowly walked in, and gently closed the door behind him. He went over to the kitchen, took some food, went over to his room, and packed some battledome items along with the food in a small bag. He then took a piece of paper and wrote on it:
“Dear dad and Gella, I’m okay, no need to worry, Braylo.”
He put the note on his lounge chair and snuck back out, almost waking Neo_tomi up accidently on the way.



Morning came, and Gella got up.
“Dad! Dad! Wake up!!!” said Gella Alarmed.
“Hmmm… What? What? Any sign from Braylo?!” asked Neo_tomi, waking up amazingly fast.
“Yes! Read this!!!” called Gella and gave him the letter.
Neo_tomi read the letter and stomped his foot on the ground.
“WHERE IS HE?! AARGH!”
“Why don’t you call the police?” Asked Gella
“He’s only been missing for 12 hours, we need to wait 24…” said Neo_tomi trailing off, as he grew frustrated and lied back down. He didn’t know what to do, and there was nothing he could do, going after Braylo won’t be much help wsince there wasn’t a single clue where he was.
“Well… I’m gonna go to the advent calender… Maybe I will see him on the way,” said Gella, not too sure what to say.
“Okay…” said Neo_tomi and looked at the ceiling.

About an hour passed and Gella came rushing in, excited.
“DAD!!! DAD!!! Come quick!!!” she shouted.
“What is it?! Did you find Braylo?!” shouted back Neo_tomi and rushed down the stairs.
“No! But I have great news!!! I only got one item and the neopoints at the advent calendar!” Gella spat with a large smile stretched across her face.
“And that’s good news?” asked Neo_tomi and raised an eyebrow.
“Ya!!! Everybody else was getting two items, which means Braylo took the other one!!! He’s okay!!!” Gella squealed.
“Great thinking!!! That’s great!” shouted Neo_tomi with pleasure. “What did he take?!”
“Some food, can’t remember what,” said Gella.
“Hmmm,” said Neo_tomi in a relieved, yet anxious tone.

[Random Cameo Neotomi]

Come on guys! Please review! I want more eviews before I post the next part

[Lappi]

It's good! ;D

[Deleted]

Its good, but you started to mis out the _ in Neo_tomi, and it says, Braylo ran down Chia Close Stree, It should just be chia close.

[Random Cameo Neotomi]

Lapin... YOu're the editor, please please edit that, eh?
Well, at least on the next tiime I send you the story

[Lappi]

Well *huff* I'm used to calling you Neotomi, but in the story you're Neo_tomi, so it's very confusing. I fix grammar and spelling mistakes, and I also change some words to make the story better. XD