Post by Deleted on Jan 17, 2003 11:59:22 GMT -5
I was thingking of writing a comedyish thing (going very heavy on the ish) about a neopet, I was thinking acara, trying to make it big in show biz. Heres the first paragraph, tell me if you like it:
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“And Good riddance to you too!” Yelled the teenaged Acara as the cab drove off with a patch from his shirt in its closed door.
The young neopet looked up and let the moon light shine on his red face. He was at an average height with a squeaky voice that reflected his years. He stared down from the freeway to his new home, Neopia Central.
What do you think?
RRRIIIPPPPP
“And Good riddance to you too!” Yelled the teenaged Acara as the cab drove off with a patch from his shirt in its closed door.
The young neopet looked up and let the moon light shine on his red face. He was at an average height with a squeaky voice that reflected his years. He stared down from the freeway to his new home, Neopia Central.
What do you think?
