How would you rate my first time article?

[Xyreno]

This is my first article! and now im going to scream if i dont get any feedback!

<p>Dark Side Interviews</p>
<p>By Articuno_Neo</p>

<p>Hello there, Neopian Times Reader..
We are gonna face and talk with ………… Lord Darigan!
Lets try to get a knack out of him!</p>

<p>We are currently walking trough Meridell!
We first need some information on his “Outside Look”
Of course I seen him in the battledome.. but waaayyy to short.
He knocks my pet down in 1 second so, we are going to find that Korbat!
</p>

<p>Finally manage to order a plane to Darigans Fortress..</p>
<p>Well… here goes.. *Knocks on the door*
Hello… a voice said. He, I really want to interview you! Great highness…
Hmm, You carry an Meridell Medal… But still I let you pass!
</p>

<p>Walking slower and slower, approaching the great Lord Darigan..
Well, I’m Articuno_Neo and I’m an Interviewer for the Neopian Times.
Could you please tell something about you?</p>

<p>Darigan: Once… I did NOT look like this!
Articuno_Neo: Yes.. I see.
Darigan: Untill that unworthy Skarl came and stole my gracious orb…
Articuno_Neo: Well Actually, he did not steal it but his knight’s did…
Darigan: Silence! You where first a Loyal Minion of mines.. But then you changed sides.
Articuno_Neo: I only wanted points.. But how did you look first? Lots of people wonder.
Darigan: First.. I was a cute and adorable Blue Korbat.. My owner treated me as his best thing that ever existed! We started our own land called “Darigans Fortress”.
My owner trained me with the best Dark Faerie Magic and Light Faerie Magic.
We created an orb, We now got it back. Its real name is “The Orb of Livings”.
Since then a lot of people moved at our Fortress. A nice lookout over the city.
Untill the knights came. The moved in and stole our orb. Our city started to change to an old, ghost city… And Skarl has got his payback. No more Marrow to Quess! No faerie to do quests for and absolutely disgusting the Meridell Petpets.
Articuno_Neo: Yes.. I think they are quite ugly to.. but the Drackonacks and Mortogs are nice  Do you know anything about the disappearing of the Turmaculus?
Darigan: Yes.. He is in the jail, Well soon bring him somewhere to train him.. He’s FAT!
Articuno_Neo: Yes.. All the people know. Maybe you should read the Neopian Times? Theres a picture of Turmacie at MassWatchers.. *Giggle*
Darigan: I understand… a advertisement for Mass Watchers.
*A Army appears and looks ready to attack*
Articuno_Neo: Well, eh.. I think I’m leaving!
Darigan: Well then…. Good bye.. Enemies…
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<p>Eh.. I’ll count to 3..
1-2---…aah!
Stay off me! I don’t want stinky Drackonack Slime on my Backpack!
Hey! Go away! Juch.. Your breath stinks!</p>

<p>The Drackonacks stops running and turn around..
Whew.. We finally are outside. I hope you know something more about the war and Darigan.
That he created the orb and if we get another oppertunity we will try and interview another evil villain! This was Dark Side Interviews! We hope you enjoyed..</p>

<p>Note by Creator: This is my first article! Please dont neomail me saying it stinks! I’m new at writing for the Neopian Times and I only hope you had fun! If you have some tips Neomail me at Articuno_Neo!</p>

[Deleted]

Hasnt it been done before?

[calvinseviltwin]

Seems a tad over done if you ask me.

[Lappi]

Eh? It should be a bit longer . . . oh wait, it's an article . . . well, lemme read it again later.

[calvinseviltwin]

It should have a bit more length.

[pichuthegreat]

this has been done before and it's too short

[Lappi]

Hum, you're writing liek you were in a chat room. Write like it's a real story, and make it longer with more details. I agree with pichu, it's too fast.

[Xyreno]

thankies ;D ill try my best and make it longer

[Lappi]

You're very welcome'su!