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Post by kittygirl on Jul 11, 2007 16:32:32 GMT -5
Thanks for the review. I'm glad you liked (for the most part) the characters. I just wish I hadn't written it before they switched the avatars. I still imagine Foltaggio as the girly guy lutari. DUDE ME TOO!!! I had a really neat character idea worked out for "him" too. Yeah, the little mynci is hard to imagine as the self conceited person who just wants to win. I almost wanted to leave my article the way it was with the characters switched.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 11, 2007 22:05:42 GMT -5
Waiting for Anna: Part Six by extreme_fj0rd I didn't realise how much I'd miss reading this story until I got back here to read it, and now that I've returned, I can only say I still love it.
And it's still great.
I had never at all expected Anna to have travelled back in time, so when that was revealed, I was at the edge of my seat in anticipation, stunned with astonishment. At the end, it was curious how we saw into Biblius' mind for a moment; so centered around Anna this story has been, the break in point-of-view was certainly unexpected. But, somehow, it just seemed right to be there. It just, for lack of any better term, fitted.
Stuck: Part Four by silent_snow I am still flabbergasted at just how perfectly clearly this reveals how to get an avatar. Anyways, I liked how the avatar just "poofed" onto the table on a slip of paper. I never really imagined them as being paper, but it was still pretty interesting.
Beyond that, though, this was both a satisfying and a saddening part in this story. It was quite unexpected that Jeff wasn't bad, as, from the end of the last part, my anticipation was raised that this new owner would be nothing good. However, the almost anti-climactic feel of the owner being good was somehow incredibly satisfying.
Towards the end, I enjoyed how you showed Dr. Death in a different-than-usual lighting; that really accentuated the abundance of misconceptions that seem almost to be a theme in being broken in this series. The offer for Sojo to stay was, for me, simply heartbreaking. I've stood at the same crossroads in my life, at the choice between two things that both matter to me, two things that oppose each other, one genuinely fulfilling but the other for those I love most. Knowing how he was feeling then, I was simply so much more capable of relating to him that it was quite a touching moment for me.
I know what decisions I've made, the consequences and the crown that they have brought, both good and bad, so I look forward to seeing what his final decision is.
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Post by Deleted on Jul 13, 2007 19:30:01 GMT -5
Not All Werelupes Are Bad by anna_invincible The first line that really stood out to me as something great was the line about the action figures cowering at the sound of the howl. It quite vividly illustrated both the character and the noise. Good job with that.
This story felt quaint, like the kind of story I'd take to bed on a cool autumn night and read until I fell asleep (which, for me, is a compliment). The plot was simple, though it had a nice level of depth to it. It began about trying to read a book, though, so I was almost disappointed when it never referenced the book again after the werelupe appeared, but that was alright, I guess. The interaction of the werelupe and Chili was nicely done and I enjoyed that. I liked that you showed how misconceptions are wrong (obviously), but more importantly, that some things we think are true, really aren't always.
Aside form some typos that I found (commonly, words were missing letters, so watch out for that), this was a really good story. Good job.
Team Spirit by Kittygirl5170 I liked this story, Kitty. It had a good moral, and it fit well with the story itself, not feeling a single bit forced onto the narrative. The description felt a bit light, but it wasn't underdone and I was still able to clearly see everything. A little more description, though, probably wouldn't have hurt this at all. Some of the dialogue felt a bit forced, not sounding really "real," but the communication back and forth between the characters was nicely done and worked well.
This story may have been short, but it was sweet, and that made it special.
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